OS: Rishhton Ka Ilzaam..:Last ch. on p-78 - All rev./com. responded - Page 71

Originally posted by: Crazy.rock

Dear Shirley

hi Meera😃

 

Have been following ur story fom day1. Have read all thots n views about the plot. I need to really applaud u for taking up this story. Let aside the plot or the ongoing discussion must say hvnt ever read anything so finely crafted n beautiful. Ur command ovr the language , the use of ryt words at the ryt place makes reading much more pleasureable . Ur skills as a writer are commendable. The magic u weave thru ur vision is worth an applaud.

Yes, frankly I was in two minds whether to put it on forum or not.. it was a unique concept for sure.. n Deepali n I both felt apprehensive abt putting it.. we din't know how many people would actually even understand the concept.. but I m glad I put it here.. this gave me a creative satisfaction like  no other ff of mine.. n I thoroughly enjoyed the writing, and really happy to see the meaningful discussions on this thread. 

 

@Bold - oh really? Thank you so much dear.

 

@Blue - 😳😳 now I m really feeling embarrassed yaar.. what do I say to such compliments... I just take a deep bow.. thank you so so much.

 

Coming to the plot of the story initially I too was a little skeptical. Considering the fact that v hv Indian values probably I culdn't accept it too. But I must say Deepali's POV completely changed my outlook towards the story. She is indeed ryt that at times owing to our pain we lose the capacity to see the ryt n wrong or even to value the precious belongings we r blessed with. Despite our efforts our patience just slips out of our hands. I really have to thank her for letting me see the pain of ur leads so deeply...it was like Nidhi was standing ryt there in front of me n cud feel every emotion of hers...I cried wd her , felt her anger of rejection , then when her wounds were actually treated by Ashu's words ,I cud see the exploding stormy tempers of the vicious sea turn calm n serene , opening its arms to embrace n accept the twisted fate. Have always been a fan of her reviews that I read on the other threads...not only did I eagerly wait for updates but for her reviews too. But what she writes here is truly superlative. 

 

Yes I guess it was only after Deeps' reviews n explanations that people started understanding the concept the way we were trying to portray.

 

Speaks volumes about my writing, doesn't it? 😆😆😆

 

But yes you are absolutely right.. I am lucky to have her with me. her superlative power of explanation, her language, n the way she put forward the philosophy of our concept is definitely worth a standing ovation..

 

I am glad you could feel every emotion and could relate to the phases of nidhi's internal healing.. that was the biggest challenge for me, actually not me, but us..

 

It was a sensitive concept and had to be dealt v. sensitively.. I am glad we could get it right for the most part. 

 

Can't refrain myself from praising Dr. Babs too. Her stand on the story was indeed magnificent.

 

Absolutely agree.. I was amazed to see Dr. Babs' depth of understanding and the beautiful way she wrote her POV here... I had the time of my life, reading the very interesting discussions by Dr. Babs, Mudra and the others.

 

I think the entire story is about " if luv hurts it has the power to heal too" out an  out a story of pure love...Ashu's love for Nidhi ...We go down the wrong road, we get lost, but wat is important is that we turn back. That's exactly wat Ashu did for Nidhi

 

Bingo!! that WAS the crux of the OS, the basic concept.

 

As for Nidhi...wat do I say...her characterisation I presume wud have been the most challenging. A girl whose dreams were shattered even before they cud bloom...her life shattered to pieces like glass...she picked up the broken pieces to rebuild the foundation bit by bit ...with just one little chunk missing ...that was ryt there in front of her...but blindfolded by hurt she cud not see. Once her ice cold piercing torment had thawed away she cud put back all fragments together n build a beautiful life.

 

Oh yes,  it was the most challenging character I have every written, it had to bother on mental imbalance at times, it had to be a normal strong woman at other times, n a hurt wounded heart at yet others.. during the outing, I had to kind of slowly peal away her layers n show her healing.. but not all at once.. 

 

But pardon my immodesty when I say that what ultimately came out in the form of this Nidhi is precisely what we had envisioned. So, I m really happy with the way the OS and Nidhi's character came out..   

 

Wat a fabulous team work ...Deepali was of course one of my favourite reviewers n to b honest I started reading this story when I read that she was going to b ur soundboard...n I must  acknowledge the fact that she has supported one of the finest writers

Originally posted by: bc123456

Shirley that was truly magnificent , loved every bit your story, loved the way Ashu shows her , without saying a word how unsuited they are , and how much she loves and misses Rohan , she had being so caught u in her first infuation , that she took it as true love , not realising that she had moved on long back , but her mind was still thinking of an unrequited love , and the what could have been , how many of us wonder how life would have been with your first crush , and forget to value what we have , a beautiful , beautiful story , very real , and very we'll written , thank u for spending your precious holidays , writing this story , 

Thank u for letting us read it , can really imagine MB in this role , suited him more than the confession , somehow in serial didn't gel , but this suited him brilliantly

Originally posted by: Cherishh

Hayeee...this is a very different concept...a brave and nice try, but a bit hard to digest fort sure😉😆

Originally posted by: gargpoo

Awww! thank you. ...🤗

Originally posted by: Pardeshi.Mithu

Deepali ji, Leena ji, Aazuu, Shirley ji, Poonam, Diksha, Suku, Bro, Teacher ji, Tupu di, Aarti ji, and everyone jinhone mujhe jhela... 🤣 Thankooo. 🤗

Originally posted by: vidyasabde

Awesome...you have ended the os marvelously...this could have been the obvious end of KTLK ...but for the theme of age gap romance.

