Here I go; I used to sneak in to read - but, had to run the next minute. Life had been that way. So, here I am, ensuring I didnt miss a feedback - as this story is awesome; its writing brilliant. and you deserve all the good words. from me, if it means, another little feedback. :)
Twelve
I always love it when the one who knows both sides or a better visibility, make the move - and so, when it was Sumo was thawed first, it was such a welcome. Yes, she took Shravan a little by surprise - but, loved again, the way he was ready to be swept by the simple & steady changes.
Simple sentences - no frills attached - those are the best. They say more, with less words.
"Will they let us be a part of the traveling package?"
"we're home."
Thirteen
And its a beautiful extension of the growing 'something' between them. And I love the conversations you make it flow naturally. and every sentence spoken taking their relationship to the next level slowly and steadily.
"Yes. Just let it go." "Try doing that yourself."
"Are you not going to ask me to dance?"
Fourteen
This is the chapter I loved the most, of this series. I am a sucker for all things nice - and this had them all.
Again, I am falling for this Sumo - who is confident; and talks her heart - no pretentions. She could place that call, when she wants to talk; and that shows the distance they have covered. And I loved the distance that her husband covered that night, both physically by rushing to her; and emotinally by just being there for her.
Look at what she says - man, she is just slaying; and all credits to you.
"Does that mean you were missing me?"
"Are you not my legally wedded husband?"
"If you are suggesting such dine out more often, I might think of a solution."
Confidence! Love it.
Fifteen
Wow, again a big distance covered; they lay to rest the fear of 'what next'. You are indeed a master with conversations. Superb update it was. And ohhooo, the birthday gift!
Sixteen
So, they have totally warmed totally upto each other. You have shown nicely, how they miss being together. and opening a new thread, now that they are more settled. hmmn!
Seventeen
At the risk of repeating myself - you write day-to-day conversations so beautifully. And you bring out more in open, than what the conversation would have otherwise held. Take for instance,
"So she told you that we cancelled her contract." He loosened his tie. "She also told me about your half-brother." Effectively, he has told about the contract bit, though the conversation didnt head there. kudos!
the 180 degrees change that was brought to his vision about his father - bravo writing, again. And the clarity it would have gotten into him, after his father actually 'spoke' his truth.
Eighteen
So, it is again proved - communication is key; moment it stops, things tumble down - insecurities creep in. Both wanted the same - but, silence crept in between & moved them far apart. And, where there are no words, assumptions take over. She thinking, she is over-stayed her welcome; he thinking, shes keeping the deal. aaaww! heart-breaking.
Nineteen
A heart-wrenching update yet again - so, Shravan is trying to put the pieces together! and, he means business - having people on the lookout. and the introspection has started too with the call to the mother. waiting for this to build more.
Twenty
hmmn, more knots unfolding. Loved your version of the flashback. And am with my seat belts on - to see what Shravan has to do with his father, M&N, and Suman!
well, thats my marathon. did I find you here, reading yet? Keep it going. Waiting eagerly to read more & more.
Pati Patni Aur Panga
Kumkum Bhagya
