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Posted: 10 years ago
thanks dear for the pm and update soon
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Very nice updates.. Pl. include me in your pm list :):)

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Celu...awesome dear...aab update bhi kar ye wali teri story tu complete please kar
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Hi my dear readers!

Actually was a little busy so couldn't update for long.
My exams will end on 17th.
Can't give assurity but will try to update after that as soon as possible.
Thank you so mo much for still remebering the story!
Thanks all once again!

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And finally. I am here with the 5th Chapter of the story. I know that this time i'm awfully late. I should write an apology letter to my readers right? Will write someday. Filhaal enjoy the 5th part.(Well not much to enjoy here actually). This update dedicated to my reader, the one who is requests me to upate KASPY everytime we meet, Roshini!!! (Roshiniluvspraja)


Chapter 5

An exasperated and angry Dheer Bai dashed inside her room and with all her might slammed the door producing a large noise breaking the silence of Chittod palace. She closed the door and bolted it with her hands which trembled with anger.

"Kunwar Pratap ka vivah hone ja raha hai. Kunwar Pratap ka! Fir kuch hi dino baad Kunwar Pratap, nahin Maharana Pratap ban jayenge ve. MAHARANA PRATAP!!! Mewar ke rana. Aur hum aur humrein Jagmal, iss mahal se bahar honge, sada ke liye!" She said to herself as if predicting her and her son's future.

"Aap vivah karenge Kunwar Pratap? Humarein swapn(dream) ko nasht kar, varsho ki humarein Mewar ke Raj Maata, humare putra jagmaal ke singhasan par baithne ka sapna nasht kar denge aap? Nasht kar denge? Humein iss mahal se nikal denge? Kabhi nahin. Humerin hote hue aisa kabhi sambhaw nahin hai. NAHIN HAI!!!!" She screamed all raged. Her eyes depicted the amount of anger boiling inside her.

"Rani Dheer Bai Bhatiyani, dekha haar gayi na aap? Aakhir tay ho hi gaya na Kunwar Pratap ka vivah? Kuch nahin kar paayi na aap? Jald hi rajyabhishek bhi ho jayega unka aur phir Kunwar nahin Maharana Pratap kahar pukarega pura Rajputana unhein, aur aap, aapko toh vahi jaana parega jahan aapko varsho pehle hi hona chahiye tha- ISS MAHAL KE BAHAR! ha ha ha ha ha!" It was her again. Dheer Bai turned towards the mirror and stared at her reflection. It was her, talking. A mocking smile was all that was visible on her face. Not only today, that woman inside the mirror often talked to her and mocked her of the mistakes she had done. This was hell annoying to Dheer Bai. Her ears pricked listening to those mocking laughs all the time.

"Fir se agayi aap? Kyun aa jati hai baar baar aap humarein samaksh. Kyun nahin rehne deti aap humein chain se? " Dheer Bai asked in an angry tone.

"Hum? Hum toh baar baar aapko bass yahi samjhane aate hai ki parajit ho gayi hai aap. Maan lijiye aap apni iss parajay ko. Maan lijiye ki haar chuki hai aap!" replied the woman, her lips curving into an evil smile.

"Nahin, Rani dheer Bai Bhatiyani kabhi haar nahin sakti.Hum Kunwar Pratap ka vivah kabhi nahin hone denge! Kabhi nahin. Na 10 varsh pehle humne unka vivah hone diya tha aur na iss baar denge. Is baar phir hum hi jeetenge iss khel mein aur Kunwar Pratap ko humesha ke liye khatam kar denge. Unhe hum jeevit hi nahin chorenge singhasan par baithne ke liye." Dheer bai said trying to convince the the woman in the mirror who thought her more of a loser, but the truth was she was just pacifying herself by saying this.

Dheer Bai's replica spoke"Kya kaha apne? Aap Kunwar Pratap ka vivah nahin hone dengi? THIK JAISE 10 VARSH PEHLE NAHIN HONE DIYA THA? Sahi kaha aapne. Fir thik ussi tarha aapki kuch sadharan si galtion ke karan Kunwar Pratap ka toh vivah ho hi jayega, saath mein aap aur aapka putra Jagmaal bhi Chittod mahal se nikal diye jayenge, jo pichli baar hote hote reh gaya tha. Haaa haa haaa haa haaa."

