Shanav-COLLAB SS YEH DOSTI HUM NAHI TODENGE (PART17 pg72)

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Part 6- Confusion cleared

At d'souza house

Ana is in her room... She is crying badly ..

She doesn't know what to do... She was so confused ...she had hurt her best friends...

She didn't knew when she fell asleep

It was about 9:00PM when she woke up..

She was still confused ... Who she loves sharad or manav..

Anna took out the album from her cupboard drawer..

It was the album of her sweet memories...that she had spent with manav and sharad

She was going through pictures of her manav...

Memory of her and manav played in front of her like a movie...she recalled manav's behaviour during his school days . he used to behave like sharad or rather to say sharad behaves like manav ...

' buddhu' she said while looking at a picture of her and manav.. She was unknowingly blushing..

She was looking at some pictures of her and sharad...

Ana -(monologue)

Mujhe sharad mein uska bachpna , uska innocence , uska cutness bahut pasand hai . Aisa lagta hai ki yahi mujhe chahiye aur maine ye kahi experience bhi kiya hai ...aisa lagta hai jaise iss bachpane se,,iss innocence ko ,iss cuteness ko mein baar dekh chuki hoon ...iss tarah se toh behave hamesha manav karta tha...

Aur uske samne manav ki wahi harkate aur nature ki yaade aa jati hai .

Realisation dawned upon her... And after months of confusion she got the answer..

She was in love .. In love with her first love.. Manav..

Anna- (monolouge)-jaane anjaane mein ne manav ko aur sharad ko bahut hurt kiya hai..bahut rulaya hai dono ko.

Anna looked out from her window..

At colony garden,

Sharad,manav ,Jacky shishir and hemant were playing ...

She was admiring manav...

She decides to tell them her decision...

Ohja uncle and lajo aunty had gone to visit one of their relatives and would not be back..for next 3-4 days .So,manav had dinner with ghotala's .

Next day,

Sharad decided to have boys night out..at manav's house . Ronnie and bhadresh tried to come but manav stopped them saying as it was for them only ...

At colony garden,

Manav- hemant, ball pass kar... Jaldi ..

Sharad- Jacky ,shishir hame ball ko pass hone nahi dena hai... Hoon

Jacky and shishir do hoon...

Hemant- haan manav bhaiya , oon aapko...and he kicks the ball ..to manav..

Jacky- sharad tum yaha ajaao

Mein waha aata hoon..

They were playing

when varsha and vasant called them...manav also comes with them

Shishir- kya hua mummy,papa

Varsha - beta detector timi timi ho raha hai..iska matalb hamara beta yahi kahi hai..

Manav - varsha bhabhi yeh itne zor se timi timi kar raha hai..

Varsha- manav yeh itne zor se timi timi tab hi karta hai jab hamare koi alien yaha ho bahut nazdik...ho tab..

Vasant comes down with multiplier tablets and specs..

Vasant- shishir dekh bahaar colony mein koi hai ya nahi. .

Sharad- bhaiya,bhabhi aap hemant aur Jacky jaaye aur dhoondiye 2015 ko ..tabtak yaha colony mein aur shishir yaha dhyan rakhenge..

Manav - main bhi chalunga aapke saath vasant bhaiya ..aur aap mana nahi karenge..

Vasant- par,manav ...

Manav- nai uncle ,mein aaunga..

Vasant-- sharad , tu yaha reh aur shishir hum jaay uske baad Tere superpower se hame follow karna hoon..

And all do ishaaba.. And leave..

They were out of colony ... Detector was still doing timi timi..

A bike passed by them and detector was doing timi timi in full speed..

Sharad- bhaiya, woh bike wala left ki taraf turn kiya hai jaldi jaaye...

Shishir was following them through his superpower ..

All were following the bike wala ..they were following him...vasant tried to look through glasses but he had gone to far...

Detector had stopped doing timi timi...

Shishir tried to follow the bike wala by looking through his seeing superpowers but now he was out of reach ...

They all were sad...

At ghotala house...

Varsha was sad...

