Rahul and Muskaan in Lonavala - pg23 - last part - Page 10

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Posted: 16 years ago
#91

Originally posted by: indianchaklii

awe i loved it when muskaan got jealous hehe

AMAZING!

Originally posted by: monadarling2628

i smell jealousy! cute update. thanks for the pm.
continue soon and pm me as usual.
love,
mona :]

Originally posted by: snow white

i am sure when Kavita came muskaan zaroor jealous hue ho ge
well that's a very cute update
continue it
:-)

Originally posted by: luv_dmg_armaan

heyyy!!

HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!
hope you have an awesum day!!!
awesome update :P very cute!! Muskaan is jealous oo oo
lol very cute

tc
radhika


Thanks! I do love to see her jealous. It happens so rarely. Atleast it made the story less emotional.

Originally posted by: leaves45

loved it. awesome. fantastic. superb. excellent. amazing. mindblowing. bravo. just....................................speechless.👏

Haha! Saima, it was not quite that good but thanks anyway.

Originally posted by: ~srk_abhi_apu~

Awww.....wonderful update Sonia!!!...Ur very talented ....Keep it going...well done!!!!

Thanks Sanah dear... (hopefully no more drama)

Originally posted by: lupin01

hey sonia brilliant job hun👍🏼👍🏼 lovely update ,tremendous work👏👏👏& thanxx 4 d pm continue soon & pm me .......

Originally posted by: coolmimz

awesome..and thxz 4 the pm

Thanks guys!

Originally posted by: sweetdamage

Hey!!! just caught up with this fanfic of yours..and I must say that I wish I could have these sort of dreams as well! I mean it would be like watching DMG...even in your sleep!! :P

but you write sooo well! and I absolutely love your fanfic! please update soon!! :D:D

Thanks for the compliment. Your writing is like a million times better.
I know. Its nice to watch my own RM focussed DMG show in my sleep. Its hard for me to focus on RM in the dreams though. You have no idea what weird stuff I dream of. I wish I was more normal.

Originally posted by: goodkashish

it was such a cute part....good to see muskaan is getting joelous.......ple ple ple continue....thanks............it was wonderful ........

Thanks Kashish for your continuous support.
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Posted: 16 years ago
#92
So... thank you very much for reading and commenting. I am not sure how much I am going to continue. I think I will make it shorter than I planned. Maybe a summary of the dream. I have plenty more so... as long as you will read and comment, I will write. Hopefully will write some today or tomorrow.
Edited by SuhaniSonia - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#93
oh pls write today.. i was scared u wld not write at all.
srry for trouble in wwrm. i jst did not like it.
Edited by stellarwind - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#94
Hmm... so I am going to try to make this short. I am really bad at that. I tend to drag out scenes forever so I am going to summarize (I hope).
You can enjoy WWRM 11 which also deals with them going to Lonavala and I am sure it will be much better. 😉 https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/dill-mill-gaye/1080169/weekend-wid-rahul-muskaan-11
Edited by SuhaniSonia - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#95
Don't mind me. I like to talk to myself so I just write messages randomly. Its me thinking out loud.
Ok so I think this is one of the last parts. I wanted to finish it but it was getting too long for me but I will finish it soon. 😊

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Muskaan - Gadhe!.. Tujhe kya?

Rahul - Gadhe??? Ab kya kiya hai maine? Tu nah shuru ho jaati hai..

Muskaan - Ab fursat mili hai mujhse baat karne ki.. Tu apni 'achi si dost' se bathein kar.. Mujhe thang mat kar..

Rahul smiles thinking she must be jealous..atleast thats some emotion he is getting from her.

Kavita.. after getting off the phone..

Kavita - Tumari shaadi hui bhi hai ? Itna ladte ho?

