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Posted: 8 years ago

Thank you Eishe & Vampire!!
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: perfictionist

woaahh and the flavours have begun!


Chapter 19 - i loved the way you beautifully portrayed Gauri's fears.. how its a consequence of the way she has been brought up.. the scars that people carry forever unless they get very very...very lucky and Gauri has finally found someplace to call home, somebody to call family, somebody to return to! kudos to you for handling that sensitive topic so well! 👏👏

Chapter 20 - Jealousy. ahaan. my favourite😳
nothing is more fun than the right amount of possessiveness with a tinge of desperation. Superbly written! So much fun to watch desperatekara who already knows its not going to get any easier😆


Sorry dear me lazy in sending PM's. I thought i would send pm's for every 2 chapters, written.

Desperation gonna peak.. at some point but he will be surprised also by Gauri.. hmm.. Lets see!!😆
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: _PrincessPooru_

Karthi ☺️

Trust me I had planned to say a lot ... But RiKara ne bolti hi band kardi ... Hey shankarji Kara kitna badmaash hai ... Pata chal gaya ke woh koi sant sadhu nahi hain ... and all his demands asking ... Mujhe zyada wait mat karwaaoo 😳 the last sketch of the sketch book ... I liked a totally jealous Ri and tinges of jealousy in Kara ... Yaar this forced me to imagine a shirtless Kara ... Karthi saza milni chaahiye tumhe itna romantic piece likhne ke liye kyonki ab main baura jaaungi 😆 ... RiKara basss ... Koi toh roklo ...
I love love love jahnvi ... Bhagwaan aisi saasu mummy sabko de 😉


@bold.. Amen.!!

ME gonna explore more of Jealous Ri in one more scene where Ri is gonna confess.. hmm almost.. thinking..still have to frame the chapter..😆
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Posted: 8 years ago
For RiKara 's sake Karthi update soon ... Main bass soch rahi hoon aage kya hoga 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
Karthi yaar... I don't even know what to say!
How the heck did I miss this?! I am kicking myself now for not reading every chapter as soon as you uploaded them.

This is such a refreshing story in the face of all the confusion and chaos surrounding RiKara in canon. I am absolutely blow away by the simplicity and freshness you've managed to bring to this fandom with this amazing piece of writing. 👏

I adore each and every chapter, every single thing about this fic... the setup of the story, the way the characters are written, how you've managed to keep everything relatively similar to canon but brought about so many beautiful changes in the relationships.

The first relationship I fell in love with was the one flourishing between Gauri and Jhanvi. I just love Jhanvi in this fic. Not just because she's like the world's best sasuma... she's so fragile yet so strong. I just love the dichotomy of her character. There's so much love to give inside her and her sharp brain sees so much others miss.

Ri is so different yet so adorably the same in this fic. I fell for her in the first couple of chapters itself. And what's left to say about Omki? I am by default in love with him... and you've made him so very lovable here. Simply put, if I were in his life, I too wouldn't think twice before risking my life for him.

The last couple of chapters are picking up the heat huh? I am very excited about this flavors of love plan of yours. It sounds very interesting and all I can say at the moment is, if the first flavor is so hot, god save me and the other readers from the upcoming chapters! You should send us virtual glasses of ice water along with your updates Karthi!

That said, do update as soon as you can... main besabri se intezaar kar rahi hoon!
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Posted: 8 years ago
Yay my girl .. how cute is this first flavour.. it ranged right from slightly fears of further aggravating distances with Ridhimas memories to a change in atmosphere with twinkling anklets n then that hint of jealousy n insecurity .. can we have a shirtless Omkara .. or even better that black kurta making an appearance.. common na Yay you are making me a little greedy .. show Mei toh band baji hai./ tu hi khush kar de .. pleajjj.. n then Gauri asking for some time .. how sane are these two.. they've grown so much .. I love this progress.. n then jahnvi n Omkara .. yaar such real talks happen between people is so alarming when you have the show for comparison where it's either emergency or heights of kuch bhi.. anyway.. can't wait for the next flavour.. Do not make me wait .. please .. loved it .. n thanks so much
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Posted: 8 years ago
Uff.. sorry for taking long guys..
Here you go for the next flavour.. I want your opinion on what flavour you think it is...