"Varsho pehle Kunwar Pratap ne toh bas aap se apna sambandh toda tha, parantu ab dekhiyega, kaise kuch hi dino mein aap bhi iss mahal se bahar hoti hai! Aur aapko pata toh hai na, iss baar kunwar pratap ki bindni Jaiwanta Bai ji ki pasand ki hai. THIK JAISE AJABDE THI. Aap samajh rahi hai na hum aapko kya kehna chahte hai?" Dheer Bai felt her head ache by the tone in which she was mocked. She wanted to pierce a dagger right through Pratap's heart. He was the reason of all hese miserable years she had spent in this palace. And now another trouble. His BETTER HALF, as they say, was going to step inside this palace.

"Aap kaise keh sakti hai aisa? Ve...ve humein nahin nikal sakte iss mahal se, kabhi nahin...nahin. Nahin nikal sakte ve humein!!!! Ve apni choti Maa ke saath aisa nahin kar sakte."

"Galat keh rahi aap. Choti Maa nahin, Dheer Bai Bhatiyani, woh aurat jiska hath unke jeewan ke adhar, unke prem, unki Ajabde ki hatya mein tha. Koi nahin aayega aapko bachaane Dheer. Koi nahin. Woh shan door nahin jab aapka Mewar ki Raj Maata banne ka sapna humesha ke liye nasht ho jayega. Ha ha ha ha ha ha." With the last sentence Dheer Bai's replica inside the mirror broke out into a loud mocking laughter. This indeed pierced Dheer Bai's ears. She found the noise intolerable.

"Nahin...nahin...NAHIN." Dheer Bai threw the beautiful flower vase into the mirror which shatterd into a thousand little pieaces. But alas, she could still hear that mocking laughter, it echoed inside her ears. She shut her ears with her hands trying to get rid of this annoying noise.

"Kya kuch nahin kiya humne. Fir bhi, fir bhi hum reh gaye asafal, sirf ek sadharan se bhool ke karan humse humara sab kuch chin gaya. Yadi humne woh bhool na ki hoti toh aaj vivah Kunwar Pratap ka nahinn Jagmaal ka ho raha hote. Khwaab Maharana Pratap nahin, Maharana Jagmaal ke dekhe jaate par aisa kuch nahin hua."

"Kya socha tha humne aur...aur kya ho gaya. Humne socha tha ki Kunwar Pratap ko unki Ajabde, Daaji raj aur unki Rani maa se unhe humesha ke liye alag kar denge aur unke sab kuch ban jayenge, unhe apne ishaare par...arghhh...parantu hua kya, humne unhe apne Daajiraj aur Ajabde se toh door kar diya, parantu hum...hum bhi unse utne hi door ho baithe. Humari baat toh kya, ve toh humein dekhne par hi krodh se bhar uthte hain..."

"Parantu iss bar naahin. Bhale hi humara aapko apno se door kar andar se todne ki yojna asafal ho gayi ho, iss baar aisa nahin hone denge hum. Yadi aapka vivah ho bhi gaya, toh bhi hum aapko raj singhasan par baithne ke liye jeevit nahin chodenge. Woh singhasan sirf aur sirf humare putra Jagmaal ka hai."

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Jaiwanta Bai slowly opened the door of the dark room and without making any kind of sound, softly closed the door. She turned around and could now see the dim light of the lamp kept on the bedside table. Her eyes shifted to the bed, no, the man lying on it and instantly she could feel her eyes welling up with tears. Restricting those tears to her eyes only, she advanced towards the bed and softly sat on the edge of the bed.

The dim light of the lamp illuminated his face but still he looked as lifeless as it always did over the past 10 years. Jaiwanta Bai caressed his face with love and then suddenly something made her draw her hand back to herself. The love that adorned her face few moments ago had changed. No, she should not be here. Definitely not. If Pratap gets to know about it, again he'd get furious which was not good. She should go, yes, she should go now. She got up from the bed, careful enough not to disturb the sleeping person and turned around to leave the place when she felt a grip around her wrist. A slack grip by a cold hand. "Humse baat kiye bina hi chali jaayengi aap...Jaiwanta Bai ji?" Came a weak voice from behind. Taking a deep breath she turned around to face the speaker.

"Bataiye na Jaiwanta Bai ji..kk...kya aap humse baat kiye bina hi chali jayengi humein...chor kar...jiss tarha sa..sabhi chale gaye." His painful vioce pierced her heart as she suppressed her tears.

