When I First Saw You - Maaneet FF (Up. Part6 Pg20) - Page 9

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Thanks Yoshita for the PM and the fantastic update! The story'salready moving along so beautifully :-) I cant wait to read more nok-jhok between Maan-Geet
Update the next parts soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
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great update
do continue
cant wait to read da nxt update
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Posted: 14 years ago
#83
Nice Update
Great story


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Posted: 14 years ago
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super cool!! luvd the lift scene especially when geet falls on maan 2 kool
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Originally posted by: shivangi783

that was a nice cute update!

Loved Geet-Meera bonding😊



Thanks! 😊

Originally posted by: ansah

that is really awesome...so loved it

great update it is...so good...
and maaneet in lift...so nice
keep writing



Thank you so much! 😊

Originally posted by: MaanEET_FAN

hey............. awesome ff yaar.................

plssssssssss update soon...........
nd pls add me to ur pm list............
thnku....
nd yess... pls pls pls... update soon.........



Thanks a lot! 😊
Yea, I'll add you! 😊

Originally posted by: revav

lovely.........simply awesome.....

completely loved loved it....
reva



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Originally posted by: .sireesha.

Thats Awesome Update Dear....👏........

Loved it sooooooooooooooooo much❤️
Loved Geet-Meera's bonding...........Its so Sweet.........
Loved the way Maan's Mom woke him......😆.....Thats so Sweet of Her...........
OMG so Maan is going to take Geet to the college.....😆😆😆.....
Im Eagerly waiting for the next part
Pls Update Soooooooooooooooooon



OMG! OMG! Such a super-long comment! 😆
Thank You! Thank You! Thank You! 🤗
I'm feeling sooo happy! 😳
I'm glad you loved it soo much! 😃


Originally posted by: swetha10

wow nice update.. liked the sis bonding.. lift scene was really nice... cant wait to c maneet reaction on knwing tht they r neighbors.. do continue soon



Thank you soo much! 😊


Originally posted by: maansi007

hey i just came a cross with ur update nd just luved it could u plzzzzzzzzzz add me to ur pm list nd plzzzzzzzz update soon



Thanks a ton! 😊
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Originally posted by: pickachu

Gr8888888888888888888 part.

Loveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee it.
Continue soonnnnnnnn.
Thanxx for the pm.

Fatima



Thankssss!! 😃


Originally posted by: lovelycutietedy

😃😃wow.................. what a introduction..................... vry intresting both the parts are very good.................. waiting what would happen when maaneet see each other😃😲



Thankss!! 😊
Don't worry, sab thik hi hoga! 😆

Originally posted by: Radhika Shah

Great part!!
Thanks for the pm..
Continue soon



Thankss!! 😊


Originally posted by: pushpi

Thanks Yoshita for the PM and the fantastic update! The story'salready moving along so beautifully :-) I cant wait to read more nok-jhok between Maan-Geet

Update the next parts soon



Awh! Thankew so much! 😊

Originally posted by: sweet cherry

great update

do continue
cant wait to read da nxt update



Thanks! 😊

Originally posted by: shreya satish

Nice Update

Great story

Pls add me in ur pm list



Thanks! 😊
I'll add you for sure!




Thanks! 😊


Originally posted by: hermoini

super cool!! luvd the lift scene especially when geet falls on maan 2 kool



Thanks a lot! 😊
Even I love that one! 😳😆

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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awesome dear👏add me to ur PM list and send next part soon😊
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Hey Maniacs! 😆 I'm back with the update! Enjoy reading it!
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~Part 4~

Geet n Meera's Flat:


Now Geet is all alone in the flat. She goes into the kitchen and starts making breakfast for herself. She began to cut onions. While doing so her thoughts drifted towards that boy, no, that young man, whom she met at the railway station. They had met only once and she hated him. "Monkey kahin ka! Dekhkar chalna bhi nahi aata use. Galti uski aur daant mujhe raha tha. Mujhe! Geet Handa ko! Himmat toh dekho zara uski!" 😡 With every line that she spoke about him, her speed of cutting onions increased ' she was 'that' angry. "Samajhta kya hai apne aap ko! Dobara agar mil gaya na toh ---


"Aaaahh!" 😵


Oh no! Geet had cut her finger with the extra sharp knife. And blood was flowing as if it had decided not to stop.

"Manhoos kahin ka! Naam liya nahi ki ho gaya kaam kharab! Yahan toh Meera bhi nahi hai, pata nahi first-aid box kahan rakha hai?" 😕

Quickly she washed her finger, but the blood still didn't stop flowing. She checked various drawers and cupboards but in vain. She thought of tying a cloth and as soon as she picked up a cloth ---


*~Ding Dong~*

The doorbell rang.

Maan's flat:


Maan on the other hand starts getting ready for college. He takes a shower and comes out of the bathroom with only a towel wrapped around his waist exposing his well toned body. His muscles tensed as he moved his hands through his wet hair. Tiny droplets of water moved their way out through his hair to his face and then to his neck. One look at him and one more girl dead ' that was how he was looking at that point of time ' Breathtaking! 😳

He wore a fitted blue jeans and a hot black shirt with a few upper buttons open. His hair were still wet. He sat down to have his breakfast.


"Oh God, ab us Meera ki behen ko bhi toh lene jaana hai! Kya naam tha uska? Geet, haan Geet! Bas yeh woh Geet na ho jo kal mujhe railway station par mili thi, warna main pagal ho jaunga! Anyways, main fatafat breakfast kar leta hoon." 😆


Having finished his breakfast, he took his books and went to Meera's flat. He rang the door bell.


*~Ding Dong~*

G : (shouting) Aayi!


