Shanav-COLLAB SS YEH DOSTI HUM NAHI TODENGE (PART17 pg72) - Page 6

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Posted: 9 years ago
#51

Originally posted by: coolhi1988


tu kya maro maro likh rahi h.. maine krishu ko bola tha...
u shut up...
haan tuned to huu.. but agar to title me pg no bhi update kar de to better ni hoga.. like ch-3 pg4.. aise


mai krishu ki syd se hi marne ka bol rahi hu..maro maro :-D
ok ji jaisa aap kahe madamji ;-D
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Posted: 9 years ago
#52

Originally posted by: Krish58

Don't worry kissiko nahi maarungi...

Tum dono behen ho meri

Group hug

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Part 4 - Your secret is now my secret


Manav is shocked ..he couldn't understand what happened just now...


Manav steps backwards..

Manav- aap log kaun hai...?


Vasant- manav hum sab sach batate hai...par plz hamari baat suno aur hum pe vishwas karo..plz


Manav is shocked ..a little bit affraid but doesn't show it... His inner voice was telling him to believe on ghotalas and listen to them for once ..



Manav- thik hai .. Par aap mujeh sab sach bataye aap kaun hai? Yeh sab kaise kiya aapne ? Kaha se aaye hai aap log?


Vasant- manav,itne dino se aur bahar Jo aliens ke dharti par aane ki news aati hai woh sach hai...abhi kuch dino pehle colony mein alien aajane ki Jo news thi woh alien aur koi nahi varsha thi..

Haan, manav hum insaan nahi hum aliens hai.. Do sar wale ..

Mera naam vasant nahi 9211 hai, aur varsha ka naam 1721, sharad ka naam 87 square hai , hemant ka naam -426, aur shishir ka naam 2+2=5 hai..

Hamara yakin karo manav hum yaha kisi ko nuksaan pauchane nai aaye..aur nahi dharti par kabzaa kar ne aaye... Hum yaha kisi aur maksad se aaye hai. Hum kisiko doondhne aaye hai.

Manav- kaisa maksad? Aur kise doondhne aaye h aap?


Varsha- hum yaha hamare sabse bade bete 2015 ko doondhne aaye hai..manav. Hemant ke bade bhai ko doondhne aaye hai..


5 saal pehle.. Woh humse naaraz hoke ghar chod ke hamare grah se yahaa dharti par aaya tha.. Tabse hum usse dhoondh rahe hai..


Varsha was crying


2 saal pehle hum yahaa dharti par aaye.. Kyuki hame sanket mila ki hamara baccha yaha dharti par hai..aur zyaada sanket hame yaha colony ke aas paas se mile.. Tabse hum yaha insaani roop lekar hamare bache ko doondh rahe hai..


Vasant- hum tabse yahaa doondh rahe hai ... Hamara baccha.. Haroz kahin na kahi mujeh apne aap pe gussa aata hai kyu mein ne usse itna daata ki woh ghar chodke chala gaya..

Hum yaha hai, ek saath hai, phir bhi har roz muskilo ka saamna karna padta hai..aur woh patah nahi kis haal mein hoga mera bacha. Kaise bachata hoga apne aapko...

Aur jis din hame hamara beta mil jaayega usi din hum log wapas chale jaayenge.. Manav.

Yehi hi sacchai hai manav hamari ..yehi raaz hai Jo hum sab Aaj tak chupate aaye hai sabse..

Aur Jacky bhi hamari tarah hi alien hai. 2015 aur Jacky saath mein bhage the ..


By now ghotala family and manav were in tears...


Manav looked at ghotala family he could see their truth,their innocence, their sadness ,their helplessness...

He could no where found them dangerous as everyone refers them.


Manav holds vasant's hands..and looks at vasant


Manav -(in tears) Uncle, Aaj se aapka raaz mera raaz hai.. Aur mein promise karta hoon yeh raaz mein kisiko nahi bataunga..


Ghotala family were over whelmed with manav's reply... They didn't have any words ...

Vasant makes appears his invisible board and shows him his family photo...


While looking the family photo manav thought they all looked cute in their alien form...

How can someone call them dangerous.. Then he looks towards a alien sitting in middle..

And he remembered someone.. Someone because of whom he was alive today.


Manav- Vasant bhaiya , yeh kon hai?

Pointing towards 2015..


Sharad- yeh hi hai hamara 2015 manav jisse hum yaha doondhne aaye hai..


Manav - Aur yehi hai jisne sarhad paar 2 saal pehle meri jaan bachai thi.,

Yehi mera raaz hai Vasant bhaiya aur varsha bhabhi .Mein ne vada kiya tha aapke bete se ki yeh baat mein kisiko nahi bataunga..


Varsha- manav ,hamara beta kaha hai abhi? Tum toh usse mile ho na toh abhi kaha hai..? Manav bolo na kaha hai hamara beta?


Manav- varsha bhabhi,mujeh nahi patah woh kaha hai abhi..


Aapka beta meri team tha.. shayad kisi shahid jawaan ka roop liya tha usne woh hamesha dara hua ,sehma hua aur shaant rehta tha.. thoda ajeeb tha toh uske ke saath koi jyada baat nahi karta tha.. Lekin mein uske hamesha baat karta tha.. Bhale hi ajeeb tha par dil ka bahut acha tha...


Mujeh Aaj bhi woh din yaad hai


Flashback starts

Jab sarhad paar ladai hui toh woh mere saath hi tha.. Mein aur 2015 dushman ko haraya par usme mein bahut ghayal hogaya... Aur dushmano ke sainik hamara picha kar rahe the... Aur raat hone kaaran patah hi nahi chala ki hum abhi bhi dushmano ke ilake mein ..