"Vaid ji ne kaha hai aapka sharir abhi bhi bohot durbal hai. Achha hoga yadi aap abhi aaram hi karein toh. Hum aapko virakt nahin karna chahte Rana Ji." She replied coldly.

A weak smiled broke into his face. "Peechle 10 varsho se hum yahi toh sunte aa rahein hai. Humara sharir durabal hai, humein aaram ki avashyakta hai. Humein...humein pata hai Jaiwanta Bai ji ki hum aswasth hai aur iss sansaar mein bass kuch hi dino ke athithi hai hum..."

As soon as he uttered those word Jaiwanta Bai covered his mouth by her soft hands to prevent him to say any further. "Rana Ji. Aise ashubh baatein aur kabhi mat kijiyega. Kissne kaha aapko yah sab. Aap...aap bohot jald hi swastha ho jaayenge aur fir se iss kaksh ke bahar paav rakh paayenge."

"Kab Jaiwanta Bai ji kab? Kitne varsho se toh pratiksha kar rahein hai hum uss din ka, parantu dekhiye woh aaj bhi nahin aaya." Jaiwanta Bai shattered listening this.

"Humse milne toh koi aata bhi nahin. Na hi Sajja Bai ji aati hai aur...aur na hi aap. Kunwar Pratap...pata nahin ve kitne barein ho gaye honge. Kitne varsho pehle dekha tha humne unhein. Ek hi mahal mein reh kar hum apne hi putra se milne hetu itne saalon se vanchit hai. Humse adhik durbhagyashaali(unlucky) pita bhala kaun ho sakta hai jisne ek hi chad ke neeche rehte hue bhi apne bete se na varsho se baat ki hai aur na dekha hai." Tears rolled down his eyes and expression of helplessness marked his face.

"Kya humein bura nahin lagta rana ji? Koshish toh humne bhi k hai parantu Kunwar Pratap...aap se swayam milne ki baat chodiye...ve kisiko bhi aapse milne aate dekhte hai toh krodhit ho jaate hai. Apni bhraas(angry) nikalne ke chalte ve swayam ko hi ghayal kar baithte hai. Koi nahin hai unka khayal rahne ke liye. Ve na swayam apna dhyaan rakhte hai aur na kisi dusre ko rakhne dete hai sivaaye humare. Hum vivash hai Rana Ji. Ek hum hi hai jo...yadi unhe humko bhi khud se door kar liya toh ve kaise reh paayenge...nahin sambhaal paayenge ve khud ko..." Suppressed tears broke out, making their way down the queen's cheeks.

"Hum jaante hai Jaiwanta Bai ji, aur isske zimmedaar hum hai, parantu humara vishwaas kijiye Jaiwata Bai Ji, hum...hum nirdosh hai...humne kuch nahin kiya hai, humein nahin pata Kunwar Pratap ko vishwaas kyun nahin hai!" Wth pleading eyes Uday Singh looked at Jaiwanta Bai's face which had blank expressions.

"Jaiwanta Bai ji! Ap..aapko bhi vishwaas nahin hai hum par...? Aa..apko bhi? Aap aisa kaise kar sakti hai? Aapko hum par, apne pati par vishwaas nahin hai? Aapko bhi lagta hai Ajabde ke hatya humne karvaai thi? Bataiye Jaiwanta Bai ji? Aapko bhi yahi lagta hai kya?" The agitation was visible in his face. He was getting hysterical now. Uday Singh tried getting up from the bed as he babbled, sweating profusely.

For a moment she had frozen. Those sentences which she dreaded to hear was uttered by him. She always felt numb when he asked this particular question-'Do you too think that I'm the one responsible for Ajabde's murder?' She didn't had a answer to this question. By the sudden movement of the bed created by Udai Singh's effort to sit up brought her back from her thoughts to the semi dark room.

"Rana Ji, Rana ji, shaant ho jaaiye...aaa...aap shaant ho jaiye. Yadi aap aisa karenge toh aapki sharirk awastha aur bhi bigad jayegi. Vaid ji na kaha hai ki aap apne mastishka mein zyada dabaw na daale. Yeh aapke liye bilkul sahi nahi hai. Let jaiye Rana ji." She made him lie back on the bed once again.