Geet ran towards the door. Blood was dripping from her finger leaving blood stains on the floor. As soon as she opened the door, she nearly fainted. Well, so did Maan! And both at the same time shouted '

"Tum!" 😲

G : (looking upwards ) Babaji, aap mere saath humesha aise kyun karte hain! Kis manhoos ka chehra dikha diya subah subah! Bacha lo babaji!

M : (to himself) Oh No! ye toh wahi Geet hai! Damn! Khair, Maan Singh Khurana kisi se nahi ghabrata! (to Geet) Geet!

G : Kya hai? Tumhari itni himmat ki tum yahan tak aa gaye! Mujhe tum par pehle hi shak tha! Pehle mujhse jaan boojh kar takraye aur ab mera picha karte karte yahan taka aa gaye! 😡

M : Geet, main '

G : Kya main? Zyada smart banne ki koshish mat karo!

M : Geet, mujhe '

G : Mujhe sab samajh mein aata hai! [😆]

M : (irritated) GEET! Chup, bilkul chup!

Saying so he puts his hand over her mouth.

Two sets of eyes started at each other. They looked into each other's eyes. It was as if time had just stopped for them. Suddenly Geet realized what were they actually doing and pushed Maan back. Both of then started looking everywhere and anywhere except for looking at each other.


M : Haan toh Geet, main kehna chah raha tha ki main Maan hoon.

G : Tum Maan ho!😲 (to herself) Oh! Tabhi mujhe yeh naam kuch suna suna sa lag raha tha!

M : Haan main Maan hoon! Aur shayad tum bhool gayi ho ki main bhi isi Apartment main rehta hoon!

G : Arrey haan! 😕

M : Aur main tumhe college ke liye lene aaya tha! Par lagta hai ki Miss Geet college jaane ke mood mein nahi hai!

G : Acha? Aur yeh aakashwani tumne kahan suni?

M : Acha, mujhe nahin pata tha ki tum apne night clothes mein college jaati ho! I'm so sorry! (holds his hand) Chalo chalte hain! 😉


Geet suddenly shouts! Because Maan was holding the same hand whose finger she had cut. She takes out her hand from his grip.


M : Ab kya hua? Kyun chill rahi ho?

G : Dikhta nahi hai, meri ungli cut gayi hai!


And seeing the blood flowing from her finger, Maan became highly tensed!


M : I'm so sorry Geet. Mujhe nahi pata tha.

G : (started crying) Ouch! Aaah! Mar gayi! 😆

M : Tum is chot ko aise leke kyun ghoom rahi ho! Itna hi dard ho raha tha toh first-adi kyun nahi kiya?

G : Agar mujhe pata hota ki first-aid box kahan rakha hai toh zaroor dawai laga leti!


Maan took her hand in his. Geet tried to protest but in vain.


M : Geet, chup chap sidhi khadi raho.


He took her finger in his mouth and sucked the blood. 😳 Geet could not help but notice the concern which reflected upon his face.

Maan on the other hand was very tensed. He quickly rushed to his flat and brought the first aid box. He cleaned her finger with cotton and Dettol and then applied bandage. All this while, Geet was wincing in pain.

G : (to herself) Yeh kya! Main is monkey se help le rahi hoon? Chee Geet! 😆

M : Geet, zyada dard toh nahi ho raha hai?

G : Nahin Nahin, bilkul nahi. Infact mujhe toh bhot maza aa raha hai!


Maan didn't say a word. He tried to do it more softly and carefully. 😍


G : (to herself) Lagta hai maine kuch zyada hi bol diya! Toh kya hua! Maana ki isne meri thodi bhot help kardi! Toh kya! Itna toh koi bhi kar deta hai! Waise nahi, aajkal ke zamane mein ache log reh hi kitne gaye hain! ( to Maan) Maan..

M : (still engrossed in putting medicine) Hmm? 😳

G : Thank You!

M : Kisliye?

G : Meri madat karne ke liye.

M : (very slowly) Tumhari madat karne ke liye main hamesha tumhare saath rahunga Geet!

G : Kya? 😕

M : Uhh.. (to himself) Mera dimag toh kharab nahi ho gaya hai? Main yeh kya bak raha tha! (to Geet) Maine kaha ' Your welcome Geet.'

G : Oh Acha..

M : Ab Miss Geet, aap jayengi tayar hone! Main tumhare liye wait nahi karne wala kyunki mujhe late hona pasand nahi hai!

G : Keh toh aise rahe ho jaise kahin ke maharaja ho!

M : Agar yahin khade hoke bolne ka plan hai toh mujhe bata do, fir main jaa raha hoon!

G : Bhav toh aise khaate ho jasie muft ka mil raha ho. 😆

M : Kya?

G : Kuch Nahi! Jaao Tum! Nahi chahiye mujhe tumhari help!

M : Haan toh mujhe bhi koi shauk nahi hai tumhari help karne ka! Woh toh Meera ne kaha tha, isliye!

G : Mujhe bhi Meera ne hi kaha tha isliye tumhare saath jaane ke liye tayar ho gayi! Warna Main? Aur woh bhi tumhare saath!? Puh-lease! 😛

M : Theek hai, main jaa raha hoon! Good bye!

G : Haan toh jao na! Good bye!

Maan slams the door and goes out. Geet rushes into the bathroom to get ready!

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I'm sorry for the short update. but you know this is my first FF and I'm not used to writing a long update. but I'm working on it. 😊

Do hit the 'Like' tab if you liked it.

Your comments/criticism are welcome!


Love,

Yoshita

A Crazy Maan-Maniac 😳

['~Next Part - Part 5 - Pg 16~']

Edited by YoshiMaanManiac - 14 years ago
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great update pls cont soonnnnnnnn

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