<Chapter 22>
Omkaara came a little earlier as usual. He met his mother on the way and came to the room. Gauri was trying out the new payal that Jhanvi got for her, earlier the day. She was trying to fix it, it was happening.
"Kya main try kar saktha hoon" Her face brightened up instantaneously on hearing the voice.
"aap itne jaldi aagay"
"Haan.. de do.. main pehnadoonga"
Gauri was seeing him, adorably, while he wrapped the ornament around his ankle.
"Gauri. Aaj raat hum dinner pe jaa rahein"
"Bahar jaa rahein.. kahaan.." She got excited like a little kid..
"We are meeting one of my friend and her husband. I couldn't attend her wedding and she is in town. She called me up and invited for a dinner before her flight at 11. I said I will come.."
Her face fell.. "Main kaise aa sakthi hoon, usko pata nahi hoga na.. ki aap married hain"
"She knows"
Her eyes popped out.. "Kaise"
"I told her everything.."
"Kuch problem nahi hain?"
"Kuch nahi.."
*************
"Omkaara ji.. yeh dress teek hain.." She was dressed up in a designer chick suit which she had got while shopping with Jhanvi earlier this day.
"Naa.. doesn't reveal much to me.."
"Aap naa.. har waqt aise hi sochthe rehte hain.." Her face reflected false anger.
"Kya karoon mein.. sirf soch hi saktha hoon" he said with serious straight face
Her cheeks turned pink as usual.. "Baat to aise karte hain jaise kuch nahi karte" she murmered low so that he doesn't hear..
"Mujhe suna hi nahi deh raha.. Kya keh rahi ho.." He leaned over sticking his ears to her.
"Kuch nahi."
"Haan.. kuch nahi hain.. Agar hain to tum meri paas aati. Har waqt mujhe keechna padtha hain" He was waging a war of words..
Her defensive look gave way.. "Sirf baatein mat badayiye. Kuch din pehle, main hi aakar so rahi thi, aapki baahon mein. Paas nahi aani hain to main aise todi karti.." She fell into the trap with her own words.
"Kyunki tum wo din upset thi, issliye meri baahon mein aakar soyi. Tumhe reason chahiye meri paas aane ke liye, like jab main wounded tha, jab tum upset thi, jab Svetlana se mujhe bachana hai.. and all.. Bina wajah, bina koi reasoning se, kabhi tum meri paas aayi ho? sirf issliye because you want to be near me..?"
He was overwhelmed by frustration that she isn't expressing, only to remember Jhanvi's words. Her pained look did melt his heart and he turned soft.
"Chal chodo.. We will leave.." He hugged her by side, and took her out.
**
It was a pleasant evening and Gauri felt so good after meeting his friend, to have got her presence acknowledged as his wife before an outsider for the very first time. She was very kind enough not to touch the sensitive points which made the conversation very likeable. Omkaara was in his usual relaxed self and his entire inclusive demeanour meant a lot to her, like she is his life now. She was falling in love with him more and more at even the smallest of things that he takes care, when she is around. Even though he was engrossed in conversations, he made sure that he got her what she liked, given her inexperience in dining at such places. He was taking care of her like a child, checking with her if she is doing fine every 10 minutes. His friend remotely joked for his attention be shifted to them for a brief span of time, away from his precious wife..!!
He kept telling her his college memories, while on the way home. He held her hand on one side and drove with the other. Perhaps this is what being loved, feels?!!
Her heart was brimming with happiness while she leaned on his shoulders.
**
Gauri was trying out tee and pyjamas for night suit. It was Jhanvi who insisted she dressed according to her age and got all these. The tee was woven delicate fabric and was clinging to her like next skin. She was nervous and thought of getting it off thrice, but decided to wear it anyway since she was lazy to change. It was a particular windy full moon day, and gauri opened the windows to enjoy such a serene moon night. With the wind blowing her hair off, she looked angelic in this new ensemble of hers. She felt a sensation which made her turn only to meet her husband's eyes which were fixed in an admirable gaze. Her nervousness increases as she witnessed his eyes trail on her in their own pace.
"Wo.. maa ne yeh sab khareeda. Maine bola ki main yeh sab nahi pehenti.. Phir she scolded me that I don't dress my age. Mujhe bhi ajeeb sa lag raha hain, ye t-shirt" she was explaining when it wasn't needed.
He came near her and bent to whisper near her ears.. "It's beautiful"
Her doe eyes popped out in surprise, while a smile played in her lips "hum terrace chalthe kya Omkaaraji.. Climate is so nice?"
**
The climate was so romantic, so was the moon. It was pleasantly windy and the pool was serene. Gauri was admiring the view around, while Omkaara couldn't take his eyes off one very desirable object standing closeby. She was looking divine, with no jewels, flying hair and enjoyable smile. She turned to notice his looks change. Her heart was brimming with happiness of all the love that she had been getting and all because of this one man. She reminded of his words in the morning. "Bina wajah, bina koi reasoning se, kabhi tum meri paas aayi ho?"
Perhaps she shouldn't restrain, perhaps she should hesitate. She went near him with all bubbliness and raised her feet to hug him tight by his shoulders. Omkaara was pleasantly taken aback. This was the first time she was expressing something by herself, without his intervention. It didn't take moments for him to reciprocate the hug.
"Omkaara ji.. pata hai.."
"Sshh.. Om bulao" he was brushing his nose in the nape of her neck.
"Main ek baat poochoon aapse?"
"hmmm" he held her on his feet, so tat she reaches his neck.
"You belong to a totally different place and I come from a totally opposite place. Phir bhi aap humhe kaise pasand karte hain. Humhaari shaadi hogayi zabardasti se, issliye aapko pyaar hogayi mujhse?"