Vasant- varsha,dekho udass mat ho ,patharwale bhagwan par bharosa rakho..hame hamara beta mil jaayega

Varsha- kab vasant,??

Vasant- varsha dekho,tum dukhi mat ho,tum himmat haar jaogi..toh hum kya karenge..

Chalo,Ab dukhi mat ho..mere chaaro 2 sar wale baccho ki ma, mere...

Hemant,sharad, shishir,Jacky were watching them ..

Sab hemant ki tarah chidhana start karte hai..

Vasant looked at them...

Vasant- kya...kya ..kya hai..chalo sab jao upar.. Matalb jao chaaro woh manav ke ghar yeh sharad ne bola tha na jao woh tum log

At ohja house,

All were playing dumbsherads...

Ghotalas plus jacky in one team..

2idiots second team

Ladies team(bhawna bhairu liza)

Kids team(mitesh pritesh padma manav ana)

Ana:ok ok sabko rules yaad hn na kya krna h??(pointing at ghotalas..last tym jaise acha khele the iss baar b khel loge na ?

Vasant:haan haan ana tum chinta mat kro..hum sambhal lenge

Ronnie:ok man to first muvi me deyenga

Ronnie gives bhairu a muvi

Bhairu stands gives Ronnie a look n as soon as hes about to sit she comes n stands beside him..asking him through her eyes what..Ronnie also asks what..

Bhairu:Ronnie bhaiya plzz tym waste mat kijiye jo kehna h jaldi kahiye

Ronnie:par maine kya kaha

Bhairu:kyu abi aap hi to bole..muje kuch kehna hai..

Ronnie:arree mere kehne ka matlb(bhairu starts shaking her head)bhairu.."muje kuch kehna hai"is movie name man

Bhairu:toh barobar

Bhawna:arre dafod..tu kyu gai..hmme se kisi ko jana chahiye tha..pehla point har gaye

Next liza gives movie to Ronnie

Ronnie goes to bhadresh:wo ba wo ba

Bhadresh- bolne vallah

Liza:Ronnie bolna allowed nahi hai..

Ronnie:haan haan I know

(shows one finger..gives clue that movie is old)

(keeps on gesturing bt is unable to tell bhadresh)

Manav:Ronnie bhaiya10sec left..

Ronnie panics

Manav: 5..4..3..2..1..aur ye Ronnie bhaiya ki team ka point kat gya..

Ronnie..kya man..bhadresh itni asan muvi nahi guess kar paye..its R man..

Hemant:nahi nahi Ronnie uncle.raaz to wo..bhawna aunty bhairavi didi se kehti hain na"tu apni harkaton se raaz nahi ayegi"

Vasant:arre wo baaz..

Hemant..nahi nahi papa..baaz to wo..jo mein ne sharad chacha aur mummy se chupa raha hoon..

Vasant:arre gende..woh raaz hota hai..aisa bolo

"Mein ne sharad chacha aur mummy se razz chupa raha hoon..

Vasants eyes widens..to sharad:ye konse raaz ki baat kr rha h

Sharad(scared)..patah ni bhaiya..

Vasant..to all:wo zaraa hume aisa kuch jaraa sa kaam yaad aa gya hum ate hn

Bhawna:oo ghotala ki sawari..Kaha??

Vasant- woooh hummm bas aise hi thoda ghar par kaam patah ke aate hai...

Sharad goes a little back behind hemant and Jacky and uses his superpower ..

Sharad- Jacky hilna mat mein superpower use kar raha hoon.

Hoon?

Jacky- hooon

Sharad use his superpower and contacts manav and also joins vasant..

Sharad- manav mein sharad bol raha hoon sharad..

Vasant- oh hemant chacha tu kya mein hemant chacha bol raha hoon bol raha hai..hame patah ki tte alava yaha kisi ke paas... Superpower nai hai..

Sharad- sorry bhaiya woh aadat hogayi hai..acha manav hame yahaa se jaana hoga toh tu yaha sambhal Lena .kyuki Ab sab log sawaal karenge...

