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Part IX - Confrontations

He needed to talk to her. She had to give him a chance. After all, they were still married. Distance and waiting had calmed him down slightly but he still paced the darkened hallway as he waited for her to come home. He stopped as he heard the door shut. Pulling her in with one hand covering her mouth, his other hand went round her waist and he pinned her to the pillar under the landing.

"Shhh Chashmish it's me. Don't shout. You'll wake everyone up. I need to talk to you." whispering to her, he moved his hand away from her mouth.

"Let me go. What are you doing?" she whispered back.

"What am I doing? What are you doing? Why were you so close to your date? Does he not have any respect for boundaries? Was there any reason that you didn't push him away when he hugged you?" He was getting worked up again as he felt her bare back, knowing that not long ago someone else dared to touch her.

"What? What are you talking about? When did you see me?"

"With that guy. The tall one. On the terrace. I saw you hugging him." his hand had started roaming over her bare back, softly caressing and the sensation was electrifying. Her skin stayed warm and tingled. It was getting harder to focus on what he was saying.

Taking a shallow breath, she questioned, "Were you spying on me? What difference does it make if he hugs me anyway? Remember I'm getting married soon. He was my date. He has every right to hug me. But you shouldn't be holding me. Not like this. Please let me go."

"I wasn't spying. I saw you and I was coming to talk to you. And it makes a difference to me." Pulling her closer he continued, "I should be the only one, holding you, hugging you."

What was he talking about? Had he been there at the function? She hadn't seen him come in. That was when she noticed his suit. He was obviously talking about Moksh, but the hug was just between friends. With all these thoughts running through her head she asked him the most important one,

"Why Abhishek? You never wanted to be the one, so why now? We decided, together that I was going to get married to someone else. Isn't that what this search is all about? Finding me a Mr. Perfect, getting me married off so you can have your rock star lifestyle back. Dadi also knows so that's not a problem."

"I'm trying so hard to forget that I love you, to tell you that you're the one who is perfect for me. Why do have to make it so difficult for me. Just let me go. I'll get married and get out of your life. I just need a little more time to forget you. That's what you want so don't make it harder on me."

His grip loosened. Did she...she said she loved him. She loves him. Everything felt right. His world made sense again. All that confusion, the dreaded feeling in his gut disappeared. She was still struggling to get out of his arms. So he tightened his hold and asked, "What. Did. You. Just. Say?"
"Let me go Abhishek.

"Not that Chashmish, you just said you love me. Is that true?"

"Lo...Lo...Love? I never said that. What are you talking about? No Abhishek. It's late. I need to change. Please." She needed to be careful. She had finally decided to start getting over him; his words, his touch shouldn't weaken her resolve.

"Okay but before I let you go, I'll tell you why. Seeing you with someone else gets me angry. I don't like seeing anyone else touching you. You're mine and you always will be." He hand moved to her cheek and his forehead softly touched hers.

"I thought I wanted you gone from my life, but almost losing you made me realise that it was always supposed to be you. That one intimate act with Moksh scared me; that you would be gone and I would be...alone...without you. And the thought of being without you was killing me inside. I'm never going to let you go."

She moved even closer to him and looked straight at him. She saw the unsaid words in his eyes, felt them in his touch. Tears filming her eyes, she shook her head, willing him to stop.

But he needed to say it all so he continued, "Dadi told me before when life takes you down a path you didn't choose, you might get to the destination you always wanted to be. True I didn't choose you, but you're who I want to be with. Forever. It took a while but I've finally understood. Let me show you Pragya."

*** *** ***
Abhi and Pragya walked out of their room hand in hand the next morning and came down for breakfast. The dadis were the only ones who were unsurprised when Abhi announced that there was going to be no re-marriage. Their plan although had been risky was successful and Dadi silently thanked God that everything worked out. Winking at Indu daasi, they asked Abhi to tell them what made him change his mind.


Epilogue - Her Mr. Perfect
Pragya didn't know her husband could be so romantic and that she would enjoy it so much. He'd surpassed every expectation of hers, doing small things to make her happy. And now he'd pulled all stops for their first anniversary celebration.
Music played in the background, whilst families and friends milled around. Waving, Pragya pulled Abhishek to meet someone special,

