If this had hap'ned-A comedy of errors(updte pg3)

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Dear All... The following is satirical and parodical write up of Shravan's love confession to Saachi(for this you all need to forget the original confession track)..This is laced with humour and comedy to treat you all to some fun..Hence the title If this had happened- A comedy of errors..😃😃😃..
Even if you dont find this write up funny, I advice you all to grit your teeth and hit the like button..Roses and praises I appreciate and welcome😳😃..Criticisms and ridicules , no thanks ; keep them to youselves😉😆😆😛..
So without Much ado about nothing for the loves labours lost here comes the comedy of errors hoping as you will all like it...😊😊😊
If this had happened- A comedy of errors!!!
Saachi and Shravan got married and were forcibly sent to their Honeymoon..A drunken spree at the bar resulted in both sloshed out completely and spending the night in each others company in the same bed..A consummation act resulted,either with conscious or unconscious effort and mind😉( its best left for you all to wonder and break your head over it😛😃)
Tara discovering about this news leaves Shravan for good(hopefully😉)..Now Sharavn has no other work but to fall in love with Saachi, which he does in a slow and steady manner.. Meanwhile Saachi is already head over heels in love with Shravanji..Shes now waiting and expecting the moment her beloved Shravan ji will confess his love to her..
Shravan realising his love for Saachi( This time his dimag ki batti worked well and fast😉😆)... Within a month after his honeymoon he was totally besotted and in love with her❤️...But wait something prevented him from saying that four letter word to her..So how does he go about it ?....Read on..
First he approaches Dadhi to help him confess his love..Like the puranic Nala maharaja seeking help of a swan to say his love to Damayanthi, he asked for her help."Chal hat Bittu, jo kam thume karna hai , thum karo.. Main khon hoti beeche mein..kabab mein haddi"😕....She refused point blank😡..
He approached his good friends Bunty and Viren..Like Hanuman acting as a messenger to Sita, both the monkeys, with their antics tried their best😳.. But Saachi refused to even see them, waiting only for her swami to comfess😡..So bunny ji and rabbbit ji returned to the pavillion, retired hurt
Next he sought his babhis help( by this time Nidhi had given birth to a baby, thank god😆😆)Both did not oblige.." Sharavn thum bhi na.. Kya kaya boltha hai..Jaa apne kam teek se karo".. they advised..
In the meantime, one day Saachi realised she was pregnant and the whole household was jumping with joy hearing this news..Except for Sharavn, his time was running short😲😲
Now he approached Naanu and with some reservations Naani too........ Naanu said " Sab Ram ji ki marzi aur kripa hai beta.When the time is right he will automatically guide you to say your love to Saachi"....😕
Naani for her part said " jaan jaye par lachan na jaye..yeh lo..you cant even do a small thing right.. how did you manage to father your baby?"🤬
He approached Madhura and his brothers for help but, they all refused..Why does he have to complicate a simple thing as saying "I love you" to his wife?😡😡
Time was flying by ..Saachi was already in her third trimester, waiting for both the arrival of the baby and the words I love you from shravan ji....😍
Sharavn gathered all his wits about him and approached Pratap..One look from him was enough to play in his mind the dialogues: "Naalayak, barquddar, bewakoof..irresponsible and immature fellow..when will you learn to do the right things at the right time?"....😡😡😡
Meanwhile mama and mammi had heard about all this and came running to Jaiswal's house.....Mammi with a belan in her hand and mama with the khakras she made , throwing it like a frisbiees at Sharavan...😉😆🤣
Sharavn dived under his bed to escape them..(both figuratively and literally) ...He wished he had a Saas bina saruraal, as all problems originated from mammi and mama was just like a bhoot in his life..😲😲😲
The whole thing was now becoming like a comedy circus and both the families wished they could all go to their terraces and yell from chajje to chajje😉😆🤣
Now Saachi went into labour and delivered Dizygotic twins(much to everyones surprise)..The babies were named Sachin and Shravani(fraternal twins), combining the names of Saavan..⭐️⭐️👏👏👍🏼
The pediatrician who attened them was Tara..Yes life comes a full circle for Saavan..But wait....When is Shravan going to confess his love to Saachi...Will he or wont he? Thats the question...
TO BE CONTINUED
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chammak_challo thumbnail
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Posted: 14 years ago
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wow maris !👏 I like it a lot !😳 a mixture of comedy & trying to romance at the same time...very well written...keep going😉
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Well written Maris and so funny. Truly a romcom queen 😃
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plz continue soon maris. i cant stop laughin🤣🤣. i think nw we r gonna see a writer maris to a comedy riter maris. i really loved nanu's dialogue. i can imagine shravan's expression when he hears this dialogue. a mixture of anger, sadness, helpless , cryin exp can be seen in his face.😭😔😔🥱😲 > shravan's expression
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Posted: 14 years ago
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OMG Maris!!! You need to keep going with this story!!

That fool has waited until delivery and still can't say it. He deserves whatever khakra chakras are thrown at him!!!

Shravan is going to end up saying I love you to his kids and then to his parents and then to his wife's doctor 🤪 and then wonder who he left out.........
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Wow Maris !!!!!!!!!!!!! im loving it!!!😃😃😃 all excited to know what happens next...

shravan is such a duffer !!! cant believe he hasnt confessed to saachi yet even after the birth of their babies😉😆😆 naani gave such a fitting reply to him!!!😆😆 loved it...par kya kare,jaan jaaye par lacchan na jaaye us nalayak ka😉 lol...loved the names of the twins'...sachin and shravani👏👏 i had never thought of the possibility of SaaVan's kids named like that...such a creative mind of yours!!!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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I applaud you for being so creative, Maris!!👏 Loved the touch of comedy, that you have added. Shravan really is such a buddhu.🤪 The guy could not even muster enough courage, to say those words. 😆

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Posted: 14 years ago
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OMG maris!!!,please continue the story.Dont why he doesnt open up his mouth when it comes to confessing his love for saanchi.looks like he will not confess even when his kids grow up and advice him😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
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WOOW Maris!! love the comedy, a very dumb thing of Shravan to do, not say i love you!! LOOL😆 please do continue....really funny!!!😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
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OMG maris... it was too good. had fun reading it. it was liking i am watching BHPH.. those bhabi parts , nani.nanu. and pratabh's dialouges... amazing !!! it was BHPHlicious 😆
and finally nidhi delieverd😆😆 and the names of Savaan's kids are too cute sachin and shrvanai..
loved it please continue soon,,,,,

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