Rented Love new Prem Heer FF(Chapter 11 on page 25)(22/6/18) - Page 3

Originally posted by: Fatima_Q

Hi Shuridh,

Just took a peek into this FF too. 😆

So I've seen the prologue and Character sketch. The concept seems interesting and I love the fact that you've provided a character sketch. It really helps to realign one's thinking with what you want the characters to be as opposed to what we know of them from the show.

I also love the fact that Meet are in this one...👍🏼...hope they have a juicy role

Will comment again once I read more.

Rented Love PH FF:

Chapter 1:

Kahate hain afsane maat shuno kyunki wo kabhi hakikat me nahi badalti. Kahate hain sapne maat dekho kyunki wo toh kabhi saach nahi hoti. Lekin meri sapne iss tara se sach ban jayegi wo main kabhi bhi nahi sochi thi. Jo meri saat hua wo koi afsane se kam nahi tha. Ye kahani hain meri, ye kahani hain Heer Maan ki.

Heer POV:

I hate to wake up early. However, today I did it because my boss would fire if I did not come to the restaurant early. With a bad mood, I came to dining table.

"Meher, Nihal bhaiya kaha hain? I asked her as I saw him absent in the dining table. Nowadays, I am always worried about him as he got engaged himself with some bad people.

"Pata nahi Heer di, bhaiya to kal raat se ghar ke bahar hain. Meher informed me.

I suddenly got worried for him, many bad possibilities were running inside my mind regarding my brother.

"Tumne Rajveer bhaiya se khabar li? I asked Meher. Rajveer bhaiya was childhood friend of Nihal bhaiya. He was a brotherly figure for us. I wished, Nihal bhaiya did not distanced himself away from him and got closer with some good for nothing friends.

"Ha didi maine khabar liya bhaiya Rajveer bhaiya ka waha nahi gaye. Lekin didi aap fikar mat kije Nihal bhaiya pahale bhi raat bhar ghar se bahar raha aajayenge wo do pahar main khane ke liye. Meher told me in an angry tone. She was clearly feeling angry at Nihal bhaiya at that moment.

"Meher samal kar baat kar, job hi who tera bada bhai hain uska adar karna chayiye tujhe. My grandmother Parthana Maan sahouted at my sister.

After my so called mother left us for building her own life, it was our grandmother who came to raise us and we shifted to Talengana. She always had a soft spot for her eldest grandchild Nihal bhaiya and therefore she always scolded Meher whenever she said something bitter about our brother.

"Ha main kha mana kiya wo meri bada bhai nahi hain, lekin aap unka badtao wo dekhiye sare din aapne lafange dosto ki saat ghur pir tha hain. Sharab pina, gambling karna jaise gandhe aadat ho gya unka. Mera dimag kharab ho jati hain jab main sochti ho unhone kis tara se aapni zindegi barbad kar rahi ho aur uska bura asar kaise hamari pariwar main pad raha hain. Nihal bhaiya anpode nahi hain wo ek highly educated ladka hain , wo job dhun sakte hain , karbar karne ke bare main soach sakte nahi unke pass in chiso ko liye waqt hi nahi hain. Heer didi ko dekhiye gradute hone ki baad bhi subha uth kar hai restrurent main jaati hain woha pe saam saat baje tak overtime karti hain taki hamari sansar chal sake.

Meher angrily replied to my grandmother. Meher became very passionate sometimes and that was one of those times.

"Meher, dadi aap dono jagharna band karo, mujhe der ho rahi kam pe jane mein. I requested them to stop their argument.

I took leave from Meher and dadi went for the work. I still did not know that my fate would take an interesting turn today.

Neutral point of view:

Few km away in another corner of Hyderabad in a luxurious house, a middle-aged woman was dancing in the tune of "Rain over me song of Marc Anthony, which was playing on the music system.

However, she became irritated when someone stopped the music system.

" Kalpana, teri himmat kaisi huyi music system bandh karne ki. Daljeet shouted at her PA.

"Music system maine bandh kya, kyunki mujhe tum se ek jaroori baat karni hain. Balwant told her .

"Kya baat hain jaldi balo,mujhe ek charity main jana hain. Daljeet impatiently told her husband.

