Posted:
Hi friends,
I have a community on orkut where many of our members and friends write fictions....here is one of them.....a really good one...specially for all of you!
THE FIC HAS BEEN POSTED WITH A PERMISSION FROM THE AUTHOR - "KIRTI".
Heres the link to our community....
http://www.orkut.com/Community.aspx?cmm=25525722
Cheers,
JIV
HIiiii!!!!!! Friends...thanks for visiting this site...I am going to write another story...This time all by myself....Please don't interrupt in the story line...But u can give ur valuable comments and suggestions.....
So here goes the A Different story of LRL.......Hope u all like it yaar....
U must have see Huda collecting donations for the engagement party of Ritu n Rajveer...So After hearing this naina goes to Rajveer's room ,,,,use manane ke liye ki who yeh engagement naa kare...
So I will continue from that.......
Naina rajveer ke room main jaati hai...aur use batati hai ki galti se uske muh se ye baat nikal gayi ki who usse pyaar karti hai..(Ritu se baat karte waqt...) To Rajveer ko bahut bura lagta hai aur who udaas ho jata hai...Lekin who apne aason badi mushkil se chupa leta hai.....Kyunkii Rajveer ko ab shayad yakin hone laga tha ki naina use Sirf apne SIR ya apne bhaiya ke Best Friend ke nazariye se dekhti hai.....woh usse kabhi pyaar karti nahin thi...aur shayad karegi bhi nahin........
Naina--- Please sir....aap Ritu mam se engagement mat kijiye....aap Aisa jaan boojh ke kyun kar rahe hain?? Aapko to pata hai ki who mere bhaiya, jo ki kabhi aapke best friend hua karte the, unki Girl Friend thi....Par unhone mere bhaiya ko dhoka de diya....
(Then she speaks slowly this time.....)
Unki wajah se aj mere bhaiya is duniya main nahin hain.Unki wajah se unke upar ek Dhabba lag gaya hai...unhe aaj sara hindustaan Desh-drohi ke naam se janta hai...Unki wajah se hi.......
Rajveer cuts her...aur who beech main hi bol padta hai....
Rajveer----Aoisa bhi to ho sakta hai ki Ritu sach bol rahi hai aur use torchure karne ki wajah se usne ye sab kiya ho..
Naina—Haan aise Ho sakta tha...Par ye to bhagwaan ka shukr hai ki ahem waqt par mare maa baba ne unki aawaz jail main sun lit hi......
Aap ka bhi to ye manna tha ki mere bhaiya k maut ka zimmedar unki Girl Friend hai... To phir aaj kya hua Sir?? Boliye Sir Boliye?? Aaj aapko bolna hi padega... Kyun sir?? Kyun?? Kya aap bhi apne Best Friend Ko GADDAR samajhne lage hain??
Rajveer—nahin Naine..Ye galat hai...Aisa kuch nahin hai..Main janta hoon ke Naveen ek saccha Desh Bhakt tha...Woh Desh – drohi kabhi ho hi nhain sakta hai...Woh to apne desh ko jaan se bhi jyaada pyaar karne walon mein se tha... Par main sirf ye manne ke liye taiyar nahin hoon ki Ritu uske haalat ki zimmedar hai........
Naina---theek hai...Sir..main samajh gayi ke baat kya hai....shayad aapko bhi Ritu mam ne apne jaal main phasa liya hai...jis tarah unhone mere bhaiya ko phasaya tha... tabhi to aap unse engagement karne ke liye taiyar ho gaye hain....ye jante hue bhi..ki who aapke Best friend ko ek baar dhoka de chuki hai.....Ye jante hue bhi..ki...
Rajveer gets angry and annoyed...And so he snaps back...
Rajveer--- Dekho naina Main kisi se bhi Engagement karun..Ye mera personal mamla hai....tumhe isme interfere karne ki koi zaroorat nahin...
Aur haan..tum khamokha hi Dr Mishra pe galat ilzaam laga rahi ho......Ab tum ja sakti ho...
Naina looks at Rajveer in utter surprise...but says nothing....She was thinking of him as her friend but rajveer is saying Its his personal matter.....
