OS: Ehsaas [prt-02/pg-04] (30th jan)

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Hello peeps 😊  not a new member but a ghost member maybe 😆 i've  been roundd this forum from strt bbut never posted anything. But AkshAm finally did the magic . 

Jindals got on with everyday life, bahus and guddan have a cordial relationship which cannot be mended.kishore and vardan took a liking towards guddan .the three muskeeters whichh brings out enjoyment whenn these three come together to plot funny pranks against dadi and some times Aj. Aj guddan relation is shaping fine, they understand each other, shoulder to each other in their weak moments, and silent ears to their silence they were comfortable with each other.
Aj has gone out of country regarding mischellion star, living jindal house duties to durga and restaurant to kishore - vardan .
It was late night, guddan sat in the dim litted hall of jindal bhavan,reading a cheesy novel when the phone rang
"Itni raat ko kaun phone karta hai?"
She received the call "hello"
"Hello guddan"
"Arrey uncle aap ho,mujhe laga prank call hoga..actually koi itni raat ko phone nahi karta hai na"
"Ab main bolon ?"
"Humne kaumsa roka hai aapko boliye"
"Bolne ka mauka hi chodti,aagey wala kaise bolega? Maa kaisi hai, main aaj bahut busy tha call nahi kar paaya ,ab kiya toh maa call receive nahi kar rahi sab thik hai na ghar par ?"
"Pehle baat,aapka ye permanent angry young man wala mood phone par bhi thik nhi hota hai kay? Aur doosri baat ,yahan bahut raat ho chuki hai aur dadi sogayi hai"
He ignored her first wrds
"Aur tum kyun nhi soyi?"
"Humein neend nahi aarahi thi toh hum aisi hi time pass lar rahe thay taki hum bore hojaye aur humey neend aajaye"
"Okay, maa se kehna maine call kiya tha ,aur tum bhi sojao bahut late hogayi hai"
"Okay,good night"
Next day went as usual by night time guddan sat in her balcomy playing on her phone when her phone rang
"Hello"
"Guddan"
"Aap? Aaj humare phone pe kaise call kiya ?oh landline kharab hogaya hai na mcchh durga bahu ne technician ko bhi bulaya tha shayad kal aayega,wo sab chodiye aap kaise hai?"
"Main thik hoon ,ghar par sab kaise hai ? "
"Dadi toh bilkul fit and fine, teeno bahuyein bhi thik hai kishore bhi thik hai bas vardan ko thoda sa zukham ho gaya hai"
"Aur...?"
"Aur haan kathor bhi kaafi badmash hogaya hai, apnq dana hi nahi khata"
"Aur tum kaisi ho guddan ?"
Guddan was taken abck by his question they never had a normal conversation leave about her well beings
"Ah..hum bhi thik hai" she replied in a confusion
Ek, dor se bandhi kaise do kahaniyaan
Ek, taar se jud gayi kaise ye do zindaganiyaan
"Kay hua?"
"Kuch nhi"
"Ab tak soyi kyun nhi ?"
"Humey neend hi nhi aarahi thi, aap bataiye aap ka kaam ban gaya ?"
"Nahi abhi kuch kaam baqi hai "
"Toh aapne sight seeing ki hai dubai ki ?"
"Guddan main yahan ghoomne nahi aaya hoon"
"Arrey bhai ye kay baat hui ,koi rule thodi na hai ki work related gaye ho toh ghoom nahi sakte,nayi place gaye ho dekho naya naya,hume toh bahut pasand hai nayi jagahon par jana  naye logon se milna"
"Ab main tum nahi hoon na "
"Aap humari tarah ho bhi nahi sakte jindal saab, par hum bhi apko apni tarah banake hi maanege" she laughed heartily
Iss phone ke saaz par meri aawaz bhar mujhpe hansti hain khamoshiyaan
Mere chehre ki do nishaniyan
Mere chehre ki do nishaniyan
Mere chehre ki do nishaniyaan
Mere chehre ki do nishaaniyaan...
Her laugh did something weird to his heart
"Hmmm, bahut late hogayi hai sojao"
"Haan aap bhi , apna khayal rakhiye good night"
Next day passed as slow as it could, two people were anxiously waiting for night to come still ignorant towards the reason
Guddan was trying to concentrate in her novel but failed miserably, every two seconds she looked at the phone
Finally it rang, she could feel her heart missed a beat and butterflies doing tango in her stomach
Kis ki nawazish hui rookhi si zindagi par
Halki si barish hui sookhi si zindagi par
Hai khauf ke na chura le koi kal-
Mere aasmaan se ye chori ke badal
Churaye so meherbaniyaan
Mere chehre ki do nishaniyan
"Aaj kafi late hogayi mr.punctual uncle ko"
"Tum mere phone ka wait kar rahi thi ?"
"Haan" her reply made his heart skip ,because somewhere he wanted to hear that
"...wo actually aaj humey bahut neend aarahi thi toh socha aap phone karenge tab sojaungi"
"..oh maine disturb kiya.." he cut off
"Nahiii" she bit her tongue to stop her stupidity
"Guddan tum thik ho ?"
"Wo kay hai na ..hum kabhi kabhi kuch bhi keh dete hai apko toh pata hi hai hum nervous hojate hai"
"Its okay"
Guddan ranted about her day and asked him about his day
He was reluctant at first, but guddan's wands did magic and mr akshat jindal talked about his day ,how his host took him out on city tour what he liked about the city.
There talk was interrupted by guddans yawn
"Ab sojao, bahut late ho chuki hai, waise tumhari aadat bigad gayi hai ,late tak jaag rahi ho aajkal"
"Ye sahi hai aapka,hum aapke call ka wait kare aur aap hi humari taang kheenche "
"Hmm,ab sojao good night"
"Good night"
Next night
Her phone rang, she received it after few seconds
Maana ke naazil nahi hona tha ye farishta
Maana ke hasil na hona tha humko ye risht
"aj aap late hogayi mrs guddan akshat jindal"
"Hum...late..*pant* ..nahi"she replied panting heavily ,which alerted him 
"Guddan tum thik toh hona "he asked worriedly
She nodde her head,and realised he couldnt see
"Haan hum bilkul thik hai "
"Phir tum aise .."
"Wo actually hum dance kar rahe thay .. kafi din he hogaye hume practice kiye huwe isiliye thoda si saans phool gayil
"pagal ladkikiki, tumne dara hi diya tha"
"Oye uncle, itna math dariye"he rolled his eyes at her reply
"I never knew u could dance"
"Apko toh abhi kafi cheezein nhi pata humare bare mein"
"I cannot agree until i actually see it"
"Dance actually hume apni maa se mili hai toh.. this is the only thing i can actually do properly" she replied smilingly
Lage khoobsurat mujhe ab khuda tu
Farishte se mere na karna juda tu
Mita de ye badgumaniyaan
Mere chehre ki do nishaniyan..
He was taken aback by her reply, though she always said she could snything there was always unsurity, but this time it was her heart speaking
They continued talking ,guddan pulling his leg and him smiling at her innocence they connected at another level, it was beyond comfort level, a relation was budding unknown to each other.
Ek, dor se bandhi kaise do kahaniyaan
Ek, taar se jud gayi kaise ye do zindaganiyaan
Is phone ke saaz par meri aawaz bhar mujhpe hansti hain khamoshiyaan
Mere chehre ki do nishaniyan
Mere chehre ki do nishaniyan
Mere chehre ki do nishaniyaan
Mere chehre ki do nishaaniyaan...
This continued for days, bahus and dadi did notice a difference in guddan ,she was happy for real, her smile was more radiant and her eyes spoke bliss
"Yeh chuhiya ajkal kuch zyada nhi chehak rahi durga di?" Asked lakshmi
"Haan durga di maine bhi notice kiya,ye pehle srf kudti phirti thi aajkal kuch zyada hi udd rahi hai" added saru
"Tum dono ko kuch aur kaam nahi hai ? Jab dekho guddan guddan" an irritated durga replied
"Jao kaam karo apna" saru and lakshmi ran towards kitchen sensing durgas anger
"Baat toh sahi hai,kuch toh alag hai iss guddan ke saath,par kay"durga asked herself