"Moksh, hi! How are you? You never got to meet Abhishek did you?"
"Abhishek - Moksh. Moksh - Abhishek."
Both men shook hands and Abhi's hand went round Pragya's waist possessively. "So good to finally meet you."
"Moksh is a producer. I wonder how it is you don't know each other."
Moksh smiled and replied, "Now we will. After all he is my friend's husband. We'll even work together one day."
Just then Pragya was called over by Dadi, "Be nice." She whispered to Abhi before she walked away leaving the two men to talk.
"So, Moksh, still talking to Pragya?" Abhi spoke first, breaking the silence.
"She'll always be my friend. If I'd met her before, I'd definitely have gotten married to her first."
"In your dreams buddy. She was always meant to be mine. Anyways enjoy the party. See you around." He walked away to find Pragya, wanting to dance with her.
Moksh laughed at that statement. He knew it was true, she was always meant to be his, but it had taken planning and almost lies to bring them together. He had taken a liking to Abhi's Dadi when he'd come to meet Pragya the first time. And had decided to find out the full truth.
His situation was similar to Pragya's; meeting different women to find the right fit and he had found her before he'd taken Pragya on their second date. But when he's explained what he was doing, she wanted him to help out. He had kept in touch with Dadi since then. He knew that Pragya had been getting more restless as the number of potential grooms reduced. He called Dadi to mention that he would give her one last push.
And he was presented with precisely that moment at the fundraiser. Purposely he'd distracted Pragya every single time she was about to come face to face with Abhi and then he'd seen Abhi walk out after her so he decided to play his last card. The hug was the end of the whole pretence and that was confirmed with the tight hold on the glass and the flash of anger on Abhi's face.
Smiling, he raised his glass in a silent toast to Dadi and walked off to find his fiancee.

THE END (OR BEGINNING)
Edited by MinMinMehra - 10 years ago
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res!!!

UNRES!!!

yayyy!!! it's up!!! so long have i been waitinggg

ok live reactions!!

whistling as he walks away!! ok you didn't say that but i imagined it. hands in his pockets wandering off thinking about his real love. how i hate him and yet how PERFECTLY ON POINT. this is who abhi was in the early days of his marriage. tanu was way more real to him than pragya.

and he's a better boyfriend in your fic than on the show...he's actually noticing that she's not liking the demands his family makes on his time ;)

oooh! good point!! aalu hate || daadi love re: pragya. never thought of that!

YES HE TOLD DAADI OMG PRAISE BE TO ALL THINGS

GODDD

I almost can't believe in a version of Abhi that would tell the truth to Daadi, simple and no frills, and motivated only by a desire to set things right. Abhi on the show is so far from that this seems too good to be true. Thank you for making it true here <3

LOL "she knew how dumb her grandson could be" 🤣

"determined to make a liar out of her"...aww...omg......powerful way to express daadi's position though!!

omg!!! the way you are laying out daadi's plan!!! eee!!!! i've only read the first few lines and i'm already so excited!

"the guilt of doing so much wrong in her life will make him find the best possible match for her" - you know, this is so convincing?? like i could so see this as a reason for abhi to do this. amazing. i love it!!!

oh my god oh my god oh my god pragya. i don't even have words for how beautifully you have rendered her pain...and it's not even mere pain. that resignation to carry through, knowing that her life what it is. something more nuanced than pain. and oh, just, wow <3!!!!

STAYING HERE AS MY DAUGHTER YES YES YES YES GOOO DAADI 👏

"his new wife will take over the task" lol when pigs will fly. love daadi for saying what she knows will never be true 😆

"she didn't realize how used to him she had gotten" oh oh oh!!! a world of implication in so few words...haayee!!

ufff!! and putting his room back to the way it was, as if she'd never left it! so pragya and so perfect and emotionally vicious in its effect though not in its intention. awesome!!!

iii!!!!! am some kind of idiot?!! for saying you shouldn't post all at once?! because of course i want the rest RIGHT NOW PLEASEEE

but. waiting sweetens the fruit right...so i shall have my doublesweet dose tomorrow?! yes, let's call it that.

awesome beginning mini me, so many emotions carefully conveyed. the scene is set and the games are gonna get crazy and i am so so so so looking forward to it!!!

thank you for writing and thank you for posting!! love love love!!! 🤗


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res again...yes i'm being cheeky

unres!! few days late sorry 😳

what were the tubs on the vanity?? pragya's makeup?

omg your abhi is almost unbearable...so happy his closet is re-arranged and only belatedly realizing it means chashmish is gone. it hurts to read him this selfish but it's also really delicious in a twisted way. kacchi keri jaise khatta hota hai lekin tasteee too 😉 😆

HAHAHAA loved Daadi's rude surprise for Abhi. Get her settled...completely bombing his notion that she'd just fade back to her mayka...love it!!!

and prags thinking she'll go back pehli waali prags. really loved that...poor sweetheart, doesn't dare imagine anything else from life!

love daadi saying that pragya became her responsibility. i like that view of things. also liked her saying that she wanted prags to be happy as abhi would be happy with tanu. twisting the knife, though he doesn't realize it's in his back yet 😉

"a hand in playing with your present" - beautiful phrasing!

