RAYA FF -Sirf Meri Ho *THREAD-9* PART-90ON page -94 - Page 69

Originally posted by: LuvSSever

And now comes the relevant post to this thread. :):)

Posting my comments on Sirf meri ho story. Needless to say it will be lengthy..😆

RaYa-FF Sirf Meri Ho

About this FF... i dont know where to start and say my thoughts on reading it.

Among the ff links in this thread, this is my fav and its so touchy,emotional and carries away your heart when u read it..among your FF's SMH is my favourite.

Beautifully written story. So beautifully written,be it the romance ,the love ,care,concern tht raya has for each other or the emotional touchy heartbreaking scenes between raya..the tragedy and the turmoil they went thru..

I cant express in words...very nicely sketched parts.👏

I wish to give comments on each part..heart wish tht...

The highlights of the story are...

Loved the initial scenes of Raya, the heartbroken priya and confused ram who caught up between past and present..then their confession , romantic date,romance at flight..superb.

Good to see KK ,apeksha and raya bond throughout. Nice it was. Teddy bear and gudiya..nice scenes with tht..

Then coming back to Km too..the way Raya was written..too good..

Oh your Ram is hopelessly romantic..so romantic..me as a person type not so engross for reading hot romantic updates..i feel little uncomfortable😆 but ur ram ...kya kya romantic idea he gets..

Ram is ever ready and reading his romance,tht too skipping in here and there, itself i get tired..😆 but raya is never tired..😆..

But after those hot updates,comes the sad part. oh priya wrenching in pain..ram unaware abt her status, she being too anaemic ..then the treatment,care and concern..too good to read..most times emotional it was,whenever we see her craving for kid...and ram trying to mk her feel good..

Culd understand her wish for a kid,right from the moment she feels completed by ram...but the complications in her health stops them enjoying tht bliss..

Truly understand raya emotions here..

Nutz in this story or the whole family was so supportive, nutz pregnancy,priya helping her to reach hospital,her delivery, the little kid with priya,in raya arms, prem ,nice name,all prem scenes with raya beautifully written..

The bday gifts segments of each ram and priya was so diff and good..

Their trip to resort and all tht was good.. priya and raya's college moments along with girl gang and priya frnds was nice and diff to read.

Ashwin and his doings always boils one blood,😡 first thought ram handled well and he was behind bars and shruthi too given support ,recovering..

But later he escapes and created the greatest havoc in raya life...

The most saddest part comes into pic with that aswin's doings...priya being preggy with twins and tht swine ashwin destroyed whole thing...grrr...

Oh hw happy was ram, hw happy wuld had been priya,if she know tht her dream came true...wht a scene it wuld had been..

All spoiled..tht ashwin, mercilessly destroyed shruthi and priya.

He deserves death frm both shruthi and ram's hand...

Ashwin is dead but the after effects of his deed...the misery raya went thru brought tears ...

Hw on earth ram wuld hv felt,when he has to choose between his kid and priya,and the news of her abortion, he has to swallow tht and inturn tk care of priya and act normal..too tough and sad..

Then the condition of priya..cannot express only.😭.ufff..wht she wuld be going thru thinking tht she was sinner and destroyed by ashwin...tht thought process only wuld hv killed her...

All there scenes on hospital and after tht was too emotional...

So she trying to distance from ram,all her attempts made failed by ram with her friend neel help...all those scenes were he tries to bring her bck to normal...finally the ride to hell by him tht brought her bck to somewht normal phase...ufff...

All was a emotional ride...

Her friend character neel needs a special mention..her character was nicely sketched.,she being there for priya always to give a shoulder to cry on and mk her understand whts right...too good...

Then raya somewht becoming normal,then their trip to amristar and the scenes there, all blushy rituals, her babhi sree ,their scenes all were good and priya's scene with the little kid there...so nice to read ...priya as a motherly figure,her bond with kid always gives me goosebumps wherever it is written(sakshi,amrita effect i think)..

Then coming bck..and whenever priya talk about kids or twins, ram going thru hell for not telling her the truth, finally he decided to say truth but before he says, truth coming in front of priya thru insurance papers..

Here out broke,ram's reactions all were heartwrenching...😭

Culd understand their turmoil and wht they went thru..

Then ram's health going bad due to bp, priya feeling guilt one side for mking ram go thru this, anger oneside for she feeling betrayed, her kids loss,she went thru a lot this time...the sree (bhabiji)coming into pic, with some act she made priya realise ram's state of mind and hw he decide on tht..

Then raya scenes after tht, the depression priya going thru..

Yes its easy to say,u still hv age and life..so move forward and yes thts the thing they could actually do and which is realistic but even then the loss they went thru will hv a larger impact on their heart and mind...