Their eyes lock and they both stare at each other for a minute...then Naina turna about and leaves the room...She wipes her tears welling out from her eyes...while going.....rajveer too regrets his words and who apne haath ko zor se deewar pe peet ta hai and sobs....
While He was alone in his room he speaks....
Rajveer--- Mujhe maaf kar Dena Naina...Mujhe maaf kar dena.... maine tumhara dil bahut dukhaya hai...Par main tumhe kaise bataoon ke main jis si pyaar karta hoon who tum ho////Who tum ho naina ....Tum....TUM....
And he cries sitting on the floor.............
On the other hand there are a lot of decorations going on at the KMA hall the next day....This is due to the engagement of the two young teachers of KMA ie...captain Rajveer n Dr. Ritu Mishra... All the students are decorating the hall as they have no classes for two days...
The hall is decorated by lots of bouquets of different flowers of different colours of flowers...there are tulips and dahlias...petunias..n lilies...Red n pink n purple coloured roses.... On the walls and on the pillars...on the satin curtains....There are some hangings og heart shaped ballons of red n white colours...with ribbons....
Chairs are placed in groups in all the corners with table cloths of pink colour....the stage with its two huge chairs are kept for the couple...
huda is managing all the decorations without himself doing any work...Alekh n yudi are making alist of all the persons to be invited and on the nearby table Pooja along with Ali are preparing a list of all the food items..
YUDI---Mujhe agar pehle pata hota hi guests list banan itna difficult hai to main ye task kabhi nahin leta...
ALEKH---Chal Chal...ab zara kaam mein dhyaan laga...
YUDI---Ok BRO!!! waise hum sab ko is kaam mein fasan ke ye Huda kahan chala gaya???
ALEKH--- Woh...nautanki...saala...Khud to kaam nahin karta hai..humein orders deta phir raha hai...wahin peeche hai...ladkiyon pe line mar raha hai...
Huda meanwhile is instructing a girl cadet to place some flowers...by holding her hands...
HUDA---Are yaar aap kya kar rahi ho kudiye?? Phoolon ko aise pyaar se sajate hain..Dekh ke kar..aakhir hamare apne Captain rajveer ki sagai hai...kisi aire gaire ki nahin...
then he comes over to the table where pooja n Ali were sitting...
POOJA--yaar Huda zara bata naa...Is list main aur kya missing hai...Ye Ali bhi naa kisi kaam ka nahin hai..Pata nahin iska network mere network se match kyun nahin karta ...
ALI---humne aapse pehle hi kaha tha pooja...ki mujhe is khane waane ka baare main kuch nahin pata..lekin ohir bhi aap mujhe apne saath le aayin.
Huda glances over the list and exclaims...
HUDA---Oye teri...Isme main cheez to gayab hai...Meri mammiji kaha karti hain...Shaadi ho Ya sagaai...honi chahiye Mithai....
POOJA---Are haan Main mithai to likhna hi bhool gayi...Shayad mera network kharab tha...tabhi to SMS mila nahin...
DR.Shalini enters the rooms and looks at the decorations of the hall n exclaims in surprise.....All students come and gather around her..
SHALINI---Great job Cadets...keep it up...Aisa hi agar kaam chalta raha to kal subah engagement will be a grand succes...Continue ur work cadets...
All the cadets continue their work...Then Naina enters the room and looks at the hall and sighs.... Dr shalini approaches her...
Dr Shalini-- Kya baat hai naina??? Are u OK?? Any problems??
NAINA-- No Mam I am perfectly all right Koi baat nahin hai...
Dr Shalini takes her to acorner to talk to her in private..
SHALINI--Main janti hoon Naina ki tum is engagementse khush nahin ho...Par kya main jaan sakti hoon kyun??
Naina---no mam, Aap aisa kyun sochti hain?? Mujhe bhala is rishte se kya problem ho sakta hai??
Shalini---Mujhse chupane ki koshish mat koro Naina..Main sab janti hoon...Par mujhe ye nahin pata ki tum khush kyun nahin ho??
Naina---No mam Aisi koi baat nahin hai...Ritu mam aur Rajveer Sir ek doosre ko bahut pyaar karte hain aur isilye shaadi kar rahe hain...
