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Posted: 14 years ago
~Immoral World~
Part 4







Geet slowly glides her hand over the water. Drop by drop tears made small wave from centre to outwards. She smiled sadly...
Chamily "well that's a good news, those selfish family of your not approving anyone. That's a good news, at least they are looking for a good person!" geet smiled sadly. "listen, don't tell your husband anything about your ..." she stopped and geet understood. She nodes.
Chamily "you never know! Just in case!" geet nodes again.

-Cafe-


Maan walks in with a tatty shirt, and trouser, he made him self look poor. He knew well that man like brij could only look for someone very poor & they can control for his sister! Maan trips on him!
Brij "look where you going?" maan looks down. His shirt was soaking wet. Shivering. It's one of those rainy season.
Maan "sorry sir! Sorry!" he begs. Brij was brushing all the water droplet off.
Brij "alright! Alright!" he was about to walk off when maan stops him again. "please sir, I am looking for a job, I have no money, no place to stay. I can do anything for money!" brij was about to ignore and walk off when he stops. Smirking.
Brij "you can do anything for money?"
Maan "yes sir!"
Brij "come to Handa haveli later on today."
Maan "sir you are a great man. You have came from haven. Thank you sir!"
Brij smirks and walks way. Maybe he is the one, maybe he is the one who they can control.

Maan stood there. Brushing his wet hair back. Smiling.

It's 10pm. The thick dark clouds have covered the whole sky, anything barely visible, anything barely clear. Geet opened her window, drinking the spitting rain. Trying to hide her tearful eyes... Suddenly there came a BANG! Some one at the door. A storm was coming, and she wasn't sure where this will take her. She looks round out of the window. Fog have appeared, nothing was vitiable. She smiled sadly Again, and ignored the sound, after few minutes the noise came back. Inatuoly geet was scared, but when chamily came she felt fine.
Chamily "this electricity had to go now!"
Geet "I will take some candle out!"
Chamily "look at those lazy b**** sleeping peacefully, & left us to do all the work."
Geet "Is someone at the door?"
Chamily "of course, he have banging like mad! Where have you been?"
Geet "I will open the door!"
Geet walks down with the candle. It's a chilly night... She shivered. Then slowly opening the door. Maans heart skipped several beat. Her wet long hair, her wet face, her White long nightdress, her pure innocent face. She looked so beautiful...
Maan "hi!"
Geet "everyone Is sleeping. You have to come back later!" she spoke bluntly, then was about to leave when maan stops her... "brij have called me. I am staying here from today on!" camily came running down. "oh it's you! Come in! Come in!" geet looked at both in confusion, maybe she have missed out something. She have been so engulfed in her life that, she could here nothing other then her pain. Maan walks in, geet looks at him once then twice. Then walks off while chamily taking him to his room.

Maan closes the door then takes his short off. First thing he needs to find his brother! That's the first aim! Then he will think about merging geet, if nothing to be found! And brij, property, let's see how he claims them! He really needs to learn a lesson.

Next morning...

Rano "take tea to that man!"
Geet "chamily will do it ma!"
Rano "chup! You stay here like a servant! So work like one, & look who is talking, you are lucky that I am still keeping you in my house, specially after all the... Chi! Chi!" tears rolled down geets eyes. She felt so ashamed, more of a disgust. "you are lucky that we looking for someone who will stay our under control." geet nodes sadly & takes the tea.

She slowly knocks. One, two, ...

Maan was doing push up, his body sweating, there was more of a shine from all those sweat. He opens the door... Half bare. Geet instantly turns round... & whispers "your tea!" maan could barely hear! He gathered, she brought tea, but some how ge was in teasing mood. "sorry?"
Geet whispers again "your tea!"
Maan "sorry! I can't here you!"
Geet looks down. Rolling her toe on the floor. "your tea." she was so sigh, barely could utter a word.
Maan "sorry! I can't here you!" he replied in louder voice then normal.
Geet "please ap cloths pahenlo!" she managed to mumble out of her mouth! Maan smirks.. & then quickly puts a towl round his neck... "now?" she slowly turns round and gives him the tea without looking! Then hurriedly tried to walk off.
Maan "by the way, I don't drink tea! Only coffee! " geet nodes and walks off.

Late morning brij comes in. Very impressed with maan.
Brij "how are you settling in?"
Maan "very good sir, it's all because of you I have somewhere to live!"
Brij "as you have said you can do anything for money!"
Maan "yes sir! Yes sir... I can do anything for money!" he tried to sound convincing.
Brij "do You have any family?"
Maan "no sir!"
Brij "where are you from?"
Maan "this town sir!"
Brij "good! Good!" maan smiles.

Brij took maan way to understand him bit more, which he did not fail. Maan impressed him allot...

Geet stood outside in the garden. Lost in her own thought. It was raining haveli, when maan some reason opens his window, finding the girl standing, deserted... Drinking the water... He walks out.
Maan "you will catch cold!" she jumps with his sudden noise.
Geet "I am fine!"
Maan "let's go in!" she does not say another word and walks in flowed by maan...


next- kitchen...😳

hay you all... thanks for all the love & support

it means allot & motivates me so much..

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Edited by FIRESafiReFIRE - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
thats something interesting coming up
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Posted: 14 years ago
Lovely update::
Awww maan was smitten by geet at first sight
Gr8 acting by maan
Luv how he was teasing her by pretending not to hear...
Cont soon Xx...
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Posted: 14 years ago
wow nice update continue soon maan is very good to convince them looking forward to more parts
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Posted: 14 years ago

.....dear...😛

...4 PM me...😃..
dear...in all updates...👏👏👏..
ur updates r n
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4 ur ..👍🏼..
all ur updates...
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... sorry 4 being late n short comment..but dear it's my exam plz forgive me......
tons of ...🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗
again i said that...
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update soon dear...
lov,❤️
Tama
P.S.: plz donn't copy paste my comments...i only mae it 4 my frndz...if anyone do it again as i saw many of my comments r copied i'll report it...u guys plz make comment urself my componets donn't coppied it...😡
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Posted: 14 years ago
Wow:) I'm loving this new ff
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Posted: 14 years ago
u know what keya...

i loved it...😳
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Posted: 14 years ago
wowww awesomeee
luved ittt
n superbbb brij impressed by maan
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Posted: 14 years ago
WOOOW YAR I LOVE THIS PART PLEASE UPDATE ONE MORE PART PLEASE
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Posted: 14 years ago
Nice prt,maan fooling brij awsome

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