How things change... - SS updated pg 20 - Page 3

Sorry for being so late to review this... I m doing combined comment of last two updates...
I don't even know where to start...Shitt...M kinda..hating you and loving you right now.🥱
Flashback scene was OUCH...they broke KHOON KA RISHTA:(:(:( M' anger.. its been 13 months they are not in contact...aah... still alive??🤔 whose photo J burnt?

"Ignore everything? Me? You're the one who is ignoring your feelings. Something has pissed you off, yet you won't acknowledge it and tell me. And I'm the one who is ignoring things. . 😊 - I love VIREN in ur SS the most... and J is always my fav. :))) I'd like to say right now that I LOVEDDD EVERYTHING U WROTE...
The Way You Write, The Plot, Details, Everything... SUPERBBB Pooja👏👏👏

They lost their Baby... :( means Jeevika lost her two babies.. her pain is no doubt much more than Viren...

I've lost everything, my parents, my family, my sister, MY child. Everyone is gone, they left, and some forever, whist others carry on with their lives, without even looking back. Where am I left, alone by myself." incredibly powerful and so heartrending...You've got me in tears, here..my heart's literally aching

Viren leant in and cried on Jeevika's bed. Slowly she patted him on the back and as she tried to understand what had happened.😊😊😊😊

Viren reading J's notes... Superb idea👍🏼

So they are heading to Hrishikesh... Well then for sure Behnas gonna face each other after an year... :) well i wud love to know they meet again... so update the next part sooon... Overall Brilliant writing...Very well-written.. excellent use of descriptions, physical and emotional. Keep it up

Sincere apologies for the late reading, Pooja! 😔 Finally found some time to breathe...couldn't wait any longer (love your writing) so just caught up with the two parts that I missed :D

All I can say to this is...B R I L L I A N T!!!! 😳 I don't know how you do it, dude!!! The way you get right into Virika's heads and beautifully express their POVs...incredible!!! I was biting my nails throughout because I was picturing all this happening right in front of my eyes...your writing is SO convincing and believable *sigh* The flashback of the JM scene was haunting...major heartbreak! The sacred khoon ka rishta...broken?! 😔 Intrigued to see how and what happens when they meet again *covers eyes* All the Virika scenes are AMAZING 😳 It's like "when a tornado meets a volcano" *sigh* The way you presented their pain and anguish because of each other & the circumstances...it's hard to take a side! I can't help but sympathize with both...Manvi, the baby, the Vadheras...*sigh* Special shout-out to the June 5th and 6th notes...so poignant! My heart was in my mouth while reading them...got reminded of Grey's voiceovers actually :p

Great work, dude!!! Update again soon :D

My apologies Pooja for commenting so late... .. caught up with part 4 and part 5 ...wish I had few more parts to read😉

well what do I say .. I loved loved loved the way the story is unfolding with the subtle emotions 👏 great great story and amazing writing skills⭐️

so Viren and Jeevika met Virat and Maanvi in Hrishikesh (well i guessed it😆 ) VirMan married... part 5 brought many things to the fore.. I loved the way you made J tell off SB .. , but still the rift between Vadheras and Virika is yet to be opened up...

J's shock when she heard about VirMan's marriage was beautifully penned down.. J's utter disbelief that her sister married without informing her very well written...

you don't realize how much i loved these lines...

"Whenever I think you Di, I will always see you in front of me and you will know that I am thinking of you. Even if you are miles away, you will forever live in my heart. Tomorrow if I marry, he will never take your place. And when I think of you, you will know. After all khoon ka rishta hai humare"

so J's world crumbles when she knows about M's cancer and the whole thing of cancer revelation and J's reaction to it had my throat choked pooja... you have caught the right pulse of all characters..

The screenplay, the plot, the characters every is just so brilliant ,,,and I am so happy with part 5 and you know the reason. JeeMan ka milan...how can we be happy when JeeMan are separate.. even if they suffer ,, we want them to suffer together.,..rather than going through the pain for each other...

will wait for the next part Pooja,. update when you are free,,,😃

Originally posted by: Sweety1234556

So finally u updated,I had been waiting for this since long.As usual,it was superb.Loved everything abt it,n now m inquisitive about the next update,Wht did jeevika do?why did they leave the house n all. Looking forward to the next part!!

Btw may I ask u a question.Have u shown tht jeevika can't conceive again?

New part coming soon this is so I don't forget to post it.

awesomeee...read all the parts in one shot!!!!! phew!!!! amazing and well wriitten...great going... do continuee soonn n pls PM me..thnkzzz

Finally u updated...i had a smile wen i read ur pm...

Originally posted by: -Pj-

You don't have to apologise, life is busy I know that. I love reading your comments otherwise I wouldn't ask. (Just being selfish) Glad the whole story worked for you, as I said I had a hard time writing that as I never planned it out. Which is also the large delay in the update. As long as it worked! I kinda of wanted to tell that part and be done with it. Not dwell on the past issue but simply explain.

I remember us saying we dislike the names, Chutku and Chutki and I hated it as well. Plus it reminded me of Krystle and Nia's interview about baby names - well the baby names in the show. Viren didn't use the words either? Uh I'm confused?

Did you read it all again this time? God. It's long. I am aiming to update over Xmas, I may ask you to pm for me if you would be so kind.