CaNt Sleep!!!!

the precious thoughts you have given me
i always relish them and smile
i live those thoughts everyday
and continue to smile
in disbelief and disappointment

your memories bring tears down along with the smile
how i wish you were still mine
the words that dropped from your mouth
were like the petals falling from a rose
i can still remember them well
and continue to smile
in disbelief and disappointment

Your thoughts have disorganised my mind as such
cant think of anything else
even today;its one year after i lost you
still cant get any sleep .no way
thinking again of your precious thoughts
and continue to smile
in disbelief and disappointment

What struck me about this poem is how genuine it sounds, its not fake at all. I love the poetic tool of repetition that you've used here.
Great work!

I agree Preets, this is coming straight from the heart...really very touching!! 👏 👏 👏

Cheers,

Anjali

really touchy dear excellent dil se nikli hui


keep posting more love to read them 😊

actually, this was posted in the memory of someone...

and i never intended to write a poem.. i just couldnt sleep that night , had immense feelings and i had to write to take them out...... it took just 2 mins to write my feelings down...... never edited it .......

It's still very beautiful Oblivion!! Feelings coming straight from the heart don't need any editing. They are a masterpiece in their own way! 👏 👏 👏

Cheers,

Anjali Edited by amisra - 17 years ago

^^Oh, i check out your blog, you've got some funny stuff there! 😆

👏 very good... u r too good to write it in two mins.. 👏