Teri Meri Dooriyan - Fan fiction - Page 11

Loved it, Angad and Sahiba relationship developing

Amazing 🤩

Awww.. it's starting.. the love story is starting.. the ice has thawed.. waiting for their next meet up..

Its beautiful yaar.. ur writing

Awesome chapter! I was kinda hoping that Sahiba would demonstrate to him what a real heartfelt sincere apology looks like and that would make him introspect and give Sahiba a real apology.

Wow Simply marvellous....

But Saheba has Amberish hazel eyes na....grey eyes reminds me of seerat though.

But finally, their love story started, the ice has broken...

This story is such a lighthearted take on the otherwise toxic TMD.

Keep up the good work.

This was such a dreaaaam!!!! The connection between them felt so organic 😍😍😍. I also love Seerats characterization, a very nice elder sister. I just loveddd this chapter... After reading it I so badly long for such a scene in TMD. But alas! It's just too late now.

CHAPTER 12

Angad was sitting on a bar stool of one of the most happening lounges in Delhi and was waiting for his date....and sipping his drink. Dressed in a jeans and fitted black Armani T-shirt, with a black pug, he was drawing a lot of female attention. Few girls had already hit on him...but he brushed them off he was already waiting for someone.

While waiting he was reflecting on the recent happenings...how things had changed.....It had been more than 3-4 months since holi. Garry and Seerat had proceeded for their one month long honeymoon and had come back too...they seemed happy together, it had been like 5-6 months since they got married and Seerat had gelled well with the family. She was just like Kiara and Ekam, just a little more mature and sensible....Garry and she were like the lovebirds of the family, always together......He had been wrong about her and secondly Garry seemed extremely happy....hence Angad had also accepted her fully as his family now....

Thinking about Garry and Seerat...his thoughts drifted to....Sahiba...the reason he was here today...... he had been extremely busy all these months, launching his international line of jewellery. He had made innumerable trips to Canada and UK and had been bone tierd on many of the days....but no matter how tierd he was....those eyes kept haunting him...he sometimes dreamt of those hands on his cheeks and her face near his....with his head in her lap....they had not met once since holi but her presence was still felt around the house....

Every few days he would be served something tasty and upon enquiry it would be known that the Mongas had sent some food for Seerat and in turn for everyone.....it was a given that Sahiba had cooked it.......

Garry had been wearing this amazing brooch one day as he got ready to goto a friend's wedding, in panther design with outstanding handiwork....though not a very expensive piece, the handiwork and design made it look unique and elegant....being a jeweller Angad had naturally been attracted to it.....he made Garry give it to him to study it...

'This is actually very good, i like the whole concept and the handwork is britlliant' he praised it while studying it in his hands....

'Seerat's family had gifted this to me for the Roka'

'You know something' Seerat interjected...'this used to be an old brouch of my grandfather some rather regular design...but it had broken in-between and dad was to repair it....when Sahiba designed this beautiful panther out of it....Dad was very skeptical about making it but she insisted and viola....it turned out brilliant....since then it was reseved for my would be husband'

'What about her own would be husband' asked Garry, 'she must have done something nice for him too...'

'Well yes, she was not interested but Dad forced her to desing something, so she made a Lion's head, its made of yellow and white diamonds, with emerald eyes, you should see it, its even more beautiful'

'Will most probably see it in her engagement' said garry

"She is getting engaged" Angad asked them sharply

"No, what I meant was when she gets engaged"

"Well then you may have to wait a long time....she is hell bent on not getting married....she has been saying no to all alliances that mummy papa are getting her and she has no boyfriend so no chance of anything for now" stated Seerat making a face

"How do you know she has no boyfriend' Garry challenged her "who knew u had a boyfriend for so long"

"You were my friend....not my boyfriend" stated Seerat swatting Garry "Anyway Sahiba is oblivious to male attention, she is lost in her own art and world, it's not that men don't notice her but she is completely unaware of them.....and knowing her...if she had a boyfriend she would have blurted it out by now..." dismissed Seerat

Though a conversation of the past, the thought of other men paying attention to her was disturbing...