I know it a little drafty, been away from writing for a long tym needs polishing🥱 And please ignore grammatical mistake posting it from phone 

Hope u like it
Do Comment
~shab😊

Edited by -TeriMalang- - 5 years ago

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Posted: 5 years ago
It was an awesome OS.  
I really like the phone conversations. I wish Cvs show something like this in show also. 

It was superb and the way they wait for night to converse with each other is protrayed beautifully😊😊
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Posted: 5 years ago
Nice update
Loving it
Waiting for next part 
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Posted: 5 years ago
amazing os... very cute! hope there's moree!
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Posted: 5 years ago
Nice update
Plz update next part 
This seems to be so interesting😛
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Posted: 5 years ago
Nice update
Please update the next part soon
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Posted: 5 years ago
Awesome
Loved the sweet conversation of Akshan
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Posted: 5 years ago
It was really a nice OS...u  described their relation developing gradually  👏
Will u continue this 😃? 
( Hoping for a yes) 😆


P.s. I can very well relate to ur problem of typing such stories using phone as I too have been doing the same 😛
Edited by Raglak_akshan - 5 years ago
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Posted: 5 years ago
Beautiful os dear
Akshan relationship progress gradually and beautifully I loved it
Can u please write one more part 
Edited by kusharberry - 5 years ago
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Posted: 5 years ago
Superb
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