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Rahul - Haan haan.. koi shak hai? Bas raat se bahar hain na toh mood karab hai hum dono ka.
Kavita - Haan yeh toh dikh raha hai ke tumhari raat achi beethi toh nahin hogi.. (pointing to his ripped clothes)
Muskaan again starts thinking of what happened the night before, becomes quiet, and eventually drifts to sleep. Rahul continues on chatting with Kavita and catching up.
They finally arrive at Lonavala at night.
Rahul - Muskaan chal hum yahan ponch gahe hain. Aur raat bhi hogi. Andhar ja ke so jaana.
Rahul opens the back door for Muskaan and notices she is still sleeping.
Rahul - Muskaan? (nudges her slightly)
He contemplates yelling at her to wake her up but she looks so at peace that he doesn't want to bother her. He lifts her out of the car in his arms. He walks holding her but can't take his eyes off her for a second.
Kavita - Hmm.. ab pyar dekhliya.. ab koi shak nahin..
Rahul actually blushes.
They are taken to their respective rooms by the guard as everyone else is sleeping.
Rahul is trying to get Muskaan to the bed but because he is so distracted by just staring at her face he bumps into some furniture in the dark and there drops Muskaan on the ground.
THUD!!!
Muskaan - Oooouuuuuuccccchhhh!
Muskaan is trying to wake up from her sleep to become accustomed to her new surroundings in the dark when her view falls on Rahul staring down at her with his mouth wide open and his hand in front of his face.
Rahul (thinking) Ab toh daant parne wali hai. Yeh mere saath hi kyun hotha hai.
Muskaan - Rahul? Hum kahan hain? (getting up off the floor)
Rahul is taken aback with her question. He helps her get up and she still isn't hitting him or yelling at him.
He explains how they are here and that its too late to meet anyone yet.
Muskaan - Mera bag to bahar reh gaya hai Kavita ki car main.
Rahul - Umm.. main ja ke Kavita ko kehta hoon.
Muskaan not wanting him to go to her just says she will sleep in what she has on which ofcourse is all a mess from the previous night
Rahul - Aise kaise? Sun.. mere kapde pehen le.
Muskaan - Ok..
Rahul (thinking) - Kuch toh baath hai.. itni achi taran se usne kabhi bhi nahin bola aur man bhi gayi woh bhi bina ladaii ke.
Muskaan goes and put on a oversized white khurtha which is so long on her and comes out.
Rahul does a double take and again starts staring at her.. - So simple yet so beautiful.
Muskaan - Kya?
Rahul doesn't realize he just said that out loud and not just in his head.
Rahul - Umm.. woh yeh jaga beautiful hai na?
She just smiles slightly and goes to the bed and falls into it.
Rahul thinks she must be acting nice because she is so tired.. only if she was tired all the time.
He changes and falls asleep himself on the floor as usual.
Muskaan wakes up first as always and really early this morning as they went to sleep so early. She looks out and sees how gorgeous it was out there. There is a door leading to a terrace which leads right outside. She walks out into the cool air without shoes or any cover. Taking a fresh breath she closes he eyes and tries to inhale its essence. She opens her eyes and just in awe of the natural beauty and the birds chirping and small animals scurrying around. She goes out further and starts spinning around and slightly dancing to her own beat.
In the meanwhile Rahul also woke up and was quite worried not seeing her right away but then notices the door is open and sees her still wearing just the khurtha looking quite messy with her hair all over the place but the first word that came to his mind was .. sexy.

He leans against the terrace door and just watches her play.. like a child. Maybe this trip was the perfect thing for them. He feels so much more at ease and so does she.
As soon as she sees him watching her she tenses up and starts walking back. He is in his own world and she literally walks past him before he notices she even moved.
She walks out and goes and gets her bags from the car after meeting with Kavita at her room.
Kavita - Raat ko batha diya hotha ke kapde nahin the.
Muskaan - Nahin woh tumhe disturb nahin karna chathi thi aur phir yeh Rahul ke..
Kavita - Haan.. dikhra hai.. uske kapde... tum bohot lucky ho.. woh bohot acha ladka hai..
Muskaan - (thinks) - Lucky? Yea rite?

