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Posted: 9 years ago
#81

Originally posted by: peeyara

Finally got tym to comment...actually bhool gayi thi :P

Poor Jai...heart broken and Anika ko lagta hai bhav kha raha hai 😆
He had such a bad childhood and youth bhi kuch waisa hi hai uska
coming Durga, what do I say? She helped everyone settled down and now there is no one for her...Initially Bindiya was worried for her and when surname got changed how conveniently she forgot
Durga has become Money making machine for them...they wanna let her go
It reminded me of Bindiya's dialogue when she said her husband k he want durga to work as she will earn money for them and wat exactly she is doing now???
Durga to harbor feelings for Anmol but do not want to commit as her family still need financial support 💔
I want Durga to speak up once about it with Anmol 😳
Anika is confused for feelings she have for Jai...toh Jai ka chance hai abhi😉


there's lot to come 😉 stay tuned..
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Posted: 9 years ago
#82
😃 Waiting for the next update. It is really yr fault that we are hooked to the story.
So no pity for you.😆😆😆

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Posted: 9 years ago
#83

Originally posted by: gmgi

😃 Waiting for the next update. It is really yr fault that we are hooked to the story.

So no pity for you.😆😆😆

wait updating 😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
#84

8. REALIZATIONS

*Flashback starts*

For the next 15 days in office.

Durga- dada yeh chaterjee nahi aaye kya aj bhi? Who kaam tha inn papers ka.

Dada- sun ne me aya sahib barish me bheege toh jwar se peedit hai babua tab se.

A man shouts from other table-

Arre barish ke jwar se ya prem rog se?

Durga become uncomfortable. Yes this was the talk of the town now.

Succumbing to her pangs of anxiety durga found out anmol's address and headed to his home.

Anmol's house

Lady- dewar ji koi aurat aayi hain daftar se. ji aaiye na.

Anmol- ji bhabhi. Bhej de

Durga- ji yeh phal unke liye.

Anmol- arre durga tum?

Bhabhi- main chai le aati hoon.

Durga- kaisi tabiyat hain aap ki? Main jaanti hoon uss din jo hua theek nahi tha.

Anmol- jo bhi ho main aj bhi apni baat par kaayam hoon. Balki aj kuch aur poochna chahta hoon - shaadi karogi mujhse?

Durga is about to answer when bhabhi comes with tea.

After having tea

Durga- dhanyabaad bhabhi. Mujhe chalna chahiye ab.

Bhabhi- aap itni durr se aayi koi kaam se hi ayi hogi na?

Durga- haan me toh bhul hi gayi. Ye kuch file hain mr.chaterjee. bas ek baar dekh lijiyega.

Bhabhi smirks. Durga leaves.

Anmol takes the files inside. He opens the top one and finds a handwritten note.

"daftar ke baad, paas wale ilaake wale kali maa ke mandir pe intezaar karungi. Agar jawaab chahiye toh aa jaye."

Anmol resumes his work next day. Durga leaves and anmol follows after 15 min.

At the temple

Anmol- kya kehna hai durga? Main jaanta hoon mana hi karogi.

Durga- mana karna hota toh aapke ghar kabhi nahi aati.

Anmol- toh tumhe manzoor hain?

Durga- meri kuch sharte h.

Anmol- bolo

Durga- pehli yeh ki shaadi ke baad bhi main naukri karungi. Dusri yeh ki meri har mahine ki aadhi tankhwah matlab dhai hazaar maayke jayegi. Teesri yeh chahe samaj humaare sambandh ko sehemati de ya na de hum yeh rishta puri shraddha se nibhayenge.

Anmol- haan mujhe yeh teeno shartein manzoor hain.

Durga- par aapka parivar?

Anmol- maa baba to nahi hain sirf bhabhi aur dada hain. Unki chinta na karo. Main unhe sambhaal loonga.

At anmol's house

Anmol- ab jab aapne baatein sun hi li thi toh mere kuch kehne se kaun sa sach jhoot hone wala hai.

Anmol's brother- naukri tumhe rozgaar ke liye kahi thi rang ralliyan manane ko nahi.

Anmol- iss rishte se burayi kya hai? Umar me mujhse choti hain, naukri karti hai, ghar baithe muft ki roti nahi todegi.

Bhabhi- koi mauka mat chodna mujhe taana dene se. dekh le aap ye izzat h meri iss ghar mein. Ab kamane wali murgi mil gayi toh mera haal toh kutta bhi nahi puchega.

Anmol- bhabhi baat aisi nahi hain.

Anmol's brother- kitna kamaati hain?

Anmol- dhai hazaar har maah.

Bhabhi- aapne apni pehli shaadi ka bataya toh hain na usse?