 

Thank you Dr. Vidya.. I am glad you liked the end. Yes actually this concept n the plot came to my mind some time ago, and I narrated to Deeps. She absolutely loved it, but we were highly skeptical about putting it on the forum. This was a v. diff. concept and we just dint know how readers would react.

 

Finally, in the last week of my vacation, I said, what the heck? zyada se zyada kya hoga - brickbats hi milenge na? So, we just plunged into it.

 

you showed very beautifully best friend can become true love if feelings are genuine at least from one side and secondly you can fall in love twice .

Oh my! You understood my concept so so well...👏

this different or hatke ending is a bit difficult to digest for Ashni lover but the os as such was outstanding...   

Thank you so much. I knew it would be difficult to digest for an AshNi lover, but I HAD TO write this. 

Now one os/ff with usual ending toh banta hai Shirley...  

Originally posted by: ttrocks

Dear Shirley, read the concluding part; have one word for this entire OS: Brilliant!!

Aww😳 Thank you so much Tupu..

Ur stories are always hard-hitting reality. Many things that we cant have in real, we wish to see them happening at least in fiction to soothe our souls stressed with hard facts of life. And this is what your stories dont offer... This OS was initially a big jolt for me with pairing of the leads and all the chapters were very thought-provoking; especially the 4th chapter. But with U as writer, I had to patiently wait for the story to unfold and the way realisation of true love dawned upon Nidhi at last is just commendable on the writer's part!! 👏

Yes I know what u mean.. believe even I like rajshri kinda movies for that very reason. It helps me to get respite from the harsh realities of life. But frankly writing that kinda stories is too boring for me.

 

I am really happy that you found the chapters thot-provoking. As a writer, nothing can be more fulfilling.  I really thank you Tupu, for the trust u have in me as a writer.

 

@bold - oh really? Thanks a lot again. I am glad this aspect came out well.

Scenes & convo.s/dialogues were really powerful, well thought of and beautifully etched out. One thing that I like in your writing is U always are sure of what U wish to convey - no confusion and no budging... And u are fully aware of what potential ur characters hold - actually you define ur characters with a certain boundary - as I feel & dont let them go OTT crossing that limit. Here I find Nidhi's character the most difficult to portray but you took the plunge and gave us totally "hatke" story.

I am glad you think the scenes, convos and dialogues came out well. I am always like... ye pakau toh nahi ho gaya. Yes frankly I like clarity in everything.. so I guess that's reflects in my writing too.

 

Yes I try to think of my characters in some details - the words they use, the mannerisms etc. So, I guess the boundaries as you call them fall into place automatically due to that.. I am really glad of it.

 

Tupu, let me confess one thing - I often get tempted to go OTT esp. with my dialogues.. but then I delete them (albeit reluctantly) but I tell myself - my own indulgence should not be the downfall of the quality of my writing.

Not to forget that whole story took place in just 2 days... something like "iss raat ki subah nahi" plot... One after the another life-shaking truths got revealed in such a constrained time... that too first 3 chapters' scenes played in span of just a few hours... Poor Nidhi... Unreciprocated, 5 yrs back brutally rejected love, she found all of a sudden...highly unexpectedly and got answers to many of her questions in those few hours - from afternoon session till late evening only. Koi sayana se sayana insaan bhi boukhla jaaye... then here we had a lady who had that piece of time 5 yr.s before, still clenched in her fists, who was very shattered with unrequited love, somewhat childish, somewhat obseessed... so much so that despite being so much in love with Rohan she wasnt able to acknowledge her feelings!! Recalled the song "Tumhe ho na ho mujh ko toh itna yakeen hai mujhe pyar tumse nahi hai nahi hai" And w/o speaking any word Ashutosh realized her the incompatibility b/w them!! Could so imagine the "Man of few words" Dr. Ashutosh portrayed par excellence by MBji throughout the story!!

 

Tupu, I m so thankful that u understand how everything from ch-1 till mid of ch-4 occurred in just a few hours.. A lot of readers felt, how could Nidhi think of all that... but I m glad you could understand that the kind of emotional bombardment she faced as the facts came tumbling out.

 

@Red - Precisely! That's the whole point, ryt? Secondly, thinking n doing r two diff things.. haina? 

 

@Bold - I am just glad I (Not I actually, we- me n Deeps) could portray it the way we envisaged.

 
Wow!! What a creativity!! 👏 So much less time for to all the events (like a tale of two days) and female protagonist leading a life of stagnancy w.r.to her first love!! She has got a man of every woman's dream as her husband but it's like:
"Jo chaha tha woh mila nahi
Jo mila hai uski chaah nahi thi"
for her. Probably that's the reason, she fails to recognize how much she values and loves him...

 

Exactly! You understood it perfectly. I mean, these words of urs make me feel that my reader has understood, exactly what I wanted to convey.

 

@Bold - aww thank you dear 

And with all such complexities, you excelled in the narration!! Hats off!! 👏