Muskaan is inquisitive about some things discussed - Ek baath puch sakthi hoon Rahul ke bade mein?
Kavita - Kya?
She basically asks about Sonia and his relationship with Kavita when ofcourse Rahul comes along.
Rahul - Meri baatein ho rahi hain?
Muskaan - Nahin toh. Main toh bas apne cheezen lehne aayi thi.
Rahul - Hmm..
She walks away quickly with her bag.
Rahul - Kya hua?
Kavita - Tune usse sach main kuch nahin bataya tha?
Rahul - Tune usse kya keh diya?
Kavita - Not much. Just that there was a girl Sonia that you were crazy about and that she loved Armaan who I heard is working with you guys and that she broke your heart.
Rahul - (getting frustrated) Yeh sab kehne ki kya zaroorat thi..
Kavita - Woh puch rahi thi toh maine kuch toh kehna pada.
Rahul - Ok ab rehne de.. main usse dekh ke atha hoon.
Rahul goes back to the room and sees that she is still getting ready but seemed a little perturbed and did not make eye contact with him.
Rahul - Muskaan? Kya hua? Tu itni chup kyun hai?
Muskaan turns her face away - Kuch nahin '
Rahul - Bata na' kya baat hai
Muskaan - Bola na' kuch nahin '
Rahul - Muskaan ' main dekh saktha hoon ki kuch baat zaroor hai' patha na.. aakhir tera pathi hoon '
Muskaan looks up at him.
Rahul - Jhooth moot ka.. magar hum saath rehte hain. Tujhe koi problem hai to mujhe batha sakti hai ' hum dost to hain ' na?
Muskaan realizes she cant act like this. He is going to keep asking her questions and she doesn't really have answers. The truth is she doesn't know why she feels so subdued. She isn't in the mood to fight or even talk too much for that matter.
Muskaan - Dost? - scoffs - Ab rehen de. Hum kaam karne aaye hai khi nahin? Chal..
They both go out and see all these kids running rampid.
Muskaan - Yahan pe toh yeh sab pagal bache kahan se aaye.
Rahul - Tu kya samaj rahi thi. Yeh hi toh hamare patients hain.
Muskaan - Kya??? Itne sare bachein.
Rahul - Tu toh khud bachi hai toh in bachon se kya darthi hai.
Muskaan - Dar kaun raha hai? Main toh kisi cheez se nahin darthi.
Rahul - Hmph smirks.. woh toh dekh lenge..
All the kids come running to Rahul screaming 'Rahul bhaiya'..
Rahul - Toh tumhe yaad hai ke main kaun hoon?
They were all excitedly screaming and surroudning both of them. Muskaan was obviously not comfortable.
Kid - Aap kitne dinon ke liye aaye ho bhaiya?
Rahul - Bas aaj shaam ko hi jaana hai.
Kid - Magar humein kaun dekhe ga.. Bhua toh gayi.
Rahul - Kya? Kahan?
They find out from the children and guard that 'bhua' had an emergency and Kavita offered to drive her but no one told them this morning that they would have to take of the children. The guard gave them a letter from her which stated the same thing.
Muskaan - Kya? Humein yahan ek saath ek hafte ke liye rehna pade ga. She was visually disturbed by this.
Rahul was also a little concerned but then thought that this may be the perfect opportunity together except for all these kids.
Muskaan - Hum in saare bachon ko kaise samalenghe?
Rahul - Tension mat le yaar.. dekh lenge.. pehle kaam jo karne ke liye aaye the woh toh karlein.
Rahul goes back out with Muskaan to face the children going wild.
Rahul - Bachon!
They actually listen to him right away and come running. They finally notice Muskaan is there.
Another Kid - Bhaiya yeh kaun hai?
Rahul - Yeh Dr muskaan hai.
Kid - Armaan bhaiya aur Riddhima didi ko kyun nahin laye?
R - Is baar aap Dr Muskaan se mil lijiye. Bohot achi hain aur tumhe bohot pasand aayegi.
Muskaan is surprised that he is actually making her sound good and she is also surprised that he is so good with these kids and pretty much with everyone. She definitely does not want to look deficient so she starts trying as well.
They separate the girls and boys into lines for their physical and shots. Muskaan is really getting into this. - Helloji .. aap ka naam kya hai?
All the girls keep asking her how she looks so pretty and how to put on makeup and fix their hair. Rahul is watching her and is proud of how she is behaving professionally and yet still interacting with the children.
Kid - goes to Muskaan - Didi.. aap bohot khoobsoorat lag rahi ho!
Rahul goes there and puts his hand up..
- Shaytan! Chal yahan se.. flirt kar raha hai.. meri biwi se?
Kid - Tum dono married ho? Lag toh nahin ra tha.
Rahul - (thinks) - Ab bachon ko bhi nahin lagtha ke hum saath hain. He feels bad about it but goes back to what he was doing.

They break for lunch and finally finish in the late afternoon.

