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Posted: 3 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: bones123


Hi Sonia,


Priya here (I know cliche hogaya). I think we very very briefly chatted on MHRW forum where you left equally lovely comments on my stories. I hope to be writing here more regularly if the show doesn’t turn me off with its ridiculous plots. But currently so much potential. See you around!


Yes Priya.

We did. You remember me... That's so sweet 😳 .

Loved your writings & I really hoped if you could write more but I know MHRW went on another tangent altogether🤡

While many believe that there're too many -ve characters here, I just feel they're all too Real. I hope for our sakes the plot here remains well cos yes, I can say I'm mildly surprised at the potential this show & the characters have here 🤗

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Posted: 3 years ago
#32

Originally posted by: bones123


Not quite Ritika (if I can call you that), Meri Priya end mein hi samjhegi ki she’s called him Ram…but you may have just inspired me to get out of my writers block.


Thank you!

Yes you can call me ritika it is my name😂

Well I'm glad I will get to read next part then😉

Your welcome 🤭

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Posted: 3 years ago
#33

“Mr. Kapoor, kya bewakoofon jaise khud hass rahe hain? Chale kya?”

Don't put scenarios in my head coz I will revolt if Priya doesn't say this to Ram in the show🥺🤣

Fab job🔥🔥🔥 loved them all😍

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Posted: 3 years ago
#34

Originally posted by: oye_nakhrewaali

“Mr. Kapoor, kya bewakoofon jaise khud hass rahe hain? Chale kya?”

Don't put scenarios in my head coz I will revolt if Priya doesn't say this to Ram in the show🥺🤣

Fab job🔥🔥🔥 loved them all😍

hahhah they have so much scope for banter. Actually show wali Priya does a decent job, but Rams 's writers are stuck at tum taana mat maaro ;)


Thank you so much for the lovely comment ☺️

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Posted: 3 years ago
#35

part 4


A/N - I was thoroughly blocked when trying to write this part. I just couldnt figure out how I connect my drabbles. Not really pleased with this, but i need to get it out of my drafts. This is so filmy, i dont even know what I want to say!

Also we are offcially in OS category. yeh drabble nahi raha ab.


Feedback is like kachori.


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Priya was weirdly skittish tonight. It was not the first time her husband was out on a business trip, but she felt his absence acutely. The first day he left, she went about her day as normal but constantly thinking about what he’d be doing. He had messaged on the Kapoor WhatsApp group when he had landed and her heart ached a bit when no one else responded.


As she returned to her room, she idled her time away until her phone rang unexpectedly. It was Mr. Kapoor. She excitedly picked up the call before schooling her mind to behave. What followed was possibly the longest conversation they had ever had since they had been married. She really couldn’t say what it was about, she only knew that if felt familiar. There was no agenda and conversation flowed with ease.


For the next two weeks, Mr. Kapoor called her like clockwork at 7pm and they spoke. They always started the call formally and ended the call formally and their banter was sandwiched in between.


Today it was 9 pm and he hadn’t called yet. She assumed it was because he was stuck in meetings. While she knew she could call him or text him to check, she also recognised he hadn’t gone to London for a joyride and the negotiations with the investment banks, PEs and lawyers could take hours to sort out final details. She heard the excitement in his voice when he spoke about the acquisition over the last fortnight. He was generally excitable like an energiser bunny, but this seemed like it was special.


She was standing on the terrace when her phone buzzed with the familiar ringtone she had set for him. Before she could say hi, she heard him sigh, she could hear his tiredness in that one sigh.


“Priya….hi”


“Mr Kapoor, is everything fine?”


“It’s just that…I have some bad news”


“Mr Kapoor, is everything fine? Please tell me what has happened”. She repeated her question,with her panic rising this time.


“The work I left for is taking longer than expected. I won’t be able to return as planned. I’m going to be in London for a further 3 weeks.”


“Oh”


“Oh?”


“No it’s nothing....bus.."


"Hahahaa Priya...dont tell me that you'll miss me..."


"I will..."


There was an awkward silence that followed and neither side spoke for a few moments.


"Mera matlab hai ki main aapke gande jokes ko miss karoongi....main" she stuttered trying to recover from her sudden admission.


"Actually I would miss you too..."


"Would? did you mean will?"


"Nahi....I meant would. Agar main London mein hota, tum se door, toh. I would miss you too."


"Kya...main samjhi nahi .....did you head to another country?" she asked bewildered.


"Woh...turn around.."


She spun around and nearly dropped her phone in surprise. There he was standing, looking tired af but smiling and his blue eyes twinkling.


She couldn't control herself as she flung her arms around him and hugged him.


"Mr. Kapoor....what's the meaning of this, what is this charade?"


"Priya, Im so sorry. We signed yesterday and i took the chance to head back a day earlier. In between all of this I thought it would be great to prank you if I said I'd be late but then come early. But, I must say, i wish I had to actually stay longer"


"Why so?"


"Well, It would have given you a chance to miss me truly!"


She extracted herself from the hug and blushed hard but didnt drop her gaze.


"Ram......aap.....never mind, chaliye, let's have dinner"


His grin increased threefold as he followed her to dinner.


Fin


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uff repeat read pe its even worse. Anyhooo.. .part 5, tomorrow which will then be the end of this drabble/os series. Thank you all for your lovely comments until part 3.


Note: I work in mergers and acquisitions and it generally pains my kidneys and other organs on how corporate life and ‘deals’ are portrayed in the show. It’s like beetlejuice, if you say deal thrice, the deal happens. I’m not even sure they know what industry he’s supposed to be in.

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Posted: 3 years ago
#36

Very nice description of their relationship progressing…looking forward to more write ups…

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Posted: 3 years ago
#37
I really like the simplicity of your narrative. Leaves me with a very nice feeling. Thank you.
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Posted: 3 years ago
#38

Are you kidding me Ms.Bones? You call this worse?

I lurvd it😍

And thank you for keeping it raw! Also cvs themselves wrote it , kinda sorta… but this has a different organic feel to it… just what what they are supposed to be.. nothing less nothing more❤️

…not laced with the utter connivance of his fam against him in the show.

If this is your draft version, what did you have in mind for the polished one?

And yes, incidental accidental hugs 🤗!

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Posted: 3 years ago
#39

This was awesome

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Posted: 3 years ago
#40

I had to go back and read the previous parts but please don't take this as a complaint. Loved reminiscing all the moments.


I felt that hug as if their distance hurt me. Eagerly waiting for the final part and your future work.

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