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Posted: 4 years ago
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I'M A COMPLETE MESS WHEN IT COMES TO ORGANIZING RANDOM SCENES PROPERLY😃........I TOLD IT WILL BE A ONE SHOT BUT NOW I'LL WRITE IT AS A SHORT STORY WHICH WILL HAVE PARTS AS I'M NOT ABLE TO MERGE ALL MY THOUGHTS PROPERLY IN JUST ONE PART😳....PLEASE BEAR WITH ME


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PART-1






Suman watched a dejected Raavi moving towards her room after Shiva jerked her hand and left.......Prafulla and Anita followed Raavi and sighing Suman too moved towards Shiva's room..........what her son did was completely wrong but Prafulla can use it to her advantage to fill Raavi's ears against and Shiva and Pandya's and corrupt her innocent mind.......Suman needs to protect this pure soul from converting into a vamp like her maasi.




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In Shiva's room.........


Suman was outside eavesdropping their conversation


"Kya hua??? ...meri phul si bachi murjhai hui kyu baithi hai.....us rakshas ki wajah se na?", asked Prafulla sitting beside a sobbing Raavi.........Suman felt bad for this child....she hated Prafulla with passion but loved Raavi given to the fact that despite being raised by a vile lady like Prafulla....the toxicity of this cruel world has not touched this pure soul.....she was indeed a lotus grown in mud


"Maasi please aap jao yahan se....mujhe abhi kisi se baat ni karni", said a miffled and disconsolate Raavi with breaking voice.......Suman's heart broke seeing her like this and that too because of her own son...she was ashamed that whatever the situation be ...the reason for her tears are somewhat always her own sons be it Dev or Shiva....she didn't know why Shiva behaved like this ...it was surely unacceptable..but until she knew the reason ..she can't really speak up between the couple.


"Mei dobi dikri ...teri fikr hai mujhe ...tu chor kyu ni deti us janwar ko jo insaano ki tarah pesh bhi ni aa skta tere sath??" , Prafulla spat.........Suman was enraged listening to this....agreed Shiva behaved rashly but that doesn't mean they will break their marriage ....she decided to give an earful to Prafulla before consoling Raavi and started entering but what she heard next left her shocked


"Yahi to chahta hai wo gadhera", saying this Raavi started sobbing loudly while Suman was baffled....why would her Shiva want to Raavi to leave...she has seen his eyes shining while looking at Raavi few days ago..and even the kangan case is solved then what the reason would be.....but before getting to know anything she needs to oust this kagdi from here else she will create a ruckus for everyone and mostly for Raavi and Shiva's married life


"Are bhai kya baat hai hn......pehli baar us saand ne akal ki baat sochi hai...wo tere layak hi nahi hai .....wo tujhe chore isse pehle tu usse chor de ....main tere liye achha ladka khojungi", said an excited Prafulla and Raavi looked at her as if she is seeing her for the first time....does she even realize what she is saying......"par pehle ye bata Kya hua hai? "


"Tu jaan kar kya kar legi??", Suman yelled while entering into the room leaving all the three ladies in shock.






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Shiva was sitting angrily outside the house along with concerned Dev. Shiva knew whatever he did was wrong but when he saw her hand in his hand, he remembered Sneha's words and the conversation he had with Raavi in their room where she mentioned compromise.....he was hurt and within seconds his hurt took over his senses exploding as anger which came out on the source...his wife......he was confused whether he should even call her his wife....why would a girl like her will like to be called the wife of a junglee gawaar and masalon ki dukan if not for compromise....he chuckled dejectedly at this thought







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Krish was sitting on the swing along with Rishita. Honestly he did not like the way Shiva behaved with his Raavi bhabhi at all. He loved his brother and knows his anger issues even over trivial things ..but treating his wife like a trash was something he never expected from Shiva.


"Shiva na sach me junglee hai..bhala aise kon treat treat karta hai apni wife ko ", Rishita spoke beside him....anger coursed his veins at her tone and words she used for Shiva but he can't deny the fact that Shiva's act was totally disrespectful towards his wife so he decided not to defend Shiva today.

