Mahabharat Katha | Dharmakshetra Nano Writing Contest Results - Page 2

This content was originally posted by: Sutapasima

congrats dear Neha for the successful contest .

Running to read all the lovely entries at leisure .

Sima did all the hard work, I just copy pasted her thread here as she was busy 😳

Congratulations to all the Winners and Runners-up 

In fact, all participants are winners, by presenting your entries itself is praiseworthy, for that, everyone is a winner in their own unique way.

Simi, you put a great effort, and you did an excellent job finishing it with style. 

Overall, there were 39 entries for the first round and 104 for the second round, that's demonstrating the competition's astounding success and showcasing the participants' passion for writing as well as the depth of their knowledge in the Epic  Mahabharat. 

Thank you for the gift, the siggy is exquisite, and I will proudly display it in my siggy box. 

Round --1

Regarding the praised entries and the authors of those Nano Dramas & Stories--

There were a few entries that scored above 95%, and when I reread those nano stories to judge the exquisite narration, there was only a single mark separating the winner from the other four entries!! 

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● vaidharbhi95 ●

for the Nano Drama 

A Clever Move.

(Draupadi is angrily removing her jewelry with maidservant's help)

Maid : "My brother says wise never get angry !"

Draupadi: " How can Parth bring another queen to Indraprastha??"

Maid: "What if she's  not a queen, but a humble servant seeking refuge in your lotus feet?"

Draupadi (Smiling) : " As clever as Govind, Subhadra !!!"

How beautifully Draupadi expressed her approval of Shubhadra's stay at the royal palace as well as her inner anger! There was friendly banter between a condensed version of a lady's wrath at having another woman as her husband's spouse and a crafty princess' magnificent submission to win her heart. How lovely it is! Well written one!

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● oye_nakhrewaali ●

for the Nano Drama 

Kunti: You look as radiant as your father, the Sun God. But you are a mistake, an error of my childishness. Farewell, son. That is all I can give you, my precious. I am the most unfortunate mother, and, I know that my misfortune will ruin your destiny.

"You are a mistake, an error of my childishness" --- this single line defines the entire story of Karna. This is one of the best entries in this Mahabharat Katha contest! This line atoned all of Kunti's sin! A well written one!

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● missFiesty_69 ●

for the Nano Drama

Kanha : Looks like a pigeon! 

Arjuna: It's pigeon.

Kanha: Seems like a vulture. 

Arjuna: Vulture it is. 

Kanha: Its the majestic Garud. 

Arjuna: Indeed!

Kanha: Parth, why wouldn't you tell me what you guess it is ? 

Arjuna: O Kanha, you're Paramarth. Why would be I so foolish to contradict you ?

This brief exchange between friends demonstrates the writer's brilliance by capturing the bond, respect, and understanding between Krishna and Arjun. Excellent.

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● tournesol ●

for the Nano Drama

Kunti: I am sorry, putri. I did not know it was you.

When a mother loses a son, her only desire is to see the rest of them together. To never lose them. I just acted like a mother.

On the last day of the war, Draupadi finally understood Kunti.

Yes...I expected our Desi Kate Wincelet would have written this. She has the ability to turn a few sparse words into something profound, giving that statement the weight of an epic!! 

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● HereAsMyself ●

for the Nano Dramas

After the War.

Panchaali walking. Uttariya caught in doorway yanks her back. Glaring, she pulls at it hard enough to tear it. Yudhishthira walks in.

Yudhishthira: He is dead, Panchaali.

Panchaali (glaring at him): Unlike my pain. Unlike my memory.

Panchaali walks off. Yudhishthira sighs. The torn uttariya flutters in the doorway.

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Made with Love.

Vidura: Coarse fare, Vaasudeva, unlike any you must have consumed before.

Background lights up. Woman with plate of food seen running behind laughing child. Krishna, dimly visible, smiles, implying only he can hear it.

Foreground lights up. Krishna, still smiling, takes another bite.

Krishna: No, wise one. Not for years.

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The first one won more than 95 marks! I had never before read such a creative expression in such few words. Shows the writer's caliber.

The second one is reflecting a devotee's dedication and God's submission to his devotee. Through these sentences, the full scene could well be envisioned. Well written one. 

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● BrhannadaArmour ●

for the Nano Dramas

Sikhandin (blowing conch): "Hiding behind Asvatthaman and Drona, your life's last seven days ... Face your death!"

Bhisma (laughing): "Wait, Amba!"

