"KILLING ME.. "--A poem.(plz chck pg 5). - Page 6

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Posted: 11 years ago
wow!! awesome awesome awesome poems Maris!! 👏 👏...u r so talented!! 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
Originally posted by: maris08

A slight modification of this poem from Ram's point of view..

 
Killing me brutally
 
 
Killing me brutally with your words
Hurting me beyond words compare.
 
Deeper I try to unravel your secret
Harder your resolve to open up.
 
Mouthing those nonsense casually
Failing to understand me seriously.
 
Killing me brutally by your actions
Scaring and singeing me deep within.
 
Shattering me each and every day
Seperating from me further away.
 
Contrasting was your heart and mind
Aghast and anguished yet so blind.
 
Killing me brutually with your love
Bury and burn me in hell, so true..
 
 
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PS: The last scene saw Ram,shattered and in disbelief. This is my way of describing his feelings at that juncture..
Asusual please leave your comments..

Shattering me each and everyday is how I feel too Maris.
great Poem dear
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Posted: 11 years ago
Originally posted by: monamie111

wow!! awesome awesome awesome poems Maris!! 👏 👏...u r so talented!! 😳

Mona thanks..for the poem as well as for your compliment !EmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassed
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Posted: 11 years ago
Shattering me each and everyday is how I feel too Maris.
great Poem dear
Yes Sri.. Thats exactly how I feel too. So wrote it from Ram's point of view..😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
Maris

Killing me softly... Wow!! I just remembered the song and your lines are
Fitting to the T!
Yet to read your page 5 update! Loved the 1st part so much that I couldn't
Resist!
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Posted: 11 years ago
Shattering me each and every day
Seperating from me further away.

Contrasting was your heart and mind
Aghast and anguished yet so blind.

Killing me brutually with your love
Bury and burn me in hell, so true..


These were my Fav part of the poem and every word is so true to the
Situation!

I remember the lines :


Nothing compares
No worries or cares
Regrets and mistakes
They are memories made.
Who would have known how bittersweet this would taste?

Sometimes it lasts in love but sometimes it hurts instead."

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Posted: 11 years ago
Originally posted by: fosla

Maris

Killing me softly... Wow!! I just remembered the song and your lines are
Fitting to the T!
Yet to read your page 5 update! Loved the 1st part so much that I couldn't
Resist!

Thanks Angie.. Finally you took time form your busy schedule to comment on my poem. Unnoda take yennakku rombha thevaiya irundhadhu..😆
Seeing Priya in that precap in a talli state I thought she will spill all to Ram.. So wrote the first poem killing me softly with your eyes..
Contd...
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Posted: 11 years ago
Originally posted by: fosla

Shattering me each and every day
Seperating from me further away.

Contrasting was your heart and mind
Aghast and anguished yet so blind.

Killing me brutually with your love
Bury and burn me in hell, so true..


These were my Fav part of the poem and every word is so true to the
Situation!

I remember the lines :


Nothing compares
No worries or cares
Regrets and mistakes
They are memories made.
Who would have known how bittersweet this would taste?

Sometimes it lasts in love but sometimes it hurts instead."

Angie all that eagerness of how those 2 days Raya will spend was shattered and destructed due to Priya mouthing those infamous lines..
Hence my own angst and anguish turned into these lines, which is my fav too..
 
 
 
Nothing compares
No worries or cares
Regrets and mistakes
They are memories made.
Who would have known how bittersweet this would taste?
 
Adele's "someone like you" is from the woman's point of view about her lover..Similar kind of pain and bittersweet memories, that Ram will now undergo..
 
Thanks ma for your comments..
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Posted: 11 years ago
Originally posted by: maris08

<font color="#6600cc">Angie all that eagerness of how those 2 days Raya will spend was shattered and destructed due to Priya mouthing those infamous lines..</font>

<font color="#6600cc">Hence my own angst and anguish turned into these lines, which is my fav too..</font>

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<font color="#333399">Nothing compares
No worries or cares
Regrets and mistakes
They are memories made.
Who would have known how bittersweet this would taste?</font>


<font color="#6600cc">Adele's "someone like you" is from the woman's point of view about her lover..Similar kind of pain and bittersweet memories, that Ram will now undergo..</font>


<strong><font color="#6600cc">Thanks ma for your comments..</font>



I needed to stay way to destress! I love Adele's song! So true it would hold good from Ram's Pov!
WhAt promised to be a memorable weekend turned out as d worst disaster! Back to reading updates
To decide! I have vented it out in my take for of us!