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Cristina Hriscu

@instcris

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Posted: 14 years ago

#101

Bravo, Hari! I like your composition. Especially when Dev chat with friends in their room. First does not recognize that he loves very much on Radhika and returned to the USA only because he can't live without it, then when Ricki says he wants to flirt with Radhika, Dev responds with anger, giving on face all infinite love that he was for her in the 5 years. I also liked when Radhika was suddenly awakened , feel with her heart, thinking her dear Dev , is so sad.

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harianjana

@harianjana

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Posted: 14 years ago

#102

Originally posted by: instcris
Bravo, Hari! I like your composition. Especially when Dev chat with friends in their room. First does not recognize that he loves very much on Radhika and returned to the USA only because he can't live without it, then when Ricki says he wants to flirt with Radhika, Dev responds with anger, giving on face all infinite love that he was for her in the 5 years. I also liked when Radhika was suddenly awakened , feel with her heart, thinking her dear Dev , is so sad.

thanks cris u liked it but really i was very frightened of my story because i am not a good writer and even i planned to end it soon before i update this part because i thought none liked this any how now also if people doesn't like this na i will end it soon other wise i will continue

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Cristina Hriscu

@instcris

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#103

I wait your continue story. You write very good, Hary, complex leaves.

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ekta15

@ekta15

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Posted: 14 years ago

#104

firstly am really sorry for late reply,actually my internet connection was not working properly from pc,i used to read ffs and get updates from cell only.
update is superb,dev's entry actually radev's entry i guess rads also entered after 5 years and abhi is just mindblowing character liked it very much and last so dev also loved her and that ricki's prank to get truth from him great poor dev misunderstood her and both got hurt in response so sad
will wait how they both will get to know about emotions of others.
good luck.

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harianjana

@harianjana

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+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#105

Originally posted by: ekta-avinafan
firstly am really sorry for late reply,actually my internet connection was not working properly from pc,i used to read ffs and get updates from cell only.
update is superb,dev's entry actually radev's entry i guess rads also entered after 5 years and abhi is just mindblowing character liked it very much and last so dev also loved her and that ricki's prank to get truth from him great poor dev misunderstood her and both got hurt in response so sad
will wait how they both will get to know about emotions of others.
good luck.

ur sorry was taken forgranted😉

thanks for liking the update, actually its indeed radev entry but radhs used o comethere before also in these five years as she stayed there till her daima died and after that also she used to come there
and not to worry there will be some sweet radev scenes

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harianjana

@harianjana

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+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#106

Originally posted by: instcris
I wait your continue story. You write very good, Hary, complex leaves.

thanks cris😉

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harianjana

@harianjana

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+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#107

thank u guys for all those support u gave me and there are really many great ff's on avina where we can float our selves in the dream land of avina or radev really today i want to salute to all the ff writers who are making us float in the sweet radev land

SALUTATIONS TO ALL THE RADEV FF WRITERS

and the ff i am writing is also a small contribution to my beloved radev

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harianjana

@harianjana

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Posted: 14 years ago

#108

PART7:DEV-DAADI CONVO ON RADHIKA

Waving bye to his friends dev rushed towards his room. By that time ramji brought his bags into the room. Dev glanced over at the room and was stisfied as it was same as before 5years, but the only change was the presence of his photo on the wall of the room. Dev smiled and went to the photo all the memories flashed back into his mind and he rushed to sheetals room.

In sheetals room, dev came inside and see his dadi crying

Dev:dadi ye aap kyun ro rahe hain

Daadi:Dev tum kab aaya yaha , jakar fresh hokar aaram karlena

Dev:main toh karungi na aaram aap ye batao ki aap ro kyun rahe hain

Daadi:(hugging him) bas mujhe mera sheetal ka yaad aa raha tha

Dev also felt his eyes moist listening to it. "daai ko bahut miss kar raha tha , jab main yeha vivek bhaiyya ke shaadi ke liye aagaye tab vo toh mera achi dost ban gayi aur aaj vusiko main bahut miss kar raha tha"

daadi:haan jab humaara haal hi ye hain toh radhika ko soch

Dev:kya hogaya radhika ko

Daadi:bichari vunki 8 saal ke umr mein uski maa aur baap mar gaya tha jab se vo toh apni daadi ko bhi sab kuch maan kar jee liya tha, aur sheetal bhi vuse kabhi ek paray ladki ki tarah nahi dekha , humesha mrinalii se bhi jyaada man liya radhika ko.

