Yuvraj entered the Sarna Mansion with a gun on his forehead. The family had just gotten up from breakfast, taking up their regular routine when they came to a halt as they found a familiar figure standing in middle of the doorway. " Tu! Tu yahan kaise aaya !" Cherry retorted abruptly stopping in between when Yuvraj pointed the gun towards him, immediately changing the position towards the vase kept on the side table by the couch and fired it, shocking everyone. " Yeh bata teri biwi kahan hai ?" he asked Kunj, letting out a maniacal laughter. " Yuvi, yeh tu kiya kar raha hai! Tujhe ghar se bahar nahi nikalna tha Yuvi !" Anita pleaded to him as Kunj looked up towards his room ...
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Natasha @--Natasha--
+ 2
8 years ago
See!This was not a shitty piece Areeba,you justified Kunj and Twinkle and Yuvraj so brilliantly.I love the authority that Yuvraj thinks he has and demands answers from Kunj and Twinkle.Both yelling for Twinkle was spot on.Thrilling OS indeed.Do write more for us
...Shakti... @...Shakti...
8 years ago
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unresfirst off areeba i dont think anything you can ever write would be classified as shitty your writing is always sophisticated and amazing!! now onto the OS i honestly LOVED it!!i really love how you play with the characters and the way you played with yuvi's character in this was mind blowing!! yuvi's pagalpan was full on and just the way you carried out the OS was great, i was looking forward to what was happening next loll i was caught in the suspense! awesome OS areeba! i always look fwd to your writings!
Sherni_Jerry @Sherni_Jerry
+ 2
8 years ago
Areeba this wasnt bad at all. it was awesome. loved it ❤️ pls write more :)
dramebaaz.af @dramebaaz.af
+ 6
8 years ago
LOL Twinkle is just perfect! Thank you!
dramebaaz.af @dramebaaz.af
+ 6
8 years ago
I had to put it there. I literally know I could've done so much better then what I put out. Oh my God! I am totally in love with Yuvi's sassiness with Kunj at this point like the way he literally questions him and demands answers from him even in the show has me in fits because there scenes are so unbelievable. LOL there is a lot of ways Anita is similar to Danger Daddy's clan. Take the easy and short route out of everything regardless of it being wrong. Even that chard, despite being morally righteous took wrong routes. TBH, I actually did leave Twinkle in a hanging position. initially the bullet brushed past her next. My inspiration for that was from Reid's situtaion in Criminal Minds season 8 finale. I would've left Twinkle in comatose or something like that but then I remembered Teddy's fragile heart and gave Twinkle her life back. Don't even bring me back to "acha sun na!" like that phrase gives my heart so many feels!! It is no longer an ordinary phrase. My friend called me out from behind with 'sun na' and I was like OHMYGOSH FEELS GO BACK INSIDE!! LOL, i have few more written and saved up in my laptop. Would post soon after refining them! Plus hriddey has requested a romantic One Shot so this Sunday, keep a look out!
dramebaaz.af @dramebaaz.af
+ 6
8 years ago
Thank you so much! You guys are just being too kind!
dramebaaz.af @dramebaaz.af
+ 6
8 years ago
Thanks hun! Glad you enjoyed!
dramebaaz.af @dramebaaz.af
+ 6
8 years ago
Thank you! I really depends on what I can come up with but i'll try to write long ones in future
dramebaaz.af @dramebaaz.af
+ 6
8 years ago
Thank you so much!I unfortunately would not be continuing this on over here because I don't think i'll be doing justice to the writing as I would want to. but means a lot for you to say that!
dramebaaz.af @dramebaaz.af
+ 6
8 years ago
[QUOTE=Iansomer1]areeba stop saying this is a shittiest piece ok this was brilliant All the while i was ok shits going ot hit the fan now i thought kunj might get hurt for a minute it seemed cherry wouldSUCH a thrilling story i loved ti The pshyco yuvi u have nailed to the tee him going k he is touching her so in tone with yuviTwinj scene at end was beautiful and so many feels Over all whole confrontation with yuvi wa ssuperb.hats of to ur skills.this was brilliant
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Awe you guys are just amazing really for saying all of this! Thank you so much!