Sikhandin (uncomprehending): "Who? 'Mother' ... Ganga?"

Bhisma (blowing conch): "Pandu's five sons want to fight me together. I'll enjoy that battle first, then die."

Bhisma's arrow breaks Sikhandin's bow. Sikhandin falters.

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Dasarni (shrouding Sikhandin's corpse): "Lady, who are you?"

Sthuna: "Sthuna Yaksa. Your husband doesn't need my manhood anymore."

Dasarni (aghast): "A hero's cremation ..."

Sthuna: "Ashes of my organs!"

Dasarni (distraught): "Manhood was his life. Womanhood in death?"

Sthuna becomes male. Sikhandini's body, bifurcated by Asvatthaman's sword, has one breast dangling.

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Yuyudhana (doffing armour): "I told Duryodhana, 'Kill me gloriously, playmate! I've seen enough slaughter.'"

Bhojya (cleaning his wounds): "My childhood ended when you fought Sauviraraja for me."

Yuyudhana shrugs.

Bhojya: "My ten playful babies lie lifeless outside ... ten days already. When I can go to them, what will I see?"

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Your descriptions of the warfare are delightful to read. You've woven a few intriguing stories with a few not so prominent  characters, that made these stories special. Well written ones.

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● Loving2Missing2 ●

for the Nano Dramas

Krishna's Purpose in Mahabharat: Dharmsansthapan!

Uddhav:  Why didn’t you stop this whole destruction?

Krishna: Vidhata’s Vidhan destiny! A person is made aware time and again of righteousness, but he ignores his inner voice. Then only death can make him face the truth! From this destruction, righteousness will burgeon. Humanity now has the boon of Geeta!

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Paritranaay Sadhunam, Vinashayach Dushkrutam!

Bheeshma: “Mahabharat has ended finally. Had the sides reversed that Pandavas ruled Hastinapoor empire and Kouravas asked for share.  I wonder whose side would you then be on?”

Krishna (smiling): “Do you genuinely believe, Pitamah, that all this bloodshed is just for a piece of land? Righteousness is my side!”

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Draupadi’s revenge: The ultimate fruit

Draupadi (Lamenting): All my sons are dead, how?

Krishna (holding her, consoling): What else did you expect, Sakhi? Revenge is boomeranged! You throw it at someone but it always comes back to you. That’s why forgiveness is the greatest virtue! You refused to forgive Duryodhana, outcome is you becoming childless.

I absolutely loved this one a lot. Krishna made Draupadi understand her Karma and the outcome of her revenge. In a way, this is simply the moral of the epic Mahabharath. It is another 90+ marks entry.

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Kuchh hua, Bas Kasam li!

Krishna: Parth, pain at your son’s death is understandable; but your oath to sacrifice life……not pardonable! When will you understand the larger purpose of this universe? Draupadi vowed to tie her hair only with Duryodhan’s blood. Each one of you lives in your tiny silos refusing to look beyond.

All entries are well written ones. 

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Best wishes to all the IF authors. 

Round 2 : Nano Tale

Assessing 104 tales at once is both a joy and a laborious task.

However, I must admit that the enthusiasm and depth of knowledge displayed by our authors in such a creative manner truly astounded me.

● BrhannadaArmour ●

for the Nano Tale

 "Can't ... get ... out!" Pariksit whined, inside the snugly tucked deerskin.

Remembering Abhimanyu, Subhadra hugged Uttara.

****** 

Mahabharat highlighted human relationships and bondings till the end, which was highlighted in this Nano tale. Good one.

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● metacrisis ●

for the Nano Tale

At the gate of Indraprastha rejoiced the five elephants, with the sixth, their queen, approaching.

*****

The regal tradition was underlined in this Nano story with a delicate and unique grandeur for the queen. A well written one. 

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● So-So ●

for the Nano Tale

 

Bhima was entrapped! Yudhishthir answered Dharma-related questions, cursed Nahusha was redeemed, Bhima saved from death.

*******

This abridged Nano tale beautifully recounted the prominent Vana / Aranya Parva story. 

The succinctness with all the details garnered praise for this entry.

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● RainOfDew ●

for the Nano Tale

"Lakshmi", said Krishna. Rukmini smiled as she felt her Krishna calling her name.

******* 

An etheric moment at the abode of a Divine couple!

Clever way of presenting the empyrean feeling.

That is what makes this Nano story distinct.

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● Physics_girl ●

for the Nano Tale

Lasting merely 18 days, Kurukshetra battle carries lessons for many more than 18 centuries after.

