[MG] FF~ In Love With Enemy(I) updt new thrd?

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-Veritaserum-

@-Veritaserum-

Rocker

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Posted: 14 years ago

#781

loved it....... it was awesome

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anupam

@shining_moon

Dazzler

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Posted: 14 years ago

#782

this time I m completely SPEECHLESS

I really don't know wat to say or type

ok I will try to pen down wat I felt after reading it

lets start from starting.........................

was wondering how did chief escaped but the way u showed was totally unexpected n ofcourse much worthy as u wrote earlier for chief "death n I were pronounced together".....it fully jstify the dialogue👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

I have one lil confusion su loves aadi though she is unaware of it but why did she behaved rudely with geet wen they kidnapped her again?????

it was so thrilling that I actually visvualised the whloe thing

now the most awaited part..........

both were desperate to talk to each other but chief's duty n geet's ego.......but love always finds its ways n so it did

poor geet ek jhalak ke liye thappad khana pada😆

but really loved the last part

I really can't explain wat I was feeling reading that part but it was extraordinarily amazing

the way he pacified her seems like he owned her...awww that was so cute😍

just loved it

though I was speechless I still wrote a lot...hah me n my talking habit😆

do keep writing just can't stop reading it again n again

Edited by shining_moon - 14 years ago

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Downhill

@Downhill

Inactive

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Posted: 14 years ago

#783

hiiii reet😛

thanks for the sweet reply to my comment....infact its u who made me blush now..............😳

u always surpass our expectations with the creativity and narration skill of urs...........👏

i seriously want u to consider writing as a profession...and mark my words ur books will sell as hot cakes.....they will be literally flying off the book shelves................u do have loads of potential...sweety😃

IF ppl shud include some more buttons below each post...

LOVE, DROOL..................😆😆

i am speechless,breathless and basically hyperventilating😆

is it the character sketch, or the plot or the updates, or the writer, or the intensity that makes me blabber lose my senses after reading each explosive update........👏

i guess its the combination of all..........

each and every part of the update had its significance....the continuation was superbbbbbbbb..⭐️

the way u portray both of them completely obsessed with other's thoughts....oblivious to the world around them....makes me visualize each scene of urs.........and thats somethng very difficult for a writer to do...unless the writer is of brilliant calibre..👏

the SLAP, maan getting DRUNK........and then the brief romantic moments😳 shared by them........simply floored me ................

u simply bewitch and keep us enchanted with ur mindnumbing and mesmerising updates......👏

choice of songs is also so beautiful, apt and fabulous with wonderful lyrics.......

the best part of ur FF...so many fantastic monologues....little talking between them....yet conveying all their emotions, feelings, through their eyes, expressions and silence...silence is indeed golden...............⭐️

the little part of advice/message tht you gave amidst ur update was simply superbbbbbbbbbbb and apt......

i am literally falling short of words........coz words wont be able to describe the happiness and the feeling of daze that i feel after i read ur updates..........simply mindblowing..........👏

it often surprises me how can someone maintain the same intensity, passion consistently everytime u write...coz it requires lot of thinking, imagining, efforts, time and energy...

and its always a delight to see u getting so many wonderful comments from so many readers........... so i read ur updates and the comments given by ur readers.........and that just practically makes my day..........as if its me who is getting all the adulation....

hats off to u👏

and one more thing

today i wud really like to thank u for taking so much pains to give us such delightful, fabulous updates......

i guess i can go all ga ga over u and ur writing the whole day...

i will spare some space and comments for others...........😆😆

love u and ur ff😛

keep writing

god bless you

reva😃

Edited by Dreamy_Mystique - 14 years ago

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maanmishti

@maanmishti

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#784

loved adi the way he saved su😊.......at last su cried for adi......the way adi said trying knowing while she was crying was awesome....loved their love for each other......how they trusted chief and r grateful to him👏.......the back ground music made the scene more effective😍......when adi addressed them as soldiers i felt there must be a strong reason for them to be like this covered😭......(reet i like the way u explained abt importance of life......seriously it moved me👏).....i felt sad when chief was feeling helpless😭.......he cant go away from his feelings nor he can accept them......oh my god chief cooked every time for geet ☺️.....how sweet....but was sad when he slapped her😭......for that scene hate su😡.....she is the one who deserves slap not geet.......loved the way he was hurt when he slapped her😉....at last the romantic part......they r opening their feelings closely.......i loved the way he possessed her.....i loved their conversation......abt love....trust....feelings........last line was awesome until u stop crying he is crazily in love with her...........todays update on a whole is breathtaking update sweety............anyways reet update soon........cant wait to read more......actually i cant wait till tomorrow but i dont have any other option..........anyways honey love u.....plzzzzz plzzzzz plzzzzzz update soon🤗

Edited by maanmishti - 14 years ago

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esheena

@esheena

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#785

hawwwwwwwwww wat u did to me i m fainting im fainting i faint *thud* lol i m totally speechless wat u did to me whole day i just crave 4r ur update 😳😳😳

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Sarita

@AnonMSK

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#786

U compelled me to switch on my pc and write a response coz writing my heart out using my phone seemed to be impossible.😉

Now it is my turn to be at loss, complete loss. Ur response overwhelmed me.😳

Did u seriously miss me, omg'..🤗

What should I say, I don't know''., m 2 happy to voice my feelings.😊

i was being so skeptical while writing my last response, tht hw r going to tk it😕, wht if u felt i was dissatisfied wid ur wrk😭. i just loved ur reponse, dont know hw many tyms did i read it, again n again😳

