"KILLING ME.. "--A poem.(plz chck pg 5).

maris

@maris08

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Posted: 11 years ago

Seeing the precap, kindled my poetical brain(I think I do have one😉😆).. Here are a few lines scribbled about Priya's feelings and emotions..

Killing me softly.

Killing me softly with your eyes

Reading my face with your look.

Deeper I hide my emotions

Easier you unveil the secrets.

Spilling your love all over

Unable to reciprocate like a river.

Killing me softly with your words

Piercing my heart with your pain.

Caressing me gently is our love

Aching my heart to hurt you.

Stronger the resolve I made

Longer the suffering for us.

Killing me softly with your love

Chilling me with dread, so true.

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PS; Please leave your comments. They are like booster doses for me..😃

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azk92

@azk92

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Posted: 11 years ago

BEAUTIFUL!!!

Love it!

It so perfectly fits the situation and her emotions!!

You are amazing!

🤗

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anizor

@anizor

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Posted: 11 years ago

very nice maris. loved it

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fanraya

@fanraya

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Posted: 11 years ago

Very nice maris, lovely.. 👏

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A. Kishore

@TVserialfreak

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Posted: 11 years ago

Awesome didi👏👏...really suits the situation to a T...thanks for posting 😳

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481405

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Posted: 11 years ago

very well written keep it up😊

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salsaly

@salsaly

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Posted: 11 years ago

superb di... well written... loved it... tfs.. :-)

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Chitra RaviKiran

@chitloner

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Posted: 11 years ago

U seem to be kidding by saying u don't have a poetic brain. This poem is fabulous. I loved the way how Ram says whats bothering me is not my mom's health but Priya's feelings. Best line and u brought out the consequences of that in a very gorgeous way dear.

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