****** 

Captured the essence of the Epic and presented it in a succinct and lovely manner. An excellent one.

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● missFiesty_69 ●

for the Nano Tale

The criminals and the silent witness will pay a price for your tears, dear Draupadi. 

******* 

In this brilliant Nano tale, Krishna gave Draupadi the assurance that both the sinners and the mute witnesses would face punishment, which was a prophecy over an impending war. 

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● Moonks ●

for the Nano Tale

"Who are you Madhav?"

"I am what you want me to be Parth", Krishna smiled.

***** 

Feelings, not many words, flow in a nano story. The grandeur of this  tale is the ability to communicate the full story without the use of any narration. An excellent one.

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● DelusionsOfNeha ●

for the Nano Tale 

Krishnaa, Yagyaseni, Draupadi. A multifaceted personality and she's mostly known for her five husbands. 

***** 

What a terrific way you explained  how Draupadi was sidelined despite being the prime character of this Epic.

This single line is an outcry of anguish about her diminutive portrayal. 

Very well written one Neha. 

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● HereAsMyself ●

for the Nano Tale 

Arjuna tells no one he saw Krishna weeping with Abhimanyu’s first bow in his hands.

****** 

The essence of this Nano tale was based on how the Mahabharat highlighted numerous human flaws and deep thoughts of a prophecy and philosophical conundrums. Great writing.

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● MaDiee●

for the Nano Tale 

Story glorifying values.

Story fighting rights.

Story enlightening knowledge.

Story establishing dharma.

It's epic - Mahabharat!

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This caught people's attention because the writer did such an excellent job of condensing the entire epic into very few words!

One of the best entries in this whole Mahabharata contest!

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● Bee222 ●

for the Nano Tales

Draupadi clasped her saree tighter. Long after the ordeal was over, she still felt naked.

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Motherly love drowned by fear. Kunti just hoped her child would stay afloat. 

******* 

I realised when I read these entries that they were not written by an average writer, but rather by a writer who has the ability to look into a woman's heart and understand the deepest suffering and anguish.

The first one was scored more than 95%. As I said, all these entries in the 2nd Round  are praiseworthy ones. 

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● oye_nakhrewaali ●

for the Nano Tales

Her baby wasn't just Bharatvansh's future, he was Abhimanyu's last memory for Uttara.

**** 

The duality in a royal queen's life is underlined in this Nano tale as she gains motherhood after losing her husband.

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Satyavati wasn't greedy, but she was ambitious. Only the ambitious can achieve greatness.

The writer emphasized through this Nano story that,Satyawati is the one who defined and initiated the Kuru Pandava's  birth of conflict, which ultimately has disastrous catastrophe, one of the top scored entries in this contest.

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● Loving2Missing2 ●

for the Nano Tales

Devyani loved Kacha but married Yayati. Her revenge against Sharmishtha became her bane in marriage.

***** 

The love triangle and it's consequences described in brief in an excellent way.

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Kindama’s curse to Pandu brought powers of nature to incarnate as humans to accompany Krishna! 

The emergence of five natural forces to aid God is a novel perspective on the entire process. An innovative concept delivered with precision

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● vaidharbhi95 ●

for the Nano Tales

Babruvahana unleashes lethal arrow ...   Arjuna Collapses ...

Slayer of grandfather Bhishma lies slain by own son !!!

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The scene's backdrop was conveyed in a very powerful way by using word play with  an author's authority.

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Sweat trickled down Bhima's forehead , each drop dissolving his pride. The monkey's tail didn't move.

A well written one on Bhima and Hanuman's combat. 

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Blood oozing from Barbarika's slayed head washed Krishna's feet.

May you be worshipped as KhatuShyam !!

All  these  three entries are exhibiting  the writer's in-depth knowledge, which is truly impressive.

● The.Lannister ●

for the Nano Tales

“Couldn’t you have stopped the war?” “Not when you couldn’t even stop your son, mother!”

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Truth battled injustice & emerged victorious from the smoke of the undying pyres on Kurukshetra.

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Mathura sacrificed. Gokul delighted. Gokul sacrificed. Bharat delighted. No good thing happens without a sacrifice.

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Even though, there's no scope to narrate, build characters, or create setting but these lines still has a deep meaning. That is the beauty of these nano tales, it is clearly visible in these well written stories. 

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Best wishes to all authors. 

https://www.indiaforums.com/fanfiction/2932

Updated here 😳

Wow Fantastic entries!! and thanks so much for putting it up here so that those outside the private forum can also read and appreciate. Congrats on a successful contest!! Each and every entry is superb. 

