*Dying Embers* Pg 26 Chapter 8 :) - Page 16

aww Vatty why  did you delete it?

I LOVED LOVED LOVED this update....and the beauty of this update was the whole conversation...It makes me want to think through it all...it is a very bold way of writing...and kudos for this ..I liked it a lot...it made me go back a few pages when i needed to second guess who said what...and as a writer I guess that was the hook for you right? ...will the readers guess who said who...or will they solve it by going back a few pages...

Originally posted by: vatsalya

I'll post again manita di...

I always write comment and criticize...so its all in good spirit...i'll work on it again ...it really is okay.

No need to work again sweetie............it is very good.......and almost half is very clear.......
Only a few places need clarification..........which my over - imaginative mind guessed who is speaking what?.............just a few places, write - Shaan and Khanak.......that's it !!!

Originally posted by: saaaz

I LOVED LOVED LOVED this update....and the beauty of this update was the whole conversation...It makes me want to think through it all...it is a very bold way of writing...and kudos for this ..I liked it a lot...it made me go back a few pages when i needed to second guess who said what...and as a writer I guess that was the hook for you right? ...will the readers guess who said who...or will they solve it by going back a few pages...

brilliant!!!! 

Exactly !!!.................me with saaaz..........!!!

WHAT the hell happened???? Edited by saaaz - 13 years ago

Hey Vatty🤗 

Why did you scrap it rey ???????...............

Believe me...................it was good................and as saaaz says let it form a backbone of a further update...............

I have read several authors, whose even in first 35 pages, readers keep getting confused.......but we go on reading and everything gets clearer in the process......................

do not let the reviews affect you creatively..........
we all love what you write !!!!

why did u scrap it...............i just read it & was waiting 4 it...................i loved it..............& i commented on it when saw it again its gone..............

Vatyy..update kaha hai ?😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕

hei vatty,
y did u delete it..s..v got confused but it doesn't mean that ur writing is bad..pls don't take that as a gr8 negative comment..vatty dont let urself down..really RBO forum has bunch of awesome writers..i wonder how u ppl give different shanaks..almost all the shanaks r different..i totally love all the FF writers of this forum..u all have ur own way of saying things..let it be pooja's, noorya's, simi's, manita's, rupali's, saas's, shilpa's, SYS's, aditee's, shiksha's,imane's..all r different..urs is different in its own way..so dont think that ur writing is bad as some of us got confused..u should hav real talent to do that too..later as the story moves on the doubts will get clarified yaar..dont lose ur spirit..

really i felt bad seeing that u scraped ur update..cos i was 1 among the few who was confused n asked clarifications..
Edited by RB81 - 13 years ago