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Manisha Bhardwaj

@Rockingbhardwaj

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#11

Hey chitra
This is fab
Ya sad one but I love it
Very well penned down

Thanks 4 d pm

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Ananya

@ExpectoPatronus

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#12

i liked d story... & now aur v sad ho gayi. :'(
i want a happy story now... Plz :'(

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anjuvrushan

@anjuvrushan

Inactive

Posted: 10 years ago

#13

U made me cry...soo touching soo emotional...good job

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Mansi

@Mansi98

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#14

Woho

Dii see finally m commenting

Ok now coming 2 os

As usual it was superb

I like d way u described his pain

Bt it was so emotional

M already crying coz meri exam hai n kuch nai padha ab aur rula diya

Dats not fair

It had a sad ending

Bt how can a relationship end just like dat

Might be coz dat wat is relationship made for

No need to get confused even m confused

jo bhi likha tarif hi ki

Keep writing more n more

-Crazy fan

Mansi

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..RiSha..

@..RiSha..

Explorer

Posted: 10 years ago

#15

very painful though a well thought os

the pain of losing a dear one is always difficult

the way swayam was taking the death of his dear wife was kind of heart wrenching

in the whole os there was pain lots of it

but the last line of the os was best of all

sad but well written

*_*

Edited by ..EnIgMa28.. - 10 years ago

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Gunika Mehta

@Thats.me.Guni

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#16

Ossm os.. So beautifully written.. .. Though it ws sad bt I luvd it.. Nd amazing thought.. '

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Nishtha

@Nicky-nish

Rocker

+ 6

Posted: 10 years ago

#17

Yr y u write such an emotional stuff...
M still cryng
It ws amazng..
Luvd it

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--Ecstasy--

@--Ecstasy--

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#18

Emotional OS.. But very beautifully penned down.

"He always told her to win over her fears in life. Irony was that heights intimidated her all her life but when it should have intimated her she jumped off winning over her fear just as he wanted."

Great work!!

Keep writing!

Thanks for PM

Shivani.

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Ayushi.

@-.wanderlust.-

Navigator

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#19

Are you guys on some sadist spree? Though I am Sadist, I am loving it, but spare others xD

Firstly Nishi with her heart wrenching Needles & Medicines & now you.

Beautifully described the pains & aching Swayam is going through. Broken Swayam trying hard to get away from the memories of Sharon, his love of life whom he loved till death was no more with him.

Sharon couldn't conceive a baby which damaged her inner self. She wanted to complete their life but she just could not. Love can make you do things you know are wrong but seems just right at some particular instances.

Personally loved the lines below-:

"He always told
her to win over her fears in life. Irony
was that heights intimidated her all her
life but when it should have intimated
her she jumped off winning over her
fear just as he wanted"

Keep writing.

-Ayushi

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Nishi

@.nerfherder

Sparkler

Posted: 10 years ago

#20

Yeah, I hate you too. 😳 I can't believe you put all the blame on me and made me face all the fire. Like it was my fault you posted the OS you had written ages ago. Admit it, you are a sadist too. 🐷

Your sad one shot's have a heart wrenching, beautiful touch to them. This one was no exception. Swayam's pain on losing Sharon was very well penned, it hurt the reader's heart. I loved the irony you showed in Sharon's choice of suicide. I wonder how people gather the guts to jump of buildings though. 🤔

Ah well, great writing but F grade for humanity. 🤡

Cheers.

Nv.