OS When I finally found my life

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Posted: 13 years ago
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After 18 years in Mumbai.
Maan: was on a business trip, he walk to a book shop to fetch some book. A voice strikes his ear. He follows the voice. He was shocked to see a girl similar to Geet.
A young girl dress up in blue jean & pink kurta .made a tight pony tail was fighting with the shop keeper. "Listen me I have paid you, don't try to mess up with me. I know how to handle such kind of people."
Maan: got inquisitive he walk to the counter "what happen why you are teasing her"
SK: "sir she had paid 100 rupees for this book they have increased the price but she is not listening"
Maan: noticed she was busy reading the book sitting out sit at shop stairs ."take this" he gave the SK more money
SK: "sir why you are paying? she will pay when she will get pocket money "
Maan: she lives here?
SK: yes she live in old home with her mother.
Maan: old home
SK;"yes old home her mother runs it "
Maan:" can I get the address of the old home"
Sk : "why sir do you want to join it" looking at her grey hairs.
Maan: "took a deep breath may be"
SK: wrote the address & gave him paper.
Maan: "can I know the owner name "
SK :   GEET
Maan: grab the book shelve & keep his hand on his heart " at last I found you tears following down his eyes."
SK : keeper are you ok sir .
Maan: sit on floor
SK: Pari ! Pari! Come here…
Pari : who was busy reading the novel turn back.. "what happen"
SK: bring water..
Pari: cupped Maan face "uncle uncle plz bola na"
Maan: felt Geet had touch his face. "beta I am fine " he took out his tablets & eat.
Pari: kya fine Uncle jee look at your face. She wipe his sweat with her hand
Maan: murmur "just like her"
Pari : tell me where you live ? what is your home #?
Maan: home? I don't have a home
Pari : uncle aaisa kyun bola mein hoon na aap kai beti…. Offer her hand..
Maan: hold it tight not to leave her again. " yes you are"
Pari: help him to stand up. "uncle keep you arm at my shoulder I will take you to Our home sweet home"
Maan: "geet tumhari perchai ha yeh."murmur.
Pari: to shop keeper " I will pay you later note it in my account"
Maan: beta I am fine now I can walk….
Pari: uncle are you sure. Looked in his eyes
Maan: for few second thought he was looking in Geet 's eyes.
Pari: bola uncle..wave her hand in front of his eyes.
Maan: yes beta.
Pari: ok hold my hand. She grabs his hand
Maan :smiled.
Pari: my mama is out of town ,she will be back by evening . don't worry we have plenty of space in our Home.
Maan: your mama will mind as you are taking a stranger… the slowly walked.
Pari: actually uncle we have a old home my mama runs it.
Maan: old home
Pari: yes uncle when my papa left us my mama travel different cities she was in search of job she was maid of a old lady she had no one like my Mama. There I was born. She was like my grandmom .after 5 years she died & left her all property for us. My mama shifted here she opened a old home .since then we are here. I grow up here . uncles & aunties come & go in my life . they enter the old home there was a garden with a lot of flowers & small benches …
Maan: recollected Geet work. "beta your home is beautiful"
Pari: uncle Our home ? smiled & kissed his cheek. "let me show you your room"
Maan: how many people are here?
Pari: me you & mama.. there were 3 more but all die in last 1 month.. she became sad.
Maan: sorry…
Pari: why sorry ? we all have to die one day … open the door
Maan: you are a strong girl .
Pari: not strong like mama she is very strong ,she never cry.
Maan: recollected how her eyes use to get teary in front of him. even if he use to scold her."meri Geet stro ng hogai ha".
Pari: uncle u rest I will bring coffee for you.
Maan: thx beta.
Pari: beta bhi thx bhi wah uncle. She walk out .
Maan: recollected he reached train station but he couldn't find Geet. He searched but she was no where. He went back home told dadima that Geet had left him for ever . Dadi took the news very seriously she became sick. Maan try to search for Geet but she was not trace able. Dev reveal about his & Geet relation. He completely broken he didn't stop his search but it was no use as every time he has to face disappointment.
Pari :knocked ..uncle can I come in
Maan: yes beta.
Pari: your coffee. How much sugar?
Maan: 2 cubes
Pari: oh like Mama she takes a lot of coffee with 2 cubes of sugar
Maan: Murmur "she never use to like coffee". tears flow down his eyes
Pari: if you don't mind can I ask you about ur life.
Maan: sure beta.took first sip just like Geet's coffee
Pari: your wife, kids, …sorry uncle.
Maan: my wife or life got very annoyed from me she left me ages back.
Pari: oh ! you are such a nice human being why she left you?
Maan: I hurt her…
Pari: oh uncle didn't you try to find her?
Maan: for last 18 years 2 months 5 days & 50 mins I am trying to find her but she is hiding from me.
Pari: you loved her a lot .
Maan; yes after her my life is empty.. she was a cool breeze in my life she taught me how to smile, how to smile in pain.
Pari: uncle mein ho na I will find her promise…. Offer him his hand.