"Bauji araha hain. Balwant simply notified his wife.

"Kya tumhara wo khados baap aaraha hain, meri sare din programm kharap ho gayi. Aab mujhe traditional dress pehen kar adarsh bahu banne padegi unke liye. Kya pata aab kis matlab se arraha hain. Daljeet shouted at her husband in a panicked voice.

"Itna chillao maat, aur ye maat bhulo hum log unki hair rahem karem par ji raha hain. Balwant told his wife.

"Chillao naa to aur kya karon. Tumhara baap to ek jangli sher hain, itna ghamand, itna gussa aur hamesha dosreka zindegigo ko control kmarne ki chahat. Unke samne tum ji khol ke kutch bol bhi nahi sakte unke goose ki dar se. Kab aaraha hain tumhara bauji? Daljeet asked her husband.

"Unhone kaha wo aadh ghante main aajayega Balwant informed her.

After hearing that from her husband, Daljeet left thew room quickly to prepare herself to face her father in law.

Aparajit juneja came to meet with his son and daughter in law. He did not have any good opinion about them. He knew that, they were parasite as they were living luxurious life without doing any work and depending totally on his fortune. However, he came here today to give them some tasks.

" Aye aye, Bauji kaise hain aap. Daljeet asked her father in law after she and her husband touched his feet.

" Jitte raho, main thik ho, dekho main tum dono ko ek kaam den eke liye yaha aya hoon. Aparajit told them.

"Kya kaam hain bauji ? . A curious Balwant asked his father.

"Dekho tum dono ko to patai hain mere pote Prem aur Preet se mera accha banti nahi. Aparajit look little sad when he was teeling that.

"Banti nahi wo dono tol aapki shakal se bhi nafrat karti hain. Daljeet said under her breath.

"Ha bauji hume pata hain aur hum iss baat se bahut dukhi bhi hain. Family main hamesha ekta rehena chaiye. Balwant told him.

"Dekho wo dono to mere se baat karte nahi, lekin tum dono se baat karta hu. Main chahata hu kit um wo dono ka agle chay mahine main shadi ka intejam karo. Aparajit told them.

"Dono ka shaddi ? A surprised Daljeet uttered.

" Ha kyun nahi , dono jawan hain, pade likha hain, dono khud ke dam se ek busniess bhi khadi kar diya hain. Jo bhi ladki won dono se shadi karengi wo bahut kismatwali hogi. Aparajit shouted at her.

"Bauji bauji mere bolne ka wo matlab nahi tha, mere do bhatija to hazaroon main ek hain , Kitna handsome hain wo dono. Kitna aamir hain wo dono. Lekin undono abhi shadi main interested nahi hai , won dono ka to abtak koi girlfriend nahi hain aur kabhi tha, dono sirf business business karke busy hain. Daljeet told him.

"Interested nahi hain, to undono ko interest karao, main budha ho choka hu, marne ki aage main undono ka ghar basana dekhna chahata hu. Shayed shadi ke baad won dono ka gussa thoda thanda ho jaye aur mujh se baat kare. Main kutch nahi shunna chahata hu agle chay mahaine ke bitch tum dono mere dono pote ko liye ladki dhononge aur shaddi karaonge. Agar tum dono ye nahi kya to main iss ghar tumse chin longa. Bass itna nahi tum dono sare bank account, credit card, debit card sab band kar donga. Aparajit shouted at them.

Balwant and Daljeet were shaking with fear after hearing the threat from Aparajit. They could not believe their ears. The fact that, they would lose their everything if they failed to complete the impossible task was terrifying to them.

"Bauji aap chinta maat kije hum aur daljeet haina . Hum aapse wada karte hain agle chay mahine mein Prem aur Preet dono ka do khubsaroot ladki se shadi hoga. Balwant assured his father.

After the departure of Aparajit Juneja both Balwant and Daljeet collapsed oin sofa.

"Daljet hum prem aur poreet ko chay mahaine ke andar shadi karne ke liye kaise manayange? Balwant askede his wife.