My exams did go very well, thanks 4 d wishes, wud surely tell u my result when it dawns upon.😆

Must tell u one thing reet, why do become a nervous wreck while putting up an update.😕 I m sure every one out here loves ur FF, n v r always honest while responding back. U know wen I read it in d beginning tht u r ready for gaalis n stuff, I wonder after finishing, where d hell did u feel tht u r going wrong. Ur FF goes according to ur wish, thts d best part.😃

So stop over exerting n panicking tht u might not be able to meet d raised standards.😆

Coming to tis update, simply superb!!! 👍🏼🤗

Were u lyk awake d whole night spending it on IF'''.😉

Every single emotion, d monologues every single thing just stood out.❤️

Although my fav was wen u went little out of track and talked abt preciousness of life, can't agree more with anything else.

N yes hw can I 4get LOVE TO SEE U CRY part, it hit me like nothing else.😊

Love to see u cry by Enrique is my fav song(I hate to hear it coz its so painful, beautifully painful. U know thts d thing wid me, running away from emotions coz they affect me really strangely. That's why my life involves 99% fiction, now I sound weird n cynical, nhi'😳)

M desperately waiting 4 d next part n witness more battles with emotions.

Tk care

With luv

Sarita😊

Edited by sarita21992 - 14 years ago

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ansah

@SahSah

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#787

out of world reet....as aweome as always

loved it to core....keep rocking.

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vivacious_gurl

@vivacious_gurl

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 14 years ago

#788

reetu i hate u for this.... u first made me addicted to bin tere n now am getting addicted to In Love With Enemy...... i hate u for this..... 😆😆😆😆😆

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shivangi783

@shivangi783

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#789

Hi Reet🤗

I read your replies for my previous comment. You truly deserve all the praise! 😊

And yeah, that part skipped outta my mind, the initial parts of Maan at police station. The dialogues and setting was too good!👏

Coming to the latest update, it was again awesome. I love reading your long updates, and this was much longer than the previous ones. 😊

I was curious to know how Chief escaped and the fate of his most trusted counterparts. You explained it very nicely with minute details. Adi escaped with little injuries but as soon as he saw Sunaina about to fall on a sharp rock, he rushed towards her saving her but himself getting brutually hurt. Sunaina's concern, worry was visible there through her tears. She's seen blood many times in her profession but seeing Adi in a pool of blood shook her and her feelings came to the forefront, though she didn't admit it straightforwardly.

I loved this line-so deep and thought provoking!

"Human mind is the most intricate and unpredictable creation of God"

And then you almost scared me-Chief inside the burning truck. My heart almost skipped a beat that time! I am just attached to the characters in this fic, specially Chief, Geet and Adi. Adi rushed to the burning truck despite of being badly hurt. Such is his dedication and love for his Chief. Not just him, but Su, Yash and Rishi also.

BTW I think you mistyped here. It has to be Rishi in the following line and not Yash, since yash was already standing there with Su while Rishi was hanging from the tree.

"Save yash .........giving the order Aadi headed to the fire....

I will come with you ...two of them said in unison .....

No you save yash ......quick ..........he shouted and disappeared behind the smokes..he couldn't proceed fast as the fire hindered his way"

Anyhow, moving further, I was just too scared reading this part. No trace of Chief or his belongings was just scaring me. And then they found him. He was hurt, bleeding profusely, unconscious but alive!!!

I love reading the monologues you write. Chief's and Geet's monologue were written too beautifully. Both of them asking questions to themselves as to why the other affects them so much. Each one of them is experiencing things, feelings unknown to them. Both have never been in this love. And this phase of realization of this feeling is the most interesting part of any relationship.

Geet's monologue when she was wanting to see Chief, to have a glance of him, to talk to him was so written so intricately. Geet not eating her food, refusing to have soup later in orderto make Chief come inside and force her to have so that she can see him. All her feelings, the desperation to see him has been beautifully conveyed!

Maan avoiding Geet but taking care that she has her meals so that she's strong. He wants her to be fit and fine so that she can be back to her home. He isn't worried if she would complain against him-all he's now worried about is "her".

The slap hurt more Maan than Geet who received it. He was pained to see the shock, hurt, disappointment in her eyes. He wanted to escape from these feelings but he fails everytime. Her face always flashes in front of him. He just can't separate her from himself. He kept on drinking to escape from all the thinking, all the feeling reeling inside him but little did he know that soon he's going to rush to her, to be with her, to caress her.

And the part that followed was described in an amazing manner! It was intense and passionate! The feelings, both of Maan and Geet were evident in this part. Geet wasn't protesting when Maan was touching her, kissing her. She was wriggling but that was out of anger as to why he ignored her the whole day and when he came he slapped her instead of talking to her. And Maan under alcohol's influence forgot all his promises to stay away from her. His actions and his words reflected all his emotions, hurt, desire. I loved reading this part-even with very little conversation, they talked a lot with each other. And when she tells him that she trusts him, he found it so difficult to digest this fact that he went away from her. They are unknowingly getting bound in an unknown relationship which started with 'hate' and now a new element has come in it-'trust'!

And I read the little note you wrote in between. Very true. Sometimes people take life for granted. And it happens with almost everyone at some point of time. The thing which matters is how soon the person realizes the value of 'life'.

And I wish all the happiness for you in your life😊

May you get everything your heart desires😊

Love you🤗