Maan: why there are no flowers in room? He hold her hand
Pari:oh mama will kill me if I put in rooms.
Maan: why? (recollected he had thrown her flowers)
Pari: I don't know she just say my papa don't use to like it.
Maan: gave a weak smile so I am your papa…. Murmur.
Pari: uncle you know it is secret my mama miss my papa a lot I know that…. Bas aik dafa papa mil jai.
Maan: how you know that?
Pari: uncle my quote him a lot. She say he use to hate her tears that why she doesn't cry. … uncle I once read her diary….. I wanted to know about papa. She daily writes it M … this happen today…opps I know it is bad habit but
Maan: when your mama loved your papa that much why she don't tell him?
Pari: mama says I don't want to be burden on him. I think she is right when relation became burden we should let it go if it comes back it is ours if not it was never ours.
Maan : when you were burden Geet? He closed his eyes.
Pari: oh uncle it is raining let me play in it mama never allows me.
Maan: why?
Pari: she say there should be someone to catch you if you slip if you don't have don't walk in rain…she ran out… you will catch me right shouted
Maan: oh Geet you don't have anyone…. He saw Pari dancing in rain
Geet reached Mumbai ..
Geet:oh it is rain Pari must be alone let me call her she called at her cell but there was no answer.. yeh ba mosam kai bearish..she got out of taxi as it was a bad traffic jam. She stared walking holding her saree. "aaj saalo ka baad Maan mein barish mein walk kar rahi hoon, aaj aap mujhe ko bahot yaad aa raha ha."she started walking fast.
At home
Maan: pari bus karo beta you will get sick
Pari: uncle aap bhi mama kai tarah .
Maan: grab her arm as she was about to slip "bus chalo andar"
Pari: thori aur plz
Maan: nahi bilkul nahi. Tumhari mama kab aai gai
Pari: abhi tak aajana chaiaya tha.
Maan:call karo
Pari: oh she called me when I was playing in
Maan: snatch cell from her try to redial but it was saying switch off
Pari: uncle don't worry she must be sitting in taxi as she will never walk in rain.
Maan: from which side she must be coming .
Pari: from airport.
Maan: ok do you have servant?
Pari: yes …
Maan: ok you stay i n till I come back …
Pari: how you will find my mama?
Maan: I will find her. He walk out
Pari: papa
Maan: turn back "how you know?"
Pari: your eyes are saying like mama's…. She ran & hug him
Maan: meri pari kissed her forehead . forgive me beta.
Pari: mama ko la kar aaya ja kar.
Maan: kissed her forehead again.
He walked out
Geet was walking on pavement .talking to herself. "Maan you changed me completely .i pretend to be strong but from inside I am tired know"
Maan: walked as fast as he could his every step looked like a year long years. It was getting dark he was standing in middle of road looking all around. He at last found his Geet walking toward him she didn't saw him.
Geet: oh baba ji yeh pari pata nahi kahan ha iss ki wajhe se aaj muhje ko barish mein… her shoes was filled with water she took it off & try to drain water.
Maan: started walking towards her he just reached next to her.
Geet lost her balance maan grab her by her waist like always.she clutch his shirt. His touch gave her goose bumps. she felt it was similar touch..
Geet eyes were closed as she was scared of falling down. Murmur"Maan"
Maan: hugged her "ha mein geet"
Geet: thought she was dreaming but his hug made her realized it was real.
Maan : tum mujhe se itna naraz hogai thi ka mujhe ko chor kar chal gai itna duur
Geet: "maan leave me koi dekhe la ga"
Maan: nahi Gee ab nahi …he hug her more tight it was totally dark there was no street light.
Geet:Maan
Maan: Geet kya 18 saal kia saaza mera leya kafi nahi ha…could feel his voce shivering
Geet: maan muhje ko daard horaha ha..
Maan: left her but hold her hand. He sneezed
Geet: oh you will get sick come with me I will take you home. She pull him with her.
Maan:geet mein na tum ko kaha nahi dhoda.
Geet: kyun mera aur aap ka tou sub rashta khatm hogai tha iss din.
Maan: stopped her pull her to him" rashta khatam mera aur tumhara rashta khatam geet bolo"..
Geet: aap na jab bola mein tou smajha tha ka tum sirf meri hoon… iss din.
Maan: ha mein na bola tha … mein iss ki mafa Magana chata tha per tum..
Geet: mein aap per booje nahi bana chati thi
Maan: tum mera leya kab booje thi Geet. He pull her more close hardly any distance between them
Geet: woh mein
Maan: chup geet aik dum chup mein tou samjha tha ka mei n maar jao ga per tum se nahi mil pao ga
Geet: kept her hand at his lips… shhh
Maan: Geet mein thaak gaya ho bahot he sank on his knees
Geet: Maan she too kneel down" where is your wife, kids?
Maan: wife kids. Mera dil kia chabi to tumhara paas thi (keeps her hand at his heart) ….mein kis tarah kaise aur ko aapna dil mein jaaga data.
Geet: kya matalb…
Maan: Geet waqt zaroo beet gaya ha per mein abhi bhi wahan hee khara ho mujhe ko maaf kar do plz geet mein tum se bahut pyar karta ho. mein bus jee raha ho tumahra baghair mein adoora ho
Geet: looked a shadow coming close to them. It was Pari she was asking her to hug him."she hugged Maan as she couldn't see him in more pain,
Maan hide himself in her arms …Geet kissed him
Pari My mama papa… she turn back with smile wiped her dears.

