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Rida Fareed

@qazplm

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#1051

I still can't get over this FF...no matter how much I try to forget it, it pulls me back and I re-read it again. Please update...you can't let such an interesting story be unfinished...it demands to be written.

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DEVIKA / DEE

@DEE2803

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#1052

hey waiting 4 update ....please do so soon n please dont forget 2 PM

thanx

DEVIKA
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nyxx

@nyxx

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#1053

Heyyyy where are you girl!

Ive been IMMENSELY missing your ff, and no matter how much i try to think that youre busy and will continue it later..but i just cant get over it...i RE-READ all your updates when i have time...and i still cant get tired of it..i have like each update memorized..its crazyy LOL i know..

But PLEASEEE DOOOO CONTINUE SOON!

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Vaishnavi

@-ialwayswill-

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#1054

Hey LADYYYY, i'll KILL you if you dont update this FF...

Already the forces of 'i dont know what' have let me sit deprived off the pleasure of reading such an amazing work of fiction :D

Theres too many things i got to say bout this, firstly, kisi kameene ne mujhe ni bataya ki itna acha FF abhi tak maine nni pada :O..[SHILPAA i hate you :P]

And now, i'l replly only when u show ur thopda here again, updating the next part ;)

I'll type up the comments somewhere coz..as uaual memory loss :P and i dont wanna anything i wanna say to u :P

So come here soon, and enlighten us ur presence ...tu aye na aye, Part zaroor aye 🤣

LOL

Loveee,

Vaishuu :P

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sweet.melody

@sweet.melody

Inactive

+ 5

Posted: 14 years ago

#1055

Originally posted by: vaish04
Hey LADYYYY, i'll KILL you if you dont update this FF...

Already the forces of 'i dont know what' have let me sit deprived off the pleasure of reading such an amazing work of fiction :D

Theres too many things i got to say bout this, firstly, kisi kameene ne mujhe ni bataya ki itna acha FF abhi tak maine nni pada :O..[SHILPAA i hate you :P]

And now, i'l replly only when u show ur thopda here again, updating the next part ;)

I'll type up the comments somewhere coz..as uaual memory loss :P and i dont wanna anything i wanna say to u :P

So come here soon, and enlighten us ur presence ...tu aye na aye, Part zaroor aye 🤣
LOL

Loveee,
Vaishuu :P

eyyyyyyyy mind it!!! kya bak rahi hai mere baare main? 🤣

It is an awesome FF .. I dont know where Sheenz gayabed though 😆

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Vaishnavi

@-ialwayswill-

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#1056

Originally posted by: sweet.melody

eyyyyyyyy mind it!!! kya bak rahi hai mere baare main? 🤣

It is an awesome FF .. I dont know where Sheenz gayabed though 😆

CHUP kar jaa !!..kameeeni you dint even temme we have such an awesome FF here :@ :@ i was suppose to be mad at you and i forgot it 🤣

I'm MAD :P

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...Aphrodite...

@...Aphrodite...

Navigator

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#1057

Slowly but Surely...

Hey guys...
First of all a hugggeeeeee thank you to all the love I've got for this ff. I haven't updated in 7 months and I still get sooo much appreciation. It's melts my heart!

I hope some of you will be happy to know that I'm in the middle of the next chapter!!

Yay!

Problem: I've lost touch with writing big...time!

I say it all the time....but 7 months is a lot of time to lose sync. So instead of staring intently at my computer screen wanting to rip my hair out, I thought I'd ask for help from the real bosses...you guys. You guys give amazing critique and every time i posted a chapter up your comments gave me ideas and inspiration into the next chapter.

So this isn't orthodox...and I'm sure FF writers don't do this but heck...I don't follow the rules.

My question: What has been your favorite part(s) of Breathless so far?

It can be a chapter, a scene, a sentence...whatever you want.

I need to know what I'm doing right...be as specific as you possibly can. This is your chance (probably the one and only) to tell me exactly what you like and what you want!

The next chapter will be up after my finals which end on 17th Dec...and if i haven't shot myself dead after them, I should have a chapter up the following week. I'm excited!

I've finally set a date so if I don't fulfill it...feel free to abuse me!

Love you guys!

...Aphrodite...

Edited by ...Aphrodite... - 14 years ago

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nyxx

@nyxx

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#1058

Heyyyyyyyyyyy YOUUU!!

Firstly, im SO GLAD that you're back...i had absolutely lost hope that this ff would continue but you surprised me girll and thank you soo much for that :)

Okie so for your question...

What really got me addicted to your ff..is ARMAAN-RIDDHIMA..lol..kk jokes apart..but i loved the feelings and emotions you described in the first 2 or 3 parts...i still remember how armaan and riddhima had that phone conversation..though less meaningful words were exchanged but there was yet soo much meanning to it..like you know what i mean? It just felt like they knew each other...even though they didnt....they had that sense of bond and security between each other..and i could actually feel it...and especially the description of the eyes...the first thing that they both saw in each other were the EYES ;) So Id love to see some more mystical bonding between them...😳

Next, finally when riddhima got to their home...the mingling between all the friends was very nice...and it felt so calm and just so right :)😊...every character has its unique trait...and thats what really brings them out of the crowd :)...

