Hi, this is Tannu! This is something I had written long back on Twitter. Hope you guys like it.
It’s just a fun fight between SuMod when Susheela visits his house and is told he has gone for a bath. Susheela is sitting and watching TV when she hears a voice.
Pramod: Towel de na, Bae!
Susheela: Teri itni himmat? Tum aise nai sudroge.
Pramod: To aap kya karegi? Aap andar to nai aa sakti na!
Susheela: Yaha se bhi bahut kuch kar sakti hu!
Pramod: Main darta nai hu aap se!
Susheela: *hands him a towel with grease on it*
Pramod: *wipes face and looks in mirror* *Shocked* Arey! Ye kya kiya aapne?
Susheela: Bandar hai to bandar jaise bana diya tujhe!
Pramod: Haww! Aap meri khubsurti se jalti hai? Lagta hai aap mujhe Sattu se zyaada handsome maanti ho.
Susheela: Puttu ko bula ke tere face ka pura naksha bhi badalwa sakti hu BF kahi-ka!
Pramod: Ab aap dekho main kya karta hu! *Rolls on the bedsheet* Ab isse saaf karne ki zimmedari tumhari.
Susheela: Hatt! Wo tum hi karo! Teri galti hai!
Pramod: Main Dharmpalji se complain karunga!
Susheela: Haan kya? Aur main unhe bata dungi tum pagal bacche jaise behave kar raha tha!
Pramod: Maine kya sochkar tumhe apni GF banaya?
Susheela: Tum sochta bhi ho kya? Mujhe to pata hi nai tha yaar!
Pramod: I dont like you!
Susheela: The feeling is mutual!
Pramod: Mazak kar raha hu!
Susheela: Par main nai kar rahi!
Pramod: Aap sirf mujhse ladti rehti hai..
Susheela: Tum appreciate karne jaisi bhi to koi kartut nai karta hai!
Pramod: Aye! Aapne hi bola tha ki aap par BF wale haq na jatau!
Susheela: Tum apna dimaag OLX pe bech ke aaye ho kya? Main K&S ke liye paise kamaane ki baat kar rahi thi!
Pramod: Oho! Tujhe paise udaane hai!
Susheela: Nahi! Mujhe aapne Pappa ki dukaan bachani hai aur phir Mumbai nikal jaana hai Hooda se milne! Mera jo star potiential hai wo yaha kaha safal ho sakta hai!
Pramod: Main aapko madat karta to hu! Mujhe chodkar jaoge?
Susheela: Kaunsi madat karta hai tu?
Pramod: Kyu? Maine aaj tak Dharmpalji ko bataya kaha hai ki Gunnu-Sattu asal mein kaun hai! Batana chahta toh bata sakta tha.. Tera khayal bhi toh rakhta hu!
Susheela: Tum ussi track pe atka hue ho?
Pramod: Bhul gayi? Main 5 dino me UK wapas jaa raha hu na!
Susheela: *Oh Shit! He did not extend his visa* Hmmm..
Pramod: Bolo na! Aap mujhe miss toh karengi na? Koi ab irritate nai karega! GF nai bulaega!
Susheela: Main to party karungi Dr. Chota Haddi ke jaane ki khushi mein!
Pramod: *makes a genuine sad face* Mujhe to sacchi laga tha ki main aapka dost to ban chuka hu!
Susheela: To jaa kyu raha hai?!
Pramod: *Tum rok ke to dekh, rukh jaunga!* Aapse aur India se picha chutt raha hai na isliye!
Susheela: How mean! Itni bhi buri nai hu main!
Pramod: Wo to aap khud se hi puch le!
Susheela: *Defensive* Mujhe nai pata tum kya bakbak kar rahe ho!
Pramod: Aapko dekhke to lagta hai ki aap exactly samajh gayi hai!
Susheela: What rubbish! You know what? Main abhi se hi tere bags pack kar deti hu! Sirf 5 din ki to baat hai! Then I am freee!
Pramod: Admit karlo Susheela ji! Aapko meri aadat pad gayi hai. You dont want me to leave.
Susheela: Zyaada mat bol! Maar khaoge tum, phir hadiyyan toot gayi toh mat bolna!
Susheela: Mujhe tujhse farak nahi padhta hai! Jo karna hai kar!
Pramod: Abhi se mujhe senti mat kardo! Thode aansun bidaai ke liye baaki rakho *Fakes sobbing*
Susheela: *Slaps him on the shoulder* Ye raha tera jawaab! I DONT CARE ABOUT YOU!!
Pramod: Owww!! Aap mujhe maarti kyu rehti hai re? Maine aapka kya bigaada hai?
Susheela: Dammit! You messed up my whole life!
Pramod: Mai chala jaunga to aap bahut miss karegi dekhle!
Susheela: Tujhe miss kare meri jutti!
Pramod: Wo mere liye exclusive hai kya?
Susheela: Arghhh! Main tujhse baat karke time waste hi kyu karti hu?
Pramod: Kyunki aap mujhse pyaar karti hai!
Susheela: WTH!!
Pramod: *Laughs out loud* Arey! Main to bas aapki kheechai kar raha tha! Par aap itna kyu shock ho gayi?
Susheela: GO TO HELL!!
How was it? Awaiting your appreciation, criticism, likes and comments on my drabble 👍🏼
Susheela was wayyyyyyy too rude. She doesnt talk to Chota Haddi like that. Not even this Tu-Tujhe, she says Tum. Otherwise, it was great! Can definitely improve tho.
Thanks for your feedback. When I wrote this 4-5 months ago, their characters were not even established and she did come across as being a little too rude to all of his advances, and I had checked episodes for accuracy as well. She had not had TOO many scenes with him for the Tu/Tujhe part, I was asked to share my drabble and I did. Obviously their dynamics have changed since then. Does not correlate with their current status, neither am I implying it does.
Thanks for your feedback. When I wrote this 4-5 months ago, their characters were not even established and she did come across as being a little too rude to all of his advances, and I had checked episodes for accuracy as well. She had not had TOO many scenes with him for the Tu/Tujhe part, I was asked to share my drabble and I did. Obviously their dynamics have changed since then. Does not correlate with their current status, neither am I implying it does.
Yes exactly, I saw it when it was posted too, even then I felt that she came off as way too rude. I don't mean to offend you, it's just that when I began writing I hoped that someone will point out the mistakes and help me improve.
I am not offended at all dearie, I totally appreciate honest feedback, I just gave my side to explain how it was not based merely on the characters, but what I perceived would be their dynamics. I am all for improvement, but dont intend to write on them again till I figure out what is happening in their story 👍🏼
Oh ok, no problem, sorry if I came off as rude. And if you plan to, PLEASE write more on them. There is not nearly enough Sumod content.
I have written a ff on sumod pls check it's name is tere vaaste
I'll read it for sure 👍🏼