too funny with abhi's "of course someone will marry you"...reminds me of hookup abhi thinking she's not that bad really, just not for him. a rational take on not-yet-in-love abhi!!!

preeto is matchmaker aunty na!! last chapter i had forgotten her name and wondered if you were introducing a new character, ooops 😳

hmmm interesting analytical point for abhi...we've never seen eye to eye, so how can we agree on a groom? oooh i'm so excited to see this process get under way!! hahahaaa

"he was happy daadi was thinking about chashmish's future." goshhh mini me...your portrayal of abhi is VERY on point but it's so hard to root for him when he's this indifferent...how are you gonna recover him as pragya's hero!!! ufff wondering wondering!

heehee tanu so sure that pragya refused daadi's condition and being unwilling to cede her place. wrong wrong wrong!!! 😃

so tanu's needs set the 2 month deadline!! good device! i like the way that sets things up 👍🏼

awww...pragya...used to him in the room...

i like her peptalk in the shower...trying to get through the day, whatever it takes...there's that saying about best laid plans, though!

ooh doing her prayers in the hall, nice detail!! kkb is not one of those shows that makes much use of the family mandir, but it's there so why not!

awww that breakfast scene is amazing!! so many little details, and careful watchers. eee!!!

and sly daadi!! inviting him to notice wilting pragya. when will it get in his head that he is the one who needs to bring the happiness back? slow and steady journey i know...looking forward to the next step!! eee!! 👏

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part 3!!!

eeks!!

so short mini me 😭

well we finally got a meeting!! i think you showed that really well, you were worried but you needn't have been. anant got his fair chance and it really wasn't a match!!

i didn't like tanu's entry at first but when she was looking over the biodatas for some reason i really liked it. maybe because i know what might be coming...heheheee. nice touch with aalu in australia!!

clueless bro remains CLUELESS omg. hope we get to see some spark from pragya going forward. maybe someone will come to bring it out of her ;)

loved this part too and want more soon!! like when i wake up ok!!! 😃
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Unres for part 4

"4 random men going on dates with his wife" 🤣 heeeheee abhi's annoyance is golden I love it!


Omg daadi...deadpan "take tanu on a date"! love it, handling him with razor sharp delicacy 😆

Aww! Pragya misses banter and comfortable silences with abhi. It's amazing that their silences somehow are comfortable!! Unspoken fit. Dreamy actually.

Uff post date conversation hits me so hard. They're both trying to be serious and genuine about this. That's good from pragya but at abhi I just wanna scream "bro wake up! Don't let this get farther!" haaaye our rockhead rockstar!

And Eeks those last few moments!! Silence with you feels like home...her heart is full but her voice is stuck. uff ho, pragya!! Exquisitely painful paragraph there.
Love the slightly melancholy tinge of abhi's musings in the kitchen...and the silver lining that he's finally get a clue.

Great chapter baachu, loved both the plot movement with the awful awkward date and the emotional development with abhigya trying to feel their way through the situation!!



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"My bahu will be all the way in Hong kong" - I know daadi is genuinely worred but I find this just 😆


Omg I love damian watching for body signals and noticing abhigya mirroring each other! Great visuals for this scene!

LOL at pragya being territorial while tanu is unconcerned! Haayeee

Omg too good at damian saying tanu is a nice person and pragya responding "not to me"! Haha.

Pragya doing this bc she loves abhi...uff :(


Eeks talking and thinking about kissing but not doing it!! So mature these two...and so careful, which is good because the situation has so many painful points waiting to explode.

Yay love love loved this chapter...pragya trying to stay focused on moving forward but unable to get abhi off her mind, and abhi finding that the further pragya gets from him the more he thinks about her. yes yes yes!

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unres part 6


"he had told her to keep the weekend free for him" - excuse me while i swoon dead omg

with the classic movie/coffee date and then especially the amusement park day, it's so satisying to imagine her just having fun. satisfying to think of someone spending all that time with her just because he's interested in her. all that attention focused on her. yay for pragya <3

yayyy i love tanu saying that they don't need to married right away, it's enough to just have pragya gone 😆 👏

that should show abhi her priorities nah!! and good for her for having them.

"deep down he knew there would be no marriage for him"...oh 🥺 the loneliness this implies...eeeks!!!! but maybe it's good for him to feel this way. will it help him appreciate what he takes for granted? will he understand how lucky he is, when he gets more than he expected? eeeksss

yay beach day!!! pragya stretching her boundaries, slowly warming up to new possibilities in life. and hurrah for moksh for encouraging her - i loveee beach days so i love the idea of pragya getting ready to enjoy one!

and uff!! completely misunderstanding abhi...this girl and her tunnel vision. she thinks abhi's saying she doesn't look good enough?!! so her. hayeee.

