OS : Main Ishitha, sirf Ishitha - updated part 22 on pg 43 21.11 - Page 18

awsome update

fabulous update
was eagerly waiting for this one
their plan is completely on track
the kids and Raman are very happy seeing ishitas concern for Raman
let's see what happens at the doctor's
plz continue soon

Finally updated

Pooja di, I second you... I feel for Raman too... He lost his son and his emotions flooded out.. But somewhere as a man I feel he should not have mouthed those words to a mother.. Ishima time and again proved how important their children are to her.. We all know how she sacrificed her own baby, who if alive would have removed her tag of being called a sterile woman ( i hate using that word)

Raman must and should be angry on her for her impulsive deed.. I would be on his side even if he had given divorce to her but since history repeats everytime unfortunately he doubts the maternal instincts of Ishima and calls her a sauteli maa, which is unjustifiable as a fan of Ishra I felt let down... Sadly, he didn't stop and the worst part he was comparing Shagun to Ishima, the former who left her Adi to die in the fire mishap...The woman who never left a stone unturned to manipulate Adi against him... This ludicrous and nonsensical comparison blew me off...

The RKB whom I admire, cherish was and is being butchered.. Always feel bad for him, the same man who never tolerated a word against his Ishita , stooping to such a level.. As of now all is well that ends well and Ishra are together...

Hi Dear,

I came across this story while reading other stories and straight away dived into this work... There are not too many fictions on current yhm track and I am glad you started writing on it... I read all the chapters in one go and it turned out to be quite a good piece...

Since you based your track on Adi's shooting and its aftermath, I am neither in agreement with Ishima nor with Raman for their course of actions.. As always, they didn't trust each other and hadn't tried to initiate a mature conversation...

Coming to your story, I certainly feel it's more of Ishima's POV and you are entitled to pen down your thoughts... I acknowledge and understand the reason of your perception as I could sense the pain in your writing as far as Ishima is concerned... You are right in stating that no one would understand what she went through after shooting down her own son but this doesn't warrant her impulsive act.. Secondly, Bhallas( or Iyers too at times) always treated her as a dumpster... Whenever, hell is breaking loose on the family , Bhallas need their ideal bahu to come to their rescue but contrarily, the so revered bahu is shown the door on her every untoward action, without heeding to her version of thoughts..

However, I always opine and continue to that Raman's POV is taken for granted in the show... No one cares a damn about Raman... Sorry this comment in no way an insinuation to your write up , only wrt CV's ... He lost his son... the apple of his eye.. for whose love he longed throughout... He should and must be angry on Ishita for what she did and there are no second thoughts about it... Furthermore, I would have stood by his side, even if he had divorced her or used his RKB brand to put Ishima behind bars... However, shockingly ( or maybe not for YHM viewers) he utters all " those " vilifying words against his Ishita... Time and again doubts her maternal instincts, differentiates her love towards children ( Pihu vs Adi) and makes her feel that their relationship exists only for children...

Furthermore, his comparison of Shagun wrt Ishima blew me off.. The lady who left her children to die in the fire mishap... the lady who never left a chance to manipulate Adi against Raman in her grey period was labelled as an affectionate mother because she was the biological mother... her "blood "... symbol of their love ( or her betrayal).. Suprisingly on the other hand the lady, who sacrificed her own blood, if alive would remove her tag of sterility had to prove her loyalty ... At the end of day she was, is and would be always a Sauteli Maa because they don't share her blood and flesh

Enough of my rant, chapters 4 and 5 are highlights in your work as far as Ishima's view point is considered... I liked your reference of what was Shagun Momma doing at the time of crisis... She was a mere spectator...

The most captivating moment in your story was Romi - Raman interaction... Romi's suggestion to give a chance to their relationship just for the sake of Ishra and not for anyone else is what I wanted as an Ishra fan... There was mo unconditional love between Isra, but sort of a compromise for the sake of children...