Manav- haan thik hai... Mein yaha sab sambhal loonga..tu chinta mat kar...

Vasant- aur haan..manav sambhal kar kehna Jo kuch kehna ho.. Kyuki. Koi aur gadbad kare na kare ... Yeh pritesh jaroor kuch na kuch karega.. Dekho woh abhi bhi hame hi dekh raha hai..aur soch raha hoga ki kaise hame phaasae ya phir hum kya chupa rahe hai.

Manav- vasant bhaiya aap chinta mat kariye mein sab yaha sambhal loonga... Hooon

Vasant and sharad both do hooon...

N whole ghotala family run away...

After ghotala family leave

all as usual started their fav.game ghotala ke khilaf charcha,...

Edited by Krish58 - 9 years ago

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Posted: 9 years ago

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superb work both of u ...
anju,krishu proud of u both...
lovely update...
finally chipkali ki confusion door hui...
but abhi yeh confession ko kitna time lagayegi..
ya is game ke bahane confess karegi...??
boys playing... seriously manav-hemant in one team??😲 bechara manav😆😆
all go to ghotala house as detector was doing timi timi...
manav wants to accompany them for finding 2015...
shishir keeps a watch on others.. sharad stays & starts his mind contact with vasant to inform him ..
very nicely written...
varsha upset.. all upset... as they couldnt reach 2015 even wen he was so close...😭😭😭 even m upset...
vasant tries to console her... 😳😳

all play damsheras , colony walo ki fav game...
& starting hi jabardast.. bhairavigiri...
bhairu ko film dena bulaya ronnie ne.. bola mujhe kuch kehna h.. aur chala gaya... bhairu gai uske pichhe aur puchha kya kehna h...😆😆😆
ronnie to bechara kuch bol hi ni paya... ishaara samajne wala sirf bhadresh tha na.. aur alsi raam to so gaya hoga..😆😆

and starts hemantgiri & professorgiri...
hemant ne phirse kuch kia h.. aur sharad aur varsha se bhi chupaya h..
vasant wants to go home to find out wat hemant did now.. sharad contacts manav & interconnects vasant & they talk that they r leaving & manav to handle all specially pritesh...
ab hemant ne kya kiya hoga???
shud i guess??
continue soon...
thnks 4 d pm...
krishu wen u send pm y dont u send d link to d update with it.. it would b easier for readers to read...

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Part 7 someone arrived

@ghotala house

Vasant:hemant kya bol rha tha tu..kya bol rha tha waha

Hemant:mai nahi btaunga nhi

btaunga..ye baaz h..

Vasant:arrree gende..baaz nhi raaz hai..ye dekh(about to start his screen)

Varsha:professor vasant ghotala..aap apni pathshala band krnge aur mudde pe ayiye..

Hemant beta plzz bata na kya kia tune ab

Hemant:nahi Mai nahi btaunga

Vasant:sharad..iska dimag padh..jaldi

Hemant in his usual way closes his mind n sharad is unable to read it

Sharad:bhaiya phir se isne apna dimag band kr lia hai

Vasant:ek aur baar try kr

Sharad tries again

Hemant(in mind):muje nahi sochna hai nahi sochna hai..kisi ko b pta nhi chlna chahiye humare greh se koi aa rha h..

Sharad:shocked..bhaiya..hmare greh se koi aa rha h..hemant ne kisi ko bula lia h..bhaiya kuch kijiye

Vasant- areee kya kuch kijiye kuch kijiye..tu uska dimaag padh aur jaane ki koshish kar ki kon aa raha hai...

Sharad again tried to read his mind but hemant has locked his mind ..so he couldn't read his mind.

@ohja house...

All were as usual talking about ghotala family and pritesh again was trying to brainwash their minds...

Bhavna- ae baba ...yeh ghotala aise kyu chale gaye.. Haan baba.. ( looking towards bhadresh)

Bhadresh was sleeping as usual ..

