SaIna FF: Aakhir ho gaya na..; Last part on Pg 44 - Page 11

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Posted: 7 years ago

Originally posted by: Samaina_1990

Bhagwan jhoot na bulaye, agar Swati itni filmy na hoti to Naina ka kya hota!!! Interesting update...waiting for more


swati is a true friend to her and she would stand with her in every situation...thanks for commenting😃🤗
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Posted: 7 years ago

Originally posted by: Swatishubh

A crucial update, but very well penned down Manisha 👏

Rewinding of the moments is not possible, but second chance can be given to prove the guilty and wrong to be better!

Liked the way you have made Sameer coming up with the bet thing told! And what a mature mind Naina has ⭐️ She not only made him tell his tale, but also listened to him on insisting. Her tears are normal, but very precious! Her shattered heart was truly weeping, but Swati made the situation somewhat lightened!
Now this can be the turning point here 😳 While Sameer is unable to handle the situation ahead, Naina might come forward to help him saving his hair at least.
I liked Swati's instant conclusion to the fact that Sameer is a changed person and has a liking for her!
Asking Chachaji can be the solution here for both naina and Sameer, but it will be a time to watch out what will happen later on.
Will Naina accept Sameer's hand again, and will continue her bond with him, or will break it forever!
I will be very eager to see the next update through your visual update Manisha 👏

Thanks Sweetie, for the lovely chappy!!! Very thoughtful of you!
Luv ya ❤️ 🤗


Thanks a lot Bhabhi...I'm so glad you liked the update...Swati I feel has a better undersatnding in these matters and thats why i think she'll be a great support to Naina always😃

I always love reading your reviews Bhabhi...take care and God bless you😃🤗
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Posted: 7 years ago

Originally posted by: worldequalsyou

thanks for an awesome update,

finally the whole bet things was revealed in front of naina by sameer himself.
can't wait for you to update.
can't wait for conversation between Naina and Chachaji.


Thanks Dear...so happy to know that you liked the way he came up with the truth in front of her😃
Will be updating soon😃
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Posted: 7 years ago

Originally posted by: prachi_vrushan

such an emotional update
but I am happy at least he told her d truth
n swati is just sweet heart
she tried there should not be any misunderstanding
update soon
thanks for the pm


Thanks a lot Prachi...Swati is a sweetheart...I wish i too had a friend like her😃
Thanks for liking the part...will be updating soon dear😃
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Posted: 7 years ago

Originally posted by: sweet_tehs

Wow loved the entire update

And the confrontation was superbly executed..

Swati and her filmy dimaag 😆
But this time she put it to good use.

It takes courage to speak the truth and that Sameer did very well..

And ab hai uske baalo ka sawaal

Subah kab hogi.😉


Yeah it takes loads of courage to speak the truth when you know that you are wrong...he showed that courage and told her everything... subah jaldi hogi...don't worry😆

Thanks for liking and commenting😃
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Posted: 7 years ago

Originally posted by: bawaswift

Awesomely an Awesome update Manisha... ⭐️👏
People are self centred ..but do good anyway.. help them anyway,,, love them anyway... give your best to the World anyway... !


he knew she was broken into bits and pieces with his revelation...her tears spoke everything..

I felt so bad once for Naina,,, n then for Sameer.. his fault is so big.. but accepting it n not letting Naina getting into splits in front of the entire school... he had to make this happen... telling the truth has shattered her... as well as him,, when he saw her into pieces..


he lost her that moment...his friend...who was there for him to complete him...to take his sorrows and give him her happiness...but he lost her today...

The realisation to loose her has made him more vulnerable.. he has his good thoughts with him .. he is in a situation to loose his repu.. n a very good friend in Naina.. n all that he can call " happiness "

a bad hearted person would never show so much courage...she thought. Her Chachaji always taught her that lying is easy but speaking the truth takes much more courage than lying.

A very tender n lovely heart she has.,,, 🤗
I wish she looks for the best advise n gets one... 😳

..maybe this realisation which made him reveal everything to her with courage acts as a turning point of his life and he improves overall as a human being ...maybe he becomes a person his Nanu wants him to be...

Only n only trying to help out Sameer even at this point,,, Niana has taken away my heart.. a very very pure soul... got broken hurt.. but ready to help the accused. .!
Lovely take on Naina's pure heart... very well given the reaction n the scene afterward.. !
Such a great soul must get all the happiness of life.. n i wish Naina also gets.. !😃

Very beautiful n heart wrenching update dear.. !!!👏
So sorry for being late.. i was stuck n then forgot.. i am feeling so embarrassed on forgetting this update.. just skipped out of my mind,,, sorry..
will try not to repeat it again,,, 😳

Thanks dear.. n God bless.. !!!