Omkaara knew it's her inner fears speaking out, but he was happy she was letting it out while she held him close.
"You are the most real person I have ever met. And jaise tumhe pata hain, main yeh status, society in sab se door rehna chahtha hoon aur mujhe paise se koi matlab nahi hain gauri. Agar humhaara shaadi nahi hoti, aur main tumhe kahin baahar miltha, tab bhi aise hi pyaar karta. Shaadi sirf humhe opportunity di, ek doosre ki bare mein jaane ke liye."
"You are the best thing to have happened to me. Main na taqdeer se bahut naraaz rehti, kabhi kabhi, ki mujhe aise zindagi di hain. Par mujhe ab koi naraazgi nahi, sirf khushi hain. Itni khushi ki meri har koi struggle, jo maine aaj tak jhela hain, wo sab yaad hi nahi hain" She spoke with content being held in his arms.
He lifted her up with her legs wrapped around his waist and sat in a recliner near the pool.. While she sat on his lap, he caressed her hair.. "Gauri, main tumhe har wo khushi dena chahtha hoon, jo main de saktha hoon. Main jitna bhi doon, tumhaare liye kam hi hain, kyunki you deserve the best" he held her chin, while their foreheads touched each others.
"Main aap ki Gauri hoon" Words came from her brimming heart while she held his chin, back.
"Kya hamesha meri gauri mere saath rahegi, meri patni banke, humhaari bachon ki maa banke?"
Her eyes reflected astonishment at the mere glint of future.. She wanted to give him every piece of her, even if it was the last one left in this world. Her heart which was already divided into factions with insecurities and hopes with latter building up on steadily, her wounds healing with his love, her loneliness almost fading from her life with his glorious presence in every minute of her life, she wasn't getting the right words to express.
She looked into his eyes and pressed her lips against his. She couldn't express herself in words, but felt the need to express at his most honest genuine question. He closed his eyes to listen what the lips had to say to his most earnest request. She held him as he was her every answer. Unlike other days, where he would be on with his mad rage passion, he leaned back to savour what she had to offer. She was undoubtedly hesitant, since it was the first time she ever kissed a guy out of her own will.
After a brief moment, she pulled out and buried her face on his shoulders again.
"Gauri.." his voice was filled with undeniable thirst.
"Hmm.."
"Ruk kyun gayi"
"Wo.. main.. wo.. Om"
"Kya hua. Tum kya itna hi feel karti ho?"
"Aisa nahi hain.."
"Phir"
"Kya karna hain mujhe"
"Agar main kahoon tum karogi?"
"Haan"
"Kiss me.. I want more"
"Om. wo." She can't escape from this demanding voice even in the pretext of all coyness she had.
He pulled her face towards his so that his lips touched hers. He refrained from giving to the iron-like temptation since he wanted her to come out her shell.
"Gauri..mujhe pagal bana rahi ho tum. Itna kya soch rahi ho?" She seemed to take her own sweet time to come out of her hesitant state, which increased his desperation to soaring levels.
Finally she gave in and kissed him again. He was persuasive and didn't let her withdraw herself in to the shell of coyness. He made her lean on the recliner as he leaned over her. His hands slid conveniently into her tshirt while she gasped for a moment..
"Om. please." She was gasping for breath..
Her restraint didn't last a minute before got in rhythm to his strokes until she had to restrain him physically at some point. She didn't want this to happen out of a physical impulsion or lost in the moment feelings. They are just opening up on each other and probably should give in more time. As irresistible as he is, he deserved her completely with her heart, mind and body all in unison. He didn't deserve this fragmented pieces of her, which he is trying to put into one.
He was frantically trying to control himself, facing away. As much he tries to avoid this situation, and let her take time to rebuild herself, he ends up half way and feeling dejected. No matter how much he decides to remind himself, that they need to take slow steps for rebuilding this, he ends up giving in to the sinful temptation. Her very proximity has alarming effect on him and her one touch is enough to break his resolve which he builds for hours. She is driving him wild and he never will be able to resist her..!!
She was trying to fix her garment which almost had come out, rolled upto her neck. She thanked heavens that she managed to stop him when he almost was about to undo her strap. Her cheeks heated up on having to face him, but she has to explain him why
"Om.. idhar dekhiye naa.." she turned his face with his hands.
"Am sorry Gauri.. wo main.."
"Please aap sorry mat kahiye. Maine aapko issliye nahi rokha kyunki yeh galat hain. Maine issliye rokha hain kyunki aap iss bhi zyaada deserve karte ho"
"Matlab?"
"Matlab you deserve more than just a physically impulsive moment. Aap jo pyaar mujhe de rahe ho, main bhi aapko aise hi kuch dena chahthi. Tabhi humhaari relationship complete hoga Om. We are there, but not just there.. aap samajh rahe naa?" She looked in to his chocolate brown eyes tinkling with endless love.
"Got it" he smiled..

<to be cont>

Luv,
Yay
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Posted: 8 years ago
First to like and first to comment...as usual lovely update...the understanding between both superb. Waiting for next update..
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Superb awesome outstanding fantastic fabulous perfect beautiful romantic sensual cute
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Posted: 8 years ago
Omkara is so understanding here. I love him in this particular ff!

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