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Hey guys writing RaVika OS for the first time mainly focusing on devika's confession.. hope u all like it.. likes dislikes critcism and compliments all are welcomed here
It was deep dark night Devika is wearing cute red saree standing near window continously staring moon and waiting for Ravi
{A brief background scenario here is in some function that held jus before this scene both the families were accusing n arguimg with each other with those blame games on ravi. Ravi was completely disheartened and disappointed n left somewhere}
Coming back to devika here..
She is disappointed at what has recently happened and restless n concerned regarding Ravi's whereabout
D: pata ni sab ravi ko itna galat q samjhte h vo to bechara sabke bareme acchaa hi sochta h.. auro ka kya bolu ek time pe to mai khud usko kitna galat smjti thi..(smiles a bit) or ye ravi b na pata ni kaha chala gya kaisa hoga kya sochra hoga..kitna pareshan hoga bechara.. jaise hi aaega na mai bina time waste kie apne dil ki baat bol dungi.. (luking towrds door with hope) ravi plzz jaldi aajao na
Suddenly she feels his presence n turns wid a jerk to find Ravi coming toward door.. she get all excited n moves a bit approaching near door..
Ravi is shattered with all acusations on him n vry disappointed(might hv even cried) his eyes completely red
Ravi saw devika standing near bed and thinks: ye abtk jagi hui h matlb fir kach kach shuru hone wali h.. ravi beta sunne k lie tayar hoja
Devika also felt d pain through which ravi was going through
D tries to speak: Ravi...
Ravi stops her from saying in middle and say: ha srf tum bacchi thi ab tum b sunao mujhe kholo apne 50 hazar illjamo ka pitara lagao mujhpe bade bade ilzam but u no what mujhe koi fark ni padte qki mai janta hu maine jo kia vo sahi tha..(tears roll down his eyes he was completely devastated his voice become husky) are tumne to mujhpe kabi bharosa kia hi ni. Tumhare lie to mai dunia ka sabse bada con man hu..
D tries to intervene: ravi meri baat to suno
R( with so much pain) : ni devika mujhe sab pata h tum kya kehna chahti ho.. tumhare or ilzam mai ni seh paunga..bht bura lagta h mujhe. Dil pe chot lagti h jab tum mujhe galat smjhti ho
D tries lot to say she was also tery eyed..but Ravi continues with those talk and was not ready to hear a word from D thinking she'l also accuse him..he was badly heartbroken n blurts out again n again that all he has done for her there is not any personal intrest of him..he was continously crying n blurting out his feelings his actual pain of not being understood
Suddenly devika moves forward holds his hand pull him close cup his face(holding his cheecks with both hands) and kissed him on lips with full authority..for those moment there was pin drop silence and they could actually feel each others heartbeats..ravi(going wid d folw) holds devika's back and gently moves his hand there..ravi felt as if some lightening ray has gone through his body and he was shaken though plesantly
Finaly both comes back to there senses n devika moves back and turns away.. Ravi was still in shock wid wide open mouth n constantly blinking his eyes couldnt able to beleive what has just happened..his eyes were shinning though filled with tears..
D turns back and says: muh band karlo varna kch chala jaega
Ravi came to senses and closes his mouth n tries to speak but devika shhh's him
D: ye sab tum kya keh rhe the ravi.. mai tumpe koi ilzam ni lagana chahti infact mai to tumhe thnk u kehna chahti thi.. tumne jo kia vo koi or ni kar sakta
Ravi is plesantly surprised and equally shocked too.. he was so confused nd boggled
D continues: haa mana maine tumhe smjhne me thda time laga dia but itta bura ni sochti mai tumhare bareme(her voice broke tears fall from her eyes they are standing close)
Or tum kya kehre the tum bht bure ho let me tell u Mr Ravi Grewal maine aaj tk tumse accha insaan ni dkhi hu jo dusro ki khusio k lie apni parwah na kare( she started crying)
Ravi is boggled and tries to comfort her.. devika started hiting him near his chest n continue saying: tum q hamesha aesa karte ho mere sath q itna pyaar karte ho mujhse..q..q ravi q..(stops hiting him n hugs him with her head near his heart,crying) mai tumhe pyaar karnese khud ko rok hi na pai.. mai ni jee sakti tumhare bina ravi..
Ravi smiles hearing this.. his eyes glown..he was like top on d world n happily hugs her back.. devika tightly clutches him as close as possible n continued crying.. A tear drop roll down Ravi's eyes also..he pulls her more close n touches her waist with one hand..devika feels his touch and shyly smiles..
To be continued later..
