Originally posted by: Zaalima_5
I wanted to read something like this.. Ye jhagda pre pe bhaari padne wala hai..🤪 not only alst part you have used all her harsh words from that fight in this OS .. Beautiful..
OS with Prerna full-on emotions, worried for her husband. This is so good. I liked how she is recalling all her words and feeling worse now. I loved all the family moments when he stayed at home, staying with others, but still in their own world❤️. They both lost for Kukki. Bajaj taking the initiative to impress his in-laws, best damaad indeed. Her acceptance that she is wrong in understanding him. The ending is .
If you’re a creative of any kind, then you’ve experienced the intense desire to express your thoughts about a specific character in your own way to hook up your readers with the content of the story.
While roaming listlessly in an unknown forum lane, saw this OS, stopped for a while to peep into its content. For my surprise, found a gem full of ardours!
The brief notes type description of places, and passions, the psychoanalytical type narrative while telling the state of mind of Prerna, esp in stressful circumstances… wah…loved this powerful writing style in these sentences.👏
‘… the unnamed, unsaid fears are gripping her, the restlessness is setting in what looks like worry, concern, fear ..’
‘standing near the window, hugs herself tight[ this phrase is worth to ponder for a while] and closes her eyes .. with only one wish, to see him safely back home ...’
‘her right hand in a fist and clings on to her mangal sutra with her left fist ..recollecting…’ the reader connects with that character instantaneously while reading these lines.😊
‘they both understood what they did here and acknowledge it with a smile .....’ --the entire scene, playing caroms and making their daughter win, with simple words you simply make your reader connect with that bonding, normally in every house, parents do such small things to please their offsprings! Her emotional expressions when he appears in front of her …--- when reading, I felt like --In your own words – 'like a kid in a candy store!’ 😊
Another one?
M yet to reply to the last one properly!
Seems we all r quite well behaved these days to give u time for this😆
Mod ji your story is really sweet. Her concern is well written and the snippets are well placed in story😊
OS with Prerna full-on emotions, worried for her husband. This is so good. I liked how she is recalling all her words and feeling worse now. I loved all the family moments when he stayed at home, staying with others, but still in their own world❤️. They both lost for Kukki. Bajaj taking the initiative to impress his in-laws, best damaad indeed. Her acceptance that she is wrong in understanding him. The ending is .
Originally posted by: Viswasruti
If you’re a creative of any kind, then you’ve experienced the intense desire to express your thoughts about a specific character in your own way to hook up your readers with the content of the story.
While roaming listlessly in an unknown forum lane, saw this OS, stopped for a while to peep into its content. For my surprise, found a gem full of ardours!
The brief notes type description of places, and passions, the psychoanalytical type narrative while telling the state of mind of Prerna, esp in stressful circumstances… wah…loved this powerful writing style in these sentences.👏
‘… the unnamed, unsaid fears are gripping her, the restlessness is setting in what looks like worry, concern, fear ..’
‘standing near the window, hugs herself tight[ this phrase is worth to ponder for a while] and closes her eyes .. with only one wish, to see him safely back home ...’
‘her right hand in a fist and clings on to her mangal sutra with her left fist ..recollecting…’ the reader connects with that character instantaneously while reading these lines.😊
‘they both understood what they did here and acknowledge it with a smile .....’ --the entire scene, playing caroms and making their daughter win, with simple words you simply make your reader connect with that bonding, normally in every house, parents do such small things to please their offsprings! Her emotional expressions when he appears in front of her …--- when reading, I felt like --In your own words – 'like a kid in a candy store!’ 😊
I seriously don't know how to react or respond to this feedback , for once i thought you posted in wrong thread , this feedback and appreciation I will always hold on to it which is much more than the actual OS content deserves i feel. but thank you so much for all your kind words and glad you enjoyed reading it 🤗❤️
Mod ji your story is really sweet. Her concern is well written and the snippets are well placed in story😊
Originally posted by: saps.156
Another one?
M yet to reply to the last one properly!
Seems we all r quite well behaved these days to give u time for this😆
Originally posted by: munnihyderabad
you jinxed it 🤣 this week I couldn't write anything lol
haan take ur time ji
😆aaah...u r feeling my presence with my absence too😎
Good! Let me catch up then u Write more
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