Its not easy to copeup soon... tht too the state raya was in...the way their dreams smashed...its not at all easy.. priya's pain put the readers in tears too. The writing was as such,it affects us too...kudos to writer.

Her bond with Rishab need another mention...tht was too good...hope rishab doesnt get into irrecoverable trouble tht again shatters priya...

Raya understand each other a lot,without saying anything they understood each other feelings and words..last raya scene with respect to terrace, tking her frm sharma house..all good.,he trying to change her mood by faking his need and she questioning abt erection..lol😆...

I hope i recollected all and wrote wht i felt, if some left, sorry... but no probs,

I enjoyed reading it a lot is what i wanted to say...

Waiting eagerly for next update...

Originally posted by: LuvSSever

Hi... :)

I have read this story and along with that i have read the other stories too for which links are given in this thread.

First kudos to both the people who made us read such stories. thanks to both of u, one who took the time and effort to post here ,so that we could read and other who wrote it all beautifully.thanks to u both.

As said, i have read all and liked the posts too there but wish to post comments or what i felt on each story.. thoda aadat se majboor hoon.😳

Since i am so late ,i dont know which thread is open and which is closed..

So if i posts my comments here for all that stories of yours i read, hope you all dont mind..😳

Sorry to the owner of thread and others if its too long and if u find irrelevant here in SMH thread to talk about other stories of the writer.

Originally posted by: LuvSSever

First posting the comments on all Os read. i knew its very lengthy...pls bare with my posts😆

*ONESHOTS*

RaYa-OS Tere Bina Mushkil Hai Jeena

Nice Os ..how i wished Ram was there for priya in first pregnancy in balh,but for introducing leap they showed insensible reasons..

This os was real, realistic in terms of how ram wuld hv handled everything ,hw raya wuld hv united..and finally the way ram disclosed the news to priya,so lovely... nice os,enjoyed reading it...

RaYa-OS An Unwanted Marriage

Wow...a nice Os that I enjoyed reading a lot...

Raya forced into a marriage,shocking tht applied divorce on first day itself,then forced to live together..initially culdnt stand eachother but hen slowly started helpin each other, priya made food, ram culdnt see her in pain, helped her,then friendship blossomed,love happened, and it was expressed on the divorce granted and story ended with priya being preggy, raya in to be parents stage,sleeping peacefully cuddling to each other..

Nice one,really enjoyed reading it...

RaYa-OS A Promice To Keep

beautifully written Os...

An interesting start...

The turmoil they went thru and then the transition between two worlds, emotionally written well ,both the worlds convos and the last part added extra beauty to it with raya reunion,their romantic moment and again blessed with special gift...

RaYa-OS Love And Life

Amazing touching,emotional Os with an end that leaves smile on ur lips with their daughter named Raya and the line, why u are explaining ,i wasnt complaining frm Ram...😳😆

Started with an emotional letter from priya tht led u in tears,then priya coming bck to life, her affectionate hug,ram reply and finally their kid's name...everything awesome...

RaYa-OS Special Gift

Wow..a romantic hot Os with Raya..

Priya again came with a idea of crazy gift appeal..she amuses Ram when every time he tells to ask for a gift...lol...And Ram the obedient true lover as always fulfilled this wish of priya too...first night in chirapunji...grt hot romantic one it was...

RaYa-OS I Miss You

Wow , a cute sweet romantic Os with Raya milan like this...

A lovely update ...each of them subconsciously calling each other name on hearing thunder, then their milan of souls, finally ram coming bck to get her tht too with the news tht she is preggy again..lol..cute nice one..

RaYa-OS Belonging

A nice Os on Raya after saath saal baad track..

The love raya as for each other showed nicely..she doesnt recognise anything but the love for him still and always alive inside her heart and written beautifully.. the sindhoor ,MS scene all nice..

RaYa-OS Missing!!

An emotional Os on Raya...heart wrenching at first to read the parents turmoil and the emotions they went thru at hospital but finally ended on a happy note. Finally realising their love and expressing it once again...good one.

RaYa-OS Reunion

A nice os with romance and sensibility in terms of reunion track..

Such a way it shuld be..so many wuld be happy to hire 'the Ramkapoor'...

Cvs hv showed something else... loved reading this...

RaYa-OS Surprise

A short super cute Os on raya ...with their morning romance on a cool whether,then surprise bday party for priya sister and finally raya to be parents...

U hv given a beautiful surprise gift to the person concerned with ur 'surprise' Os..

RaYa-OS A Gift

Nice Os...loved the Raya moments. Be it their dance,priya being jealous or last veach part..nice update

RaYa-OS Pyaar Toh Hona Hi Tha!!

