Dialoguebaazi - SuMod Drabble

Posted: 3 years ago

Hi, this is Tannu! This is something I had written long back on Twitter. Hope you guys like it. 

It’s just a fun fight between SuMod when Susheela visits his house and is told he has gone for a bath. Susheela is sitting and watching TV when she hears a voice. 

 

Pramod: Towel de na, Bae! 

Susheela: Teri itni himmat? Tum aise nai sudroge. 

Pramod: To aap kya karegi? Aap andar to nai aa sakti na! 

Susheela: Yaha se bhi bahut kuch kar sakti hu! 

Pramod: Main darta nai hu aap se! 

Susheela: *hands him a towel with grease on it*

Pramod: *wipes face and looks in mirror* *Shocked* Arey! Ye kya kiya aapne? 

Susheela: Bandar hai to bandar jaise bana diya tujhe! 

Pramod: Haww! Aap meri khubsurti se jalti hai? Lagta hai aap mujhe Sattu se zyaada handsome maanti ho.

Susheela: Puttu ko bula ke tere face ka pura naksha bhi badalwa sakti hu BF kahi-ka! 

Pramod: Ab aap dekho main kya karta hu! *Rolls on the bedsheet* Ab isse saaf karne ki zimmedari tumhari. 

 Susheela: Hatt! Wo tum hi karo! Teri galti hai!

Pramod: Main Dharmpalji se complain karunga! 

Susheela: Haan kya? Aur main unhe bata dungi tum pagal bacche jaise behave kar raha tha! 

Pramod: Maine kya sochkar tumhe apni GF banaya? 

Susheela: Tum sochta bhi ho kya? Mujhe to pata hi nai tha yaar!  

Pramod: I dont like you!

Susheela: The feeling is mutual! 

Pramod: Mazak kar raha hu!  

Susheela: Par main nai kar rahi! 

Pramod: Aap sirf mujhse ladti rehti hai..

Susheela: Tum appreciate karne jaisi bhi to koi kartut nai karta hai! 

Pramod: Aye! Aapne hi bola tha ki aap par BF wale haq na jatau!

Susheela: Tum apna dimaag OLX pe bech ke aaye ho kya? Main K&S ke liye paise kamaane ki baat kar rahi thi! 

Pramod: Oho! Tujhe paise udaane hai! 

Susheela: Nahi! Mujhe aapne Pappa ki dukaan bachani hai aur phir Mumbai nikal jaana hai Hooda se milne! Mera jo star potiential hai wo yaha kaha safal ho sakta hai!  

Pramod: Main aapko madat karta to hu! Mujhe chodkar jaoge? 

Susheela: Kaunsi madat karta hai tu? 

Pramod: Kyu? Maine aaj tak Dharmpalji ko bataya kaha hai ki Gunnu-Sattu asal mein kaun hai! Batana chahta toh bata sakta tha.. Tera khayal bhi toh rakhta hu!

Susheela: Tum ussi track pe atka hue ho?

Pramod: Bhul gayi? Main 5 dino me UK wapas jaa raha hu na! 

Susheela: *Oh Shit! He did not extend his visa* Hmmm.. 

Pramod: Bolo na! Aap mujhe miss toh karengi na? Koi ab irritate nai karega! GF nai bulaega! 

Susheela: Main to party karungi Dr. Chota Haddi ke jaane ki khushi mein! 

Pramod: *makes a genuine sad face* Mujhe to sacchi laga tha ki main aapka dost to ban chuka hu! 

Susheela: To jaa kyu raha hai?! 

Pramod: *Tum rok ke to dekh, rukh jaunga!* Aapse aur India se picha chutt raha hai na isliye!  

Susheela: How mean! Itni bhi buri nai hu main!

Pramod: Wo to aap khud se hi puch le! 

Susheela: *Defensive* Mujhe nai pata tum kya bakbak kar rahe ho! 

Pramod: Aapko dekhke to lagta hai ki aap exactly samajh gayi hai! 