Pritesh- haan dadi.. Sochiye aise itni jaldi jaldi kyu chale gaye ghotala family...aisa kya raaz hai Jo sirf aur sirf hemant bhaiya ko patah aur baki sab ko patah nahi..hai... Aisa kya bhayanak raaz ho sakta hai.. Socho socho..Ronnie uncle sochiye.

Padmavati devi- sochiye sab aisa kya raaz ho sakta hai..

Pritesh-(in mind) Ab dekhta hoon ghotala family ko kon bachata hai aur hemant bhaiya ka raaz toh mein jaanke hi rahoonga. Unse raaz nikalwana toh bahut aasan hai... ..

Manav -(in mind ) pritesh sabka brainwash karne ki koshish kar raha taki sab ghotala family par shaq kare... Mujeh kuch bhi karke baat ko ghumna hoga taki sab ghotala family ko pareshan na kare ..koi bahaana sochna hoga...

Pritesh- haan toh aap log..

Before pritesh could take his next move manav makes his move

manav - aap log phir se unpe shaq kar rahe hai..yeh dekhiye mujeh abhi sharad ka msg aaya ki hemant raaz kya hai..

Bhadresh waking up from his beauty sleep

Bhadresh( yawing)- toh bolna ghotala ke vakil ..

Manav - bhadresh bhaiya aur sab sun lijiye.woh raaz aur kuch nahi hemant ne Do bade se ..mote se chuhe ghar mein paale the toh woh usme se ek ghum hogaya hai

On listening this all liza..Bhavna Anna and bhairavi are scared and they stand up on sofa...

Manav- Aur sharad ke kapde chuhe ne kutar diye the issliye hemant ne yeh baat chupai hai sharad..se aur varsha bhabhi ko dar lagta hai chuho se... Yeh dekhiye mujeh sharad ne msg bheja.. Hai..padh lijiye..

Bhavna- aeee yeh hemant ghanchakkar hai koi chuhe paalta hai kya..Mein nai jaaungi Ab ghotala nagari jab tak woh chuhe nikal nai jaate..

Liza- sahi keh raha hai aunty Bhavna tum mein bhi nai jaayega ..

Anna - mein bhi..

Bhavna- Chalo sab apne ghar chalo aur dekhke chalna kahi woh mota chuha aa na jaaye..

Pritesh tried to stop all bit all in vain no one listened him..infact he had to listen from Bhavna..

All leave

Manav sighed..he decided to go ghotala house as they will need his help..but decided to go after sometime.

@ ghotala house

Vasant asks sharad to read hemant's mind..but hemant blocks his mind so..sharad was not able read his mind..

Meanwhile manav enters..

Hemant does eeeh on seeing manav...

Manav- vasant bhaiya kya hua... Kya problem hui hai..

Vasant- acha hua manav tum aagaye.. Yeh hemant ne kisiko hamare grah se bulaya hai..

Manav- kya...? Kon aa raha hai aapke grah se ?aur kab aa raha hai ?

Jacky- patah nai manav hemant ne kisi ko bulaya hai abhi koi aa raha hai hamare grah se..aur hemant batah nai raha hai hame ki kon aa raha..

Manav goes to hemant...

Manav - dekho ,hemant mujeh batao tumne kya kiya. Hai...tumne kisko bulaya hai..tumhare grah se...

Hemant- nai mein kisiko nai bataunga...

Vasant- aeee hemant batana kisse bulaya hai..

Hemant starts doing hafu hafu... And goes behind manav...

Hemant- dekhiye na manav bhaiya papa daant rahe hai mujeh.

Manav- vasant bhaiya mein puch ta hoon hemant se aap shaant hojaaye..

Meanwhile Jacky and shishir are trying to contact high command..

Jacky- uncle,high command se contact nai ho paaraha hai ..lagta hai woh wapas khana khaane gaye hai...

Vasant- yeh bhukkad baaras high command jabhi kaam hota hai khaana khane chale jaate hai..

Shishir- papa ..yeh dekhiye 333 ka audio msg Aaj subha hi aaya hai...

Varsha- kya 333 ka msg aaya hai toh patah kyu nai chala.. Hame...