"Woh Rana Ji hum, hum aapko Kunwar Pratap ke vivah ke baarein mein batane aaye the. Dheer Bai ji ne aapko iss barein mein toh bataya hi..." Before she could complete her sentence Udai Singh interrupted "Naam bhi mat lijiyega unkaa humerein samaksh. Aaj unhi ki wajha se humari yah dasha hai." His eyes were red with rage. He truly hated that woman.

"Toh iska arth hai unhone aapko kuch nahin bataya?" She asked a litlled surprised. Though she knew that earlier Dheer Bai had said she would inform Udai Singh only to escape from that place. After all who could know that woman better than her. She very well understood that the news of Pratap's marriage must've struck her like thunder.

"Humein toh yaad nahin pichli baar ve kab humse milne aayi thi."

"Koi baat nahin Rana ji. Aap chinta mat kjiye. Woh hum aapse Pratap ke vivah ke baarein mein hi baat karne aaye the."

Jaiwanta Bai started. "Humne Kunwar Pratap ko apni saugandh dila kar unhe vivaah karne ke liye raazi kiya hai." "Hum Ujjain gaye the, Gauri Puja mein jaane hetu nimantran bheja gaya tha humein. Wahan hum Ujjain ki Rajkumari, Aakriti se mile, aur ve humein bohot achhi lagi. Humein lagta hai ki ve Kunwar Pratap ke liye sabse upyukt kanya hai.Aur...aur kahin na kahi humein yeh vishwaas hai ki ve Chittod mahal ki paristhitiyon ko sudhaar paayengi." A ray of hope made its way into Udai Singh's heart. It meant that still relationships could be mend.

"Humne Indravati ji, Aakriti ki maa se baat ki thi. Unhone apni swikriti prakash ki hai. Hum soch rahein the ki kal hi shagun lekar hum Ujjain ke liye rawana honge. Bass aapki sahmati..."

"Humari sahmati...iska arth hai...kya humari bhi koi baatein maani jaati hai iss mahal mein...humein koi apatti nahin hai...hum bhi aapke saath jayenge kal."

"Kya? Yeh aap kya keh rahein hai rana ji. Aapki sharirik sthiti thik nahin hai. Aap nahin jaa paayenge humarein saath." She was sorry that he couldn't go. But his condition was severe. The man who is not even able to sit properly, would go to Ujjain. Impossible. She undestood how painful it must be to him that he was not able to accompany them. He too wanted Pratap to get married soon so that Pratap could sit on Mewar's throne.

"Rana ji. Humein abhi jaana hoga. Khamba ghani." With that she left the room. Lonliness once again gripped him.The suffocating darkness filled the room as the lamp blew of.


I know this was not that interesting but its important for the story to progress. Thanks to all those who still follow my story because i understand its tough for the readers to again connect with the story when it's update at such big intervals. But what can I do. Dad has got sticter. Annual exams. Projects. Arghhh. I'm stuck ya know. Well i will TRY to update sooner. TRY okay? No promiss because i hardly fulfill what I promise. That's a bad thing. Chalo bye bye!!!!!!
Now please do barsat of your wonderful comments. And don't forget to like the post!!!!!

Dekho you all should comment more. You know it encourages me to continue or otherwise I'm really to lazy even to open my comp.!!!! :(

You can find more of my writing pieces on PrAja in my writing index!!!
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*FOR ME ,FAISAL KHAN AND ROSHNI WALIA WOULD ALWAYS BE THE PRATAP AND AJABDE(AAKRITI IN THIS ONE) OF MY STORIES. HOWEVER, READERS ARE FRE TO IMAGINE THEIR RESPECTIVE FAVORITE ACTOR AND ACTRESS AS PRAJA*



Edited by AsYa_Celana - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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kitne shocks milte h mujhe teri stry me..bt tu ladki h ki update krne ka naam hi nhi leti...
Ajabdeh's murder ab ye mystery kab solve hogi😆..wat to say abt dis update .DB tho h hi shaitaan..
JB-US convo sad convo infact..
teri stry progress krte krte meri saans atk jayegi 😆waiting 4 nxt1
Edited by RoshiniluvPrAja - 10 years ago
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You are back with an update Yayyy...I must say that part was actually interesting to see what all has taken place in palace...I know curfews on the net are a such a bad thing but studies come first...so please do update when you get the time... am waiting for it 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
This is the first time I have seen this story, so just read it all. Its interesting. Waiting to see how it unfolds.
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Celu superb update but please story complete karna...waiting

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