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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awesome😃
Kanak's innocence n Uma's lattoo-giri😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Anjali33

Awesome😃

Kanak's innocence n Uma's lattoo-giri😆

Thankyou😃
Latoo ho gaye uma...
Kanak ka chala jadu😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Of course you have to write it.
Is it even a question to ask?I was mindblown imagining your work.plzz continue it.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Of course😛
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Posted: 9 years ago
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helooo Tia, pardons for a late response.. well many congrats for starting this FF... have to say, I found it engaging. It fits in very well with the back drop of the original story line. In fact I found your Introduction of Uma's life very clear. You mention his father and the reason for his mother's disability. Makes me wonder about this in the original story. His assumption that she will accept his out of the blue demand!! made me laugh. Some pleasant descriptive scenes,like the day break..
So overall I laud your creative effort, and request you to continue with chapter 2.. I will read it for sure,when I can make the time.. follow your creative drive... much love hammie
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Chapter 2

Early morning rays kissed her cheeks.she moaned from the tapping sun-light against her face, wondered
how long she been sleeping. She blinked, shut her eyes, blinked
again. As blinding light slowly subsided she finally opened her eyes one by one...Awareness came in a flash, this was not within their comfort zone, this was strange and in some ways frightening. What had happened - how had she got here - where was here - why were she... ? So many thoughts scrambled themselves to the surface in panic that a thin film of perspiration began to form on brow and upper lip. Fear was setting in and there was nothing she could do to stop it, no comforting words or thoughts, nothing reassuring came to her mind. She took in the details of the room. It was in blue with beautiful murals on the wall, hand painted by someone who knew what they were doing. She saw two reclining chairs beside her bed. And one amongst which was moving to and fro as if some one has just sat on it. It didnt took her long to understand the warning bell ringing in her head. She hastily checked for any door or window in the room . finding the door across few steps of her bed she got up quickly off bed. And keeping a hand over her mouth she began to take few big steps to the door. In the meanwhile, the door opened from other side and entered, Uma.

"Hey..." he voiced. Kanak jumped out of her skin and shuts her eyes , backing away.
"I am sorry. I didnt know you were up already." uma scratched his head with a smile.
Kanak's brow knotted up , seeing a familiar face. She continued searching for him in back of her mind while she stared at him.
"Why dont you freshed up? Let me quickly get you something to eat." he didnt wait for her to speak before shutting the door and locking it. Uma went down to grab breakfast for kanak. While kanak tried to still remember his face. And then suddenly her heart gripped in fear when finally everything from last night came rushing to her.
She quickly got near the door and banged it loudly.
" please open the door. Is anyone there. Help me." kanak screamed for help.
The muffle sound from far made maasima wake uo from her slumber. She quickly reached to uma's room with fast pace.
"Are, its lock?" she said checking on the latch.
She unlatched it and open the door. The door made a creak sound putting kanak on alert made.
" na dar na rona na hichki. Mat bhul kanak tu beti hai kiski" she kept on reciting to herself as her eyes darted the door.
The door opened and revealed maasima on the otherside. The lines on her forehead became visible seeing a girl in Uma's room. Maasima, noticed the thick line of tears which were flowing freely on her face.
Seeing a lady figure in front , kanak felt a sense of relief she ran and hugged the woman without a thought. Maasima carresed her head and kept saying soothing words to calm her down.
Its when kanak's cries died down maasima thought to inquire. Kanak told masima everything about uma's action. Few tears shredded down as she remember she is practically kidnapped here.
"Please aunty , let me go home." kanak folds her hand in front of maasima and begs.
Maasima smiled heartedly, she carresed her face with her hand and wiped her tears.
" you dont need to worry about anything. Now that i am here. We will go down first eat your breakfast and then i will ask gabbasa to drop you to your hotel." she smiled in assurance.
Kanak nods her head in no and argues to let her go to hotel. She do not feel like having breakfast. But couldnt decline her request anymore. " theek hai, come with me. " maasima. Started walking downstair with kanak following her.

