MN FF: Fortunate Lover Part 4 [LAST] @ Pg 22 - Page 5

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Posted: 14 years ago
#41
aww... dakshu..
one more ff!🥳
its soo excitin!!!
cant wait 4 d update!
count me in & update soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
#42
really interesting concept...cant wait 4 the story to move forward..:)
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Posted: 14 years ago
#43
Nice conept
Im in ur pm list
Update soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
#44
hey Daksha
nice one
waiting for part 1

love
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Posted: 14 years ago
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The story will proceed with two mindsets. One from Mayank's side and other from Nupur's side. Nupur: Purple and Mayank: Green



Scene: Cabin of Editor (The Times of India)

"Hiya, take your seat and please be comfortable" A lady smiled behind her spectacles and gestured the lass infront of her to take her seat.

She forwarded her hand and gave her introduction "Hi, I am Nupur. Would you like something? Tea or Coffee?"

The girl nodded her head.

"Ok so Naina, tell me from the beginning. Your story will aware the people in our country...so go on and don't be hesitant."

"Ac...actually" Naina was hesitant to speak.

Nupur pressed her shoulders to comfort her "There is no need to worry....we are with you and everyone will be with you"

Naina took a deep breath and continued "I was very happy that day, my friend told me that he was planning to propose me. I was all ready in my favourite black...."

Hearing those words Nupur lost into the flashes of her past...



I was all ready in my favorite black colored tunic shirt and three fourth legging, accessorized with black beaded necklace and hairs pinned up half falling on my shoulders. I blew off the strand coming over my forehead placing my lower lip over the upper one and applied the last stroke of strawberry lip-gloss on my lips. "I am ready baby, just coming for you"

I sat in my silver Honda OSM and drove to my college.

As usual when I stepped in front of the entrance gate, thousands of eyes were on me.... just on me... The Nupur Bhushan... you know. But for me, my boy was only one my Adi...Aditya. I saw him standing in front of the basket-ball court. Black sports jacket complementing his ruffled blue denims over a graffiti T shirt imprinting COOL. I ran towards him. In the meanwhile someone took my name, but who cares when my Adi is standing in front of me.




Scene: Cabin of MD (Sharma Enterprises)

"Mr. Sharma, I think this calls for a celebration tonight. As the deal is final so I think party at our place at 9"

Mayank smiled and then his gaze stopped at the photo frame having his and Nupur's photograph.

"Actually Mr. Clark, I promised to spend tonight with my wife. Today is our anniversary"

"Ohh...ofcourse...I mean congratulations. We can party on weekend, if you want"
"Yaah that will be fine"
"Ok so I'll take your leave"
"Sure"

After Mr. Clark left Mayank sat on his chair. He took the photo frame in his hands. "Happy Anniversary, Nupur"
Mayank rolled back into his past....



"Nervous" Samrat enquired
"Sort of" Mayank replied
"You have to just ask her for a date dude"
"Not at all. I am leaving"
"Mayank, be a man and ask her"
"Don't question my gender, Samrat?" Mayank gave him a hard look
"Look, she is here. You have just go and ask her. Its simple."
"Simple? Do you think asking her for a date is simple? If I'll ask her, I'll get to know one thing only."
"What?"
"Her shoe size"
"You have to just call her name and invite her for a dinner or a coffee. Just go and ask." Samrat pushed him forward."Go, go"

Like always she was looking stunning in her black attire. But today a different glow was there on her face. It matched with her lips. In no moment, she passed by me and I heard Samrat hissing "Stop her, you idiot"
I remembered why I was standing here and called her "Nupur" and turned towards her.

She didn't took notice of me and moved away.

"You idiot. Couldn't you stop her before?" Samrat scolded me and I turned towards him.

Samrat was blabbering in front of me, giving me lectures on how to impress girls but I just want Nupur to take notice of me atleast. I don't want to impress girls, I just want to impress a single girl and that is Nupur. I love her like hell.

"Dude, I know you like her, but to be with her you'll have ask her" Samrat came in between my thoghts
"Hmm.." I nodded I love her you idiot but why should I tell you




Firstly tell me the idea of reading the story from two point of views. Is it fine or should I change it?
This will be quiet a short FF. Do tell me everything what you liked what you disliked (except that it was short 😆 I know am never able to fulfill this wish of yours)

Waiting for your comments eagerly.



Wish you a very Happy and Prosperous New Year 2011 !!!!!



Edited by .Daksha. - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#46

first of all thank GOD u updated i was thinking that u will not write it.i am really very happy that u updated.i liked ur writing style past and present together,i can't be able to comment on it because it is just a first part and i only know that mayu loves her but what happened and is happening i will know after u update next part.but this part is lovely with mix emotions.i liked it and plz do continue soon i be waiting😊😳

Edited by mahakmev - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#47
amazing concept daksha........i loved it lots..........i dont think there is a need to change anything.........do continue soon.......loved it lots....
nd wishing you a very happy nd prosperous new year in advance..........
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Posted: 14 years ago
#48
nice, lovely part. loved it.
continue soon.
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Posted: 14 years ago
#49
wow
its is good to write the story in 2 mindsets
i am comfortable with it ...
gr8 concept
keep updating
n
HAPPY NEW YEAR

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waitin for ArTi.....together again
Edited by dhano_arti - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#50
i had falllen in love with the concept

but now i love the update

awesome yaar

itz gr8


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