VEEBA OS:i can take away a part of my life but not life part 2 pg 2

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Posted: 11 years ago

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thank you everyone for the love and support.i got 209 views already within hours for my first ever os.dont worry i will continue tomorrow itself.the number of comments increases then the speed of update will also increase.please tell me guys if you want me to write the rest of the parts in hindi or english.comment below ur choice and i will take the majority.thanks once again and their is lot of exciting things happening in part 2.stay tuned and pls comment!!!!!!! 😊love u all...

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Posted: 11 years ago

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sanjana nice update sweety...continue soon

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Posted: 11 years ago

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PART 2

veera having enough of baldev's silence shouted at him

veera:baldev kuch pooch rahi hu main.javab de mainu.

baldev:tennu ghar chad deta hu main.aa ja..

veera who lost her patience by now,

veera:muje tumse javaab millke binna mai nahim jaungi kahi...baldev tuje meri kasam hai.javab de ki tu muje ab pyaar na karke bhi tum kyon itni taqleef uttakar yaha aaya mainu bachane vaaste..

(baldev who could not control it screamed out)

baldev:kyun ki mai tumse pyaar kartha hu aaj be...kall...aur apne zindagi bar kate rahoge...tu hi mera zindagii hai...mera saas hai...mujse judi hui har ek cheez teri yaadi dilaati hai.kyun ki mere andar mujse be zyaada tu rehte he.jaana tha na tannu sach...ye hai...

(veera who could not get out of the shock,tears rolled down her cheeks.)

veera:phir tum ne ek haftae muje ignore kyun kar rahe the?tum ne hi tho kaha na ki tum mujse pyaar nahi karte us din...

baldev:jab muje patha chala ki tu mera chehra bhi nahi dekh sakti aur mere saath tu kabhi kush nahi rah paayenge,tab maine jhoot kaha ki main tujse pyaar nahi karte.main bas tumhe kush dekhna chahta hun.

veera: b..baldev...main jaanti hun ke main maafi maangne ka bhi hakk nahi hai,lekin phir be...(burst into tears and falls at his feet)

veera:baldev main maaf kar do iam...sorry..

(baldev who could not bear to see his sherni cry bent downwards)

baldev:nahi veera...tu koi galat nahi kiya.main tere peeche peeche ghoomke tannu kitne pareshaan kiya.mainu maaf kar do...

(baldev and veera did not speak anything more and both got onto baldev's jeep and dropped veera at home)

veera:baldev!!!! ghar par koi nahi hai...muje laga ki current chali gayi...yahha chor aata hai raath par..kya tum 2-3 ghante ke liye aa saktha hu mere saath jab tak veerji aur beeji louthe hai?

baldev:theek hai..

(veera ran to the terrace...baldev followed her wondering what she is upto now)

veera:baldev aaj shukravar hai.aur har shukravar ko main yaha aata hun ek sithaara ko dekne ke liye sirf jo iss din aata hai.tu bhi aa..

baldev:theek hai mere maa...jo tumhari marzi...

veera:baldev kya tum mujse sach me pyaar kathe ho?

baldev:karu ya na karuu..yeh batake kya fydaa..tu to...mujse...ye chaddnaa...

tu kush hai to main be kush...sherni ko dhahadne main acha lagta hai...Roasring(roaring meant by baldev's english)

(veera eyes started dropping tears..baldev saw this and was stunned and was about to ask her why she was crying when she suddenly holded baldev's hand and started to look into his eyes to say something)

veera: leking...ab...sherni ke kushi sirf sher ki saath hai...

(baldev stuck not able to even breathe..)

veera:main tujse pyaar kartha hun...tu ne mainu jeeth liya apne pyaar se.. .

baldev:main kaise yakeen karu ki tu mujse sach main pyaar karta hai?kya patha ki yeh chote samay keliye tere hamdardi bi ban sakta hai mere vaaste..

veera:nahi baldev..is baar...apne dil se bol rahe ho...

(baldev turned from where he was standing and was slipped out of the terrace because he accidently put his shoes on a rock and veera held on to his hand...)

veera:BALDEV!!!!!!! mere haath pakad lo..

