os-beinteha mohabbat hai tumse special note on pg 12

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hello friends,thanks from bottom of my heart for appretiating my first story"tere liye".
as promised i am back with my new story"beinteha mohabbat hai tumse",as i am a big raya fan so this will be a romantic but with lots of drama,here is cheracter sketchas well as introduction to track...

RAM KAPOOR is elder son of amernath kapoor and krishna kapoor,quite,shy,down to earth,extremely hardworking and and very sensetive man,he single handedly runs the kapoor empire with lot of pride.he has devoted himself to work and demands of his family.

amarnath kapoor and krishna kapoor died in a car accident,when ram was 25,and then
ram's dadi,the only person in RAM's home who cares 4 him.
geeta kapoor sister of amernath kapoor enters kapoor mension with her two children and controls the entire mension,she had taken divose from her husband and came back from US,permanently settled in KM.
rajat kapur is elder son of geeta kapoor,and was a spoil brat,
sneha kapur is daughter of geeta kapoor,is very rude stuborn and spoiled lady.

vikram and neha ram's chidhood buddies

priya sharma daughter  of sudhir and shipra sharma runs a small industry of cosmatics in mumbai,is a happy go lucky girl enjoying her life to fullest in their small world.


further cheracters will introduce as the story progresses

in the kapoor mension...
rajat;mom,mom where r u

rajat shouts on entering KM with lot of anger,geeta came out from her kingsize bedroom
geeta;what happen beta,itne guse main kyu ho
rajat;what is this mom,menay apko bataya tha na ke mujhe bmw latest model buy karna hai,to phir meray account mein paise abhi tak kyu transfer nahi hue,aj jab main ne pament ke lye unhe yeh card diya to unho ne kaha ke meray account main paise nahi hain,
throwing the card in anger
geeta;relax rajat main abhi ram se pochti hoon;and was about to call ram.

in the meantime ram and vikram enters the hall
geeta;what is this ram?how can u be so irresponsible,maine tumhe sid ke account main paise transfer karne ko kaha.
ram;par bua,maine last weak hi isske account main 50 lacks deposit kiye hain...
rajat;look at this mom,bhai ab hisab rakhte hain ke hum kya kharch karte hain.
ram;meray kehne ka woh matlab nahi  hai rajat
geeta;ram tum to kehte ho ke hum tumhare apne hain,phir humse yeh garon wala salok kuan!agar tum chata ho hum yaha se chale jayain gye,and start shadding crocodile tears
ram;arre buaji,yeh app kya keh rahi hain,yeh ghar apka hai,sab kuch apka hai,app jaisa kahe gi waisa hi hoga,aur rajat mera bhai hai,mera saab kuch ussi ka to hai
he goes near her and said"agar meri kisi bat se apko taklef hue ho to main haath jor kar apse maafi mangta hoon,i am sorry.
geeta;its ok ram maine kabhi rajat aur tum main koi faraq nahi samja.
ram;app jaisa chahain gi waisa hi hoga and side hugging her,and she gave an evil smile to rajat.

vikram noticed the entire scene and felt bad for ram,he thought,ram ki acchai ka yeh log kitna faida uthate hain,aur ram jo insab pe apni jaan cherata hai kab inta asli roop samaj paye ga,oh GOD pls ram ki zindagi main koi aisa insaan bhej jo usse scchi mohabbat kare,

precap;ram and priya's first encounter


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Posted: 10 years ago
Awesome start pls make the scene clear like ram- or rajat- then u start ur dialogue n i like the concept pls continue soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
Lovely starting😉
Continue soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
nice start...waiting for the RAYAs first encounter
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Posted: 10 years ago
First part is nice good beginning
Ram is so alone vikram is right
waiting for Priya's entry in his life
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Posted: 10 years ago
Nice start...
es story mein sid bhi hai kya
aapne kaha sid ke account mein paose trasfer kyun nhi hua krk😕
continue soon..!!!
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Posted: 9 years ago
beinteha mohabbat hai tumse
part 2


next day morning...
in KM...

ram came down,after getting ready for office but didn't find anybody around,he inquired from bansi kaka about everyone;

BK;sahib,geeta mam,rajat sir aur sneha mam soo rahe hain aur dadi puja kar rahi hain.

ram became quite,he was about to leave the hall when dadi called him

dadi;ram,

ram turned back,came to dadi
ram;GM dadi,kaise hain app.
dadi;jeete rah putar aur janamdin mubarak ho; and gave him pershad.
ram;dadi apko yaad tha.
dadi;main tera janamdin kaise bhool sakti hoon,bagwan tujhe aur kamiyabi de aur tera jeevan khusiyon se bhar de.
ram;thanks dadi,i love u so much.

he lovingly hug dadi and take her blessing by touching her feet.

ram;jalta hoon dadi,ajj office main ek important meeting hai.
dadi;par nashta to karle.
ram;main office main karlo ga dadi,ok bye.