"Mera Shiva dil ka sona hai Rishita ....haan gussa thoda zada aata hai mere bache ko...koi baat use pareshan kar rahi hogi ya undono ka jhagda hua hoga...ab ye baat khatm karo", said Dhara coming towards them and saw Rishita rolling her eyes at her words. She really didn't want any more chaos today and the way Rishita was mentioning the incident clearly depicted that she would not leave the chance to insult Shiva this time. It's good Gombi went to the market to bring more milk for puja and didn't witness Shiva's act otherwise he would have beaten him blue-black. She cannot let him know this.


"Mere baat khatm kar dene se sach to ni badlega na bhabhi....koi bhi wajah ho par sabke samne apni biwi ke sath aise pesh aana galat hai...aisa dil ka sona ho ke bhi kya faeda jahan aap apni maa aur bhabhi ki puja karo aur biwi ko itni bhi respect na do ki atleat sabke samne dhang se pesh aa sake...pata ni aise ladke shaadi hi kyu karte hain?", Rishita spoke pointedly and left muttering something under her breathe followed by Dhara who went to calm her a bit. Krish sighed thinking that for the first time Rishita sounded more logical and right than Dhara bhabhi....he loved Dhara bhabhi but her defending Shiva today didn't go well with him and even Rishita used hurtful words but she had a point.....he was feeling pity for his Raavi bhabhi thinking how much she has to bear because of his family and seeing Dhara today he has a feeling that even she is going to give lecture to Raavi only.....God bless his Raavi bhabhi.







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"Shiva tu ab ye natak khatm kar samjha...tujhe guilt hai insecurities hai maine maana....main ye samajhta hun ki tu Raavi ki bhalai soch raha hai par tujhe ni lagta tere is bartaw se sabse zada thes use hi pahunch rahi hai...tu sabke samne apni biwi k sath aise kaise behave kar sakta hai?", Dev asked calmly...he knew Shiva was enraged and dealing with enraged Shiva angrily meant death for him.....he can't let Rishita become a widow for saving his brother's marriage from his own fire of insecurities


Shiva sighed visibly controlling his anger and asked Dev to leave him alone for sometime. One part of him wanted her to leave as he didn't deserve her while the other part wanted her to stay with him forever...his mind was in complete mess right now and speaking to someone would be dangerous for the person as the only outlet he had for any of his emmotion was fury which everyone can't tolerate. So he left to find some peace in the world.












- SAM❤️



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HAPPY READING👍🏼

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Posted: 4 years ago
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This is great.

I loved Krish and Rishita here. Suman was much better too 👏 Waiting for more

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Absolutely wonderful👍🏼 Esp Rishita's dialogue👏...something i myself wanted to convey...maa aur bhabhi ko respect dena achi baath hain but if you cant respect other women then whats gud in it...and my Raavi is really a lotus Update soon🤗

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Posted: 4 years ago
#14

Beautiful chapter❤

Love it


Cont soon 🤗

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Posted: 4 years ago
#15

Well Written, doesn’t seem like you’re a beginner in Writing :)

Loved Rishita.

Krish is a sweetheart and he understands what’s right or wrong.

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Posted: 4 years ago
#16

Sam, loved it 💜

looking forward to the next chapter


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Posted: 4 years ago
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Hi Sam! Welcome! ❤️ The prologue anf Chapter 1 were really good. I loved how Suman and Krish realize how wrong Shiva is despite loving him.

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Posted: 4 years ago
#18

Rishita said the correct thing.

On point

Loved it

Would be waiting for the coming updates

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Sam it's Wonderful 👏 Update soon

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Loved Rishita and Krish here! He's the only one who can see things clearly! The other two are on Bhabhi Jaap and Dhara can never find fault in her bachhas.🙄


I look forward to reading your version because the show one is unbearable! Please continue soon!

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