My only request is try to include Raman' s POV as a father, husband and make both of them realise their mistakes... You did a splendid job throughout in portraying raw and rustic emotions .. Keep it going and please PM me your next update...Thank you very much...Sorry I have made many digressive comments as well, hope you are not offended

Originally posted by: srini18

Hi Dear,

I came across this story while reading other stories and straight away dived into this work... There are not too many fictions on current yhm track and I am glad you started writing on it... I read all the chapters in one go and it turned out to be quite a good piece...

Since you based your track on Adi's shooting and its aftermath, I am neither in agreement with Ishima nor with Raman for their course of actions.. As always, they didn't trust each other and hadn't tried to initiate a mature conversation...

Coming to your story, I certainly feel it's more of Ishima's POV and you are entitled to pen down your thoughts... I acknowledge and understand the reason of your perception as I could sense the pain in your writing as far as Ishima is concerned... You are right in stating that no one would understand what she went through after shooting down her own son but this doesn't warrant her impulsive act.. Secondly, Bhallas( or Iyers too at times) always treated her as a dumpster... Whenever, hell is breaking loose on the family , Bhallas need their ideal bahu to come to their rescue but contrarily, the so revered bahu is shown the door on her every untoward action, without heeding to her version of thoughts..

However, I always opine and continue to that Raman's POV is taken for granted in the show... No one cares a damn about his Raman... Sorry this comment in no way an insinuation to your write up , only wrt CV's ... He lost his son... the apple of his eye.. for whose love he longed throughout... He should and must be angry on Ishita for what she did and there are no second thoughts about it... Furthermore, I would have stood by his side, even if he had divorced her or used his RKB brand to put Ishima behind bars... However, shockingly ( or maybe not for YHM viewers) he utters all " those " vilifying words against his Ishita... Time and again doubts her maternal instincts, differentiates her love towards children ( Pihu vs Adi) and makes her feel that their relationship exists only for children...

Furthermore, his comparison of Shagun wrt Ishima blew me off.. The lady who left her children to die in the fire mishap... the lady who never left a chance to manipulate Adi against Raman in her grey period was labelled as an affectionate mother because she was the biological mother... her "blood "... symbol of their love ( or her betrayal).. Suprisingly on the other hand the lady, who sacrificed her own blood, if alive would remove her tag of sterility had to prove her loyalty ... At the end of day she was, is and would be always a Sauteli Maa because they don't share her blood and flesh

Enough of my rant, chapters 4 and 5 are highlights in your work as far as Ishima's view point is considered... I liked your reference of what was Shagun Momma doing at the time of crisis... She was a mere spectator...

The most captivating moment in your story was Romi - Raman interaction... Romi's suggestion to give a chance to their relationship just for the sake of Ishra and not for anyone else is what I wanted as an Ishra fan... There was mo unconditional love between Isra, but sort of a compromise for the sake of children...

My only request is try to include Raman' s POV as a father, husband and make both of them realise their mistakes... You did a splendid job throughout in portraying raw and rustic emotions .. Keep it going and please PM me your next update...Thank you very

much...Sorry I have made many digressive comments as well, hope you are not offended

Thank you so much for the feedback. Definitely makes me think differently. No offences taken definitely. Thanks once again

Sorry to all readers for not updating. My mistake. Will definitely put up the next one by this week

Thank you

Thank you for such spirit, we are free and should be to discuss and debate our views in an amicable manner...

Originally posted by: varunike

Thank you so much for the feedback. Definitely makes me think differently. No offences taken definitely. Thanks once again

The bell rings at 6.30 and Raman rushes to open it and is so relieved to see his wife waiting there for him

Ishitha : Raman, chale

Raman : jaha tum le jao.. he tells this dreamily and walks with her happily..

Part 13

Raman walks behind Ishitha with a wide smile..

Raman (ST) : Tumhare piche piche to main kahin bhi ja saktha hoon madrasan..main yunhi zindagi barr tumhare piche chal saktha hoon.

