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Posted: 12 years ago
ohh intresting love it
and hw is shyame going to do that
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Posted: 12 years ago
Res.

Umpteen apologies, RB. Got caught up with exams and just read the chaps. Dimaag ka dahi ban raha hain!


-Edit!-

Phew! This one's a mind-boggling one, RB. It all comes down to trust no one, beguile everyone.


Khushi, being the compulsive liar and manipulator that she is, doesn't seem to match up to what is the general impression she creates. I know shes in the asylum to avoid the death sentence but her digging into the matters of the inmates..Arnav, Dr. Malvika, Shyam seems a tad bit out of order. Probably there's more to it or I have missed something (do correct me if I am wrong!). Akash seems to be another one that does not fit the picture the way he proclaims. I have a wild guess on his case but I will hang on for more details.


Arnav's one who has gotten the least coverage in the story in my POV. He is truly an enigma and only he knows what he does. At times I wonder if he is really insane seeing the extent to which he can plan..and that sudden attack on the officers..I really don't know what to decipher out of that. Would like to have an insight into his brains..my mind seems to draw a blank every time I think about him. The story seems like a Gordian knot at the moment where I can see no loose threads and I applaud your writing skills for that, RB.


P.S. Thank you so much for still sending the PMs, RB. Will read Cult now..
Edited by deereyedgal504 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
Nice update
So even Arjun isn't friends with khushi,seems he liked Tara better like others n covered up for her when she went black. wouldn't surprise me if khushi does have evidence against her after all she might be black too but is very smart n would have some kind of leverage incase her sis turned on her.
So Akaassh is hiding his plans even from shyam so why so many trips to sol? Is he the one who stole the file or is he talking to Dr M?
Wonder if there was anyone in khushi's life now or in her past who really cared for her without conditions maybe her paternal father?!?
Wonder if Dr j will turn to khushi or Arnav to retrieve file? Also wondering what's in that file
Thanks for pm plz keep em comin N update soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
oh,man! my mind hurts trying to understand n guess wats gonna happen...itz so dark & deep...freak I feel like m watching something on the lines of Silence of the lamb and Seven..trying to get into the minds of people like Hector..
phew! i wonder how u manage to write it...hats off to u!
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Posted: 12 years ago
Awsome update. m super confused. Suspence is killing me!
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: vgedin

I don't know what to say - Khushi hasn't changed one bit since she entered the facility, if anything the monster in her has found wings in the company of people like Arnav. And Arnav - the enigma that he is - no one knows what all he knows, what he is truly capable of, and what he wants.


Shyam, who is struggling the keep reins over the demons and the dark secrets that they are surrounded by, and keep it safe from the hands of those who can misuse it. Information is power, and every character in this story seems to be fully aware of this fact and taking advantage of it.


Khushi is no monster she is just taking care of her interests and as you rightly said, information is power. If that power is abused then we have cause for concern and that is what Shyam wants to avoid at any cost.
Arnav interests me less compared to Khushi and this keeps changing; she is dealing with depth and intricacies of her mind and she alone knows what she is up against. I want to see the fight and hope to get a ring side view.
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Posted: 12 years ago

Tara's accident was a part of the challenge wasn't it?

Tara reminds me of the twin with the short hair and ah cat! 😉 😆
Khushi reminds me of this toffee I used to like as a kid. It was soft candy, like a marshmallow, but it had a surprise centre - sour in flavor and jelly-like in consistency, like a slinky monster lurking under the enigmatic smiles. Which brings me to doubt certain things on her file ... the way she killed her sister, for example. Khushi is slinky in nature, she is the kind of person who would enjoy the look of absolute horror on your face, as you felt the poison, she injected, slug through your veins. The one line "
"There was a streak of malevolence in him which never escaped her radar; it was always directed towards her and never at Tara"
It is so funny how people hide their inner devils. Some, like Khushi, pretend to wear them on their sleeves while others, like Tara, pretend to be like your regular next door girls. I think Khushi resented the fact that nobody really recognized Tara for what she was hence leading to ... well, you know what it led to.
Have you ever seen a defense lawyer in action? It is beautiful, almost like watching a lotus bloom. I mean, watching them work is like taking different stars from different parts of the sky, and join them to form a pattern (or a strong case) . However, Arjun does not understand the beauty that is law, he doesn't understand the rush of adrenalin. He is very by the book, is Arjun and does not see things beyond the face value. I don't want to belittle him or anything, but in order to be an EXCELLENT lawyer, one must have some basic fire in them, to look at things beyond the face. I think Arjun is yet to earn that, I hope when he walks out of this labyrinth relatively unscathed, this is something he learns to do.
As somebody before rightly said ... "information is power" and all of them realize that.
But with great power comes great responsibility. And I don't think anybody here is ready to deal with the responsibility properly.
I missed Arnav
Edited by -bhindi- - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago

Outtake 1: Arnav

There was a menacing way in which Khushi approached the game. She didn't hold back her punches and attacked when least expected. Outside the walls of the asylum he would call her a slave of the thrill but now that they were inside the walls, the simple terms were forgone. She was complicated individual, he would give her that. It took him few weeks to realize that much of that complicated persona was constructed over years of practice. Fundamental analysis of her games showed him that she was intelligent with an incredibly linear analytical mind. In his book she was far from being complicated.