Shalini---Ye sach hai naina ke Ritu rajveer se bahut pyaar karti hai...Aur woh is engagement se bahut khush hai...Lekin tum shyad ek baat nahin janti...
naina---Kaun si baat mam??
Shalini---Rajveer Ritu se pyaar nahin karte hain...Woh to bas Ritu ki khushi ke liye ye engagement kar rahe hain...
Naina---KYA????? rajveer sir Ritu mam se pyaar nahin karte????Par kyun?? Kya ye sach hai??Phir wo ye sab kyun kar rahe hain??
Shalini---Ye to mujhe bhi nahin pata cadet..Ye to sirf Captain Rajveer hi tumhe bata sakte hain....Kabhi kabhi insaan ko zindagi se samjhauta karna padta hai....Shayad Captain bhi abhi yahi kar rahe hon...
Pata hai naina...Jab ek insaan ko apna pehla pyaar nahin milta...tab woh ek aise insaan ko apna leta hai jise uski tarah dil tootne ka gham dekhna naa pada...Wo use apna leta hai...jo insaan usse pyaar karta hai...na ki jisse woh khud pyaar karta tha...
Shayad woh kisi aur ko apne gham se guzarte hue nahin dekh sakta hai...Waise hio cptain rajveer kisi aur ka dil todna nahin chahte hain...
NAINA----To kya Rajveer sir ko bhi kisi se pyaar tha?? Kya unhe bhi kisi ne thukra diya tha??
SHALINI---mujhe theek se to nahin pata hai...Lekin I am sure ki woh kisi aur se pyaar karte hain,,,,Lekin shayad us ladki ko wo ye bata nahin paye...unhe shayad himmat hi nahin hui ...woh ladki to ye bhi nahin janti ki captain usse kitna oyaar karte hain...Aur captain usse kuch kah nahin paye...
NAINA---Par woh kaun hai mam?? Jise sir itna pyaar karte hain...Kya aap janti hain?? Phir shayad hum us ladki ko ja kar bata sakte hain...To shayad woh ladki haan kar de..
SHALINI---Ab aise nahin ho sakta cadet...ab bahut der ho gayi hai...
Engagement ki saari taiyariyan ho chuki hain...Ab ye roki nahin ja sakti... Ritu ko ye bahut bura lagega... Shayad bhagwaan ko bhi yehi manzoor tha...
Saying this Dr Shalini starts to go away but naina interrupts her and asks...
NAINA----Par mam aapne yeh to nahin bataya ke woh ladki kaun hai?? Kya woh unke college ke batch se thi??
SHALINI---Tum khud socho naina...Ke woh ladki kaun ho sakti hai...jisse captain anjaane main hi itna pyaar kar baithe?? Jiske har mushkil se mushkil ghadi main unhone uska saath diya...Jis ke sukh aur dukh dono main maujood the?? Jiske saath woh sabse jyaada waqt bitate the....Tum use jaanti ho naina..Khud socho...Jawaab tumhe apne aap mil jayega...
NAINA...Par ma...m......
But Shalini leaves the room leaving behind naina...who is totally confused...
Naina thinks for a moment....
kaun ho sakti hai woh ladki..jisse rajveer sir itna pyaar karte hain... par kabhi bata nahin paye....aur jisse main jaanti hoon??? She thinks and thinks and thinks...
then some scenes flashes backs in her mind......
****************************************
I have a community on orkut where many of our members and friends write fictions....here is one of them.....a really good one...specially for all of you!
THE FIC HAS BEEN POSTED WITH A PERMISSION FROM THE AUTHOR - "KIRTI".
Heres the link to our community....
http://www.orkut.com/Community.aspx?cmm=25525722
Cheers,
JIV
HIiiii!!!!!! Friends...thanks for visiting this site...I am going to write another story...This time all by myself....Please don't interrupt in the story line...But u can give ur valuable comments and suggestions.....
So here goes the A Different story of LRL.......Hope u all like it yaar....
U must have see Huda collecting donations for the engagement party of Ritu n Rajveer...So After hearing this naina goes to Rajveer's room ,,,,use manane ke liye ki who yeh engagement naa kare...