Ishitha gets into her car and Raman quietly sits.. he just wants to admire her. The entire journey he kept looking at her. Ishitha was a little conscious of his looks.

Ishitha : Raman aise kya dekh rahe hain.

Raman : kyun, tumhe kuch ho raha hain?

Ishitha : nahi to

Raman : to phir, tum gaadi chalao main apna imagination chalaonga.. He replied with a smirk.

Ishitha quietly drove to the clinic. She realized no point arguing with him.. he was back in form with his taunts and one liners.

Ishitha : Ab sar dard nahi ho raha apko ?

Raman : nahi vo ab mere bagal mein baitha hain.. kyun tume chahiye kya?

Ishitha just huffed and sighed and drove towards the hospital.

Raman was happy that they were talking like before. He wanted everything back. His wife, his love, his happiness, his contentment everything.

They reached the clinic and were waiting for their turn.

They were ushered in and Rajeev pretended he had not met Raman before. Ishitha gave a complete background of the medication Simmi was giving and the treatment Raman underwent. Rajeev was keenly listening or atleast pretending to listen.

Just for the sake of of pretending Rajeev asked a couple of questions and then asked Ishitha to stay outside while he checks Raman.

Ishitha waits outside (ST) : Muruga, please keep Raman safe. Hope it is nothing serious.. She was restless and kept biting her nails.

Raman walks out and is so happy to see his wife worried for him. He knew that she still loves him and that gives him motivation to woo her back.

Raman : Arre, jaate waqt dinner kar lenge.. nakoon chabana chod de..

Ishitha : ho gaya. Kya kaha Rajeev ne?

Raman : mujse to sirf sawaal poocha.. baat tumse karna chahtha hain. andar bulaya hain tume

Ishitha walks in and raman is sitting outside hoping their plan works.

Ishitha walks in and takes her seat.

Ishitha is worried and Rajeev notices her restlessness.

Ishitha : kya huwa Rajeev. Sab theek to hain na.

Rajeev : kya kahoon? Ishitha raman is very disturbed.. wo dawai unke nerves ko damage kiya hain thoda bahut. Usse theek karne ke liye medication, peace of mind or aaram chahiye.. muje nahi lagta raman theeno mein se ek bhi kar raha hain. He needs to take medicines. Kissi bhi baat ki tension nahin lena hain aur aaram karna hain. magar aise hi chalta raha to bahut problemho jayegi. Jab maine baath ki to muje laga ki wo tume bahut miss kar raha hain. har sawal ka jawab tum thi.. sambhal lo usse..

Ishitha just listens and says thank you Rajeev.

Rajeev : kuch bhi ho muje phone karna.. I will always be around.

Ishitha leaves in a daze and sees Raman waiting outside.

Ishitha : chale Raman

Raman : haan chalo

They get into the car.

Raman is sittinginthe passenger seat and observing Ishitha.

Raman : Kya huwa.. marne wala hoon kya

Ishitha : ekdum chup Raman. Kya kar rahe hain aap. Dawai nahi kaa rahe, aaram nahi kar rahe hain.. or kis baath ki stress hain aapko?

Raman smiles seeing her angry and is relieved that she is now talking like his Jhansi ki rani.

Ishitha : kuch pooch rahin hoon main.. kya baath hain.. muskara kyon rahe hain aap.

Raman : accha lag raha hain. itne mahino baad meri madrasan mujse baath kar rahi hai. Meri parwah kar rahi hain. mere liye bechain ho rahi hain. ab mar bhi jaoon tho muje koi afsos nahi hoga..

Ishitha breaks suddenly and looks at him with anger. She sees that he is genuinely looking at her .

Ishtha : ek aur lafz marne ke baare main kiya to main khud maar doongi aapko. Samje

Raman ; mar hi to raha hoon.. bit by bit, thoda thoda har roz.. tumse door rahna to marne ke barabar hain mere liya. Kya tum nahi jaanthi iss baath ko..bolo ishitha. Kya tume nahin pata ki main kya ho jatha hoon jab tum door rahthi ho..