(baldev was smiling which went unnoticed by veera.she pulled him up)

baldev:tannu kaise laga jab main gir gaya..

veera:ae ki bol raha hai tu baldev? mere jann nikal gayi..saas ruk gayi...

(that was all baldev needed and told her that he purposely fell out of the terrace to know if her feelings towards him is true or not)

baldev:ab mainu yakeen ho gaya ki tu mainu pyaar kathi hai...veera bachpan se leker aaj tak main tujse isliye ladaya kyunki main tujem appnapan mehsus kar sakta tha...phir pata nahi kab ye tere liye jo fiqr..addat dil me ishq..pyraar...aur aakhir dil dhadkte hue mohabbat ban gaya...

veera:sherni paida hone se apne sher ki tha .. aur hamesha rahega...

they both realised the love they had for each other..and again started their nok jhok.when someone arrived there...baldev and veera looked back by the sound...thunder was hitting their hearts...thinking..is all over now??????????

PRECAP:BALDEV MESMERIZED BY VEERA IN RAIN...VEERA TO SLAP BALDEV...VEEBA TO CELEBRATE BALDEV BIRTHDAY TOGETHER!!!!!!!!!

hey guys,thanks for the comments and likes.i have written this in hindi...my mother tounge is malayalam iam from south india,kerala.iam in 10th.the more like the more comments the faster the updates...pls feel free to criticise...aprreciate...love u all lots😊

Edited by sanjanatamannah - 11 years ago

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: sanjanatamannah
thank you everyone for the love and support.i got 209 views already within hours for my first ever os.dont worry i will continue tomorrow itself.the number of comments increases then the speed of update will also increase.please tell me guys if you want me to write the rest of the parts in hindi or english.comment below ur choice and i will take the majority.thanks once again and their is lot of exciting things happening in part 2.stay tuned and pls comment!!!!!!! 😊love u all...

