BADLAAV -(Akshan SS)Final part updated in page 4* - Page 2

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: Krina_Patel

Nice start

Update soon ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜Š

Thank u so much. .will update soon 
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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: kayafever

Beautiful writing lora pls do continue soon

Thanks  a lot...will update soon..
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Awesome update dear
Plzzz do continue soon
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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: kusharberry

Awesome update dear

Plzzz do continue soon

Thank you so much. ..will update soon 
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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: nish_vir

Lora ๐Ÿ˜›, this was worth reading, all right! So dont say you dont know how to write :)

I liked Guddan's response to AJ after he was done pinning the blame on her. She was cool as a cucumber๐Ÿ˜Ž and nailed it, with her words. This is how Guddan actually is, unmindful of those jo uske peeche pad jate hai๐Ÿ˜†. How royally she told dadi ki i'm going for audition ;)
Aj bhi aj hi hai. Thoda gussail, otherwise very sensitive towards his mother and he does think of Guddan highly๐Ÿ˜† 'kisi aur ko pakaa rhi hogi!'
Eagerly waiting for nxt update.

Thanks for the kind words dear..it means a lot to me...I'm glad that you all liked it...will try to update soon...
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Posted: 5 years ago
BADLAAV -(Part-2)

AJ ne bahut baar Guddan ko phone kiya...lekin uska phone nahi lag raha tha..ab sach mein AJ pareshaan hogaya...Tabhi usse ek vedio call aata hai..wo receive karta hai aur wahan ka nazara dekh ke shock ho jaata hai...Guddan ko ek chair pe baandh ke raka tha aur wo behosh thi ...uske ke chehre pe khoon tha...AJ darr gaya...
AJ:"Guddan ...tum kahan ho ...?ye khoon ye sab kya hai..?kisne kiya..?.."
Pehle AJ shock huva lekin phir usne socha ki 'zaroor Guddan ki koi sharaarat hogi...audition ke liye gayi thi na ...uska continuation kar rahi hogi muje irritate karne ke liye...'
Aj:"Bas karo apna ye natak guddan aur jaldi se ghar aa jao..maa tumhare liye pareshaan hai.."
Tabhi Guddan ke peeche se ek Dutta aa jata hai...
Dutta: "ye natak nahi hai AJ saheb...ye asli hai asli...dutta ka asli khel..."
AJ bahut gussa ho gaya.
AJ:"Duttaaa...teri itni Himmat kaise huyi..."
Dutta jor se hasta hai...
Dutta:"Himmat tho karni yi padegi na AJ...tumne jo kiya mere saath uska badla lene ke liye..."
AJ:"chod do Guddan ko dutta..."
Dutta:"itni jaldi bhi kya hai AJ...abhi tho picture shuru huyi hai..apni pyaari biwi se baath karna chahte ho? Wo kya hai na tumhari biwi bahuth bolthi hai...uska munh bandh karne ke liye usse ek tappad lagana pada aur wo behosh hogayi.. "
AJ gusse se:"Duttaaa...guddan ko haath lagane ki jurrat kaise huyi Teri...mein tuje chodunga nahi..."
Dutta:"wo kaya hai na AJ...kitna bolthi hai Teri biwi...?chaanv chaanv chaanv chaanv...mere tho khaan pak gaye the...isiliye ek tappad lagana pada...Muje ek baat batao AJ...iss umar mein tum kaise jhel lete ho iss nonstop chatterbox ko...bekar mein BP badadegi..."
Dutta ne Guddan ke munh par paani maara aur wo hosh mein aagayi...
AJ:"Guddan...tum teek tho ho na...?
AJ ka concerned dekh ke Guddan"hum teek hai uncle ...lekin aap itna concerned mat dhikao Hume ..humse digest nahi ho payega...ek tho inn logo ne mera dimag karab karke rakha hai..."
Guddan as usual apne style mein ...
