Drabbles: 30. Episode XXXI- Return of the Jallad (Pg 95) [Note Pg 98] - Page 45

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Posted: 11 years ago
its awesme
really loved it

a
read all the drabbles in one goo



sweeet!!!!!
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: gangaprakash38

smooth... lovely update...just leave me thirsty for more.👏


Originally posted by: shreya_rc

wow wow !! my midnight wandering at IF got rewarded !


Originally posted by: DDC1

From Alexander Pope:

Nay, fly to Altars; there they'll talk you dead;
For Fools rush in where Angels fear to tread.


Lovely update..


Originally posted by: hkdrama

"How would she appreciate that the greatest threats to their fragile, budding relationship lay in the same bedroom, in the same bed?" : hmmm...thinking

Nice update 👍🏼


Originally posted by: inspiringstars

Making an entry into RangRasiya forum with your drabbles. Started watching the show not so long ago, but have been a forum member since long time, so was looking around this forum. Found these drabbles, and drabbles have always excited me, because its an art to convey so much, with little words, or lesser words than usual.


Let me say this, I loved each and every one of your drabble, they are simple, very evocative of what you write, and they all have beautifully written characters. Plus your style of writing it and the names of chapters, they intrigue me. :) I like how even though the drabbles arent in continuation, they do have the connection, and the story is progressive.

Hoping to read more, though I am not sure if I am going to be able to continue watching the show.

I cannot believe you are just beginning writing here, saw your posts. You are a brilliant writer, I am glad RR made you delve into it (Assuming you hadn't before).


Originally posted by: likeadesigirl

Wow. I'm at a loss for words. I"m thoroughly impressed with your writing. I like how you've built up their relationship- I hope the show doesn't make a mockery of their relationship and respects a marriage- and I hope Laila is used as well as she has been in this story. Personally, I think Rudra has enough honor that he wouldn't have a mistress while married- which is exactly what you've shown in this. Great work 👏


Thank you so much! 😊
@inspiringstars- I've written before but this is a first of sorts for me-- in terms of style, tone, and format.
@likeadesigirl- I don't believe he would either. I've tried to stick as close to my initial perceptions of the characters as possible. Those are usually the ones that stay with me.
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: LyssaPie

Interesting so he's worried about two things and not just one..


Originally posted by: custodian75

Nice trick paro, but rudr is too worried about you to appreciate it.


Originally posted by: Exprimere

The subtlety of it all. Your piece has a big impact with all that is unsaid.

Another smile-fetching update, with danger lurking in the corner.


Originally posted by: sariarshi97

You know you write magic, don't you? That kind of magic that wraps you under it's spell!! When you can do nothing but give them the power to capture your imaginations and twist it into a tangled mess of euphoria!!

Oh! You are gifted TT...I'm loving this series:)


Originally posted by: Polkadots78

Adorable it was...both Paro's attempts at placating Rudra and his attempt at remaining angry with her :)


Originally posted by: liya96

I just love your writing style.. It's amazing :)


Originally posted by: --BumbleBee--

TT, I just caught up with your story and I'm going to be stalking 😉

I have never watched the show, but you make it so easy to love the characters..
And maybe, I really should start watching it..

Loving the Major Saab and his Paro.

Keep writing!

Cheers!


Originally posted by: vishruta

its awesme

really loved it

a
read all the drabbles in one goo



sweeet!!!!!


Thank you all so much! I'm glad that I still have you all with me. 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: |Persephone|

Great update as usual! I absolutely love how quick you update!
But I was a little confused at the ending paragraph - "How would she appreciate that the greatest threats to their fragile, budding relationship lay in the same bedroom, in the same bed?" Was he talking about himself or his distrust in the fact that she would run away at some point? Hopefully you'll clear that up in the next one?


Originally posted by: aruni50218

Ok me tubelight, didn't get it. Is he talking about his fear of Paro leaving him???


Originally posted by: IronButterfly

Silly me but didn't quite get the end =/


Originally posted by: Jaz1990

Awesome, about the ending, is da threat him?


Originally posted by: Hunnybunny3

2 fabulous updates and yes I'm with the majority didn't quite grasp the ending. Was he talking about himself?


Originally posted by: sonia_92

is rudra referring to himself as a threat? I don't understand... if yes, why? is there a past incident to explain this? is laila involved?


Originally posted by: shree10

sorry but like many others didnt quite get the ending.


Originally posted by: jisa

this was great...
but what do u mean by the last line..??
couldn't get it..
w8ng for next..!!!


Uh-oh. Sorry for being obscure, you guys. Totally not my intention. So I'm one of those annoying writers who hate explaining what they've written. Very schoolmarmish of me, but I like readers to form their own conclusions-- whatever they may be.
So I've collated all the theories that readers have offered in their comments, in the next post. Go through those? I'm always amazed by how different people read the same text differently and come up with different responses.
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: InvisibleSmile

They finally did the deed. It may have come before love, but sometimes...things happen. They needed each other. Laila's character becomes real and believable, in the sense that I actually felt sorry for her.