She had been in his radar the moment his eyes fell on a photo of her standing on the steps of court house with her lawyer. The grainy pixelized version of her had oozed charisma even in her two dimensional form. His attention to the story arose when he read the heading: Sibling rivalry touches abyss of inhumanity. It was impossible not to be attracted to her when she was looking so achingly indifferent towards her grieving parents. It was almost erotic. The dotted black and white print from newspaper was in his pocket for most part of her trial and was moved into his pillow when she came to the facility. When he read in newspaper about the insanity plea the defense had come up with, he had barked out in laughter at the blatant stupidity of it all. Somehow he was disappointed and relieved at the same time. If she were to be incarcerated he would never get a chance to meet her and talk to her and if she wasn't then…

Anyway, he had made few calls to his people who kept him in loop about the ongoing of her proceeding. He spoke to his lawyer and asked him to tell her defense to consider this facility as their primary choice. His lawyer had given him an odd look and Arnav had ignored it. He had to make sure she ended up in the same facility as his.

And she had. However he hadn't recognized her when he first saw her being taken away. The blotched images of her in newspapers were much more humane albeit indifferent than the expressionless corpse that had walked past him. But then he hadn't realized the extent of the perverseness she carried when it came to destroying someone's confidence and their personality in the process. She was the best adversary for him, next to the Punisher.

And that very fact had made her his next target. He was bored playing with people with average to above average intelligence. Now he craved for someone who was as intelligent as him. It would be so much fun to break her mind bit by bit, take it out and fill it with lies. Tabula Rasa; it means 'clean slate' in Latin. He would wipe her mind clean and then write a different story there. He didn't know how he would achieve it but he would find a way. When he was finished with her, she would confess that she was the Punisher. He would tear her identity away from her and convince her of the murders she didn't commit. It wasn't because he had a personal agenda against Punisher or something. He was simply fascinated with the man. He was probably even in love with him, like one did with their favorite television or movie hero, if he analyzed the nature of his intentions a bit more.

By creating a Punisher then he could come face to face with the real man himself.

Why?

May be he was bored. Maybe he was wired wrong. Maybe he loved Punisher more than anything or anyone. Maybe there was some deep psychological bullshit theory behind this. Reasons were many. But the action required was just one. And he took it.

But after meeting her and talking to her, he lost the enthusiasm of upping her by destroying her psychologically. The first day they played chess in their minds was probably the most intimate gesture he ever shared with anyone. He had fallen in love with her all over again. He decided to change the game then – the two of them would solve the mystery of her sister's death sitting inside this facility. He sincerely believed when she said she didn't kill her sister. True, she was a compulsive liar but he had understood early on that the lying was a faade for the longest game she played with her sister.

It was so messed up that no sane person could ever understand the beauty of the game the sisters' played. But he saw it for what it was worth. And it seemed like the better person had won – the older sister.

Malvika had badgered him relentlessly about his reasons behind sharing chess, Go, card or board games with Khushi. He had given her eleven answers. More than half were contradicting the rest. His memory was far excellent enabling him to keep track of the falsified answers. It was pure entertainment when Shyam picked up Malvika's line of questioning.

What had come to him as a small surprise was, Khushi's perceptiveness regarding Akash and himself. She had caught a moron working either for Malvika or Shyam who was recording the game. He had to bite his cheek painfully to stop from laughing out loud. They could have installed a hidden camera and it would have been easier, cleaner and way simpler.

And then he decided to make his move.

He attacked the orderly.

He wanted to understand Khushi a bit more. He wanted to see what she would do when a man whom she pegged as knowing him, would act otherwise. In her moments of confusion, she would display her true nature. Her natural instincts would rise to the occasion and then he would have a vague idea what Khushi was all about.

He had to admit.

If he ever thought of willingly allowing another human being within five feet radius for more than few hours without any ulterior motive – then it would be Khushi.

He wondered if this is what normal people called love.

Note: The reason for this Outtake is to give a glimpse of Arnav which isn't all that much till now. This chapter is the hardest thing I have written since some chapters in We, the people. I have been reviewing this chapter over and over again because once its posted, I cannot go back to keeping Arnav abstract anymore. :=)

Thanks for all the comments and enjoy the story!

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Posted: 12 years ago

O.M.G.

My jaw dropped open after reading this update and looks like it won't close again very soon.

How long have I waited for Arnav's point of view of everything and here it is!!!

I dunno about the rest of the readers, but for me, this was the most beautiful and captivating update of this FF.
Okay, yeah. I won't deny the fact that he did freak me out in the beginning, especially at the bit he says she was on his radar since the beginning. AND when he found that erotic...
By the time he was telling his lawyer to suggest his facility, I had decided he had serious stalking issues.
To think that he had appeared indifferent to her when she had first come in the facility... And he was hatching this whole sordid plot!
And Goodness, when we get an overview of what his plan was... I was like WTH??? Tear down her identity and make her believe she is the Punisher??? Just so that he could face the actual Punisher??? Man, he's really sick in the head...
But then he dropped his crazy plan for the simple reason that he fell in love with her? I don't know why, but I found this kinda sweet. And the mind-chess thing was somthing he had never done with someone else before... Aww... Maybe I'm going crazy too, but this melts my heart...
He wants to know her better. He was to track down the Punisher with her. Maybe this is not love as we know it but it still is love... And I loved this Outtake...
The last lines stole my heart

He had to admit.

If he ever thought of willingly allowing another human being within five feet radius for more than few hours without any ulterior motive – then it would be Khushi.

He wondered if this is what normal people called love.

Edited by ShikhaKhushi - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
okay...first i need 2 calm down...
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WHAT??!!
THIS WAS COMPLETELY UNEXPECTED!!!!!!!😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲



arnav is the most manipulative...most psychotic...i dont even have the r8 word 4 him!!

i mean...he did all that cuz he was bored???
nd he wanted to brainwash khushi??????
but now he wont cuz apparently he is in love with her????!!!

oh my...
i'm gonna go back 2 calming down again...
Edited by no_username - 12 years ago

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