TUM MILE( DAKSHNA FF)...

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Posted: 12 years ago
Hey guys

A  sweet FF for our forum members...Hope u will like it...πŸ˜‰...

Back ground of the story

Just imagine ayi baba ke anniversary din If daksh would have proposed naina how would it be.and the contd events...Here we go...


Ayi baba anniversary din.Daksh and abhi decide to confess their feelings to naina...
From morning daksh is busy decorating terrace and rest of story is same as it happened in SSBN but only...till

Daksh manages to get the love globe after fighting with goons..He reaches home...abhi didnt propose naina yet..They are dancing on number  "woh ladki hain kaha"... abhi and naina on stage..daksh stage ke neeche.gaana kahatm hone ke baad.. when every body is busy with wishing ayi baba..abhi is about to propose naina...just then he gets an imp call which he needs to attend ..so he gets down stage and goes out to attend the call as party is going on in P-zoo

Naina gets down stage to wish ayi baba...just then daksh comes there...Nana looking at him...
Naina; daksh.tum agaye...tum kaha the aur( looking at his wounds) ye khoon( very worried)..kya hua😲..tum teek tho ho...
Daksh; woh sab chodo naina..mujhe tumhe kuch dikhana hain..pls jaldi mere saath chalo...and before she could react..he holds her hand  and takes her to terrace
...
on the way to the terrace...

Naina; ; batavo tho sahi..baat kya hain..aur tumhe chot kaise lage..aur..

They reached terrace...and as soon as they enter.. naina sees the decoration  and is surprised..Mean while daksh closes the door.. Naina goes into the main decorated part jaha par chairs aur table hain( hope u remember)...sees greeting card lying on table...

Daksh becomes happy looking at her reaction...he comes near her...

Naina( excited)..daksh ye sab kuch tume..hmmm.. ab samaj aaya ye sab tumne uss ladki ko propose karne ke liye kiya jis se tum pyar karte ho..haina..
Daksh; with lotsof love in eyes; haan ye sab kuch sirf uss ladki ke liye...jis se main paagal ki tarah pyar karta hoon...❀️
Naina; tho phir..kaha hain woh...tum usse yaha laaye??😲..mujhe milna hain usse..batavo..aur ye chot kaise lage..rukho main first aid box laati hoon...shes about to go daksh holds her hand and stops

Daksh; Naina rukh javo pls..meri baat suno..chot kasie lagae hain iss se jyada zaroori baat karna hain...waise woh ladki yahi hain..jis se main pyar karta hoon
Naina; kya?( excited) πŸ˜›acha tumne usse chupake rakha..batavona kaha hai woh..batvo..
Daksh; comes and satnds infrontof her and says; mere saamne khadi hain😍...

Ek min ke liye sab kuch dhamgaya..naina is shocked. listening to this

Naina; tum mazaq kar rahe ho...
Daksh; mazaq nahi naina..yahi mere zindagi ka sabse bada sach hain..ki

 Daksh comes lil forward... takes away his specs..holds her hand gives a cute smileπŸ˜ƒ and says; Naina..woh ladki jise main pyar karta hoon woh koi aur nahi tum ho..haan naina..with lots of feelings and sachayi...he says; I love u naina..main tumse bahut pyar karta hoon.
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rem naina;s dialogue on terrace when she explains daksh how to propose.exactly the same way daksh proposes her..😍..😍

Naina is just like shocked... time freezes betweem them

Naina; daksh...tum ye...
Daksh; haan naina..dekho ye sab kuch maine tumhare liye kiya..jaise tum chahthi thi bilkul waise...flowers candles...he takes greeting aur ye greeting tumhare liye...aur  tumhara pyar ka tofa... love globe uske saamne rakhtha hain table par...

Naina remembers all those moments.. ..remembers the first greeting card she had seen in his room...the love she has seen in his eyes that day on terrace and and also her dream proposal..which turned true...