Then, that little bit of Armaan Riddhima bickers was nice....and then, the beach scene...and TRUTH AND DARE :O....LOVEDDD THAT! and again...there was some unknown bond between AR...their eyes were speaking for them...i really liked that :)

and then BANG....the next scene that followed made me LAUGH!...that silicone....i loved the use of words and vocab that was used there :D JUST SUPERB! and then...obviously the cute sorry's that followed.....

the car ride was nice as well...AR's bond grew...and same goes for the couples...while keerti talked to shubankar on the phone..nikz and abhi were romancing..while rahul muski were just starting another phase of their life together...and atul-anjali were just talkinggg ;)...

and then...also...the AR scene that followed was nice...them sharing their taste on music...and falling asleep.. for a new beginning :)

Your ff has also been very realistic.....very simple and easy to relate to :D...

I dont know if this helped...since i think i just kinda refreshed my own memories of this ff..and im actually superbly surprised that i remember so much...but again I LOVEEEE THIS FF :D

I hope you continue this veryyyyy soooon Shrinzieee :D

Take care!

and cant wait or December 17th :D...continue sooon :D

and i wonder what may happen next ;)

-devu

Edited by Armaan-KSG - 14 years ago

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Rida Fareed

@qazplm

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#1059

Okie YOU LITERALLY MADE MY DAY😳

I had almost given hope that my favorite FF ever would be left incomplete...and just 3 days ago, I printed out your whole FF(140 pages) and was reading it in my free time today.

Thank you so much for thinking about us and coming back🤗You really have no idea how happy this makes me🤪

This was my intial reaction. Will reply about what you asked in a couple of minutes.

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MelodiousDreams

@MelodiousDreams

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#1060

SHRINZIE!

Remember me? 🤔 (It's been a looong time, but I'm so happy to hear from you! Hope you're doing well!)

Anyhow...I was originally going to reply to the favorite part question with this obvious answer: Two words, one couple: Atul-Anjie!

But then I read the part about being specific, and I'm sitting here thinking, "How can I possibly be specific if I love EVERYTHING about Atul and Anj in Breathless?!"

I don't think this is going to be helpful at all, because I'm hopelessly attached to Atul-Anjie anyways, and whatever you have written so far is "extremely enjoyable" with two capital "e's"...But for your sake I'll try to hit some of the main points that I remember being drawn to instantly. Off the top of my head (somewhat randomly), then:

- Atul's attitude and Anjali's reactions, and vice-versa, of course: I decided to take a peek at the last chapter you posted, and came across the text messages between Atul and Anjie.

"Delete it?! This photo is as rare as the solar eclipse. I plan on making a lot of money out of it...but until then...you'll see it as my screensaver. Sweet dreams gorgeous."

All the texts are awesome, but I loved the implicit teasing/sarcasm/"almost-complimentary-tone-but-not-quite-since-Atul-is-probably-more-intent-on-annoying-Anjie-right-now"-ness of the entire exchange, which pretty much is their uniqueness factor as far as I can tell.

Which brings me to my next point...

- The perpetual battle of wits that goes on between these two has been so much fun so far, and I'm sure you'll continue making their interactions just as enjoyable to read, if not more!

Random bit that I feel like quoting:

Anjali looked at her reflection in the mirror and groaned. Looking back at her was the epitome of frustration with long dark hair wrapped up in a messy bun, two stiff hands resting at her hips and the bottom half of her white tank and stripy pink shorts drenched with water. Laying limp in her mouth was her butchered toothbrush, which she had abused for the best of the last ten minutes trying to brush the blue from her icecream off of her tongue and teeth.

The way you describe Anjali here is funny (I love how you've laced everything with a little bit of humor - at least a lot of the major AA parts I remember had me smiling and laughing, so that's always a good thing) but it also reveals some aspects of her personality and her feelings at that point. Words that sort of jumped out at me, for example: "epitome of frustration", "messy bun", "drenched with water", "butchered toothbrush, which she had abused...trying to brush the blue...off her tongue and teeth".

The way you describe her appearance hints at her feelings, and I love when writers do that! Your story flows...The descriptions are seamlessly integrated into the chapters along with dialogues, so everything is extremely easy to read. As a result, it's equally easy to get caught up in the world of these characters. I may have said this before, but when I read this FF, I can truly imagine the actors here. Especially Pankit and Sunaina. The banter is SO lively that I feel like I'm watching them act everything out as I read.

Umm, I think I'll just leave it at that for fear of ranting on and on, because I'll ultimately end up saying that you should just keep the wit and humor intact and see where things go from there...The sweetness is hidden beneath all the banter, many, many, many layers below the surface, but that's the best thing about Atul and Anjali here! I can't wait to see how you handle things from here on out because the two of them together have been nothing short of explosive so far!

Much love,

Borna