Shishir,msg open kar.

At dsouza house,

ana n liza have just returned from shopping n are showing their dresses to Ronnie..but hes unable to speak anything

Ana:Ronnie bhaiya ye kaisa hai

Liza:Ronnie ye wala kaisa hai

Ana:Ronnie bhaiya ye color muje boht pasand aya tha..kaisa lga

Liza:Ronnie ye tumhara fav color hai na man..dekho mai le ke aya ab next tym jab b bahar jaynge mai yeich pehnenga..

Ana:liza bhabhi..

Ronnie:arre chup kro man..ye kaisa hai wo kaisa hai..koi muje bolne ko ni deta

Liza:ah..haan haan Ronnie tum bolo

Ronnie:haan liza wo ba wo ba

Liza:tum bina bolte hi sahi lgte ho..jb bolta hai to atakta h man

Ronnie:sorry..lets do this work tomorrow ko hindi me kya bolnge

Liza:hum ye kaam kal karenge

Ronnie:haan..tum dono wo KamKal salesman peter se to ni Mila na man

Liza:seriously Ronnie..tumne kam akal ka KamKal kia

Ronnie:tum samjha na

At ghotala house...

Shishir opens the audio msg..and in next moment what they heard was certainly a shock + surprise for ghotalas and manav ..

Vasant- aeee hemant tune kya kiya..kyu bulaya tune 78sq...ko yaha? Ab hum kya karenge... Haan??

But among all the person who was more shocked was sharad ...

Manav- yeh 78sq.. Kon hai vasant bhaiya?

Hemant- manav bhaiya woh hamari chachi hai..

Manav - matalb?

Vasant- manav hamare grah par hamare janam ke saath hi hame hamare jivan saathi ka no. Diya jaata hai..aur sharad ko 78 sq.ka no.diya tha..woh dono bachpan se bahut ache dost hai..

Hemant-(with tear)aur jab unhe patah chala ki sab mummy Papa aur chacha par shaq kar rahe unhe chor keh rahe. Unhe bahut bura laga...aur hamare 2015 bhaiya ko doondhne mein help karne ke liye aa rahe ...hai..

Varsha- par hemant tujeh hame batana chahiye tha na beta...

Hemant- agar bata toh aap sab unhe aane nai dete aur yeh chacha ke liye mein surprise rakhna chahta tha...

And he hugs varsha..

Sharad was in tears ..He remembered the time he spend with 78sq...

He was quite unhappy... Which was noticed by manav..

Shishir - papa landing mein sirf 15 minute baaki hai..

Vasant- sharad aur manav tum dono bahar jaakar dekho ki .. Koi hai toh nahi na colony garden mein...

Shanav leaves..

At colony garden,

Manav- sharad tum khush nahi ho ki 78sq..aa rahi hai..

Sharad- ( not looking in his eyes ) aisa kyu bol rahe ho manav mein khush hoon.

Manav- apne dost se jhut bologe?

Sharad( with tears)- manav...tumhe kaise ...

Manav- tumhara dost hoon toh agar jai dukhi hoga toh uske veeru ko patah lagna hi hai.

Sharad- mein sab batata hoon.. Manav

At ghotala house..

Vasant- oh hemant ..78sq konse insaani roop mein aa rahi hai aur uska naam kya hai?

Hemant( becomes happy)- eeeh papa 78sq chachi yeh wala insaani roop le ke aa rahi and he shows a photo ..to vasant aur mein ne aur 333 ne aur thodi shi

Shirshir ki help leke..

Shishir- mein kab aapki help ki bhaiya.

Hemant- shishir uss din mein tujeh se puch raha tha na ki baarish ke aur kon kon se naam hote hai..tab...

Vasant-- haan haan bata na kya naam rakha hai...

Hemant- papa 78sq chachi ka insaani naam hai "Megha"...

Vasant- megha...

At bhatt house,

bhavna is sitting at the dining table

Bhavna:chakudi oo chakudi khana la na..