He made a detour on his current Canada visit and stayed over in Delhi for a night. He needed a distraction and get these thoughts out of his mind...

'Hi Angad' Naina greeted him as she drew near, giving him a hug and kissing his cheeks.

Naina was a relatively tall girl, fair and beautiful and was dressed in a black tank mini dress with high heels. She was sophisticated and smart. She had assisted him on one of his deals in the past and was always available for Angad...he ensured that he gifted her something from his collection everytime they met, though she would have been fine without a gift also...all girls coveted spending time with him.... as they were bound to have a good time...

'Hi Naina'

They engaged in some regular talk and proceeded to have drinks and dinner. He must be coming down with something he thought couple of hours later....... he felt no attraction whatsoever towards Naina...and was in no hurry to take her to his room.......he had always had a good time with her in the past but this time all he could do was find faults with her.....her eyes were not expressive enough, her hair was too short, she was not tall enough for him....her dressing was too revealing.....and what not...

After an hour or so he finally made an excuse ...'You know what....I am not feeling too good....I think I am jet lagged...how about my driver drops you home for tonight....I think I will go crash'

Naina was surprised and not so happy, she had canceled her other plans to meet him and he was dumping her half way through like this....she looked absolutely upset.....Angad himself was upset with himself....the whole objective of staying back in Delhi was to have a good time and cleanse his system from all kinds of wayward thoughts....but he just could not bring himself to do so....

He was not sure what was wrong with him he thought as he tried to sleep that night....he would wrap up some work in Delhi tomorrow and take an evening flight to Chandigarh and then head home..

NEXT DAY EARLY MORNING MONGA HOUSE

Mummy and Papa ji had gone for a pilgrimage and Sahiba was staying with Taaiji and Param when they suddenly got a call that Taaiji's brother was quiet unwell in his village...Taaiji and Param had to urgently leave early in the morning. Sahiba was all alone at home, she was not used to it but was quiet sure she would manage.

'Haan mummy, I am fine...no you don't cut short your trip...it's another 2 weeks...we have really saved up for this trip....you don't worry about me....I will be absolutely fine....I have some orders to complete today so would be working on my pottery from home.....there is no need to talk to Seerat Di....I am telling you I will manage....don't worry' Sahiba cut the call....mummy was getting tensed unnecessarily....

BRAR MANSION

'OK mummy, yes I agree she should not stay alone, I don't trust that Amrinder character at all, she is all alone and he never leaves an opportunity to trouble her otherwise also...you don't cut short your visit....I will go...yes don't worry' Seerat cut the call.

'Go where" Garry asked casually as he was getting dressed....

Seerat explained that Sahiba was all alone at home for few days..."And there is this one guy in the colony who is always after her, keeps troubling her, I just don't like or trust him.....and you know Sahiba. She is lost in her own world when she is working... I need to go stay with her for few days'

"What do you mean stay with her...what about me" Garry exclaimed....

"I will be with you for our whole life, please Garry...." She made a puppy dog face while trying to give him a hug....Garry could not say no..

"Ok" but he was not happy to listen that it could take 2 weeks for her parents or someone to comeback....

"I will take mom and Bebe's permission' said Seerat happily.

In the hall everyone was enjoying a late cup of tea before they were to go about their own day.....when Seerat asked Bebe

"Bebe....I wanted to ask your permission to goto my peke for a week or so"

"Kya Hua puttar....sab theek toh hai" asked Daarji

Seerat explained about Sahiba "Mummy was planning to cut her pilgrimage and come back early as we are not comfortable with the idea of her staying all alone....so I thought I can go stay with her for few days...so that my parents can finish their pilgrimage in peace and I can be with Sahiba"

"Why don't you do something better....why dont you call her here....everyone is around. ....she can stay here till your parents come back after their pilgrimage " suggested Manveer....

"That's a fantastic idea mamiji" Garry was extremely happy with this solution..

"But...how can Sahiba come here....this is my in-laws place and" Seerat was hesitant about this...