"Manana parega Balwant warna iss shaan shaqkat se hat dona padegi aur hum log sadak pe ajayenge, jo mujhe kabhi manjoor nahi. Ha mujhe pata haiun wo dono shadi ki liye asani se nahi manega iss liye humko kutch aisa kadam uthana padega ki wo dono majboor ho jay shadi karne ke liye. Daljeet told her husband.

"Daljeet mujhe lagta hain tumhara dimag mein already kutch pak raha hain. Balwant remarked.

"Shayed iss liye tum meri husband ho, kitni asani se mujhe pechan leti ho . ha meridemag mein kutch pak raha hain, hum ek aisa tadika apnayenge jisse hum jaroor safal honge. Lekin iss mein tumhe meri pura saat dena hoga. Daljeet told her husband.

"Daljeet mein to hamesha tumhara saat diya , iss mein bhi donga, par uske pahele mujhe plan to bataon. Balwant told his wife in curious voice. He was feeling curious to know about planning of his wife. He was sure that, it would be wicked.

"Pahele hume do aise ladki ki khoj karne padegi jo paisa ke liye majboor hain ,lekin acche ghar ki ho aur acche shabav ki. Uss ke baat undono ko pade lekhi hona chayiye agar undono ne business related subject se graduation ki hain to sabse accha hogi, uske baad un dono khubsaroot hone chaiye saati saat iss baat ka bhi kheyal rakhna hoga ki wo dono ko simple ladki lage. Uss do ladki ko independent minded aur intiligent hona bhi jaroori hain taki tumhare do bhatije ubdono se relate karsake intellectually. Daljeet told her husband.

"Ek minute, ladki khabsaroot saati saat simple hona chaiye , business mein graduate honi chaye, acchi shavab ki hone chaiye, intelligent aur independent minded bhi honi chaiye. Iss sab quality to Bhabiji mein tha, tum hume do aisi ladki ki khoj janne ki keh rahi ho jiss mein in sab qualities hein par sati saat undono ko paisa ke liye majboor hona chaiye taki hum undono ladkiyo ka majboori ka faida utha kar aapna matlab hasil kar sake.Balwant told her.

"Yes, Prem aur Preet ke liye unki maa Sipra Juneja ek ideal woman thi , jahir se baat hein agar undono ne kisi ladki mein wo qualities dekhe to mein sure hamari baat ban jayegi. Sirf itna hi nahi hum un do ladkio ko aapne hato se trained karenge, undono ko Prem aur Preet ka har pasand na pasand ki bare mein batayenge, Prem aur Preet ki har choti se choti adat hum un dono ko samjayenge.

Agar hamne ye sab kar liya to mujhe pura yakeen tumhara dono bhatije un do ladki ki payar mein dhub jayenge aur chay mahine ke bitch mein hi shadi karne ke liye raaji ho jayenge. Ekbar shadi hojay to un do ladki hamesha hamesha ke liye tumhara bhatijo ka zindegi se door chali jayegi taki hamara ye plan hamesha ek raaj rahe. Daljeet told her smile.

"To hum Prem aur Preet ke liye bhade mein le ayenge? Balwant asked his wife.

"Ha meri jaan, bahot jald Prem aur Preet ke zindegi mein payar ayega lekin wo payar hoga bhade ke payar jisko English mein kahete hain Rented Love. Daljeet commented.

Chapter End

Thank you my readers for liking and commenting on Prologue and Character sketch of this ff.

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In Next Chapter:

Entry of Prem and Preet.

Originally posted by: Fatima_Q

Ooo...me first this time 😆

Great 1st chapter...I already love Meher in this story. I love how she tells it like it is.

Ah...so Blawant and Daljeet have made up their plan...but how will they get the girls...which I'm assuming will be Heer and Meher..to agree? Excited to see what happens next.

Thanks for the update 🤗

Originally posted by: sadiaharshiti

I would love to see same bonding of prem and preet ..

Thank u bro for sending links .

Originally posted by: preciousrose26

Thanks for the update.
Wow great part. Love the starting and bonding btwn two sisters
daljeet character is intersting waiting to knw how she will get the girls which i am sure are going to be heer and meher.
Waiting for next part and prem & preet entry .
update soon