Another beautiful Os..I loved reading it...

The circumstance raya married, then when ram told abt komal ,first shocked then relieved same like priya..lol... then their dosti,togetherness, finally confessing their love on her bday after a emotional shock, then their romance..

Ram holding priya with proud before komal,serves her right..

Then finally ending with a bubbly pihu and priya preggy for second..

Lovely os...

RaYa OS Being With you

A fantastic beautifully written Os on the jaipur track which was not concentrated much on actual balh..

I loved reading it, a happy happy family feel with raya romance adding a creamy layer and icing on cake,the story ending with a new edition to their happy family and love..

Raya busy in their profession,yet finding time for their love, being romantic,pihu with her cuteness personified, then asusual priya insisting on hw celebration shuld be, their morning and kulfi romance, then bday party with all family,finally priya being preggy and both raya on high emotions,feel and final end with title 'being with you'... so good to read..loved it..

RaYa OS Chup Ke Chup Ke

A superb cute romantic Os with a surprising twist.

Reminded of raya role play epi after 8yrs leap...

Loved it...first thought ram is too fast,whts this,but later realised the twist,

And poor raya with rohan as haddi..and priya embrassed , then their secret came to fore,then their hot romance, neha teasing them with photo..all good..

RaYa OS My Prince

A superb Os sticking so much to its title..so apt..

The way it started, the flow,end all was nice.

Loved all, Raya, their romance,love,care...teasing part from neha,nutz and family on one hour...all..

Their morning romance was beautiful and gift from her man was so thoughtfu and priya's inner emotions truly understandable... And so the return gift from her to Ram, their eve,night was even more beautiful...

I am over with my comments on all Os...ahhh relieved now...after commenting out wht i felt😆

Overall to say in short, i enjoyed reading all Os.. :)

Originally posted by: LuvSSever

So Now posting the comments on short stories i read...sorry again for it being lengthy.

*SHORT STORIES*

RaYa-SS Love Journey

awww...A cute written SS it was..already three in store, 2 more cutiepie to come... story on Raya and their cuties was a pleasure to read.

Their hospital scene was so nice..and the connect raya hv has parents with their kids too good and cute...

RaYa-SS RaYaPe Meet

A nice short story on RayaPe meet and this Raya milan in the story i loved it..

There were many moments in the story ,were some are cute, some are emotional, feel good and happy ones too..

Ram asking priya's name, finally mking her utter mrs.Priya ram kapoor:):)wow..

Tking her to KM...then he not asking her anything,she guilt stricken,finally both pouring their heart out, pihu entered thru window..lol..then cute moments,still priya culdnt move forward,due to guilt,then asking ram to punish her and the punishment he gv...aww..these two na,great lovers,then slowly moving into,they had their romantic moment, the way priya ended up conveying happy news to ram was superb and then finally story ending with a superb cute raya family pic with raya,peehu,kush ,amar and krishna...aww so cute they are...

Overall enjoyed the story...

RaYa-SS Custody

Among the SS, this is my fav..I just loved it... so emotional, well written, exactly portraying each side emotions neatly, both of Raya, both their turmoil in the past 5 yrs, missing each other, longing to be together all written so nicely..

Interesting start, though dont want to see peehu in such circumstances,court where she has to choose her dad or mom, tht scene was brilliantly written..

The emotions and feel of each character written well, priya completely broken

down on hearing peehu choosing to stay with papa, ram cant see priya in tears but ego plays, then pihu finally putting forth a condition where she culd hv both her parents with her, poor kid,hw much she wants both their loved ones there..

Thnks to nutz she saved the situation..

Then priya was sick, depressed, so down due to ram's cold shoulder to her..so sad to see her like tht, but even Ram wasnt wrong in his behaviour..his beloved, who he loved to the core,chose to hide frm him and hide his daughter too and tht she believed truly ram could move on... priya was wrong there..

But wht i liked in this SS is, it showed both their emotions,turmoil in past yrs beautifully... sadness ram experienced being away frm his love , and for priya,suffering, its double the amount, since apart frm sadness of separation frm her loved one, she had to carry the guilt too for 5 yrs.,

The way she saved the memories of pihu for ram and had it as a gift to him was the highlight of this ss, everytime ram opened a gift and saw each thing,it was so touchy ... it was a nice thought...

The way priya longing for his love after coming to KM, ram unwillingly showing cold shoulder, then the love,care and concern from him,when she was sick,

Finally they pouring their heart out and solving all in priyam room, all those dialogues priya mouthed and ram mouthed to say they are still the same raya, and dialogues resembling march 5th, jan 10th..all so touchy and emotional, felt so sad for ram,when he explained hw he spent 5yrs and finally they sleeping peacefully after 5 long yrs..all good..