"This is not your in-laws place, this is your place Seerat beta...and she is your sister, of course she can come and stay. She will be just like any other kid of the house, like Veer, Ekam and all. Don't think so much....call her here...or better go and get her......." finished Bebe.

"Yes Seerat, go and get her aspa" said an ecstatic Garry...

MONGA HOUSE SAME DAY

There was a knocking on the door and Sahiba opened it to see Seerat Di standing there! Di! She exclaimed, hugging her.

"Ok...pack up soon" said Seerat after few minutes

"For what"

"You are coming with me for next two weeks to Brar Mansion....so pack up"

"What...I don't think so....I am perfectly fine here" Sahiba could not imagine staying with the Brars....it was going to be so awkward.....it's not that they were not nice.....it's just that she would be so uncomfortable staying in someone else's house and that too with HIM around.... he will think she is a freeloader....

It had been months since holi but it felt like yesterday. It had not been fully her mistake but she still felt a bit guilty over the whole thing....she did not want to meet him....

"You are not fine here and I don't like the idea of that Amrinder sniffing around with you all alone in the house"

"Don't worry about him....I can handle him....and see I will goto the shop every day and only spend some time in the night....so why worry" Sahiba said casually..

"The nights are a problem....so come pack soon......"

"I am not going...."

"Yes you are....otherwise you are going to get one slap from me and secondly Garry is never going to forgive you"

"Why" asked Sahiba perplexed

"Because then I have to come here and stay and he is going to be really upset with you then"

Sahiba had no option but to go finally....she hoped things went well

BRAR MANSION

Seerat reached back with Sahiba just as the sun was about to set. Everyone gave her a warm welcome and she was assigned one of the guest rooms....

Sahiba initially felt very awkward but everyone made her feel right at home.....post evening tea...everyone dispersed to rest before Dinner and Sahiba too went back to her room to freshen up...once done she felt reatless sitting idle and went out, thats when she came across the kitchen and Manveer Mamiji cooking something.

"Can I help"

"Sahiba....no you are our guest, you go enjoy yourself"

"I am not used to sitting idle and everyone is busy with something....please let me help...I am very bored....what are you cooking"

"Angad is coming back from his trip after many days....so am cooking his favorite food....am done with the main course...just have to do the sweet....hey wait....I remember Seerat telling me once that you do amazing Phirni...it's Angad's favorite....can you please make it"

Mamiji asked so nicely, Sahiba could not refuse. She worked along with Manveer to cook phirni for everyone. She made few other things too...

Angad reached home quiet late in the night, as he reached home mom was waiting for him...

"Angad, you got late"

"Yes ma, my flight got late and then the long drive from Chandigarh"

"Have dinner first....it's so late, you must be hungry"

Angad realised he was super hungry, eating outside food for so many days had whet his appetite for home food.

As everyone had already had their food and proceeded to their rooms, Angad was all alone while eating.

"Umm this smells good" he said as it was served the food....he was famished he realised...then his mom served him phirni...

"My favorite...this is really good, thanks ma....I feel like kissing your hands"

"Well in that case you need to kiss Sahiba's hands....as she made the phirni" teased Manveer

Angad choked....it was as if mama had voiced his secret thoughts

"Here here...have some water"

The mongas kept sending food over so he did not give it any thought...

Sahiba was feeling restless and could not sleep and decided to go for a walk in the back lawns...

Angad had eaten too much and was not feeling comfortable....so he thought he will go for a walk

As he went into the lawn...he saw a figure donned in white walking ahead....it looked eternal against an inky backdrop...he went near...only to be shocked to see Sahiba...he thought she was a figment of his imagination.... his jet lagged mind may have manifested this mirage...he had been thinking too much about her...

He went near and near and near....as he got close the mirage stilled....he started bending his head towards her when he was shoved hard and he heard "oh hello, what do you think you are doing"....Angad was shocked to his core

"What are you doing here"

"I have come to stay over for few days. What are you doing here"

"What do you mean what am I doing here .... I live here"

" I know that....what I mean is what are you doing in the lawns"

"I came here to walk"

"Well I came first....so leave"

"No...this is my house and I will not leave"

"Fine...then I will" Saying that she turned to leave...only for Angad to hold her arm..

