"A Final Request" (poetry)

desi chic

@desi chic

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Posted: 17 years ago

Hey there KAAians, how are you all??!! Okie... I guess its been a while since I bored you guys with my words so I wrote a few lines... I wrote them a while ago for a competition, but I think they are kinda suited for Gauri's situation when she is distanced from Shiv😕... Comments/Criticisms all welcome!😊... and I guess sleeping cannot be controlled here, but no snoring plz!🥱😆 Raminda... don't jump to any conclusions yet... aage aage paro...😉

"A Final Request" (separation)

Sookhe pate ki tarah hawa mein udh rahe hai hum...
Na manzil se waqif na raaste se pehchaan.
Waqt ki lehr jaise tham si gayi hai kahin...
Saasien toh chal rahin na jaane kaise magar...
Phir bhi zindagi ke safar mein chal rahe hai bejaan.
Yaadon ke sagar mein doobe hai kuch is kadar...
Jaise machli paani mein paati hai jeevan...
Aye khuda karde mujh nacheez par ek aur ehsaan...
Kahin se pila de in pyaasi nazron ko ek boond.
Todh de ye bandishien, dooriyan saari...
Na utehenge phir ye haath... na khulegi zubaan.

Translation: 😊

I'm flying aimlessly in the wind like a dry leaf...
Unknown to my destiny, nor familiar with the path...
The time has stopped somewhere...
Yet still I move on lifeless...
Lost in the sea of memories I am so...
Like a fish which depends on water for life...
Oh dearest Lord, do me ones last favour...
From somewhere quench the thirst of these eyes...
Break the boundaries, distances and all...
Then nor will these hands raise to beg, or this mouth open in request...

Hope you liked it!!

Cheers,

dc

Edited by desi chic - 17 years ago

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Posted: 17 years ago

I've died and gone to heaven, amazing,Extraordinary, remarkable, astounding, marvellous, incredible, wonderful, breathtaking, ,let me think of a few more words and i'll come back to u

tremendous, grand, splendid, just fine, impressive, striking, inspiring, imposing,

DC rocks👏👏 rocks👏👏 rocks👏👏 rocks👏👏 rocks👏👏

Raminda

Edited by Iqbaladdict - 17 years ago

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Posted: 17 years ago

i donot understand. i can see love, warmth, feelings spreading but how could the talent of poetry spread from people to people. this is wonderful. u did a marvelous job buddy. 👏

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Posted: 17 years ago

Extremely powerful, you r too good. Let the tears roll cause its really touching! 😃

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tinkertoesreads

@tinkertoesreads

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Posted: 17 years ago

Its beautiful!!! so u write poetry huh? No wonder ur fanfic is so poetic... DC, ur a marvellous writer, don't ever, and I mean EVER stop ur words from flowing!

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Priya_128

@Priya_128

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Posted: 17 years ago

*whooot *whooot*....u spin magic with your words....all the praise wont be enough for this. hai...hum toh fida ho gaye...brilliant work meri jaan. brilliant....
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Priya_128

@Priya_128

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Posted: 17 years ago

From somewhere quench the thirst of these eyes...
Break the boundaries, distances and all...
👏

what do i say ?? tu pls balaji creative team mein enter hojaa

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Posted: 17 years ago

really marvellous.. 😊

touched the heart and so much depth in these lines you have penned down...

love this bit...

"Aye khuda karde mujh nacheez par ek aur ehsaan...
Kahin se pila de in pyaasi nazron ko ek boond.
Todh de ye bandishien, dooriyan saari...
Na utehenge phir ye haath... na khulegi zubaan"

just superb and mindblowing..

these applause for you and you deserve it... 👏

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155447

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Posted: 17 years ago

its mindblowing.... you have a way with words... you write very beautifully.... thank you soooo much for sharin it... 👏

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Posted: 17 years ago

fantastic 👏 ur too gud 👏

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&quot;A Final Request&quot; (poetry)