Then back to back two hot romantic updates..so hot it was...lol..so with family tricking them in same room and arranging such a suite,finally raya became one again..

Then finally pihu's wish of hving a sibiling fullfilled, riya coming into pic and after years, they celebrating priya bday and ended with good note..

Loved this Ss.

RaYa SS:Destined to Marry

I have read this Ss too ,loved it too , a great combo of love and suspense.

I have posted the comments on that respective thread,since its still open and i am eager to read future parts too.. this is the first story i read on ur duo work and i loved it too..

Similarly to Os, again in short i enjoyed reading these SS's too

Originally posted by: LuvSSever

Now posting the comments on FF i read... :)

*Fan Fictions*

RaYa-FF Prediction After Yesterday

A great start on the emotional track...felt so sad for priya and culd understand her pain...she doing all this for ram and her own home, they didnt allow her in, and thnk god finally kk and jp coming to rescue..

Then ram's turmoil of not finding her anywhere ,his concern, his angry on her family members,neha' s taunt to him, written well..

Oh apart from pain in heart, priya was physically weak too...sad indeed, but good to see ram landing up there and finally giving her the support needed...

She was relieved ,yet angry at him,finally finding solace in his hug,the hospital scene was nice, but again she chose to be away frm him for his sake.

Those paper signing and raya romance all written nicely..

Ram keep him away from her to mk KM the place worth for priya to live and priya doing all for his safety and depressed at same time being away from him...

Good to see kk care,affection for priya..good to see their bond..

She was preggy with their child but weak to go thru pregnancy..the way ram informed this by kk and ram broke down on his mom lap,then throughout hospital scene was touchy emotional..

Even after returning home, ram hiding priya abt this pregnancy and need for abortion, care and concern shown at each level, priya wanting to give her to ram and ram carried away with the situation... then his anger and her manofying..

Then finally priya coming to know abt her pregnancy and the war of words between Raya, so emotional...both their stand understandable and its written nicely...then too happy to knw child is safe and finally pihu in their arms...

Then the story of priya and her father, the love and affection,care they shared,their bond shown...

He being sick and she getting bad dreams, then their emotional meetup,finally seemingly all well but priya was wokeup to hear the peaceful demise of her father,.

The bond they shared,surely priya heartbroken..

The recovery frm that phase for priya with ram and pihu helping was so realistic and good,..

Then last part of pihu firstday to school, ram standing all day along..lol..priya coming,reminding and they live happily ever after was good..

Nicely written track with flow of events fitting in correctly...

RaYa-FF ISHQ

Yet to read it.. :)

Originally posted by: sssabcd

eagerly waiting for update..

pls post next part soon

Originally posted by: lalmadhu

Hi Neel,

Hw r u dear? Update after a long time...

I'm kinda not feeling good about this update...when I started reading this update I kinda didnt remember the current line of the story. So the lines...Priya's pain had so much impact on me...It was so sudden...I couldnt handle this...U made me cry stupid writer...😭 👏 👏 👏

But I'm kinda glad...satisfied...coz u showcased the pain so real...coz the attitude out there is entirely different...everybody will be ready to say...it happens...its ok...keep trying...

But its not about the trying...damn its about the loss...A loss is always a loss...its very difficult...I mean very difficult to go thru the loss...

Hmmm...Ram's try to get Priya out of that... And what was that question 😲🥱

Please keep giving updates...I want to read this story till the end...😃

And also I may keep coming to the forum😛

Thank u for the update dear. Waiting for more.

Originally posted by: armanz

okk babes

First of all thanks for the update.. ha ha finally we are able to update again..even if its ages😆🥱

Neel frankly...I wanna tell onethig first..I laughed like anything wen Priya asked Ram one Q...🤣..Omg how does she write such things I just feel🤣..kiddooo kahi ki 😆

Coming to the total part...I am so so amazed to read the RaYa pain..well written...well thought and well planned..which was happening b4 my eyes all the while I was reading.

Priya and her pain...cant put words to explain what I felt😭 but my heart became heavy filled wid tears...Ram was trying his best to make her normal. And finally Neel helped her to get out of the pain...Neel hai na..can do anything😉

And the way he treated her when she was on terrace..awesome .really silence is the best medicine to treat self anger..👏

Hmmm...finally now RaYa are gonna come slowly back on track and yeah got one small doubt..Was that sign thing also some part of plan??

Anyways great to read the part...superb kiddo...especially that one line "wher is ur erection"???🤣

Originally posted by: jodude

Wow after a long time...
Thanks for the update...
Hmm emotional part
Love it