Muskaan - Rahul - Hum sath dinon tak kya karein ge inke saath?
Rahul - Bhua waise school main subjects paddathi hain..
Muskaan - Humein unhe padanha pade ga?
Rahul - Jo bhi dil chahe.
Muskaan - Hmm.. unhe pooch lethe hain.. bachon aaj raat kya karna hai.. kuch schedule pe hai? Koi television program?
Rahul - whispers - Muskaan yahan koi tv nahin hai..
Muskaan - Kya?.. now even more concerned.. main to yahan mar hi jaoongi..
The kids yell out all these different things to do.
Rahul - Chalo aaj raat ek kahani suno ge?
They all scream and go to eat dinner first.
They decide to sit outside on the floor in this big gazebo.
Rahul decides to tell a story about this guy in college and a girl named Kavita and Sonia and another guy. Muskaan looks up at him and it is as if he is basically talking to her about everythung that happened in college but using different names. She is quite engaged in it and Rahul throws in some jokes to keep the kids happy. He did emphasize how it hurt him and she basically understood never to bring it up again.
They finally get the kids to go to sleep after running after them for the longest time. They go back to their own room and get ready for bed but are very quiet.
Muskaan - Rahul zameen pe kyun so rahe ho?
Rahul is confused by this question.
Rahul - points at her and then himself and then the bed .. irrhada kya hai?
Muskaan - Woh.. woh.. mera matlab yeh nahin tha.. woh yahan bohot kamre hain toh.
Rahul - Oh.. umm.. nahin main yahin hi theek hoon. Aadat si hogiye hai... aur tujhe dar nahin lagega?
Muskaan - Dar? Kis baat ka? Maine kaha ke main kisi cheez se nahin darthi hoon.
Rahul - Ok ok ab so ja..
Muskaan - mutters - Kya sojtha hai apne ap ko..
Rahul hears that and smiles.. thats more like her.. shes been so quiet..
She again wakes up bright and early. Muskaan actually gets ready and leaves the room smiling at Rahul still sleeping. She was hungry and also wondering what the kids were up to.
She bumps into one of the girls who is crying because this boy was teasing her.
Muskaan sympathizes - Yeh ladke bhi na..
Kid - Didi.. aapko bhi ladke thang karthein hain..
Muskaan - Hmm.. inko sabhak sikhana chahiye..
Kid - Kaise?
Muskaan is being devious and thinking of all these silly pranks. She finally decides to start with a simple one. They put a pail of water on the door and call the boy over. But low and behold who walks through the door but Rahul.
Rahul - sees her laughing hysterically - and smiles initially to see her happy and then screams.
Rahul - Muskaan!!! Ab dekh.. running after her
She shrieks and goes running herself along with the other girls. The boys chasing them as well.
He gets a hold of her and they both fall to the ground. She is struggling for a bit when she finally stops she notices he is just staring at her and she looks back. Their bodies are pressed against each other but neither one has any intention of moving just yet. His hair is wet and drops of cold water are dropping on her face which is a much needed relief as she is starting to feel really warm. And it doesn't help that she can feel his warm breath on her face as well. He starts leaning further in and she closes her eyes..
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Ok I know I suck... will continue as soon as I have some time.
⭐️ Preview: Football, antakshari, some play, and some romance mixed in. ⭐️
Edited by SuhaniSonia - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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very nice ,,,,,,,,,,ple continue..........story is getting very interstring..........thnks for pm..
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wow interesting part, beautiful update hun 👏.................... thanxx 4 d pm sonia plzz continue as early as possible .........& of course pm me 😉
Edited by lupin01 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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really interesting part and thanks 4 the pm
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Posted: 16 years ago
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your FF is much much much much much much much better than WWRM 11.totally.100%.absolutely.trust me.
and its not because i'm your friend.
i sent you back a PM. do read it!
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Posted: 16 years ago
OK wow ahmazing! like no words this is awesome... soo cute and liek RM.. you have to continue this for many parts like seriously this is teh best stuff ever... i look forward to reading your ff they are soo much closer to Rahul and Muski as portrayed on DMG and like seriously it doesn't matter what goes on in other topics u have got to contd this ff its too cute and sweet to be ended soon...Anyways thank you for making my day! u rock and your FF are just fab!

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