Tears roll down her eyes..thinking Am I lucky one to get his true love..is this true?? Am I dreaming...How could she be blind to his as well as her feelings...

Daksh holds her hand kneels down and says; Naina... kya tum mujhse shaadi karoge naina..main tuhmse itna pyar karunga ki duniya ka poora pyar kam padjayega...bolo..will u marry me?
Naina with tears running  down her eyes she nods her head in consent as she is completely specchless...daksh  with tears of happiness running through his eyes   both hug each other...

Daksh; I love u naina..I love u...

Dakshna spend few moments on terrace where naina dresses his wounds..eye locks..as usual with few smiles...

Daksh; naina..tum kuch kehna bhool gayi..
Naina; kya?...Looks into his eyes... and she says; ab tumse shaadi karne ke liye maan gayi..keha jaroori hain kya?
Daksh; Tumhare mooh se yahi sun ne ke liye itne dino se tadap raha hoon
Naina; acha tho phir aur thoda tadpayenge hum tumhe...( lil attitude) stands up
Daksh; Tumhare mooh se sunne ke liye poora zinadgi intezaar karne ke liye tayar hoon...
Naina; acha ..aur agar maine aaj naa kardiya tho...
Daksh; marjaata..
Naina puts  hand on his mouth; daksh..aisa mat kaho..pls..
An eye lock...daksh holds her hand with his..she places a hand on his cheek...and says; I love u daksh..main tumse bahut pyar karti hoon..I love u

Ek aur hug...and they celebrate their love with wine...and spend some  pvt moments aloof from world

Just then they remember ayi baba 's aniiverssary..naina hurries down

Daksh stops her; phir kab miloge?
Naina; function khatm hone ke baad yahi par..ab chale
Few smiles and both leave from there...

They are getting down from terrace...on steps they meet abhimanyu who is searching for naina...

Abhi; naina kaha chali gayi tum..aur daksh subha se gayab tha tu kaha chala gaya...
Daksh; woh  bhut jyada zaroori kaam yaad aagaya..
Abhi; terrace pe??
Dakshna exchange looks
Naina; offo..ab tum ye jasoosi chodo aur jaldi chalo..ayi baba ko wish karna hain...she starts getting down followed by daksh..abhi looks at them with lil suspicion...but finaly he gets down too...

In function

Dakshna exchanging few looks( aankhon ki gustakiyan)πŸ˜†..πŸ˜†.few smiles..abhi trying hard to speak with with naina..but un successful in his attempts as naina is busy with attending guests ...


Finally function khatam hogaya..every body retiring to their rooms.dakshna hurry to their respective rooms remembering their meeting on terrace...abhi lil disappointed ..

Abhi ; naina bhaut tired hogi..kal subha usse batadunga apne dil ki baat..

..sab log sogaye...daksh slowly gets up after confirming that abhi sogaya...slowly steps out of his room...he slowely opns the naina's room door ..but naina nahi hain..

He rushes to the terrace...

On terrace/...

Naina standing... looking at greeting card and love globe..with sound of door she turns  around and finds daksh...

She flungs into his arms...πŸ€—πŸ€—
Naina; kitne dher laga diya tumne
Daksh; sry naina..oh abhi ka sone ka intezaar kar raha tha..ayinda kabhi late nahi avunga promise...

They come out of hug...both get settled...

Daksh; kya soch rahi ho?
Naina; yahi ki kal hi maine ayi ka kasam liya ki mai tumse pyar.(pauses).kyunki uss waqt mujhe ehsaas nahi tha apne dil ke feelings ka..aur ab
Daksh;tension mat lo..sab teek ho jayega..ayi samaj jayegi ..main samja dunga kal hi
Naina; nahi daksh...awkward lagega..kuch dino ke baad batate hain..pls...
Daksh ; jaise tum chaho...
Naina; mujhe bahut neend aa rahi hain..kab subha client ke saath meeting bhi hain..
Daksh; kal main drop kardunga main tumhe aur pick up bhi karunga..aur shyam kahi ghoomne chale??
Naina; acha.! ghumaane le javoge mujhe! haan haan kyu nahi..jayenge

SmilesπŸ˜ƒ...
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Daksh; pehle tum neeche chale javo main baad main avunga..kisne dekh liya tho...Naina nods her head saying yes...