kuch bhi chalega..par jaldi likhona..plzz😭😭

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sanjanabaldev

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: sanjanatamannah
PART 2
veera having enough of baldev's silence shouted at him
veera:baldev kuch pooch rahi hu main.javab de mainu.
baldev:tennu ghar chad deta hu main.aa ja..
veera who lost her patience by now,
veera:muje tumse javaab millke binna mai nahim jaungi kahi...baldev tuje meri kasam hai.javab de ki tu muje ab pyaar na karke bhi tum kyon itni taqleef uttakar yaha aaya mainu bachane vaaste..
(baldev who could not control it screamed out)
baldev:kyun ki mai tumse pyaar kartha hu aaj be...kall...aur apne zindagi bar kate rahoge...tu hi mera zindagii hai...mera saas hai...mujse judi hui har ek cheez teri yaadi dilaati hai.kyun ki mere andar mujse be zyaada tu rehte he.jaana tha na tannu sach...ye hai...
(veera who could not get out of the shock,tears rolled down her cheeks.)
veera:phir tum ne ek haftae muje ignore kyun kar rahe the?tum ne hi tho kaha na ki tum mujse pyaar nahi karte us din...
baldev:jab muje patha chala ki tu mera chehra bhi nahi dekh sakti aur mere saath tu kabhi kush nahi rah paayenge,tab maine jhoot kaha ki main tujse pyaar nahi karte.main bas tumhe kush dekhna chahta hun.
veera: b..baldev...main jaanti hun ke main maafi maangne ka bhi hakk nahi hai,lekin phir be...(burst into tears and falls at his feet)
veera:baldev main maaf kar do iam...sorry..
(baldev who could not bear to see his sherni cry bent downwards)
baldev:nahi veera...tu koi galat nahi kiya.main tere peeche peeche ghoomke tannu kitne pareshaan kiya.mainu maaf kar do...
(baldev and veera did not speak anything more and both got onto baldev's jeep and dropped veera at home)
veera:baldev!!!! ghar par koi nahi hai...muje laga ki current chali gayi...yahha chor aata hai raath par..kya tum 2-3 ghante ke liye aa saktha hu mere saath jab tak veerji aur beeji louthe hai?
baldev:theek hai..
(veera ran to the terrace...baldev followed her wondering what she is upto now)
veera:baldev aaj shukravar hai.aur har shukravar ko main yaha aata hun ek sithaara ko dekne ke liye sirf jo iss din aata hai.tu bhi aa..
baldev:theek hai mere maa...jo tumhari marzi...
veera:baldev kya tum mujse sach me pyaar kathe ho?
baldev:karu ya na karuu..yeh batake kya fydaa..tu to...mujse...ye chaddnaa...
tu kush hai to main be kush...sherni ko dhahadne main acha lagta hai...Roasring(roaring meant by baldev's english)
(veera eyes started dropping tears..baldev saw this and was stunned and was about to ask her why she was crying when she suddenly holded baldev's hand and started to look into his eyes to say something)
veera: leking...ab...sherni ke kushi sirf sher ki saath hai...
(baldev stuck not able to even breathe..)
veera:main tujse pyaar kartha hun...tu ne mainu jeeth liya apne pyaar se.. .
baldev:main kaise yakeen karu ki tu mujse sach main pyaar karta hai?kya patha ki yeh chote samay keliye tere hamdardi bi ban sakta hai mere vaaste..
veera:nahi baldev..is baar...apne dil se bol rahe ho...
(baldev turned from where he was standing and was slipped out of the terrace because he accidently put his shoes on a rock and veera held on to his hand...)
veera:BALDEV!!!!!!! mere haath pakad lo..
(baldev was smiling which went unnoticed by veera.she pulled him up)
baldev:tannu kaise laga jab main gir gaya..
veera:ae ki bol raha hai tu baldev? mere jann nikal gayi..saas ruk gayi...
(that was all baldev needed and told her that he purposely fell out of the terrace to know if her feelings towards him is true or not)
baldev:ab mainu yakeen ho gaya ki tu mainu pyaar kathi hai...veera bachpan se leker aaj tak main tujse isliye ladaya kyunki main tujem appnapan mehsus kar sakta tha...phir pata nahi kab ye tere liye jo fiqr..addat dil me ishq..pyraar...aur aakhir dil dhadkte hue mohabbat ban gaya...
veera:sherni paida hone se apne sher ki tha .. aur hamesha rahega...
they both realised the love they had for each other..and again started their nok jhok.when someone arrived there...baldev and veera looked back by the sound...thunder was hitting their hearts...thinking..is all over now??????????

PRECAP:BALDEV MESMERIZED BY VEERA IN RAIN...VEERA TO SLAP BALDEV...VEEBA TO CELEBRATE BALDEV BIRTHDAY TOGETHER!!!!!!!!!

hey guys,thanks for the comments and likes.i have written this in hindi...my mother tounge is malayalam iam from south india,kerala.iam in 10th.the more like the more comments the faster the updates...pls feel free to criticise...aprreciate...love u all lots😊

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HappyST

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Posted: 11 years ago

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It was really nice...I simply loved it...

Plz continue soon...

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Hey Sanjana.. nice update!!
omg why veera to slap baldev! :-S
update soon dear. luv u...
and if u want u can continue in english we don't hv any prblm :)

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Varun.srk

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Wt a precap yaar

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sanjanabaldev

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Posted: 11 years ago

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i can take away a part of my life,my not my life itself part 3

hey,guys here's another part for you guys for loving my os so much.love u guys!!!!!!!!!hope u enjoy...

part 3

baldev and veera terrified when gunjan and ranvi stood there with astonishment...everything was over..they thought...they both came to know about it..

baldev:tum log aa gaye,lekin tum log toh ek ghante ke baad aane wale the naa..(said shivering..)

veera:haan veerji..ap log itni jalgi aa gaye?

(gunjan and ranvijay started taking steps forwards veera and baldev with an angry face)

gunjan:hum sab kuch samaj gaye...

veerji:muje tum log se ye umeed nahi the..

(veeba started to get afraid...is everything finshed for them..their family came to know about their love..?...then sundenly gunjan and ranvi started smiling..)

gunjan:ham samaj gaye ki tum log apne bachpan dushmani kadam kar diya...tabhi toh veerji,apne veera ke khatir itni raath uske saath uske suraksha(protection)keliye aap itthe hai...

ranvi:haa veera..hum log ko bhi bohot khush ho gaye ye jankar ki tum log abb ache dost ban gaye...