So I will continue from that.......
Naina rajveer ke room main jaati hai...aur use batati hai ki galti se uske muh se ye baat nikal gayi ki who usse pyaar karti hai..(Ritu se baat karte waqt...) To Rajveer ko bahut bura lagta hai aur who udaas ho jata hai...Lekin who apne aason badi mushkil se chupa leta hai.....Kyunkii Rajveer ko ab shayad yakin hone laga tha ki naina use Sirf apne SIR ya apne bhaiya ke Best Friend ke nazariye se dekhti hai.....woh usse kabhi pyaar karti nahin thi...aur shayad karegi bhi nahin........
Naina--- Please sir....aap Ritu mam se engagement mat kijiye....aap Aisa jaan boojh ke kyun kar rahe hain?? Aapko to pata hai ki who mere bhaiya, jo ki kabhi aapke best friend hua karte the, unki Girl Friend thi....Par unhone mere bhaiya ko dhoka de diya....
(Then she speaks slowly this time.....)
Unki wajah se aj mere bhaiya is duniya main nahin hain.Unki wajah se unke upar ek Dhabba lag gaya hai...unhe aaj sara hindustaan Desh-drohi ke naam se janta hai...Unki wajah se hi.......
Rajveer cuts her...aur who beech main hi bol padta hai....
Rajveer----Aoisa bhi to ho sakta hai ki Ritu sach bol rahi hai aur use torchure karne ki wajah se usne ye sab kiya ho..
Naina—Haan aise Ho sakta tha...Par ye to bhagwaan ka shukr hai ki ahem waqt par mare maa baba ne unki aawaz jail main sun lit hi......
Aap ka bhi to ye manna tha ki mere bhaiya k maut ka zimmedar unki Girl Friend hai... To phir aaj kya hua Sir?? Boliye Sir Boliye?? Aaj aapko bolna hi padega... Kyun sir?? Kyun?? Kya aap bhi apne Best Friend Ko GADDAR samajhne lage hain??
Rajveer—nahin Naine..Ye galat hai...Aisa kuch nahin hai..Main janta hoon ke Naveen ek saccha Desh Bhakt tha...Woh Desh – drohi kabhi ho hi nhain sakta hai...Woh to apne desh ko jaan se bhi jyaada pyaar karne walon mein se tha... Par main sirf ye manne ke liye taiyar nahin hoon ki Ritu uske haalat ki zimmedar hai........
Naina---theek hai...Sir..main samajh gayi ke baat kya hai....shayad aapko bhi Ritu mam ne apne jaal main phasa liya hai...jis tarah unhone mere bhaiya ko phasaya tha... tabhi to aap unse engagement karne ke liye taiyar ho gaye hain....ye jante hue bhi..ki who aapke Best friend ko ek baar dhoka de chuki hai.....Ye jante hue bhi..ki...
Rajveer gets angry and annoyed...And so he snaps back...
Rajveer--- Dekho naina Main kisi se bhi Engagement karun..Ye mera personal mamla hai....tumhe isme interfere karne ki koi zaroorat nahin...
Aur haan..tum khamokha hi Dr Mishra pe galat ilzaam laga rahi ho......Ab tum ja sakti ho...
Naina looks at Rajveer in utter surprise...but says nothing....She was thinking of him as her friend but rajveer is saying Its his personal matter.....
Their eyes lock and they both stare at each other for a minute...then Naina turna about and leaves the room...She wipes her tears welling out from her eyes...while going.....rajveer too regrets his words and who apne haath ko zor se deewar pe peet ta hai and sobs....
While He was alone in his room he speaks....
Rajveer--- Mujhe maaf kar Dena Naina...Mujhe maaf kar dena.... maine tumhara dil bahut dukhaya hai...Par main tumhe kaise bataoon ke main jis si pyaar karta hoon who tum ho////Who tum ho naina ....Tum....TUM....
And he cries sitting on the floor.............
On the other hand there are a lot of decorations going on at the KMA hall the next day....This is due to the engagement of the two young teachers of KMA ie...captain Rajveer n Dr. Ritu Mishra... All the students are decorating the hall as they have no classes for two days...
