Drabbles: 30. Episode XXXI- Return of the Jallad (Pg 95) [Note Pg 98] - Page 41

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Posted: 11 years ago
Just read all the drabbles...and I love them. They are brilliant. Wonderfully written, they explore and unravel all the complex emotions of the protagonists with so much sensitivity and beauty, that it makes for a very fulfilling reading experience. Thanks :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
I dont know how you manage to.write so much with so little words...👏
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: meera30

Believe me when I say I was waiting for this piece?


I was and you did justice to it.

Is it just me or could you have changed this entire thing to read Ocean, Happiness and the other L woman and it would have still made sense?






Originally posted by: Jaz1990

Loved how u showed how Laila was feelings


Originally posted by: blackdice1001

You did it again with your 'story with chapters that are flash-fiction length' haha!

I feel sorry for Laila, she had no one but Rudra did she :/ Not trying to distract you from your storyline but I'm totally petitioning for a hottie for Laila atm.


Thank you all! 😊
@Meera- Not gonna lie, this triangle reminds me so much of the one that cannot be named. 😆
@blackdice- I hear you. But I'm not going to tell you what I have planned for Laila. :P
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: gangaprakash38

👍🏼 wow... didn't think I was going to feel bad for Laila!!! you have got talent girl.


Originally posted by: memario

Just read all your drabbles in one go..you have the amazing ability to tell a story in just a few words keep up the good work 👍🏼


Originally posted by: Sofna

Never thought I would feel for Laila considering this is hr profession...but you have beautifully conveyed her heartbreak!


Originally posted by: current

ah but of course ..poor laila..although when it started i thought it was Paru ..after her ahem late night..😆

Poetry in motion..👏


Originally posted by: sparikh

that was so heart wrenching - u really feel for Laila.

-Sona


Originally posted by: Malini1

Well written as always, finally Laila, keep up the good work, you're too good with words.


Thank you so much! 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago


Originally posted by: custodian75

It was natural of Laila to feel envious of paro, but hope she is able to control this envy of hers and not do anything she will regret later.


Originally posted by: shagun-rocks

so this was from laila's point of view..at first i thought maybe it's paro who feels deprived of rudra's affection..wonder what laila's next course of action would be...


Originally posted by: sslmay11

Never thought I would feel for Laila. Your writing did it.


Originally posted by: Exprimere

I have always wanted that Laila br given a voice. I was so certain she also had a story to tell. Thank you so much for such a vivid, true and heartfelt account of her emotional state :)


Thank you all! 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: meera06

You have given a wonderful tale on Laila!!

I actually feel so bad for her..


Originally posted by: vaish912

So beautifully written .. To give tht much of yourself n not getting anything in return .. This must be hell for her .. N the PH has yet to give voice to Laila inRR .. May be one day soon they will ..


Originally posted by: shree10

Sorry TT, but after teasing us for so long, I wish you had graced us with little more of Parud heaven.

I am impatient to know how they are acting after the night of bliss..


Originally posted by: DDC1

TT: TQ & no worries. I get lazy ..at times.
OMG his kurtas seriously have to go! The red one today was just a tad bit better than the green. I'm laughing so hard over the Kurta that it takes away from the intense scene. Crisp white is what I vote for.


Originally posted by: Chicagobears

Just read all the drabbles...and I love them. They are brilliant. Wonderfully written, they explore and unravel all the complex emotions of the protagonists with so much sensitivity and beauty, that it makes for a very fulfilling reading experience. Thanks :)


Originally posted by: jisa

loved it...!!!!!
w8ng for next..!


Thank you so much, guys!😊
@Shree- I know, I am too, but Laila is a very important part of Rudra-Paro's story.
@DDC1- I don't know how I feel about his kurtas. I can't fault them-- they're traditional enough. Plus I own a saree that his green kurta looks like it's been cut out of. So, erm, I'm just going to go with the flow-- kurta or no kurta. 😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
Wonderful!! Amazing!! Very well written. Just went through all the Drabbles. Each one is perfect. And keeps me wanting and waiting for more..
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Posted: 11 years ago

The Folly of Fools


"Parvati!"

Maithili continued rolling out chappatis with a poker face while Sunehri, who was an incorrigible romantic, giggled behind her novel.

The woman in question shot her elder sister-in-law an apologetic look, before abandoning the vegetables that she had been chopping and hurrying out of the kitchen.

"Parvati!"

"Aayi!"

Running into their room, one look at his forbidding expression told Paro that she was in trouble.

She cautiously approached the Demon standing near the bed with a scrap of paper in his hand.

"Ji?"

Her polite query only seemed to exacerbate his temper as the frown on his face deepened.

"You went to the fair yesterday."

It wasn't a question. Parvati cringed. Here we go.

"Ji."

She could almost hear him grit his teeth.

"Alone."

"Ji. You were at work, Sunehri was in college, and Jija was fasting."

"So you couldn't wait one more day for me to take you? You knew I'd be home today! I wouldn't even have known if I hadn't found your bus ticket! How many times do I have to tell you that you are not--"

As his decibel rose, Paro made a quick decision. Stepping forward, she wrapped her arms around him, resting her head on his shoulder. She felt him stiffen momentarily, before he returned her embrace, drawing her closer.

"Don't be angry. The fair wrapped up yesterday. If I had waited till today, I wouldn't have been able to go at all. It was in the next village-- nothing could possibly have happened to me."

His fingers dug into the bare skin of her back and waist with deliberate possession.

"You are my wife, Parvati. Is it so hard to understand that? Understand that I have enemies? Understand that they may use you to get to me? Understand that when I say something, it is not without reason?"

The tight sarcasm in his tone told Paro that he knew exactly what she was doing, and that it was not working.

A tiny furrow of annoyance gathered on her brow. It was just a fair! It's not like she had gone to Jaipur by herself! Everything was working out now-- and who would dare attack Major Rudra Pratap Ranawat's wife in broad daylight anyway?

She pulled away from him, chastised.

"I'm sorry. Can I go back to the kitchen now? Jija needs my help."

He studied her face carefully, the anger gradually subsiding on his.

"Paro..."

She heard him sigh and looked up expectantly.

"Nothing. Go back to your Jija."

He returned to the paperwork lying on his table.

After hovering uncertainly for a minute, Paro walked out of the room just as quietly as she had entered it.

He slammed a file down on the table a little harder than necessary.

How was he to explain to her that it wasn't just external threats that he was worried about? How would she appreciate that the greatest threats to their fragile, budding relationship lay in the same bedroom, in the same bed?



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Posted: 11 years ago
smooth... lovely update...just leave me thirsty for more.👏
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Posted: 11 years ago
Great update as usual! I absolutely love how quick you update!
But I was a little confused at the ending paragraph - "How would she appreciate that the greatest threats to their fragile, budding relationship lay in the same bedroom, in the same bed?" Was he talking about himself or his distrust in the fact that she would run away at some point? Hopefully you'll clear that up in the next one?

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