Dev:paray ladki? ye aap kya keh rahe hain

Daadima:Dev jo baath main ab tum se bol rahe ho ye baath sirf purohith family aur sharma family ko pata hain aur kisi ko bhi nahi jaante hain. u promise me that u keep it in ur mind.

Dev:promise i never spill.

Daadima:radhika ek anath ladki hain, aur jab vo 6 months ki umr mein hain radhika ke papa yaani mohan uncle use ghar lakar devki ke haath mein diya.vus din main bhi yaha hi tha aur mohan hum se bas ye kaha ki ye toh ek brahmin ki beti hain aur vuske sab se ache dost hain vo. vus din se devki isko kuch bhi kami nahi hone di aur isko mrinalini se bhi jyaada pyar diya tha.

Dev:ye sab thik hain maa lekin aap log daai ki marne ke baad humaara ghar kyu laya yaha toh ranjiv chacha aur sab log hain na

Daaima in a anger tone "Dev ye tum kya vus se ye phark le rahe ho"

Dev:"nahi daadi aap apne pote ko galat samajh rahe hain, jab tak main radhika ko jaantey hain vusko toh vrinadvan aur apni kanha mandir se bahut pyar hain, aap ko kabhi aisa nahi laga ki aap vunki choti si kushi ko cheen liya"

Daadi;"sorry beta for mis understanding u, haan main bhi jaante ki radhika ko apni is vrindavan aur apni kanha par jitna pyar hain, lekin main kya karu neta vusko bachane ke liye mujhe aur koi bhi rastha nahi hain."

Dev:"bachana, ye kya bol rahe hain aap"

daadi:"yahi hain dev, jitna kush dikhte hain vo , vo vutna kush nahi hain beta ye musku raat se vo apne andar ki duvidaon ko hum se chupa rahi hain. ranjiv chacha ke baarein mein apna opinion batao"

Dev:"chacha toh acha hain aur vo radhika se bahut prem karta hain, vaise hi vydehi chachi bhi"

Daadima:"yahi toh sab soch te ain lekin asli baat ye hain ki ranjiv radhika ko nahi balki vuski property jo mohan ne marne se pehle vuske naam par lika tha vusko pyar karte hain , aur vydehi aur amma ye donom humesha radhika ko daant hi dethe hain"

Dev:"what , mujhe ab bhi yakin nahi ho raha tha daadi"

Daadi:"lekin yahi sach hain"

Dev:"lekin vun logon ne radhika se bahut pyar si baatein karte hain"

Daadi:"ye sab dikhavat hain humaare saamne, jab hum log nahi hain tab vo amma ne radhika ko tappad bhi lagte hain. aur humesha vusko manhoos aur abhagin kehkar vunko baut duvida dethe hain"

Dev:"lekin radhika ko kabhi rothe huye nahi dekha aur vo toh vun logom se bahut pyar karte hain na"

Daadi:"yahi hain mera radhika vo sach much heera hain, vusko apni kanha aur apni padaai ke siva aur kuch nahi jaante hain aur vunki dost hain na vo humesha vuski chehre par muskuraahat dene ke liye koshish karte hi rahenge"

Dev who was listening all this about radhika felt a lot of sad ness for her and he got a lot of anger on the ranjiv's family.

dev:"ye sab jaankar bhi tum ranjiv ke family ko kyun avoid nahi kar rahe hain"