The loud thump of footsteps made uma to turn his head over his shoulder. He stopped pouring the juice in the glass and stared at the figure hiding behind maasima.

She bites her lips in fear and tries to hide herself as much as possible from his vision.

" aao kanak. Daro mat. Baitho." she took Kanak's hand and made her sit in dining table.

"Tum bhi ao uma. Waha khade kyu ho? " maasima said serving fruits in kanak's plate.
Uma's eyes didnt even blink once as he took a chair right opposite to kanak.
Maasima caught him staring all live struck at kanak. She smiled and served parathas in his plate.
Kanak felt her feet heavy. She felt like oxygen cutting off from her. Her breath started to pick up and she brought her both hands on table for support to stand.
"Kanak. Eat. " maasima kept her hand above kanak in assurance.
Few bites were all she took from her plate. She did not have appetite now. She wished to run from here.
Soon they finished with breakfast. Maasima wiped her hands with clothes as she called gabbasa.
A man in 50 plus age appeared before her. "Gabbasa , she is our important guest. Make sure you drop her home safe . inhe kisi cheez ki takleef nahi hone dena." she said and smiled at kanak.

"Ji hukum." was all said by the man before he rushed to get the car for kanak.
Maasima began with a small talk to comfort kanak while they walked to the door together tagging uma behind.
He had a bright smile on face seeing her talking to maasi so confortably made his hope higher.
"Kanak. Just forget bad dream. My son might look like villain but he is golden at heart. Now you go back to your hotel. I will come to see you soon." she waved her hands in bye watching kanak sit in the car. Soon gabbasa drove off the car.
Maasima watched them leaving and she turned to get inside the home.
When she noticed, uma still intently staring at the place where once kanak was standing.
She smiled and clicked finger in front of him.
"Wapas aajao..kaha chale gaye." she laughed and he turned away, face burning, yet fingers icy cold.

Uma followed masima inside the house with a chuckle.
" maasima wo...main.." uma begin with his explanation when maasima stopped him in middle.
" mat bolo kuch. Pata hai mujhe wo tumhe bha gai. Haina? " she laughed patting his shoulder.
" ladki to ghani choki(achi) chuni tumne. Uske ghar ka pata do mujhe.. Tumhare rishte ki bat krte hai." uma looked puzzled at her.
" aise kyu dekh rahe ho. Kya main apne uma ko nahi janti! Tumne unski har barik jankari le rakhi hogi ab tak. Tumhara yahi ilaaz hai..ke use is ghar me humesha ke liye laya jaye." she again let out a small laugh.
Uma felt his cheeks burned. He felt happy that masima knows him so much. He had no need to say anything. She had become more than a mother for him.
He nods his head in yes and goes back to his room.
Maasima watched him retarding and then turns back to see the open door with a sigh..
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Hamlet53

helooo Tia, pardons for a late response.. Hello hammiee🤗well many congrats for starting this FF..thank you. 😳have to say, I found it engaging. It fits in very well with the back drop of the original story line.i wanted it to be linked up so it would ne east to connect😃 In fact I found your Introduction of Uma's life very clear.just my imagination. Thanksyou i am glad you liked it😳You mention his father and the reason for his mother's disability.😳i have just guessed it...because they never speak about uma fatherMakes me wonder about this in the original story.ditto😉 His assumption that she will accept his out of the blue demand!! made me laugh. Bur this is what he always does. Imagine and act😆Some pleasant descriptive scenes,like the day break..
So overall I laud your creative effort, and request you to continue with chapter 2.. I will read it for sure,when I can make the time.. follow your creative drive... much love hammie

Thankyou so much ...i love your comment😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: sravz23

Of course you have to write it.

Is it even a question to ask?I was mindblown imagining your work.plzz continue it.

hahaha thanks😆 i am very happy you liked it. Wrote 2 chapter do tell me..how did you find it😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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likh diya😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Padh liya😛

Bohot accha laga😃

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