Originally posted by: pagli91
Heyy Akki 🤗
Hey 😃
So am back reading ur FF after such a looong time So glad about that. :)) and i was so enjoying catching up too that i was commenting on every lil thing, like rambling bwt everything i liked in each part which clearly my laptop didn't like coz it crashed.. TWICE..Ouch. (thrice now but if u read the next part u will understand how i caught up again) wen trying to post! But now i am taking precautionary measures and copying and pasting after every paragraph.. 😳
Seriously i spent ages writing and analysing and now itss all gone but i will rewrite it coz this FF and ur writing and ur sense of humour is just way too special not to comment on. Awe, thanks a ton, Fahi. This means a lot. 🤗
So i had to re-read the first parts to get back into it but i am starting to comment from chapter 5 coz thats where i finished last..
Btw i think i have mentioned before but i have to say that i love the conversations the two of them have with their conscience, especially Mayank.. by God his conscience is its own person.. too funny it is.. 😆 I am glad you like it. :) ok so here goes:
Chapter 5:
Ok so a special mention to Mayank's conscience over here coz i loved him here. 😆Ooh and i loved the change in Nupur here too.. the way she melted is just lovely. Staring at the ceiling, I sang nursery rhymes, Dexter's Laboratory, Swat Kats. . .I sang their songs too. Here they come just in time, the Powerpuff Girls!
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Omdz i rofl'd at this... poor Mayank going to extreme measures to block out Nupur's thots and remaining unsuccessful every time. 😆😆😆
Okkk then the kiss at the end.. tbh it was so unexpected coz it was so sudden but it was certainly a pleasant surprise.. Go Nupur.. ⭐️
I was shocked at the end about how it all happened but i read chapter 5 and it all made sense. 😎😆😆 Awe, I am pleased to know it made you laugh. Its like my ultimate goal on earth. 😆 Thank you, hun. :)
Chapter 6: So i said in chapter 3 that it was my fave part so far but i take that back coz this is most definitely my favourite part. After i read this part i remembered exactly why i became such of fan of this FF in the first place.. ur perfectly placed humour.. 👍🏼
There is just sooo much i wanna say about this chapter but will try and keep it to a minimum.. 😃
You really outdid urself with this chapter. 👏👏👏 With force equal to double her mass multiplied by acceleration more than a jet plane's, she thrusted me upon the wall. (Force = Mass x Acceleration, was Newton's second law of motion, I remembered.) God! Mumbaities were born with muscles or what? I am going to stay firm on my resolve. Gym calling from tomorrow. I mean, this girl was manhandling me. I was like some dumb heroine of Hindi films and she, the tyrannical hero who later falls in love with the simplicity of the heroine. Stop Mayank, you are talking NONSENSE.
🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣 You have no idea how much this part made me rofl.. he was thinking about Newton at such a moment?? 🤣🤣 Not just one but three theoriess??? 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣 He pauses from the kiss coz of his conscience?? I mean really this part is just too good yaar. 👏 Oh and i thot it was so sweet what Mayank was thinking about her being the one and all... so so sweet.
And I knew, I would never be the same again.
This line really stood out for me.. it was so simple yet so bful. 👍🏼
And the rest of it was so cute and sweet, what more can i say? So happy though.. he told her he likes her.. as a fan was not so happy with her verbal response but as a reader i understand that she went way beyond her own characteristics and showed him what he means to her through actions.. but can't wait for the verbal revelation too.. 😃
Also have to mention loved Mayank's remark about Mubaities once again.. now its like your updates aren't complete without them. 😆 Thank you, thank you, thank you. Okay what do i say? i'm elated you decided to stick to this FF and give me individual reviews. its a real pleasure. thank you. :) 🤗
Chapter 7: However, I had full idea of how his glare x-rayed my body. I mean I wasn't even a girl! Funny!😆😆😆 Lol curse of the mummy.. haha i do like that film tho, Mummy 2..yeah me too. 😆 Though curse of the mummy is like this curse that is placed on archaeologists when they open the tombs of the pharaoh or something like that. I think i was making a project on it when i wrote this chapter. 😆 ok thats besides the point but yh..
Mayank, your anger level plotted versus time could make a funny graph!
😆 If Mayank's conscience was an actual person i would love to be his friend.. i like!! 😆 Actually credit goes to u seeing as its all ur ideas.. 👏👏 Awe, thank you. 🤗
He didn't even have dimples! And his smile wasn't as gorgeous as mine! Yippee!)
😆😆 U know what now i am having a tough time deciding who i like more, the conscience or Mayank...😕 oh well its all one and the same right?? 😳 Yep, its all the same. its like this thing, that whenever you are doing something, you have this somebody inside you telling you to do the exactly opposite. So yeah, I build on that. If you read the chapters thinking that Mayank is not that innocent and sappy as he is, you'd understand. its like there are latent personalities of his, that come out in front of Nupur. :))
My left bloody foot! And the stinking sock too!
Dude ur killing me laughter over here!! 😆😆
Awww poor Mayank tho.. poor Nupur too actually.. they are both so confused and the only thing in their way in Sam..plz remove him, distract him with Gunjan..
Loved the 'every action has an equal and opposite reaction' so wonderfully fitting.. very nicely done. 👍🏼
LMAO... Bharatnatyam no Khatakalli?? 😆😆😆 Really Mayank?? 😆 He certainly is one of a kind.. 😆
Aww and double aww.. change SIP to SS.. 😃😃😃
Oh man Samrats not gonna give up easily.. nice to see he cares so much but if Nupur is happy then he should back off too..
Ok loved the end.. i have not enough words to say how much. 😍 Seen this particular scene so many times but it never gets old..
Push him away and increase the inches between us, is what I should have done. Pull him closer and place my lips on his, is what I actually did.
Yaaayyy Nupur.. good girl!! 👍🏼
Cannot wait to read the next part but i must.. 🥱 Aww, I am so glad to have read this comment, Fahi. you have no idea. Thanka a lot. Its really good to know you enjoy reading this stuff. 😃
Ok so for now this is all i can write coz i gotta get going but not to worry coz i will most definitely be back for the rest.. its too good to stop reading but sleep is calling and how.. so byess... 😃😃😃
PS just realised.. its almost been a year since i read this...
Ok anyways, be back soon. 😃 yeah, id wait patiently. 😃 thanks a lot. 🤗
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