No one like you Priya picked up a snack tray from the kitchen counter and hurried out, stopping to belt out instructions to the team of caterers bustling about. “Have at least 2 more trays of the kebabs ready, and another couple with the chicken tikka. Be as quick as you can.” She walked to the living room, handing the tray to one of the caterers whose tray was empty. She took his empty tray, intending to go back to the kitchen to have it refilled. As she turned the corner heading into the long corridor towards the kitchen, she heard voices coming from Ram’s study. The drinks were being served there, so perhaps some of the guests had made themselves comfortable in the room. ...
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Mads11 @Mads11 1 years ago such a wonderful os yaar,plz do continue it na plz. it's just amazing, i can't get over it. it's such a wonderful story plz continue it.
Mads11 @Mads11 1 years ago Hey it was amazing, write another part of it plz
basket_101 @basket_101
+ 3
2 years ago
Hey there! I'm finally back to leave a proper comment :)I have to start off by mentioning - I'd never have guessed that you have never watched the show. You've done such a great job with their characterization!One of the things that I really liked was showing the initial reaction of Priya wanting to confront Neeraj and Raj, but then ending up with her cowering from it. She is the type of person who would confront them, if it were about anything else, but because of the experiences and bullying she went through, it makes you understand why she didn't.Following that, I appreciated that Ram didn't comment on her crying. He knew his wife better than to point it out. The little commentary that he had running on didn't match the playfulness he had in their conversation, and that was really well done too. It shows that he wants to be there for her in a way she would feel comfortable.Also - I really liked that Ram wasn't walking on eggshells with her when he asked her straight up "Or is it just that you want to be in charge." To be there for her didn't mean to say whatever he had to to make her feel better, but to present another perspective instead.The way the word beautiful rang in her head was so adorable. It really depicts just how ugly and un-loved she was feeling, and how warm Ram had made her feel.It was indeed beautiful. And what made it even more special was him explaining to her that she mattered. To someone who feels invisible/unworthy, it is very easy to overlook their importance.Aaah... and to end off, I loved that it was a "I like you very much" rather than an I Love You. They aren't there yet, and it wouldn't be right for Ram to say that unless he meant it. So I really appreciated that.Lastly, more than any particular instance in the OS, what I really liked was the way you composed the piece. There was a very beautiful flow to it!I am looking forward to reading more of your works :)
sosweetsumi @sosweetsumi
2 years ago
ok i love it perioduff these two
Pks20 @Pks20
+ 2
2 years ago
I cannot believe you haven’t watched the show based upon your writing! You have been so spot on with the characters it’s u real!Beautifully written and portrayed.I was sinking deeper and deeper into Ram’s blue eyes as you described them in such detail. I liked how you managed to bring their polar experiences of their relationships with their fathers together… Ram had a positive relationship where as Priya’s was negative but high went through a loss and both wanted to take control of their situation… got the sake of their families. Different life experiences but same emotions and feelings.I also liked the realism of Ram telling Priya that he really liked her…. Not loved her as I don’t feel that they are there yet and personally as much as it’s nice to see it Bollywood and dramas … it rarely happens like that… or perhaps I am cynical 🤨 Enjoyed their stolen moments away from the party away from everyone else, just their time and Ram stressing in the need to do things that makes Priya happy, take time for herself. Loved it all! Great writing … please do tag me in to future posts 😊
basket_101 @basket_101
+ 3
2 years ago
I totally agree with you actually! I definitely shall when I get home later tonight :)
basket_101 @basket_101
+ 3
2 years ago
Wow, this was absolutely beautiful!I am trying to think of specific things I really loved that I can comment on, but I would then end up writing about the entire piece. It was truly amazing.You have a way with your words. I'm really glad I came across this work!!
SONIA441 @SONIA441
+ 4
2 years ago
Hey Lizzie!This was absolutely a stunning piece. Loved it to the core. How Ram was able to help with Priya's insecurities...& each line he used to allay her fears was so well-craftedLoved the flow of the entire sequence & hope I get to read many more work on this couple too....I think I have read some of your work on PS's ShiVi & they've also been amazing
Pori @Pori
+ 2
2 years ago
I was a bit surprised to see you on this forum but more than that I was EXCITED!!!! talk about making readers fall in love with the characters of a show and making them come alive. Darling, you have that skill. What a fantastic piece of art you have here. This is amazing!!!!hahah for once I thanked neeraj and his snarkiness! ram is soo sweet. lLOVE IT!!thank you for this beautiful piece of work
BlurredLines10 @BlurredLines10
2 years ago
Heart achingly beautiful! I adored it. So so so nice!