Tabhi Guddan ke peeche se aur ek aadmi aata hai..
Parv:"Tum logo ka prem puraan katam huva tho hum thoda baat karle AJ ji..."
AJ: "Parv tum...ye tumne achcha nahi kiya ...iska anjaam tum jaante ho na..."
Parv Guddan par Gandhi si nazar daal ke
"Anjaam ke baare mein baad mein sochenge AJ...pehle thoda mazaa tho lene dho"
Guddan gusse se" pehle mere haat tho kholo kamine ..phir eaisa mazaa chakayenge na zindagi mein na bhuloge..."
AJ: "sapne mein bhi math sochna Guddan ko chune ki parv...tumhara haath kaat denge..."
Dutta:"Rakshas ki jaan thote pe basthi hai waise yi tumhari jaan iss Guddan pe... hai na AJ?bahuth pyaar karthe ho na tum apni iss biwi se...tho iski hifazat chaahthe ho tho meri sharthe maan lo.."
AJ gusse se"yeh kya bakwas hai...kaise sharthe..?chod do Guddan ko..."
Dutta evil smile dekar"AJ. ...agar tum tumhari iss choti si biwi ko sahi salamat ghar leke Jana chahte ho tho...tumne jo meri property mujhse cheeni hai na wo tumhe wapas karna hoga..."
AJ bina soche turanth maan jata hai.
AJ: "haa...teek hai dutta. .bas guddan ko kuch math Karna "
Dutta:"rukho AJ...puri baat tho sun lo...meri property ke saath saath tumhe tumhara restaurant bhi mere naam karna hoga..."
Guddan aur AJ dono shock ho jate hai...
AJ: "pagal ho gaye ho kya dutta..?
Guddan:" sach mein iss dutta uncle ko pagalpan ke daure pad rahe hai"..
Dutta gusse mein"chup karo ladki..aur AJ tum jaante ho na mein kitna katarnak Hun...kuch bhi kar sakta Hun..tuje Teri biwi zinda chayiye tho chup chap meri sharte maan le..."
AJ pareshaan hogaya...bahut bada kashmakash mein tha wo ...ek taraf uski zindagi uska sapna uska restaurant aur dusri taraf uski biwi Guddan ki jaan jo chaahe ya na chaahe uski zindagi ka ahem hissa hai ab...kisse chunega AJ?Restaurant ya Guddan?
AJ ne ek baar aankhe bandh kar di...usse Guddan ke saath bitaaye huye har katte meete pal yaad aagaye...Nahin...wo Guddan ko inn darindon ke beech nahi chod sakta...usne faisla kar liya...
AJ:"Teek hai dutta...muje manzoor hai"
Dutta aur Parv Kush...Guddan shock...AJ worried...
Parv :"Arre waah...Budda tho sach mein fisal chuka hai biwi ke pyaar mein.."
Dutta:"aur nahi tho kya?apna sapna apna restaurant kurbaan kar raha hai wo bhi kiske liye iss galthiyon ki pudiya ke liye..."
Ab aur chup rehena Guddan se na ho payega...
Guddan:"ye kya kar rahe ho uncle ..?apke antara ka sapna kurbaan kar rahe ho?..nahi... mein aapko eaisa karne nahin doongi...aap na meri chinta math karo...hum ne mohalle mein bahut logo ko seeda kiya hai...inn dono kamino ko mein sambhal loongi...ye tho humse zaroor ho payega..."
Itne mein dutta gusse se Guddan ko ek zordaar tappad lagana hai...guddan ke munh se khoon aata hai..
AJ:"Duttaaa..."gusse se chilata hai.
AJ:"Guddan tum teek ho..?plz ab chup raho...mein baat kar raha Hun na..?"
Dutta:"Apni biwi ki math suno AJ...chup chup mera kaam karo aur apni biwi ko le chalo...aur police ko inform karne ki koshish bhi mat karna..Varna Teri biwi ko jaan se..."
AJ dutta ki baat kaat leta hai aur
AJ: "Nahin...nahin Javunga...guddan ko kuch math Karna"
Parv Guddan ke pass aata hai aur uske chehre ko Chu tha hai 
Parv:"jyaada hoshiyaari math dikhaana aur jaldi aana AJ...wo kya hai na... Teri biwi pataka hai pataka...mein tho tehra gabru navjavan fisal gaya tho..jyaada dher control kar nahi pavunga...Guddan se kuch ho payega ya na ho payega...humse sabkuch ho pata hai AJ..."
Parv devilishly hasta hai...
AJ:"Parv...meri biwi ko haath nahi lagana...uss par bhuri nazar daali tho jaan se maar dalenge ...
"Guddan tum chinta mat karo... mein aa raha hoon.."