"you're going to be getting a lot of attention" - round of applause for abhi for being frank and warning her without getting gross about it. god i love this more mature abhi!!

eee!! mumbai cruise!! navigating the yacht!! omg so many fantasies. sweet ones. loving moksh for pragya!!

heehe so abhi wants to talk, wowww. amazing to see him finally recognizing his restlessness and looking toward the right direction for the solution.

chapter 6 was epic, but in an understated way. i know that makes no sense but i can't find any other way to say it!!



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Eee! Again you were worried about nothing. Chapter 7 was really engrossing!!

So many feels so many feelsss

Damian and Tanu!! Woohoo for them being together and out of the way!! So sweet that Damian wanted Pragya to be there was one of his few friends.

OMG the balcony scene! So few words but just enough to create the most devastating and impactful feelings. Aieee!!!

Maybe karma was coming around. He was suffering for the torture he had put her through.<-- Uff!!! And he's ready to accept it even. Wow, this is really powerful.

My meeting all these suitors has spoilt your life
<-- omg this girl! this self catastrophising girl! someone needs to tell her all the troubles of the world are not her fault! haila. but i can see her thinking this way and it's just...achingly exactly right. I mean, it feels like how Pragya would think!!

Subconsciously knowing there'd never be another marriage...but that doesn't mean he'll be alone. He just doesn't know it yet! And family dinner was adorable to mention!!

Oooh so very interesting with Nilay. A night that was all business and kept being interrupted by business. And some people in mismatched relationships actually have to live with that all the time...thank goodness Pragya realized and felt comfortable enough to say it would be better for them both not to proceed and that he needs to settle his work life first. Is that kind of on purpose, to have Pragya be assertive? I feel like before marrying Abhi she would've had a full-on compromise mindset, and if she'd been matched with Nilay then she wouldn't have said anything about how they didn't click but rather would've tried to make it work. But maybe having been through everything and needing to do this as a second chance, she can be more realistic about what's workable and not?? Idk you have to tell me if any of this was in your thoughts or not!!

And uff, taking the signal that Abhi doesn't want her even after Tanu...wrong signal!! But he's not sending the right ones!! Haayeee!!

Looking forward to chapter 8 and hoping to see some more of Moksh!! 😃
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unres ch 8


eee!! so it's all building up to this. pragya feeling ready to move on. believing she can love and be happy again, if not wholly then enough. EEE!!! want this for her so much ufff.

aww...getting her first flowers... awww...moksh!!! ⭐️

blush coloured gown sounds perfect!! pragya would look stunning i think. and moksh thinks too apparently 😆

yay moksh called dadi about the dress!! very conscientious of him 👍🏼

the terrace scene!! oh oh oh!!

distance herself from him...i wonder i she has thought about how she could. everything in her subconsciously resists that though, and so here she is, struggling with herself...!

yay abhi was watching i am so glad!! something needs to jolt him into decision, hopefully this was it! but he seems to be walking off with the wrong idea so i'm nervous 😕

eeeks!!! so close to the end, how!!!! amazing chapter though, honestly. loved the atmosphere and the progress. eee!!!
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unres ch 9


eee!!!! so this is his version of talking to her!! agitated and pulling her against the pillar, eee!!! 😲

so possessive! respect for boundaries indeed, and then his hands wandering everywhere! i love the line about him being more annoyed to remember that someone else had been given that privilege not long before too 😛

"I should be the only one, holding you, hugging you." <-- YES FINALLLYYY

"I'm trying so hard to forget that I love you, to tell you that you're the one who is perfect for me. Why do have to make it so difficult for me. Just let me go. I'll get married and get out of your life. I just need a little more time to forget you. That's what you want so don't make it harder on me." <-- i LOVE THIS SPEECH SO MUCH. Finally Pragya just lays it all out. The feelings she can't extinguish, the conditions he's created, the determination she's trying to abide by, and the pressure he's unfairly putting on her. YAY.

She was still struggling to get out of his arms. So he tightened his hold <--
That's our Abhi 😆

"Lo...Lo...Love? I never said that. What are you talking about?" ...She had finally decided to start getting over him; his words, his touch shouldn't weaken her resolve. <-- Yes! Perfect reaction from Pragya. Still trying to stick by her promises.

"You're mine and you always will be." He hand moved to her cheek and his forehead softly touched hers." <--- eee what a visual!

EEEKS. I didn't choose you but you're who I want to be with - let me show you - and then walking hand in hand to breakfast! Haaaye did asterisks every imply so much?? I love it. It's a jump cut but I think it works. The invitation to fill in the blanks leaves more scope for romance than writing it out ever could.

yay for the dadis' plan working out! a perilous risk indeed but after going through this process abhigya should both really know how to value each other and how important it is to express that to each other. worth the risk!

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