os-beinteha mohabbat hai tumse special note on pg 12

Posted: 2014-04-28T14:18:16Z
hello friends,thanks from bottom of my heart for appretiating my first story"tere liye".
as promised i am back with my new story"beinteha mohabbat hai tumse",as i am a big raya fan so this will be a romantic but with lots of drama,here is cheracter sketchas well as introduction to track...

RAM KAPOOR is elder son of amernath kapoor and krishna kapoor,quite,shy,down to earth,extremely hardworking and and very sensetive man,he single handedly runs the kapoor empire with lot of pride.he has devoted himself to work and demands of his family.

amarnath kapoor and krishna kapoor died in a car accident,when ram was 25,and then
ram's dadi,the only person in RAM's home who cares 4 him.
geeta kapoor sister of amernath kapoor enters kapoor mension with her two children and controls the entire mension,she had taken divose from her husband and came back from US,permanently settled in KM.
rajat kapur is elder son of geeta kapoor,and was a spoil brat,
sneha kapur is daughter of geeta kapoor,is very rude stuborn and spoiled lady.

vikram and neha ram's chidhood buddies

priya sharma daughter  of sudhir and shipra sharma runs a small industry of cosmatics in mumbai,is a happy go lucky girl enjoying her life to fullest in their small world.

further cheracters will introduce as the story progresses

in the kapoor mension...
rajat;mom,mom where r u

rajat shouts on entering KM with lot of anger,geeta came out from her kingsize bedroom
geeta;what happen beta,itne guse main kyu ho
rajat;what is this mom,menay apko bataya tha na ke mujhe bmw latest model buy karna hai,to phir meray account mein paise abhi tak kyu transfer nahi hue,aj jab main ne pament ke lye unhe yeh card diya to unho ne kaha ke meray account main paise nahi hain,
throwing the card in anger
geeta;relax rajat main abhi ram se pochti hoon;and was about to call ram.

in the meantime ram and vikram enters the hall
geeta;what is this ram?how can u be so irresponsible,maine tumhe sid ke account main paise transfer karne ko kaha.
ram;par bua,maine last weak hi isske account main 50 lacks deposit kiye hain...
rajat;look at this mom,bhai ab hisab rakhte hain ke hum kya kharch karte hain.
ram;meray kehne ka woh matlab nahi  hai rajat
geeta;ram tum to kehte ho ke hum tumhare apne hain,phir humse yeh garon wala salok kuan!agar tum chata ho hum yaha se chale jayain gye,and start shadding crocodile tears
ram;arre buaji,yeh app kya keh rahi hain,yeh ghar apka hai,sab kuch apka hai,app jaisa kahe gi waisa hi hoga,aur rajat mera bhai hai,mera saab kuch ussi ka to hai
he goes near her and said"agar meri kisi bat se apko taklef hue ho to main haath jor kar apse maafi mangta hoon,i am sorry.
geeta;its ok ram maine kabhi rajat aur tum main koi faraq nahi samja.
ram;app jaisa chahain gi waisa hi hoga and side hugging her,and she gave an evil smile to rajat.

vikram noticed the entire scene and felt bad for ram,he thought,ram ki acchai ka yeh log kitna faida uthate hain,aur ram jo insab pe apni jaan cherata hai kab inta asli roop samaj paye ga,oh GOD pls ram ki zindagi main koi aisa insaan bhej jo usse scchi mohabbat kare,

precap;ram and priya's first encounter

Edited by afshaan - 2014-12-02T14:08:01Z
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Posted: 2014-04-28T20:16:58Z
Awesome start pls make the scene clear like ram- or rajat- then u start ur dialogue n i like the concept pls continue soon
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Posted: 2014-04-28T20:38:39Z
Nice start..cont soon
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Posted: 2014-04-28T22:53:38Z
Lovely startingWink
Continue soon
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Posted: 2014-04-28T23:10:30Z
nice start...waiting for the RAYAs first encounterDay Dreaming
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Posted: 2014-04-29T00:04:19Z
lovd it waiting for 
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Posted: 2014-04-29T00:28:44Z
First part is nice good beginning
Ram is so alone vikram is right
waiting for Priya's entry in his life
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Posted: 2014-04-29T01:49:24Z
Nice start...
es story mein sid bhi hai kyaOuch
aapne kaha sid ke account mein paose trasfer kyun nhi hua krkConfused
continue soon..!!!
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