Anmol- haan bhabhi bataya hain. Ye bhi kaisi uski maut huyi aur main kis kadar tanha ho gaya tha.

Bhabhi- ek kaam kare kal usse le aaye ghar kal.

*flashback ends*

Anika- W*F. Matlab anmol ne sabko double cross kiya. How cheap.

Jai- who knows shayad uska intention accha ho. I mean owing to what conditions durga had posed, anmol ki kya uss zamaane ki koi family durga ko accept nahi karti.

Anika- yeah, but pehli shaadi.. who kyun chipayi?

Jai- anyways, listen we have to go to a party. Kabir ke ghar. He's home.

Anika- ohh par kis khushi mein?

Jai- uska birthday hain. Chalo its gonna be fun. Sab college ke dost mil rahe hain. Kinda reunion??

Anika- okay, I'll be ready.

In the evening

Kabir's home

Kabir- whoa, thank god tum dono aa gaye. I was least expecting you both. See all are here danny, susan, ria, suyash... please make yourselves comfortable. Main dusre guests ko attend karta hoon tab tak.

Anika(whispers)- yeh susan kyun aayi hai?

Jai- puri batch aayi hain ani aur wo toh kabir ki best friend hain.

Anika- best or special?

Jai- gosh!! Don't temme u hate her even today??

Anika- u know me jai, ek baar dushman toh..

Jai- saari umar dushman. You are very loyal actually.

Anika- its good for health.

Jai-kya? Dushmani?

Anika- no, loyalty. Jao bula rahi hain tumhari special friend.

Jai greets susan.anika is very uncomfortable with the proximity they share.

Susan- dance jai?

Jai- oh sure why not...

He hands over his phone to anika.

Anika goes to have drink.

Jai's phone rings.

Anika- hi.. roy... Kaise ho?

Roy- ani. M fine. Mujhe ye batao tum dono ka baa rahe ho? Iss gende ne jaan kha rakhi hain. Naa tum resign karti aur naa yeh sab hota. Jai kaha hain?

Anika- maahol ko purani yaadon se garam kar raha hain..

Roy- koi crush???

Anika- hmmm. Par baat kya hain?

Roy- pata nahi iss ullu ke patthe ne kya kaha hain boss se ki usne tum dono ko permission toh de di par ab meri jaan kha raha hain.

Anika-daal me kuch kaala hain.

Roy- chalo bye n jai ko bata mujhe phone kare.

Anika- yup.

Anika stares at the dance floor.

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The story will end in 2 chapter guys 😉

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Posted: 9 years ago
#85
Why is Anmol not telling her the truth?😡
Ani is uncomfortable with Jai n Susan's close proximity.😆
What story did Jai feed to his boss?😆 Boss tho khaccha kha ja yega dono ko.😆

Only two more updates?😭
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Posted: 9 years ago
#86

Originally posted by: gmgi

Why is Anmol not telling her the truth?😡

Ani is uncomfortable with Jai n Susan's close proximity.😆
What story did Jai feed to his boss?😆 Boss tho khaccha kha ja yega dono ko.😆

Only two more updates?😭


Yeah. It was 43 pgs only Geena. I have reached pg. 34 now. So I ges 2 chapters are enough to put an end to it..

Again there may be loop holes. If this turns out to be another shurpi urf phuski rocket don't hit me pls 😆
Aur tumhare kisi bhi sawaal ka jawaab nahi h mere paas. 😆 me khud sab bhul gayi hu 😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
#87

Originally posted by: daydreamers

😆

😆 😆 boondi ka raita 😆
i didn't deduce anything re.. juz asking. some bangla chunks cmn to meet you soon 😆


ohhk.😆😆..well then personally i shd wait for some Rajasthani Chunk, as m from Jaipur😉
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Posted: 9 years ago
#88
Part 2: wowieee...Nani is awesome😛 ...Rajjo masi b badi advanced h..RISHTA WAI SOCH NAI😆😆😆...convos among the three were just so cool and casual...loved it...and this Jai..oh he z so caring munda..lucky Ani😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
#89
I feel so sorry for Durga, she is clueless..
And Anika, she is jealous ;)

I love how you connect the flashback and the modern story...

Please be back with a new one after these 2 parts!


Something like Ekaki 2 😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
#90
jz read Ch-3. the story is very intriguing. Feelin for Bindiya already provided the society she lives in..dats bound to occur...
Hey u dint say bout Marathi chunk han...got confused with 'aai'. I thought was there some new born jo aayi b h to gujarat me...but then u already wrote badi beti and chhota beta...so was gonna ask u..bt then thought to read once more after reading the whole chapter and then understood 'aai is mother' ..my bad..cdnt catch it with the flow😆

u r really good in both Bengali and Marathi👍🏼...personally related to the states?


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