Sorry for mistakes …. Plz ignore.. today morning I got this idea….hope you like it

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Naddiya!
You did it again...made me cry 😭

This was so beautiful...
I even got some coffee 😉 some REAL coffee

Thanks for the PM and do write more and more and more! ⭐️
It's amazing! 😃

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hey :)
 
I think the entire concept is well thought of, the familairity, the epiphany and the feelings. Oooh, and Pari. Cute :)
 
Overall, I liked it :)
 
PS: I ferevntly hope this doesnt happen in Geet, I would rather he stop her today, than repent for 18 years. But the entire feeling after reading your OS, was extremely romantic, and emotinally appealing :)
 
Much Love.
Edited by Arushi. - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: Ayesha_MSK

Naddiya!
You did it again...made me cry 😭

This was so beautiful...
I even got some coffee 😉 some REAL coffee

Thanks for the PM and do write more and more and more! ⭐️
It's amazing! 😃


sorry i made you cry Ayesha.i shiver when i typed this . i cried myself....dear you will get coffee soon. i just added this ..as this idea came in my mind i didn't want to let it go sorry..i will update ff's soon insha Allah
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Posted: 13 years ago
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u made me cry
great
beatifully portrayed
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Wow, Awesome One Shot :)
This is AMAZING!! Awwh, It was quite emotional 😭

Do make more, and PM me! 😊
Thanks!

xx
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: Arushi.

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Hey :)

I think the entire concept is well thought of, the familairity, the epiphany and the feelings. Oooh, and Pari. Cute :)


Overall, I liked it :)


PS: I ferevntly hope this doesnt happen in Geet, I would rather he stop her today, than repent for 18 years. But the entire feeling after reading your OS, was extremely romantic, and emotinally appealing :)


Much Love.


hug.. i am for sure he will stop him.. it is just a thought that came in my mind when i got up this morning .i just put my thoughts words....
surely it will not happen... just to pass boring weekend 😳
welcome to my world of Maaneet.
thx for liking it
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Posted: 13 years ago
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It was such a beautiful OS!!
Loved it when pari called maan "papa"
The ending was perfect!!!!
Thanks for the PM
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: naddiya26


sorry i made you cry Ayesha.i shiver when i typed this . i cried myself....dear you will get coffee soon. i just added this ..as this idea came in my mind i didn't want to let it go sorry..i will update ff's soon insha Allah



No I'm glad you wrote this! Don't be sorry 😲
It's wonderful! and update your FF at your leisure 😃
I'll be waiting...