Thanks a lot Bhaiya for your lovely review...I can't get over your words still even after so many days...thanks a tonne Bhaiya...God bless you😃🤗
I know what we all have been through in the last week...so its ok Bhaiya...no issues...your reviews are always a treat to read👏😃
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Posted: 7 years ago
Here I am with the next part of this fiction😊

Part 5

With the decision of talking to her Chachaji for advice in the morning, she went off to sleep recalling the beautiful moments she spent with him. She woke up early morning at 6 am before everyone else and went to the nearby PCO and called up at her home. Chachiji was the one who picked up the phone.

Chachi: arey Naina...tu...itni subah subah...wahan bhi itni subah uth gayi? Bhagwan jhooth na bulaye kitni sanskari hai humari Naina...main to humesha kehti hu Bhabhiji se...par wo...

Naina: Chachiji ...wo aap Chachaji ko bula dengi kya?

Chachi: to tune mujhse baat karne ke liye phone nahi kiya? Theher ja...abhi bulati hu...par tu meri lipstick laana mat bhoolna...theher...bulati hu...

In the meantime, Preeti came to talk to Naina... Listening to her voice, she had tears in her eyes...how she wished Preeti was here with her when she needed her the most.

Preeti: arey Naina tu ro kyun rahi hai?

Naina: ro kahan rahi hu? Wo awaaz baith gayi hai...thand bahut hai na yahan...isliye

Preeti: tu apna dhyan rakh Naina...mujhe teri bahut chinta ho rahi hai...Naina tujhe meri yaad to aati hai na wahan? (she too had her eyes moistened and she too was missing her a lot)

Naina: nahi...bilkul nahi aati...tu pagal hai kya Preeti? Aisa kabhi ho sakta hai kya? Ab tu jaldi se Chachaji ko bula...ja na...

Just then Chachaji came and Preeti gave her the phone...

Chachaji: Hello Naina...kaisi hai? kaise yaad kiya?

Naina: Chachaji wo...wo...

Chachaji: kya baat hai Naina? Kuchh pareshani hai? bata beta...

Naina: Chachaji aapse...wo kuchh poochna hai...

Chachaji: kya baat hai? bata...

Naina: Chachaji agar koi insaan koi kaam galat iraade se shuru kare aur baad mein wo us galti ko maan le...use apni galti ka ehsaas ho...to aise mein kya karna chahiye hume? Agar usse hume bahut chot pahunchi ho...tab hume asie mein kya karna chahiye?

Chachaji: kya baat hai Naina? Aisi baat kyun pooch rahi hai? kya hua hai?

Naina: kuchh nahi hua Chachaji...wo kale k group discussion chal raha tha...to mujhe iska jawab dena tha...to mujhe kuchh samajh hi nahi aaya...aise mein kya karna chahiye? Aap bataiye na...

Chachaji: dekho beta...galti insaan se hi hoti hai...par achha insaan wo hota hai jo us galti ka ehsaas kar sake...aur fir us esudharne ki koshish kare... Aise mein bina soche samjhe use saza dena theek nahi hai...ek mauka to har kisi ko milna chahiye...apni galti sudharne ka...aur fir agar tumhe lage ki wo sach mein badal gaya hai...to use tumhari maafi ka poora adhikar hai...

Naina (with a smile): to iska matlab hai ki hume use ek mauka dena chahiye?

Chachaji: haan Naina...mujhe to aisa hi lagta hai...har insaan ko sudharne ka ek mauka to milna hi chahiye...ab tumhari samasya ka samadhan hua?

Naina: Thank you Chachaji...you are the best... achha Chachaji main rakhti hu...bye...aur sabko mera pyar dena...

She started back towards the guest house. There in the guest house Swati woke up and saw Naina missing...she became worried for her and started searching for her. She was searching for her when she saw Munna and Pandit standing...she asked them whether they had seen Naina as she was missing...

Munna: kya sipahi mil nahi raha hai...kahin wo Ahmedabad wapas to nahi chala gaya?

Swati: urghhh...tumhe kuchh aur nahi soojhta kya?

Munna: arey Pandit mujhe tere alawa kuchh aur nahi soojhta...

Swati: meri chhodo...Naina ko dhoondo...pata nahi wo kaisi hogi?

Pandit: kyun kya hua?

Swati: jaise tumhe nahi pata...tumhare dost ne jo uske saath kiya...uske baad...

Munna and Pandit were shocked to hear this...how do they know about the bet? They thought... just then they saw Naina coming at a distance. Swati ran upto her and asked her where she had gone early in the morning? She told her about her conversation with Chachaji. She told Swati that she wanted to talk to Sameer when they all go to Dilwara temple today along with her, Munna and Pandit. Swati was surprised to know this but Naina told her to trust her and she did as she was told. Munna and Pandit rushed to their room to talk to Sameer.

Pandit: yaar Sameer yeh tune kya kiya? Tune Naina ko sab sach bata diya?

Sameer: haan ...to...