Ishitha : haan jaanthi hoon par kya karoon.. mujhe aapse door aapne khud beja tha.. har baar meri marzi se nahi jaathi hoon. Har baar muje dhakka deke ghar se nikala jaatha hain.. tho muje blame math kijiye..

Raman : haan, jaanth hoon, gadha hoon main.. par thum tho samajdhar ho.. ek thapad maarke muje bhi saath le chalthi..

Raman : theek hain, wo sab chodo. Bolo ab doctor ne kya kaha.. agar marne nahi waala hoon tho thum itni tensed kyun ho.

Ishitha : Raman, kya aap dawai nahi le rahe ho?

Raman : haan letha hoon. Par kabhi kabhi bhool jatha hoon. Wo kya hain na tum to nahin ho jo har cheez hath me dene ke liye.. khud lena padtha hain.. bhool jaatha hoon.

Ishitha : aur kya stress hain apko.. office mein kuch problems hain kya.

Raman : nahin tho..

Ishitha : to phir stress kis baath ki.

Raman : wo tum to waapis aane ke baare mein soch bhi nahi rahe ho.. kya karoon. Bachchon se baath karthi ho.. jaisa tum 4^th floor pe settle ho gayi.. ghar nahi aa rahi ho.. stress tho hogin na.

Ishitha : Raman hum iss baare mein baath kar chuke hain. main waapis nahin aa sakthi.

Raman : oh hello, baath kahan ki humne.. tum ne bas apna faisla suna diya.. maine haan thodi kahaa..

Ishitha : ye kya baath huyi.. aap jaanthe ho main kyun nahi aa rahi hoon.

Raman : nahi, nahi jaantha main.. muje bas tum chahiye. Sab ke paas apni apni zindagi hain. sirf meri zindagi mujse door hain..

Ishitha has slight tears in her eyes.

Raman notices this and decides tomake the move now.. it is a do or die situation for him.. but he decides to take the plunge..

Raman (ST) : hey mata rani,, meri raksha karna..

Raman : tum ghar nahi aa sakthi

Ishitha : nahi Raman, nahi aa sakthi.

Raman closes his eyes , takes a deep breath and blurts : to phir theek. Meri zindagi mere paas nahi ayegi to muje apne zindagi ke kareeb jana hoga.

Ishitha is shocked. She breaks suddenly and looks at him. She has a confused look. Raman has his dapper smile and raises his eyebrow : kya huwa

Ishitha : kya matlab hain aapka.

Raman : simple sa matlab hain. tum bhalla house nahin aogi to main tumhare saath shift ho raha hoon. Mera stress kam ho jayega aur tum time pe muje dawai de dena.. kya khayal hain. mera khayal mein ye best hain..

Ishitha is shocked. She was not prepared for this.. Raman was very cool after saying this. Ishitha is staring at him not able to believe what he just said..

Ishitha : Raman, kya bakwaas hain ye.

Raman : arre, bakwaas kahan. Tumne puche muje kya pareshani hain, maine kaha muje kya pareshain hain. doctor ne kaha hain no stress. To agar tumhare saath rahoonga to koi stress nahi hogi..

Raman : ab muje ghoorna bandh kar.. tumhare saath hi rehna wala hoon. I don't mind ki tum muje gooro ya kuch aur karo..

Ishitha has no idea what is going to happen next. She had no answer. She was caught off guard. She remembered what Rajeev told her. She also felt bad that Raman said he is alone. She was not sure of how to go about it.

Raman: chalo , ab gaadi chalao. Muje bhook lagi hain. kuch kathe hain phir ghar chalthe hain. muje packing bhi karni hain.

Ishitha started the car with lot of questions and doubts about the way forward. Raman had a peaceful smile on his face.. he was smiling, happy that he is now going to be with her.

Hi All,