Congrats to all the winners 👏

This content was originally posted by: DelusionsOfNeha

Popular Choice

Round 1 : Nano Drama

#5. HereAsMyself 

   for the Nano Drama

Made with Love.

Vidura: Coarse fare, Vaasudeva, unlike any you must have consumed before.

Background lights up. Woman with plate of food seen running behind laughing child. Krishna, dimly visible, smiles, implying only he can hear it.

Foreground lights up. Krishna, still smiling, takes another bite.

Krishna: No, wise one. Not for years.

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#5. Loving2Missing2

   for the Nano Drama

Supine Bhishma rebukes Shrikrishna.

Bhishma:“Vasudev. Unarmed Karna was killed. A pious, kind soul! What kind of Dharmayuddha are you doing?”

Krishna: “He would otherwise kill Arjuna. I was left with no other choice. This battle would have ended with all purposes lost. Karna who is now a martyr, would then be biggest villain!”

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#4. DelusionsOfNeha 

   for the Nano Drama

Bhima was blessed by Nagas, and he tormented the Kauravas in mischief. Arjun enjoyed the view from atop a tree.

Yudhishthir: Stop, Bhimsena! You've gone insane with power, this isn't you!

Bhima: Of course, I have. Have you ever tried going insane without power? It's bland and boring.

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#3. Physics_girl 

for the Nano Drama

Lachit : Mother, you taught me to be brave, but if I lose like Abhimanyu?

Nageshwari: He didn't die due to  courage but because of  incomplete knowledge .

Lachit: But didn't his bravery get wasted?

Nageshwari: No, his courage is the reason even his failure is remembered with dignity, son.

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#2. missFiesty_69 

for the Nano Drama

Kanha : Looks like a pigeon! 

Arjuna: It's pigeon.

Kanha: Seems like a vulture. 

Arjuna: Vulture it is. 

Kanha: Its the majestic Garud. 

Arjuna: Indeed!

Kanha: Parth, why wouldn't you tell me what you guess it is ? 

Arjuna: O Kanha, you're Paramarth. Why would be I so foolish to contradict you ?

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Thank you so much dear Simantini for making the thread public . Applauds to you 👏👏👏

Edited by Sutapasima - 1 years ago

This content was originally posted by: Anjureads

Wow Fantastic entries!! and thanks so much for putting it up here so that those outside the private forum can also read and appreciate.

Those outside the Mahabharat Katha private forum don't get the full benefit of fiction generated by the Dharmakshetra contest. One purpose of the contest was to bring new members to the private forum. Only a few Nano Dramas and Nano Tales are shared in this thread. Anyone who enjoyed them should join the private forum through this link and read the full set of 39 Nano Dramas and 104 Nano Tales. It doesn't take long.

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/1435

This content was originally posted by: BrhannadaArmour

Those outside the Mahabharat Katha private forum don't get the full benefit of fiction generated by the Dharmakshetra contest. One purpose of the contest was to bring new members to the private forum. Only a few Nano Dramas and Nano Tales are shared in this thread. Anyone who enjoyed them should join the private forum through this link and read the full set of 39 Nano Dramas and 104 Nano Tales. It doesn't take long.

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/1435

Thank you. I agree I am missing out on reading the other dramas and tales but right now I dont intend to join any more forums because I will be mostly an inactive member and joining a forum for me would be if I intend to participate in discussions.  Maybe sometime later 👍🏼

Edit: Surprisingly,  I just searched Mahabharat and found the two voting threads now. And was able to read through all of them. Not sure how that happened and why I am able to see the forum threads but kudos to all those who submitted entries. Amazing work 👏

Edited by Anjureads - 1 years ago

This content was originally posted by: Anjureads

Thank you. I agree I am missing out on reading the other dramas and tales but right now I dont intend to join any more forums because I will be mostly an inactive member and joining a forum for me would be if I intend to participate in discussions.  Maybe sometime later 👍🏼

Edit: Surprisingly,  I just searched Mahabharat and found the two voting threads now. And was able to read through all of them. Not sure how that happened and why I am able to see the forum threads but kudos to all those who submitted entries. Amazing work 👏

it's an auto-join forum and I had sent you an invite long ago 😆 

This content was originally posted by: DelusionsOfNeha

it's an auto-join forum and I had sent you an invite long ago 😆 

Omg I am a member?! seriously had no memory of this 🙈