AJ pareshaan hokar car chala raha tha..Jitni jaldi ho sake utni jaldi wo Guddan ke pass pahunchna chahtha tha..kyunki wo jaanta tha dutta aur Parv kitna katarnak hai...wo unpe bharosa karke Guddan ki jaan katre mein nahi daal sakta tha...usse guddan ki bahut chinta ho rahi thi...Insaaniyat ke liye yi sahi wo usse har haal mein bachana chahtha tha...Ghar mein koi pareshaan na ho isiliye kisi ko ye baat nahi batayi usne Siva kishore or vardaan ko...Jab AJ Dutta ke adde pe pahuncha tab dutta uska intezaar kar raha tha.
Dutta:"Aayiye AJ saheb welcome...Papers laaye ho?"
AJ ki nazare Guddan ko doond rahi thi...
AJ:"tumhe jo chayiye wo milega...pehle Guddan ko mere pass bejo...kahan hai Guddan...?"
Dutta:"arre AJ...itne bhi utavale kyun ho rahe ho apni pyaari biwi ko Milne ke liye...thoda sabr karo..."
Dutta laughing...AJ frustrated...
AJ:"apna gandha mazak bandh karo aur Guddan ko muje dho..."
Dutta:"Pehle tujse mera hissab tho chukta kar loon AJ..."
Dutta AJ par attack karta hai...Dono ke beech fight ho jaati hai...dono gayal hote hai...tabhi vardaan aur kishore police ko leke aa jaate hai...haan...Back up plan ke taur pe AJ ne  vardaan ko police ko lekar aane ke liye pehle se yi inform kiya tha...
Kishore:"Paapa hum iss dutta ko sambhalenge aap Guddan Maa ko doondiye..."
Dutta aur chelo ko police arrest karthi hai...
AJ Guddan ko doondte huye chala jaata hai...
Dar asal Parv apna badla pura karne ke liye Guddan ko wahan se lekar dusri aur chala jata hai...ek purani garrage...
Guddan:"ye kya kar rahe ho parv.."
Parv:" Batate hai sasu maa...bathate hai...Dutta ko tho restaurant mil jayega ..lekin muje kya milega...? Muje aapne jo tappad maare the  aur AJ ne jo beizzat kiya tha uska hissab kaun dega...?"
Guddan darr gayi.
Guddan: "ye kya bak rahe ho tum?"
Parv:" aaj tumhari aisi haalat karunga jis se tumhari rooh kaamp utegi...aur tumhari ye haalat dekh kar tumhara wo uncle pati tadpega...tab tum logo ko pata chalega ki parv se panga lene ka natija...tab jaake muje sukoon milega...ek teer se do nishaane.."
Parv Guddan ke pass aa jaata hai...uske chehre par haath rakhtha hai...
Guddan:"kya battameezi hai..?chod do Hume.."
Parv :"chodenge chodenge ...itni khoobsurat cheez ka mazaa tho lene do..."
Parv par pagalpan sawaar tha...Guddan bahut royi chillayi lekin parv ne suni nahi...usne Guddan ke kapde faade...aur usse molest karne ki khoshish ki...guddan bahut protest kiya...cheeki... chillayi..."bachao ..koi bachao..."shaayad zindagi mein pehli baar Guddan itni laachaar hogayi...aaj tak kabhi haar nahi maan ne wali Guddan aaj iss haivaan ke aage haar gayi...usse kuch samaj mein nahi aa raha tha ...bas wo motionless ho gayi ...sab kuch dhoondla dhoondla dikhayi de raha tha...bas ek aakhri baar jor se chillayi "AKSHAT..."aur shock mein chali gayi...

To be continued. ..
Precap:Emotional breakdown 

Note:sorry for the short update and errors..Actually I wanted to complete the story in second part itself...but I couldn't write bcoz I was busy...next part will be last part and impotent one...I will try to update very soon...
Thank u guyz for your support. ..
Love 
Lora vincent 


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Posted: 5 years ago
Beautiful and emotional update
Loved it AJ neh guddan ko chunna 
Oops poor guddan I hope AJ saves her from this devil and beat him into pulp
Plzzz do continue soon
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Posted: 5 years ago
Ohho so frightening I feel so sad for Guddan
Really good to read that Akshat thinking of Guddan and Guddan thinking for Akshat
I want Akshat and Guddan bonding after all this mishap
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Posted: 5 years ago
Superb update 
Love it
Continue soon
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Posted: 5 years ago
Now AJ won't spare those two idiots ๐Ÿ˜ก
Fantastic update ๐Ÿ‘
I wanted to read more ๐Ÿ˜†
Yeh bhi bata do ki next part kab aaega๐Ÿ˜›