(veera and baldev smiled knowing they did not came to know about anything.after sometime baldev went to his house saying to bye to gunjan,his jeejaji and his sherni...who has accepted his love..)

next day morning...baldev messaged veera.veera woke up the minute she saw the ringing sound of baldev's message

veera;reading baldev's message to spend an entire day...got very happy and got dressed quickly and went out to impress her sher)

they went on bike and after sometime.rain started to pour heavily and they got down from there bike on veera's insistence .veera started to play in rain and got dancing..baldev mesmerized by veera..

baldev:in mind:meri sherni ki tarah iss duniya mai koi nahi hai jo...jo muje itni kush kar paaye...

veera:in mind:mere sher ki tarah iss duniya mai koi nahi hai jo muje itni kus dekhkar kus ho sakte hai...

veera called baldevz;itte aaona baldev mere saath nacho baarish mai.

baldev:agar tumne pooche tu kya mai mana kar saktha hun?tu toh mere jaansi ki raani hai...hai na?

they started dancing in the rain and both hugged each other losing at staring into each others eyes which was filled with a world full of love for each other..)

baldev:veera mai tujse pyaar nahi karta hun..

veera:ki?ae ki bol rahe hai tum?

baldev:jo mai tumse karta hun voh kal thak pyaar the...lekin ab jo kartha hun vo kahane ke shabd iss duniya mai nahi hai...pyaar ka matlab kisiko dil she pasand karna hai..lekin mai tumhare liye apna jaan bhi de sakta hun...mai tujme apne app ko dekta hun...ab batao kya isko pyaaar keh sakta hai...mereliye jo tumhare liye hai kya woh paanch shabdom mai annd(end)kar sakta hun?

veera:baldev,aaj se veera nahi hai baldev ke bina..aaj je baade me hum dono ko ek naam se yaad karunga...aadha baldev aur aadha veera...humara naam veeba...

both hold onto to each other's hands never to let go..

that night :

veera was running to baldev's house...baldev gave her a smile..she came running to him with red eyes knowing the truth...that he was cheating on her..

slapped him on the face which made baldev's eyes dropped tears...

veera woke up..it was just a dream...she signed...she at that moment itself ran to baldev'house with a kit...

climbed onto baldev's room and woke him up after decorating his room with paper saying"happy birthday baldev".baldev was shocked and happy to see his sherni taking the risk to come to his room being a girl without any fear of getting caught..

then veera wished his sher happy birthday and kissed his gently on his cheek with a smile..then baldev noticed something dried on veera's cheeks..

baldev:veera tere aansu suk gaye ki nishani dekh sakta hai menu..tu kyun roya?ki hoya..bata mainu..

(veera told baldev about the dream)

veera:mai seh nahi sakti ke mainu tannu haath lagaya aur tu aansu baha raha tha...main jee nahi sakta agar tum ne mainu dokha de...

baldev:ki?ae ki bol rahi hai tum veera?mai tho apne sapnon bhi tumhe dokha dene ko tho door tere chechre par ek pal keliye bhi dukh nahi dekh sakta...

(veera holiding onto baldev's shirt to let him know that she will never let him go)

veera:chal ab cake kaathe he..

baldev:ha...jaldi khaane hai muje...ha ha

(veera and baldev both fed each other with cakes.and had a wonderful night...but little someone knew that one person noticed veera was missing and huge trouble and huge loss,love,sharing,care is to happen very soon from the inner core of the heart which gives out the power of love..)

precap:baldev and veera alone...veera to stay in baldev's house...veera to shout and baldev and question him what kind of a person he is angrly...veera to challenge baldev to do...baldev aacepts it not knowing what he will be doing...

hey guys,inspite of being a malayalee from kerala i wrote my os in punjabhi because i want to give it an originality...it was tough as i was only it 10th..but passion made it easy for me...stay tuned.bahut twist aane wala hai part 4 mai..i will update as the comments and like increase.otherwise i will stop if no one likes it as i took a lot of pain writting my os's.love you guys!!!!!!!!!

Edited by sanjanatamannah - 11 years ago