Munna: to yeh ki ab tere baalon ka kya hoga yaar? Shart to ab gayi haath se...

Sameer: tum dono ko shart hi soojhti hai bas...us din yeh Pandit hi mujhe keh raha than a ki Naina bahut achhi ladki hai...to ab kya hua? Maine bahut socha... Aur mujhe laga ki main uske saath galat kar raha hu... aisa nahi karna chahiye mujhe...isliye maine use bata diya...ab mere baalon ka jo ho... baal to fir aa jayenge...uska dil nahi dukha sakta main... main jaanta hu ki tum dono ko meri yeh baat galat lagegi...par pehli baar maine wo kiya jo mere dil ne mujhse kaha...

Pandit: to aakhir tujhe apni galti ka ehsaas ho hi gaya... main to keh hi raha tha... Aakhir tu badal hi gaya Sameer?

Munna: theek kehta tha Pandit...Naina bahut achhi ladki hai...isliye to...

Sameer: isliye to kya?

Munna: isliye to usne hum sab ko bulaya hai ...wo tujhse hum sab ke saath kuchh baat karna chahti hai...

Sameer was elated to hear this...but why in the presence of his friends? He thought... maybe she wants to talk about the bet ... He left everything to her decision now and decided to do as she wanted him to. Today she wasn't even looking at him during the breakfast... He tried that once she looks at him...but she didn't. he realised that he deserved this punishment for what he did with her. Then they all left for Dilwara temple and there when everyone else was busy in enjoying themselves, these 5 people gathered at a place in isolation where not many people came.

Sameer: Naina...I'm sorry Naina... kya tum mujhe maaf kar paaogi?

Naina: nahi... Maine tumhe maaf nahi kiya hai Sameer... Tum meri maafi deserve nahi karte... Jo tumne kiya uske baad tumhe lagta hai ki koi bhi ladki tumhe maaf kar degi?

Munna: to sipahi tumne hum sab ko kya pravachan sunane ke liye bulaya hai? (Munna sounding confused)

Swati: tum to kabhi apna dimaag mat lagana...bas pandit aur Sipahi mein hi ghoomte rehna... tum dono bhi shaamil hon a is shart mein? Bolo...

They both nodded in a yes... Feeling ashamed...Munna placed his finger on his lips signalling that he would be quiet from now. Pandit asked them why had they all gathered here if she didn't forgive him as yet?

Naina: yeh sach hai ki maine tumhe maaf nahi kiya hai Sameer...leki n tumne apni galti maani hai...sachai se mujhe sab bata diya... isliye ...sirf isliye main tumhe is shart se bahar nikalna chahti hu... Aur kuchh nahi...

All the 3 guys had a smile along with surprise on their faces. They asked her how would that happen?

Swati : uske liye hum dono ne ek plan banaya hai...dhyan se suno...

She told them their idea in whispers after she asked them to come close. Munna was doubtful whether their plan would work? Swati assured him that this plan would work and if not then they should suggest a better idea if they had. But Sameer insisted that they would do as Naina says and no one would say anything else now.

Naina: bas isme ek gadbad hai...agar meri turn pehle aa gayi to...

Munna: arey aa gayi to main sambhal lunga...waise bhi tub hi sipahi aur main bhi... Dono sipahi bhai bhai...dekh lenge...sipahi tu chinta mat kar...

Sameer: thank you Naina... tum sach mein bahut achhi ho aur main bahut bura...I'm sorry Naina...

Naina and Swati turned around and left from there and left...all the 3 boys hugged each other happily as now they would be free of this bet with her help and maybe later he can win her trust back. With this hope in mind they all went inside the Dilwars temple and Sameer accepted his mistake in front of the Almighty and prayed to God to grant all that Naina wishes for herself and may she be happy all through her life.

End of this part😊



P.S: I'm so disappointed to see so many members not even opening up the PMs I send them for the updates😔 and they didn't get time to read the chapter once
I'm not sending the PMs to them this time...I feel this fiction is really not upto the mark for them to read it even...I will be finishing this fiction soon now as even I have started to feel detached from this seeing the response

Thanks to all the members who have been my constant support through this work of mine...God bless you all😃🤗 Means a lot really😃🤗
Edited by braveheartdoc - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
Aye sipahi
Mast update diya hai..
Thank you so much for this..

Chachajias always is rocking
Like swati here
The way she is supporting Naina is superb..
And Munna is hilarious as always..

And don't be disheartened dear..

Just tell me why do u write stories?
It's your passion maybe...
U like to write and share your ideas and thoughts with others..

Don't bother about those who don't read or comment or reply..
But bother about those even if they are 5 who are constantly there to support u..

Write for yourself and be happy..
That's it..
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Posted: 7 years ago
And yes
Please a little longer update the next time.
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Posted: 7 years ago
Omg...
I'm the first to comment

Just saw it now😳

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