Susheela: What rubbish! You know what? Main abhi se hi tere bags pack kar deti hu! Sirf 5 din ki to baat hai! Then I am freee! 

Pramod: Admit karlo Susheela ji! Aapko meri aadat pad gayi hai. You dont want me to leave.  

Susheela: Zyaada mat bol! Maar khaoge tum, phir hadiyyan toot gayi toh mat bolna! 

Susheela: Mujhe tujhse farak nahi padhta hai! Jo karna hai kar! 

Pramod: Abhi se mujhe senti mat kardo!  Thode aansun bidaai ke liye baaki rakho *Fakes sobbing* 

Susheela: *Slaps him on the shoulder* Ye raha tera jawaab! I DONT CARE ABOUT YOU!! 

Pramod: Owww!! Aap mujhe maarti kyu rehti hai re? Maine aapka kya bigaada hai?  

Susheela: Dammit! You messed up my whole life! 

Pramod: Mai chala jaunga to aap bahut miss karegi dekhle! 

Susheela: Tujhe miss kare meri jutti!

Pramod: Wo mere liye exclusive hai kya? 

Susheela: Arghhh! Main tujhse baat karke time waste hi kyu karti hu?  

Pramod: Kyunki aap mujhse pyaar karti hai! 

Susheela: WTH!! 

Pramod: *Laughs out loud* Arey! Main to bas aapki kheechai kar raha tha! Par aap itna kyu shock ho gayi? 

Susheela: GO TO HELL!! 

 

How was it? Awaiting your appreciation, criticism, likes and comments on my drabble 👍🏼

Posted: 2 years ago

Susheela was wayyyyyyy too rude. She doesnt talk to Chota Haddi like that. Not even this Tu-Tujhe, she says Tum. Otherwise, it was great! Can definitely improve tho.

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by SuMod


Susheela was wayyyyyyy too rude. She doesnt talk to Chota Haddi like that. Not even this Tu-Tujhe, she says Tum. Otherwise, it was great! Can definitely improve tho.


Thanks for your feedback. When I wrote this 4-5 months ago, their characters were not even established and she did come across as being a little too rude to all of his advances, and I had checked episodes for accuracy as well. She had not had TOO many scenes with him for the Tu/Tujhe part, I was asked to share my drabble and I did. Obviously their dynamics have changed since then. Does not correlate with their current status, neither am I implying it does. 

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by Me000w



Thanks for your feedback. When I wrote this 4-5 months ago, their characters were not even established and she did come across as being a little too rude to all of his advances, and I had checked episodes for accuracy as well. She had not had TOO many scenes with him for the Tu/Tujhe part, I was asked to share my drabble and I did. Obviously their dynamics have changed since then. Does not correlate with their current status, neither am I implying it does. 

Yes exactly, I saw it when it was posted too, even then I felt that she came off as way too rude. I don't mean to offend you, it's just that when I began writing I hoped that someone will point out the mistakes and help me improve.

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by SuMod


Yes exactly, I saw it when it was posted too, even then I felt that she came off as way too rude. I don't mean to offend you, it's just that when I began writing I hoped that someone will point out the mistakes and help me improve.


I am not offended at all dearie, I totally appreciate honest feedback, I just gave my side to explain how it was not based merely on the characters, but what I perceived would be their dynamics. I am all for improvement, but dont intend to write on them again till I figure out what is happening in their story 👍🏼

Posted: 2 years ago

Oh ok, no problem, sorry if I came off as rude. And if you plan to, PLEASE write more on them. There is not nearly enough Sumod content.

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by SuMod


Oh ok, no problem, sorry if I came off as rude. And if you plan to, PLEASE write more on them. There is not nearly enough Sumod content.

I have written a ff on sumod pls check it's name is tere vaaste

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by Riddhi2Saini006


I have written a ff on sumod pls check it's name is tere vaaste


I'll read it for sure 👍🏼



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