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Bushra

@cmileyfreaky

Inactive

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#731

the rain scene...
what a scene!
beautiful, just beautiful!

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ruby-red

@ruby-red

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#732

a lovely update, what a contrast to the first rain scene, he really has done a 180 degree turn, love this loving and caring arnav, cant wait for the next chapter, please update soon and thanx for the pm.

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Japonica

@Japonica

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#733

Doe-eyes, this is a beautiful story you've created. I stumbled on it by chance sometime last week and have been checking eagerly for every update since.

I love the way you've paced the story. One of the first things that struck me about your work is your great facility with language which manages to capture and convey the depths of feeling and agony that the two characters, epsecially K, are going through.
Your description of the tussle between K's thoughts and heart in today's update was superb- 'like trying to tie two ends of short rope' is such a perfect metaphor to describe her state of mind.

I hope they are able to reach across and allow themselves to heal each other, what has divided them will hopefully bring them together.
Look forward to the rest of the story.

Edited by Japonica - 13 years ago

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Simran

@dmg123

Inactive

Posted: 13 years ago

#734

An Awesome update!!...I liked how he was making sure she was not getting wet at all...it shows just how much Arnav does not want her hurt..the umbrella was quite an important item!

I can't wait to read more. Continue soon!

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Mira

@kyunki_iloveu

Inactive

Posted: 13 years ago

#735

woww..tht was a gr8 update...cant wait to read more..:)

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Downhill

@Downhill

Inactive

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#736

beautifully written...i love ur unique style of writing...its hauntingly beautiful

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dumas

@dumas

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#737

I promise...I promise I will shelter you, protect you for the rest of our lives, in rain and in sun, in heat and cold...forever.

loved those line awesome update loved how all it took for him to come to her was a call she is realizing he is changing for her loved the decryption about the rain and the feeling and the flashbacks loved it thanks for the pm

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..Anita..

@..Anita..

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#738

I loved it

Especially the rain scene

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hilly

@hilly

Navigator

Posted: 13 years ago

#739

Loved it ! :D hence, I felt it was too short ! the best of the update, best of the scenes... you had to make a somewhat of a short update... I know what you mean, but still !

Ah, Loved the rain scene... the way you carried out the rain scene- the rhythm of the rain matching the whirling flashbacks and series of emotions that upheld her .. Brilliant !
and ah, Arnav is such a sweetheart, well he got to be, no duh ! Loved the way you described his soft, heartwarming thoughts of protecting Khushi no matter what happens, and him getting wet is serves him towards no irritation.

I'm glad you exposed Khushi to the earlier imagery of the quick phone call, her increasing of the heart break and other tumbling somersaults ... as well as her apprehensiveness upon waiting for his car to arrive and see him... just perfecto.

Please have the next update to be longeerr ?! I'm just too anxious, yet soo excitteed ! Can't wait for wait for either to start a convo :D