"Wait...it's a big lawn...maybe we can walk together" he said....inviting more torture...

"Leave my arm"

"See I have left it....ok I will leave you stay"

"No ..it's fine....stay"

There was an awkward silence and they started walking together....but it went against Shaiba's nature to stay silent for long, she could not help but talk ...even with ATM

"Manveer mamiji was saying you went for a trip....where did you go"

Angad was not used to small chit chat....but he had asked her to stay...so could not not answer now .

"Canada...."

"Wow...nice...have you been to the Niagra falls"

"No"

"Ever"

"Never"

"Oh why..." She sounded dissapointed

"I never have the time"

"But if you are going all the way to the other side of the world would you not want to see it...must be so beautiful"

"No"

"I plan to see it one day...Amrit Veerji has got my passport and visa done and has been calling me but I could not go.. .one day when I save enough money...I plan to go and see the Niarga for sure" She said excitedly....but the mention of Amrit Veerji brought back uncomfortable memories of his rudeness that time...

"Ok...I think I will go back" She said...

Just as she was about to turn she heard him say "I am sorry"

"What"

"That day in the wedding, I am sorry for that comment, I should not have said it"

Nothing could have surprised Sahiba more....this guy was saying sorry to her...."Ya you should be you know....you were so rude to me"

Angad did not respond....one he was saying sorry and second she was rubbing it in his face....his irritation started surfacing

"Yes...and that's why I said I am sorry"

"It's OK....just don't do it ever again....otherwise i will get you bashed up next time" She reprimanded him again

"Ok" he said through gritted teeth....why could she not just gracefully accept it...

"You know I was of half a mind to get you beaten up with Param.....but then I thought I will let it go" She said magnanimously

"What"

"Yes....I did not want to spoil the wedding atmosphere"

"You think Param would have beaten me" he asked quietly....

'Yes, Param is a state level wrestler you know and he is trying for nationals....so for sure he would have beaten you to a pulp....but I let it go' she said not realising that she was hurting his ego...

Anagd was livid....what had he found attractive in this girl he could not understand, she just said what came to her mind, chatted mindlessly and kept insulting him all the time....he felt like wrangling her neck...but....he stopped himself.....good this happened......he had got his mind screwed during his Asthama attack...now in full senses he knew what a meance she was!

"Thank you" he said...thanking his lucky stars...." I think I will go now"

"Are you sure"

"Good night"

"Good night" he better work late nights in office he thought if she was staying her for few days!

You write really beautifully! Theres a flow and i can imagine things as I read.

But I'm honestly finding Angad a little too unlikeable. So he just has flings with women from time to time after his past? Thats just too cliche na. And he doesn't seem to be attracted by Sahibas personality but more so by her mysteriousness and her looks.

Hey thanks for the feedback....I am trying to mellow him down....but I want his character to be sauve and modern...if he is not committed and is having flings ... I wanted to give it a Casanova to committed sequence....let me see if I can achieve it.

Personal view - it's very normal these days to have flings if ur single so thought will add little realism

Feedback taken though

Flings maybe normal and its fine when consensual.

But my own ideology is conservative and I think my main discomfort is to picturize a couple where one person has this type of history of casual flings whereas the other is completely ignorant with no experience. Doesn't seem fair or equal.

I love how you write. So I feel obliged to share my honest view of how Angad is coming across to me and why he's unlikeable - it seems like he's happy to have flings with "modern" women who drink/party/can have casual relationships but he also expects his wife to be not like that- she should be like his mom- simple, a good cook, someone who should not even be eyed by another man and say yes to everything he wants and not challenge him or question him at all. So he is attracted to Sahiba because she looks stunning, is caring , cooks well, is artistic but doesn't like her speaking up to him or challenging his authority. So whether the girl is modern like his clubwaali or traditional like Sahiba the only common thing is that he just wants full submission and all the control

Hey...do give feedback...I always welcome it...agree on ur view too...let me try to mellow him down.. and u guys read and give feedback I feel like writing more...so do share feedback