The Moonrise : A Rangrasiya OS - Page 3

prettypri

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Posted: 10 years ago

Hey Shreya 👏

You have written this emotional OS so well

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All the feelings in rudras mind are described so poignantly.

The scene as it was shown on tv was mind blowing.

I can't think of a better way to put the same in words than what you have written here

😳

Keep writing...😊

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milinda.shreyz

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: tvbug2011
Lovely, atmospheric writing, Shreya. Love your interpretation of the scene, the description of Rudra's pain. His pretence is an interesting twist - makes me wonder does he pretend to Paro or to himself. Delicious!! 👏👏👏 Please write more.

sabs, thank u so much for reading my OS and providing me ur valuable comments. It was indeed my meagre attempt to capture the plethora of emotions,displayed by both leads. I sought hard suitable imageries to complement Rudra's mental turmoil,agony,helplessness and desperate anger upon his own fate and decided that nocturnal imagery esp the darkness of a moonless night might serve my purpose. the absence of moon and then its late rising sum up the whole situation,shown in that episode, nah ?

and about rudra's pretence, well i took creative liberty. thatz all.😃

I will write again and again knock at ur door for feedback.

Luv Ya !

Shreya.

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Suhana6

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Posted: 10 years ago

Wow Shreya sa, you just created magic. I can literally visualize every word. Seriously you have a very good hand at writing. 👏

Would definitely love to read much from you shreya sa.👍🏼

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milinda.shreyz

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: Sunaha6
Wow Shreya sa, you just created magic. I can literally visualize every word. Seriously you have a very good hand at writing. 👏

Would definitely love to read much from you shreya sa.👍🏼

ooh !

hi suhana,

thank u for reading it, and then cheering me up with your lovely comment !😃

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milinda.shreyz

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: prettypri
Hey Shreya 👏
You have written this emotional OS so well
😳
All the feelings in rudras mind are described so poignantly.
The scene as it was shown on tv was mind blowing.

I can't think of a better way to put the same in words than what you have written here
😳

Keep writing...😊

thank u soo much priya jiji ! you guys are my source of enthusiasm ! watever i i write, it is always for u guys entertainment only.

so it really gives me immense satisfaction and inspiration to write more !

luv u lots !❤️

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prettypri

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: shreya_rc

thank u soo much priya jiji ! you guys are my source of enthusiasm ! watever i i write, it is always for u guys entertainment only.
so it really gives me immense satisfaction and inspiration to write more !
luv u lots !❤️

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milinda.shreyz

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: napstermonster
Mesmerizing! I loved the repeated use of the moon, and especially poignant was when he pretends..and that is left upto me to interpret--Who is it to? To Paro? himself? It opens up a lot of space for the reader to re-read and use her own interpretation!

One request/suggestion---can you paragraph it so that the scenes flow a little closer together? Its just a posting style thing for me, its easier to read if the paragraphs are more clear, and also separated from each other so each new image/concept you've introduced gets a bit of space!

Hi Naveen !

so so glad that u read it and liked it too. i mean, you and tatte-tales are my role-models when it comes to writing drabbles and OS s, here. I hav never thought to write my own and now when I have nervously stepped into the pool, ur fantastic feedback actually braves me to take the plunge and see how it really feels 😉. yes, i always liked stories that give their readers abundant space to fly their own imaginations...and when I am writing, it thought to do the same. glad u liked it.

About paragraph thing, naveen . An honest confession I was unsure myself where to end a para and to start the next.ant the story reflected my confusion.I will definitely try to make it more clear, next time.

Thank u so much for ur post.

Cheers !

Shreya RC

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milinda.shreyz

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: Radaz
Wonderful Shreya! It is couple of days since the episode in which
The scene aired but rudra's eyes and his emotions r still with me
The silence and his monologue got a much deeper interpretation
Once i read ur OS. His deepest darkest never heeling
Wound was cut open again and that feeling was clear
Depicted in ur OS
And finally him surrendering to the comforts
Offered by his own Paro, whom he does not want
To acknowledge as his saviour as yet!
The subtle reference of surrender ! Awesome
Good going shreya! Hope to read more of
Ur work !

raddy !🤗

thank u sooo much for this big comment ...nehi tho ro parti main 😛. u know very well, how that episode haunted me and writing this os acted as an outlet to those forcefully shut down emotions.

I tried my best to capture those moments with words.

I will try to write more !

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milinda.shreyz

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: SherryGS
Very nice illustrative writing. Well done.

thank u so much.😃

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milinda.shreyz

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: dknala
Awesome writing!

thank u !😃

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