Daksh; good night
Naina; good night...

Naina starts leaving from there...daksh looks at her with all love in eyes...Naina truns back..and comes near him...
Daksh; kya hua?
Naina; kuch bhool gayi..
Daksh kya?
Naina comes closer gives a small kiss on his cheek and says; good night kiss...
Daksh becomes cute pink kp...Naina about to leave..daksh holds her hand pulls her towards him

Eye lock..cool breeze...

Daksh; ab meri baari( gives a small kiss on cheek)..says i love u..naina 
Naina lowers her eyes with shy smile..lifts up and says; love u too..

 ...hug each other...

Abhimanyu jasoosi karte karte..teraace tak pahuch gaya..and he sees this scenario😭...( DAKSHNA IN HUG)πŸ€—uski aankhon main asoo.😭😭.😭hr8 brk..πŸ’”πŸ€£πŸ€£...and he realises its too late..ab naina uski nahi hosakthi..woh sirf daksh ki thi aur hamesha rahegi.....
.asu asu beh rahe hain( just like daksh in real SSBN lekin yaha par scene reverse..LOL..LOL...)

Daksh drops a small kiss on fore head...Aur abhimanyu ka bacha hua hr8 bhi brk hogaya ye dekh kar...)πŸ₯ΊπŸ₯Ί and he leaves from there...


Dakshna apne duniya main khoye huye..doesnt notice this cartoon..
.πŸ˜†

Daksh kal subha ka intezaar karunga.πŸ˜›.
Naina; main bhi..πŸ˜›

Naina leaves from there with grteeting card and globe...later daksh...

PS; not yet sure of continution..hope u enjoyed reading this..

Lucky
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aditya151 thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
THanks lucky for ur as usual great,sweet,romantic FF😊and I wish this scene of urs would have been at that time and it would have been beautiful...and pleasepost the remaining story also...
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Posted: 12 years ago
Gr8 title lucky... 😊 . Tum mile.. 😊 .. superb superb.. πŸ‘ . πŸ‘ . Red highlight portion loved the badla.πŸ€— πŸ€— .. Yes yes u made abhi cry.. πŸ˜‰. πŸ˜‰Hmm... Feels so good.. πŸ˜‰. And the Dakshna moment later at nite simply amazing yaar.. πŸ˜‰.. Thank u thank u so much.. πŸ€— . πŸ€— Abhi tak actual SSBN main bhi dakshu ko ek bhi kiss nahi diya hai naina ne... Don't recall the filmy behind the flower kiss at teachers house... That's no kiss for us... Lol... A big tightwali Jadu ki jappi for this dear. πŸ€— ... πŸ€—   πŸ€— πŸ€—
If this would have been the actual scene tho phir SSBN Kahan hota... 😍
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Posted: 12 years ago
wow Lucky.. aowesome.. !! ⭐️as usual you rocked!! super idea..!!! I liked it liked it liked it.. umha... 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
Wow..!!!! awesum lucky πŸ˜Š ... great job
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Posted: 12 years ago
@ aditya, @rupu,@ neetu and@ sonikudi 19

Thanks a lot for such lovely comments...πŸ€—πŸ€—
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Thanks a lot...πŸ˜›
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Posted: 12 years ago
Awesome lucky good work bohot acchi hai kaash aisa hota to na rehta ye abhi na aati sonakshi...agar hum log story writter hote ye boring track kabhi nahi aane deti and as like ur FF aisa hi karte the simply superb😊