Lastly, Rudra's thoughts were sort of an acceptance of his own feelings, when it comes to Parvati. I presume, I am reading the last two sentences right? Basically, Rudra is a destructive individual who feels most in control, when he hands out destruction. However, the dimension of their relation is changing, so to try for a healthy relation would mean for him to be not in control. For example: he got angry at Paro for going to the fair without informing him. He wants to be in control, because that is the normal for him. He has lived by his own rules till now. But, now, Paro is opening new doors along with old ones.



Originally posted by: blackdice1001

...trust? his inability to make her stay? the bed sheets?? D:


Originally posted by: sslmay11

Is Rudra worried about his insecurities ...he's a broken man inside...Hope he gets healed inside too.


Originally posted by: meera30

I will save you from the world

But how do I save you from he who is me
For when the crystal shatters into a million pieces
It is my raised hand you will see

Run, while you can, run out of the door
Run, till you find that shore
When you do, say a little prayer
And promise me to love no more.

PS: I am definitely no poet. But I blame you, TT, for forcing me to unleash this upon the world ;)


Originally posted by: msin

Very well the devil is inside rudra...seeds of distrust... Suspicion which will not him settle for happiness


Originally posted by: DiyaS

What Paro should fear the most ... the devil inside Rudra.

That's what the last para meant, right?

Loving these ... keep them coming.


Thank you so much, you guys! 🤗
I loved reading the different possible reasons and motives you've all come up with. My answer would be-- I don't know. It's all of these. It's more. It's what you make of him.

@blackdice- 😆 Yeah, Rudra's worried that Paro hates their bedsheets so much, it will become a threat to their relationship. He really shouldn't have bought that ugly floral print.


@Meera- If you ever want to take over this series or co-write it, you have only to say the word. That poem was BEAUTIFUL and sums up Rudra and Paro so well, I don't for a minute believe that you are not a poet.


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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: dreamwinner

What happened to today's update😕


Originally posted by: shree10

TT forgot to post today's drabble.. 😭


Originally posted by: meera30


And it's Friday today - does that mean the weekend drought has begin in the Rann ke ret?


Sorry, sorry, laakhon sorry!
I was rather preoccupied with something else yesterday and couldn't focus on writing at all. We're back now. Weekend drought bole toh, I hope to get another drabble up. That's the best I can do.
😊
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Posted: 11 years ago

Ek Tooti Huyi Choodi Ki Keemat (Tum Kya Jaano, Rudra Babu?)



Paro had never felt so out-of-depth in her life. She fingered a shard of peacock blue glass that she had missed while making the bed earlier.

In the harsh light of day, it seemed ridiculous that it had taken the end of her favourite set of bangles for her to realize what should have been obvious-- just how superficial her relationship with him was.

She had spent the morning rehashing all their interactions since the night she'd accused him of having a mistress. He hadn't verbalized an answer. But he'd given her to understand that she was the only woman in his life. Under the comforting cover of darkness, it had been so easy to believe him.

Even now, it was not that she questioned his fidelity. Paro had enough faith in his belief in the sanctity of their marriage--especially now that he had consummated their relationship.

What bothered her was how he didn't seem to want to share more than his body with her.

Every time she ventured into sensitive territory, he clammed up. And if she pushed the point, he would storm off in an ungovernable rage. He would return eventually, of course. He would seek her out with the desperation of a drowning man-- treating her clothes and jewelry with rough disdain for daring to keep her away from him.

Last night, it had been one tentative question about Thakurain Maasa that had set him off. Her beautiful gilt-daubed blue bangles had ended up as collateral damage.

Staring at the single piece of curved glass resting in her palm, her eyes welled up.

Paro was beginning to suspect that while Rudra stood like a wall, protecting her from the world-- he was also a wall that kept her away from everything else, including himself.

And she didn't know what it would take for her to break through.

Was she greedy? Yes she was. She wanted all of him. Just like she had given him all of herself.

Sniffing loudly, she wiped her tears away, and dropped the piece of glass into her drawer. She couldn't bring herself to throw it away-- she had loved those bangles so.

~~~

She would talk to him, she resolved firmly. And then she prayed for the courage to see her resolution through.

She could hear him tramp down the corridor to their room.

Rudra barged into the room and Paro opened her mouth to begin her well-rehearsed speech.

But words failed her at the crucial moment, as he walked up to her and reached for her wrists.

He examined them carefully, all the while rubbing his thumbs gently across her delicate skin.

"It's been bothering me all day-- whether I hurt you accidentally last night or not. Kyun rehti hai iss jallad ke saath?"

His eyes held all the apologies he could not voice.

Swallowing the lump in her throat, she smiled. "I hit my head as a child. Tabse manhe jalladein hi pasand hain."

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Posted: 11 years ago
wonderful! have been reading these from the start - now I am a huge fan of drabbles - did i say you write beautifully - to say so much by writing so little is a gift and you definitely have it 😃
the latest one about the broken bangles ( my Hindi is not great) was lovely - who said love would be easy?
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Posted: 11 years ago
I love these drabbles! Love how ur progressing it
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Posted: 11 years ago
What a beauty TT! I was scared as I was reading through that this might end on a sad note.. for the weekend! But that Paro's dialogue - put a bright smile on my face!

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