Bhairavi:,baa ye lijiye..sev aur tamatar ki Sabzi..khaman aur saath mein baajre ki roti banai hai

Bhavna: arre wah chakudi..aj to bina gadbad ke tune dinner bnaya.

Bhairavi: hasto (smiling)

Bhavna: acha Maine tuje kheer bnane ko bola wo banai..??

Bhairavi:banai na baa..(opens lid n shows)ye dekhiye..

Bhavna is shocked to see the dish..

Bhavna: aeee ghotala putri aahiya aav..aa su che...( oh ghotalaputri come here... what is this)

Bhairavi:gajar ki kheer.. Hai baa

Bhavna:gajar ki kheer..??chakudi maine tuje kheer bnane ko bola tha tune gajar kyu dali

Bhairavi: baa aap hi to boli thi..beta kitchen me gajar padi h wo fridge me rakh dena..par beta pehle kheer bnana mat bhulna

Bhavna- arrre mere kehne ka matlb tha..gajar fridge me rakhna n chawal doodh ki kheer bnana..(bhairu is shaking her head the usual way) ae vandari..mundi na halavis

Bhairavi:baar baar galti aap krti h phir b muje dant ti hn..isme meri kya galti..

Bhavna: ae dankan..zyada hoshiyari mat dikha..kheer bola to kheer ka ek hi matlb hota hai.

Bhairavi: matlb baad me samjhane ka kya matlb baa..

Bhavna is staring at her in anger

Bhairavi:koi baat nhi baa sry mat boliye maine aapko maaf kia...mujeh patah hai aapne aapki galti maan li hai(murmuring) ek toh bade hai aur kuch bol bhi nai sakte..baa ko kitni baar kahaa ki jaake apne dimaag ka check up kar vaaye...

Bhavna- ae vandari chup kar..

Bhairavi-toh barobar

At colony garden,

Sharad- yeh baat Aaj tak mein ne bhaiya bhabhi ko nahi baatayi.

Manav- sharad tum , tumne usse reason nahi pucha..

Sharad- nahi manav uss ke baad mein ne baat nahi ki usse aur phir patah chala 2015 ghar chodke bhag gaya hai issliye hum log yaha usse dhoondhne aaye hai. Manav plz yeh baat bhaiya bhabhi.. Ko plz mat bataana .

Manav- thik hai..sharad mein nahi bataunga...

Jacky calls them and they go inside... Ghotala house..

Vasant informs them about 78sq insaani roop and her name..

Manav- uncle, jaise hi space ship land hogi toh dhamaka jaroor hoga..aur colonywale bahaar aayenge...toh jaise hi space ship land hoga uske thode der baad mein ghar jaaunga taki kissi ko shaq na ho aur baad mein mai sab situation sambhal loonga.. Hoon

All- hoon

Shishir - papa landing mein kuch hi waqt baki hai..

Sharad- bhaiya sirf 10 second..

Jacky- 10,9,8,..4,3,2,1..

And after a few seconds all lights start to flicker and with a big sound a spaceship enters ghotala house from window...

Spaceship door opens...

a girl wearing a blue kurti dress .. Comes out of spaceship...

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Posted: 9 years ago

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superb update...

well done gals..

m proud of u...

hemantgiri,bharavigiri to best hi thi..
no doubt..
lekin manav bhi mast tha..
hemant do mote chuhhe pale h..🤪 🤣
seriously itna hasi hu me yeh padhke... kya bataoo...
sach batao yeh chuhe ka idea kiska tha...??
anju ka tha na?

pritesh ka to mast popat hua..
bechara pritesh...
really felt bad for d boy..

bhairavi as superb as always...
gajar ki kheer..
me bhi try karti huu kabhi...

roonie bechare ko koi bolne ni deta...😆😆

all know megha is cuming..
so name already decided by hemant...

sharad told sumthing to manav..
but wat?? secret??

anna confess kab karegi..
realise hua na to daud k kyu nai jati??😡😡

continue soon..

thnks 4 d pm..

Edited by coolhi1988 - 9 years ago