Egarly waiting for feedback
part 1- pg 1
part 2- pg 1
part3- pg 3
part4- pg 4
part5- pg 5
part6- pg 6 - the ILU part
part 7- pg 8- the consummation part
It was deep dark night Devika is wearing cute red saree standing near window continously staring moon and waiting for Ravi
{A brief background scenario here is in some function that held jus before this scene both the families were accusing n arguimg with each other with those blame games on ravi. Ravi was completely disheartened and disappointed n left somewhere}
Coming back to devika here..
She is disappointed at what has recently happened and restless n concerned regarding Ravi's whereabout
D: pata ni sab ravi ko itna galat q samjhte h vo to bechara sabke bareme acchaa hi sochta h.. auro ka kya bolu ek time pe to mai khud usko kitna galat smjti thi..(smiles a bit) or ye ravi b na pata ni kaha chala gya kaisa hoga kya sochra hoga..kitna pareshan hoga bechara.. jaise hi aaega na mai bina time waste kie apne dil ki baat bol dungi.. (luking towrds door with hope) ravi plzz jaldi aajao na
Suddenly she feels his presence n turns wid a jerk to find Ravi coming toward door.. she get all excited n moves a bit approaching near door..
Ravi is shattered with all acusations on him n vry disappointed(might hv even cried) his eyes completely red
Ravi saw devika standing near bed and thinks: ye abtk jagi hui h matlb fir kach kach shuru hone wali h.. ravi beta sunne k lie tayar hoja
Devika also felt d pain through which ravi was going through
D tries to speak: Ravi...
Ravi stops her from saying in middle and say: ha srf tum bacchi thi ab tum b sunao mujhe kholo apne 50 hazar illjamo ka pitara lagao mujhpe bade bade ilzam but u no what mujhe koi fark ni padte qki mai janta hu maine jo kia vo sahi tha..(tears roll down his eyes he was completely devastated his voice become husky) are tumne to mujhpe kabi bharosa kia hi ni. Tumhare lie to mai dunia ka sabse bada con man hu..
D tries to intervene: ravi meri baat to suno
R( with so much pain) : ni devika mujhe sab pata h tum kya kehna chahti ho.. tumhare or ilzam mai ni seh paunga..bht bura lagta h mujhe. Dil pe chot lagti h jab tum mujhe galat smjhti ho
D tries lot to say she was also tery eyed..but Ravi continues with those talk and was not ready to hear a word from D thinking she'l also accuse him..he was badly heartbroken n blurts out again n again that all he has done for her there is not any personal intrest of him..he was continously crying n blurting out his feelings his actual pain of not being understood
Suddenly devika moves forward holds his hand pull him close cup his face(holding his cheecks with both hands) and kissed him on lips with full authority..for those moment there was pin drop silence and they could actually feel each others heartbeats..ravi(going wid d folw) holds devika's back and gently moves his hand there..ravi felt as if some lightening ray has gone through his body and he was shaken though plesantly
Finaly both comes back to there senses n devika moves back and turns away.. Ravi was still in shock wid wide open mouth n constantly blinking his eyes couldnt able to beleive what has just happened..his eyes were shinning though filled with tears..
D turns back and says: muh band karlo varna kch chala jaega
Ravi came to senses and closes his mouth n tries to speak but devika shhh's him
D: ye sab tum kya keh rhe the ravi.. mai tumpe koi ilzam ni lagana chahti infact mai to tumhe thnk u kehna chahti thi.. tumne jo kia vo koi or ni kar sakta
Ravi is plesantly surprised and equally shocked too.. he was so confused nd boggled
D continues: haa mana maine tumhe smjhne me thda time laga dia but itta bura ni sochti mai tumhare bareme(her voice broke tears fall from her eyes they are standing close)
Or tum kya kehre the tum bht bure ho let me tell u Mr Ravi Grewal maine aaj tk tumse accha insaan ni dkhi hu jo dusro ki khusio k lie apni parwah na kare( she started crying)
Ravi is boggled and tries to comfort her.. devika started hiting him near his chest n continue saying: tum q hamesha aesa karte ho mere sath q itna pyaar karte ho mujhse..q..q ravi q..(stops hiting him n hugs him with her head near his heart,crying) mai tumhe pyaar karnese khud ko rok hi na pai.. mai ni jee sakti tumhare bina ravi..
Ravi smiles hearing this.. his eyes glown..he was like top on d world n happily hugs her back.. devika tightly clutches him as close as possible n continued crying.. A tear drop roll down Ravi's eyes also..he pulls her more close n touches her waist with one hand..devika feels his touch and shyly smiles..
To be continued later..
Egarly waiting for feedback
part 1- pg 1
part 2- pg 1
part3- pg 3
part4- pg 4
part5- pg 5
part6- pg 6 - the ILU part
part 7- pg 8- the consummation part
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