he reached office early today,and start working on his presentation.

an hour later...

vikram and neha both entered his cabin and collectively said

"happy birthday fatty"

ram;arre tum dono kab aaye.
neha;jab tum apne kam main busy the bus tub,and gave him hug one by one

neha;come on fatty,ajj tumhara birthday hai aur humain party chahiya.
ram;arre neha party ki kya zarorat hai.
neha;kyu bhi,kyu zarorat nahi hai,jab rajat aur sneha ki birthday hoti hai to tu party deta hai,to ajj kyu nahi.
ram;yaar woh to bache hain,aur waise bhi sab busy honge,aise hi pareshan ho jayain gye.
vikram;accha chal phir ajj hum kahi bahir dinner karte hain,bus tu main aur neha.

ram agreed after little hesitation,he also want some time to relex.

at sharma house...

shipra;priya jaldi aa,putar nasta thanda ho raha hai.

sudhir raise his head while reading the newspaper to see his lovely duaghter
coming out from her room.
priya;accha ma main chalti hoon,
shipra;par nashta to karle
priya;nahi ma,pehle hi bohat deer hogai hai.
shipra;par
priya;don't worry ma main office main kuch kha loon gi,ok bye ma bye pa.

before shipra could further react,priya left.

shipra;yeh larki bhi na,hamesha jaldi main rehti hai.
sudhir;zaror koi important meeting hogi,aur tum to janti ho usse kam ke aage kuch nahi sojhta.
shipra;ji jaise apko priya ki waqalat ke siva
kuch nahi sohta

shipra replied angerly and start cleaning the table.

sudhir;agar gussa khatam ho gaya ho to ek cup chaye mile gi

shpira angerly stirred sudhir and left for kitchen.

later that night...
at the resturant;

vikram and neha reached the resturant early
neha;vikram call fatty,uske liye dinner plan kiya hai aur wohi gayab hai.

vikram calls ram and asked,where he is?
ram;haan vikram i am almost there...

ram while talking to vikram,was about to park,but almost at the same time a car came from front and parked the car on that spot,in trying to reverse his car got struck into back car

ram;oh fish

he quickly came out,at the same time a lady wearing black denims with white floral print lose shirt also came out from other car and angerly move towards him

lady;mr.cant u see,car reverse karne se pehle peche dekhna chahiye,agar bari gari main ghomne ka shawk hai tu usse chalana bhi sikhiye,na ke dusron ki gari phoriye,

ram dont know what to say,he was just lost in those two mesmerizing expressive perfactly kholed eyes,the innocence and spark on her face was exceptional,there was an unknown attraction in her persona,sees like GOD have been kind to create such innocence,her every feature was flawless,her pink glosi lips were so appiling,he want to touch her softness but somehow maneges to control himself and with collecting some strenght replied

ram;i..i..am so sorry mam,its all my fault
lady;oh really! yeh accha hai pehle galti karo phir sorry bolo,aur bus baat khatam,yeh jo angrezo ne ek lafaz nikal diya hai "sorry" isse app logon ka to khub bhala huwa hai...

and she goes on...the security and some person also gathered there,seeing this the second lady came out of car and rushed to first one...

2nd lady;priya...priya just calm down,unho ne sorry bol diya hai.

she pulled priya and asked her to get in the car ,in the mean while vikram also came outside.he asked the security to park his car and take ram inside.

sandy[priya's childhood friend]choor yaar priya,tu bhi kya baat ko chewinggum ki tarah khinch rahi hai,hum yaha khana khane aaye hain jhagra karne nahi.

by that time priya's neves calm down and she parked the car and goes inside.


inside the resturent...

neha;ram tumhe itna waqt kaise lag gaya?
ram narrated the whole incident.
vikram;chal ab chor yeh saab,kuch order karte hain bohat bhuk lagi hai.

while they were placing their order priya and sandy also came in and settled on one corner table.ram noticed this and keep on observing her at regular intervals,vikram also noticed this and said.
vikram;khana kaisa hai ram?
ram;bohat khubsorst
neha;kya,kya kaha tumne
ram came back to his senses and said"mera matlab hai bohat mazedar hai"
vikram slowly replied in his ear"aur ladki"

ram stirred him and replied"tu bhi na kuch bhi maat bol"

neha;arre tum dono kya khuser phuser kar rehe ho?
vikram;kuch nahi neha main ram se keh raha tha ke woh ab koi acchi se lakdi dekh ke shadi karle.
neha;ram,vikram theek keh raha hai,u are almost 40 now,ab aur kitna intezar karwao ge hamain?
ram;yaar tum dono bhi na,aise baatain karke mera damag kharab mat karo.


precap;rajat and priya 1st met
ram relize his love 4 priya
Edited by afshaan - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Awesome ram fell for priya at 1st sight amazing now want Raya love story to begin n pls continue soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
nice update...continue soon
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Ram Priya first encounter was nice
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