Dadima:"beta vo toh mohan ke family ki blood relatives hain, aur humaare vun logon ko avoid karne ki koi haq nahi hain. vaise bhi mrinalini toh vun logon ko avoid karte hi rehti hain , is liye hi buisness mein bhi ranjiv ko itna shaamil nahi hone de raha tha, jab radhika ki padai poori tarah se khatam honge tab mrinalini ranjiv ko poori tarah se buisness se hatavungi"

Dev:"waah i am proud of my bhabhi"

Daadi:"yeah indeed mrinalini was also a heera"

Daadi in her mind "is liye hi vun do heeron ko apni do pothon se udna chahti hu, bas ek heera toh humaara hogayi, doosra heera humaare hone ke liye itna samay nahi lagega"

Dev in his mind :daadi main bhi ap se ye kehna chahte ki vo heera mera hojao lekin jab tak mujhe vus heera ki acceptance nahi milte hain tab tak aap se kuch nahi keh paaoge"

Daaima:"kya soch rahe ho Dev"

Dev:"radhika ke baarein mein dadi"

Daadi:"Dev mujhe tum se ek request hain, pata nahi kyun jo muskuraat main radhika ke chehre par mrinalini ki marriage ke pehle dekha tha baad mein nahi dekha tha. pata nahi vunki chehre mein mujhe in 5 saalon mein kuch saf dikhaya tha. please try to bring back that smile on her face. kyun ki vo toh in donom parivaar ki lucky sign hain , aur vuske aise saaf dikhte main nahi rehpati hun. especially mrinalini vo radhika ko lek kar bahut pareshan ho rahi hain"

Dev:aap chinta mat kijiye aur ab vunki bestfriend aagaya hain vunko dekhne ke liye.lekin ap in 5 saalon mein badal gaya tha .aapko aisa nahi leg reha ki aap mujhe se bhi jyaada apni heera kopyar kar rehe the

Daadima:of course dev vo toh mere kanha ne mujhe diya gaya radharani hain toh kyun pyar nahi hoga
waise bhi mera pota toh humeshe mera pota hi tha, vun par mujhe bahut jyaada pyar hain is liye main apni heera ko inhi haathon me diya tha protect karne ke liye.

dev:oho! common darling afterall ur heera is my best friend how come i don't protect her.

Daadima:lekin jab tak tum yaha ho tum hoga but after u leave for U.S

Dev:U.S koun jaane wala hain

Daadima:agar tum U.S nahi gaya toh tera aakhri saal koun poori karega

Dev:oho dad didn't tell u i am going to complete my last year here in India in P.S college of buisness management

Daadi:kya tum sach bol rahe ho

Dev:yes dear u don't worry i am here and will be here

Daadi :ye toh bahut achi baat hain

Dev:yeah but i gonna miss my friends

Daadi:kyun?

DeV:wo log toh wapas jayega na U.S agar ruk liya toh armesh yaha rukne wale hain mere saath baaki sab log wapas jaaoge

Daadi:chinta mat karo vo log toh apni padai ke baad yaha hi aayega na because they are all the children of dad friends and they will come to heir their companies na

Dev:yeah but we are close friends

Daadi:oho mere bachu ab ye sab chinta chodo aur kaise enjoy karna ye socho

Dev:hmmm okay

Daadi:jaa jakar fresh ho jaa

Dev:okay i will go and need to take a nap too

Daadi:jao

Dev left to his room and he took his kurta set and went to fresh up. mean while he didn't find radhika in her room. He came back and saw the photo of radhika on the wall and said to him self "tum sirf mere ho aur tum ko main kabhi nahi kho doonga chahe kuch bhi ho aur tumhe kabhi rone nahi doonga" and went to his bed and slept well.
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okay guys thank u for all ur comments and hope u like this part too if u like this part press like button and feel free to comment if u doesn't like this part feel free to say it on my face so that i can correct it and as i want dev to understand radhika and her hard ships completely i am giving u this part hope u like this interaction .

Edited by harianjana - 14 years ago