The hall is decorated by lots of bouquets of different flowers of different colours of flowers...there are tulips and dahlias...petunias..n lilies...Red n pink n purple coloured roses.... On the walls and on the pillars...on the satin curtains....There are some hangings og heart shaped ballons of red n white colours...with ribbons....
Chairs are placed in groups in all the corners with table cloths of pink colour....the stage with its two huge chairs are kept for the couple...
huda is managing all the decorations without himself doing any work...Alekh n yudi are making alist of all the persons to be invited and on the nearby table Pooja along with Ali are preparing a list of all the food items..
YUDI---Mujhe agar pehle pata hota hi guests list banan itna difficult hai to main ye task kabhi nahin leta...
ALEKH---Chal Chal...ab zara kaam mein dhyaan laga...
YUDI---Ok BRO!!! waise hum sab ko is kaam mein fasan ke ye Huda kahan chala gaya???
ALEKH--- Woh...nautanki...saala...Khud to kaam nahin karta hai..humein orders deta phir raha hai...wahin peeche hai...ladkiyon pe line mar raha hai...
Huda meanwhile is instructing a girl cadet to place some flowers...by holding her hands...
HUDA---Are yaar aap kya kar rahi ho kudiye?? Phoolon ko aise pyaar se sajate hain..Dekh ke kar..aakhir hamare apne Captain rajveer ki sagai hai...kisi aire gaire ki nahin...
then he comes over to the table where pooja n Ali were sitting...
POOJA--yaar Huda zara bata naa...Is list main aur kya missing hai...Ye Ali bhi naa kisi kaam ka nahin hai..Pata nahin iska network mere network se match kyun nahin karta ...
ALI---humne aapse pehle hi kaha tha pooja...ki mujhe is khane waane ka baare main kuch nahin pata..lekin ohir bhi aap mujhe apne saath le aayin.
Huda glances over the list and exclaims...
HUDA---Oye teri...Isme main cheez to gayab hai...Meri mammiji kaha karti hain...Shaadi ho Ya sagaai...honi chahiye Mithai....
POOJA---Are haan Main mithai to likhna hi bhool gayi...Shayad mera network kharab tha...tabhi to SMS mila nahin...
DR.Shalini enters the rooms and looks at the decorations of the hall n exclaims in surprise.....All students come and gather around her..
SHALINI---Great job Cadets...keep it up...Aisa hi agar kaam chalta raha to kal subah engagement will be a grand succes...Continue ur work cadets...
All the cadets continue their work...Then Naina enters the room and looks at the hall and sighs.... Dr shalini approaches her...
Dr Shalini-- Kya baat hai naina??? Are u OK?? Any problems??
NAINA-- No Mam I am perfectly all right Koi baat nahin hai...
Dr Shalini takes her to acorner to talk to her in private..
SHALINI--Main janti hoon Naina ki tum is engagementse khush nahin ho...Par kya main jaan sakti hoon kyun??
Naina---no mam, Aap aisa kyun sochti hain?? Mujhe bhala is rishte se kya problem ho sakta hai??
Shalini---Mujhse chupane ki koshish mat koro Naina..Main sab janti hoon...Par mujhe ye nahin pata ki tum khush kyun nahin ho??
Naina---No mam Aisi koi baat nahin hai...Ritu mam aur Rajveer Sir ek doosre ko bahut pyaar karte hain aur isilye shaadi kar rahe hain...
Shalini---Ye sach hai naina ke Ritu rajveer se bahut pyaar karti hai...Aur woh is engagement se bahut khush hai...Lekin tum shyad ek baat nahin janti...
naina---Kaun si baat mam??
Shalini---Rajveer Ritu se pyaar nahin karte hain...Woh to bas Ritu ki khushi ke liye ye engagement kar rahe hain...
Naina---KYA????? rajveer sir Ritu mam se pyaar nahin karte????Par kyun?? Kya ye sach hai??Phir wo ye sab kyun kar rahe hain??
Shalini---Ye to mujhe bhi nahin pata cadet..Ye to sirf Captain Rajveer hi tumhe bata sakte hain....Kabhi kabhi insaan ko zindagi se samjhauta karna padta hai....Shayad Captain bhi abhi yahi kar rahe hon...