Humne jungle ke raaste Hindustan ki sarhad par aane ka faisla liya par, raste mein hi kuch dushmano ke sainik ne hame gher liya.. Bandook mein goliyaan bhi khatam ho chuki thi aur koi raasta bhi nahi tha hamare pass..

Phir tabhi 2015 ne apne superpowers use karke dushmano ke sainik ko chakma diya aur unhe behosh kar diya .Aur 2015 mujeh waha se le gaaya ..


Mein bhi pehle yekin nahi kar paaya ki kya hua.mein ne usse pucha ki tum kon ho aur yeh sab kaise kiya...2015 ne kaha ke woh alien hai.aur woh yaha kissi ko hurt karne nahi aaya .aur kaha ki mein yeh baat kisiko naa baatau ki woh ek alien hai. aur usse wapas uske grah jaana hai usse apne ghar wapas jaana hai...mein ne usse vada kiya ki mein yeh baat kisi se nahi kahunga.. Aur uske baad mein behosh hogaya..


Phir patah nahi kaha chala gaya woh.. jab mujhe hosh aaya tab patah chala ki mein dushmano ke kabze mein hoon..


Jab woh dushmano ke sainiko ne pucha ki mera saathidar kaha hai.. Toh jhut bol diya ki mere saath koi nahi tha akela tha.mein..tabse mein dushmano ke kabze mein tha. Mujeh 2015 ki chinta hoti thi .. Patah nahi kahaan hoga woh aur kis haalat mein hoga woh mujeh uski madaad karni thi. .aur phir aap log ne mujhe bachaya.


flashback ends..


Manav - vasant bhaiya,varsha bhabhi.. Aapka beta mujhe nahi patah kaha hai mein khud usse doondhne ki koshish kar raha hoon. taki me uski help kar sakoo kisibhi tarah se.. usse thnks keh saku... yeh guilt mujhe khaye jaa raha tha ki woh kahan h? kaisa h?
phir jab maine sharad ko dekha sarhad paar.. apni jaan ki parwah kiye bagair meri jaan bachane.. aur uski masumiyat aur himmat mujhe hamesha 2015 ki yaad dilata.. aur aap logo ka ajeeb vyavahaar pe mujhe isliye shayad shak nai hua kyun ki me pehle hi yeh vyavahaar dekh chuka tha... aur 2015 ko me maddad nai kar paya.. to socha aap logo ko inn colonywalo ke shaaaq se bachao taki apni thodi si guilt kam kar saku... aaj pata chala me 2015 ke parivar ki maddad kar rahaa tha... aab mujhe thoda achha lag raha hai...


Vasant and manav hug each other.


Manav- mein aapse vada karta hoon ..mein aapke bete ko doondhne mein aapki help karoonga... Woh mera bhi dost hai...

Hooon?


All ghotala's do- hooon..


Varsha- manav aur sharad tum dono baitho mein ne tumhara fav.dishes banai hai manav..

Mein abhi laai tum dono ke liye..


Vasant- haan toh gende woh bunty nahi batti hota hai yeh dekh and he makes appear his invisible black board ..


Manav was watching them ..


Hemant- papa woh batti nahi bunty hota hai


Vasant makes understand hemant difference between bunty and batti words..


Manav- vasant bhaiya aapke aur baki sab ke kon kon se superpower hai..


Vasant- areee manav mein bataunga nahi dikhanga tumhe. Abhi toh tumne dekha na woh black board wala superpower woh sirf aur sirf mere gende ke liye use karta hoon..


And then everyone shows their superpower to manav.

Edited by Krish58 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#54
yeah me first 🥳

superb chapter...
wat a twist...sweet wala ..
loved it...

manav ka secret ghotalaz ka secret, ghotalaz ka secret manav ka secret...👏

well done krishu...
abhi pritesh un scientist se milke bhi ghotalaz ka kuch nai bighaad payega...

abhi shanav achhe pakke dost bhi h aur secret dost bhi...

ab jaldi se megha ki entry karwao.. me sharad ko akela nai dekh paungi...😭

professor ghotala apna class lena nai bhulta... phirse gende ki class shuru...
ohh so black board sirf gende k liye h...😳😳

continue soon..
solly for late unres...
thnks krishu for d pm..😳
thnks anju for updating d title...😳
Edited by coolhi1988 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#55
It turned out beautifully well. Nicely written I loved it👏
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Posted: 9 years ago
#56
Well written 👏
Kya baat hai ⭐️⭐️
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Thanks ice cold.. Without help of hiyu,anji,and kulsaya,mta yeh part nahi likh paati mein
Edited by Krish58 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#58
oh my god kya story hai

it echoes what we really want to see on the show.


well written can visualise the whole revelation scene
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: chatterbox

oh my god kya story hai

it echoes what we really want to see on the show.


well written can visualise the whole revelation scene


Di plz plz agar pradeep aapko aapke area ya bldg ke aas pass dikhe toh plz can you ask him na ki uska character ko negative toh nahi kar rahe na...plz plz I don't want him to be negative... He was so serious today...

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Posted: 9 years ago
#60
Wow wow wow ❤️ this is so beautiful, the relation of shanav is so aww worthy in first three parts , so emotional and deep 👏 awesome work guyss 🤗
I would love to see their bromance in bdsah
And in the fourth part they make manav a part of their secret, looks like manav is part of their family now. Friend of 2015, friend of sharad. He is unofficial ghotala I feel 😆
Update soon 😳

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