Pata hai naina...Jab ek insaan ko apna pehla pyaar nahin milta...tab woh ek aise insaan ko apna leta hai jise uski tarah dil tootne ka gham dekhna naa pada...Wo use apna leta hai...jo insaan usse pyaar karta hai...na ki jisse woh khud pyaar karta tha...
Shayad woh kisi aur ko apne gham se guzarte hue nahin dekh sakta hai...Waise hio cptain rajveer kisi aur ka dil todna nahin chahte hain...
NAINA----To kya Rajveer sir ko bhi kisi se pyaar tha?? Kya unhe bhi kisi ne thukra diya tha??
SHALINI---mujhe theek se to nahin pata hai...Lekin I am sure ki woh kisi aur se pyaar karte hain,,,,Lekin shayad us ladki ko wo ye bata nahin paye...unhe shayad himmat hi nahin hui ...woh ladki to ye bhi nahin janti ki captain usse kitna oyaar karte hain...Aur captain usse kuch kah nahin paye...
NAINA---Par woh kaun hai mam?? Jise sir itna pyaar karte hain...Kya aap janti hain?? Phir shayad hum us ladki ko ja kar bata sakte hain...To shayad woh ladki haan kar de..
SHALINI---Ab aise nahin ho sakta cadet...ab bahut der ho gayi hai...
Engagement ki saari taiyariyan ho chuki hain...Ab ye roki nahin ja sakti... Ritu ko ye bahut bura lagega... Shayad bhagwaan ko bhi yehi manzoor tha...
Saying this Dr Shalini starts to go away but naina interrupts her and asks...
NAINA----Par mam aapne yeh to nahin bataya ke woh ladki kaun hai?? Kya woh unke college ke batch se thi??
SHALINI---Tum khud socho naina...Ke woh ladki kaun ho sakti hai...jisse captain anjaane main hi itna pyaar kar baithe?? Jiske har mushkil se mushkil ghadi main unhone uska saath diya...Jis ke sukh aur dukh dono main maujood the?? Jiske saath woh sabse jyaada waqt bitate the....Tum use jaanti ho naina..Khud socho...Jawaab tumhe apne aap mil jayega...
NAINA...Par ma...m......
But Shalini leaves the room leaving behind naina...who is totally confused...
Naina thinks for a moment....
kaun ho sakti hai woh ladki..jisse rajveer sir itna pyaar karte hain... par kabhi bata nahin paye....aur jisse main jaanti hoon??? She thinks and thinks and thinks...
then some scenes flashes backs in her mind......
****************************************
**************************** .......when Rajveer asked her name on the first day at KMA... ......when Rajveer took his first class and impressed Naina... ......When Naina was unconscious after Major Nair's Punishment of hanging upside down, it was Him who carried her in his arma and took her to the infirmary.... .....When Rajveer was holding her very close to him on that night while teaching her dance steps for the Fresher's Ball..... ......When they both became friends rather than student and teacher...... ......When Rajveer said...Tum Bahut Achhi Dhik rahi ho Cadet naina Singh.......at the ball..... ........when they both danced at the party..... .......When,,,,,,, When rajveer asked her for her hald bowing down for dance...... .......When Rajveer fought with Huda in Boxing match for her sake. .......When rajveer supported her and encouraged her in the cold chamber.. When rajveer n Naina both fought against terrorists..... ......When Rajveer helped her in every class and defended her before Major Nair...... When Naina n Rajveer Both were covered with mud at the camp....... When Rajveer fought with veryone at the court and helped her to return back to KMA..... When Rajveer encouraged him at all her distress. When naina was shocked and so depressed after hearing about Rajveer's accident and death..... When they embraced for the first time..crying in each others arms........ All this made a thought to strike in her mind and then she realized something with ran shivers through her spine.......and she concluded something....... Kya jis Ladki se Captain rajveer itni beinteehan mohabbat karte hain.....Kya woh......Kahin woh..... KAHIN WHO LADKI MAIN TO NAHIN????????? |
comment:
p_commentcount